*RK..FF-Jaane Kya Chahe Maan*UPDATED-Part2 ,Page2

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Hello frenzzzzzzzzzzz...well.well...well...i wanted 2 start dis post long tym bac...buh wasnt sure about ma writin' skills.Hence,finally m tryin' 2 gather all ma confidence...n ur love to write a ff exclusively for RK.....Plz excuse me if ya don' lyk ma first attempt...as a ff writer....😃

Firstly a ray of light on d title....
Jaane ka chahe maan...signifies confusion,frustration,anxiety,resentment,annoyance,helplessness,disappointment and turmoil in one's life....
These emotionzz all together leads to unhappiness and imbalance in our life....
I chose dis title for my FF because it clearly relates to the 2 main characters of my story ....Kranti and Rajbir...😳....
Dis..iz d story of d two ppl [RK]...who have different backgrounds,cultures,believes and society ,yet have a similar major life crises- they dont noe what dey want 4m dere life.
In d end dis is the journey of d 2 strangerz who are travellin' in d same train...searchin' 4 "Jaane kya chaahe maan"..😳
"CASTING"
RAJBIR: He is d son of a corrupt politician .He has everthing dat a man can ever ask 4.He has money,power,style,attitude and a good heart.His life iz js perfect buh d only crisis in his lyf iz dat he have no idea what he wants from his life.His dad wants him to b a political personality as him,but he iz completely disgusted by his father's disloyalty towards d nation.
KRANTI: She is a small town girl and belongs to a punjabi background.She graduates from her skul but have no clue what her next step wud be...Her skul friends have big plans about their life which makes kranti wonder about her future.She wants to do sumthing big...sumthing unique that can make a difference to the world.😳
k...guyzzzzzzzzzz...dis iz d intro of my "FF-jaane kya chahe maan..."....just 2 give ya d glimps of wa ma story iz all about...
Plz comment on dis post frenzzzzzzz....js 2 lemme noe..if i shud continue workin' on dis post or not....
plzzzzzzzz b honest about ur comments .....it will help me 2 know about watchya feel....😛
luv
neha😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
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neha dear it was really nice.
i really like it .
i am waiting for the story .
plz write it as soon as you can.
and don't shy.
huh.......
all the best.👍🏼
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Sounds great ............Neha .............Please continue ............
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Neha sweetie,
Please do continue. It sounds very interesting. Only I hope its in English?? 😕
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Neha woww the intro sounds really cool😛...So Raj is the son of a corrupted politician😳...this can guarantee you a fiersome fight between Raj and Kranti when they first meet..right😉😆😳...Pleaseeeeee continue soon..I m dieing to read it now😆😳...
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: skeptical

Neha sweetie,

Please do continue. It sounds very interesting. Only I hope its in English?? 😕

thx a lot...skeptii....it really boosted ma confidence...m glad yew lyk it...😃...well yea skepti...dis ff will b in eng...js 2 make things easier 4 ya...😃
luv
neha..😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: bhawna_dhunna

neha dear it was really nice.
i really like it .
i am waiting for the story .
plz write it as soon as you can.
and don't shy.
huh.......
all the best.👍🏼

thx a lot bhawna...i guess i really need dat...m very nervous bout' ma first post...😆😆😆...feelin' lyk...xam' tym...here..😆😆..
i'll continue veryy soon...
luv
neha😉
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: jyoti06

Neha woww the intro sounds really cool😛...So Raj is the son of a corrupted politician😳...this can guarantee you a fiersome fight between Raj and Kranti when they first meet..right😉😆😳...Pleaseeeeee continue soon..I m dieing to read it now😆😳...

awwwwwwwww ...thx alot jyotii...ur commentz olwaiizzzzzzzzzz...support me ...n' fill me with a new lyf n' energy.....😃...
ummmmmmmmm...well...let's see..if RK in ma post fight...or support each otha'...😆😆😆
i'll continue veryy sooooooooooooon dear
*hugs*
luv
neha😳
Edited by *mesweet neha* - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: Dawn Idol

Sounds great ............Neha .............Please continue ............

thx dawn...
i'll continue 4 sure...
keep stickin'
luv
neha😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
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PART I
fasten ur seat belts guyzzzzzzzz...n' get readyy 4 an amaizin' journey with ur ol' tym fav jodi...Rajbir n' Kranti....😃
PRESENTIN'...UR VERY OWN...RAJBIR N' KRANTI...BUH IN ZARA HATKE STYLE...😳
NOTE: lets move the clock to d times when the riots of 1984 took place.......
31st October,1984
Delhi..
While whole india was burnin' and the people were being killed brutally,politics was engulfin' n' distroyin' innocent people on d name of religion and community,breakin' all the limits of decency n' humanity and yet...laughin' at their helplessness and ignorance .Sheddin' all the shame,and coverin' demselves behind the mask of a hermit, they were looking at people merely ,as if they dont' exist. Creating Situation,which can even make d creator of dis world in pain,the unbearable pain that can complell d almighty himself,2 cry his heart out and say
" Stop!...Stop yew monsterz....stop destroyin' ma beautiful creation,my children,with ur mercilessness ....stop yew ruthless tyrants... b4...i curse my self 4 creatin' animals lyk yew..."
😭
But...
People say dat goodness lies within evilness.And in dis case it is purely a sheer-TRUTH...
While the destruction was at its peak....😕😕
Somewhere in d house of the cruel politician,dere lies a heart dat cries for the nation's dreadful situation.Who feels sick of dis never endin' plague,bleeding ,and yet ,helpless.The heart which is filled with love and respect for his nation but unaware of what he should do to free his motherland from the giants monster's strong and powerful grip...That heart is of our very own..."Rajbir"z.😳
Continued....
SCENE1:
College Canteen
DAV College, Delhi
Bunch of college sudents sittin' in d cafeteria...watchin' the latest news ...n' discussin' d current riot situation.....
1st voice: omg....what is happenin' in dis country........
2nd voice: Everyday, its d same story.....news of destruction,rape,mental extortion,bomb blast....
3rd voice: Y d government is not doing anythin'?Instead of taking a step to stop this violence,its just waitin' for the situation to get worse each pass day.
4th voice: Dat's it.....dis ruthless govenment will do nothin'...being d youth n' d future of dis country...we have to take a step 2 stop dis extortion.
5th voice: But what ...what can we do......the govenment has all the power ....we can't go against the system.....WE CAN'T FIGHT D SYSTEM....nuthin' will change....everythin' will remain d same.....our society iz heading towards distopia.......
6th voice: How can you......
an anxious voice intrupts the conversation.....its our very own SANJAY!!😳
SANJAY: "Hey guyz...did anyone see raj today?"
4th voice: ummmmmmm...no.....what happened?? why are you soundin' soo..tensed...???
SANJAY: uhhhhhh....not now...i'll tell ya laterz....buh i gotta find raj...i...i need to talk to him...its very...important...(sanjay leaves ,leavin' confused people behind)
3rd voice: I wonder....what's d emergency??? why was he lukin' so tensed?? I never saw him like this...b4...I hope.....everythin' iz fine...😕
While sanjay was lukin' for raj.....
In a silent corner towards the end of main hall, a tall,handsome man ...with d head held straight up ....is standin'......facin' towards the wall...
Sanjay: What are you doin' here....i wuz lukin' 4 yew in d whole college...
The man turns......Its none other den...our dashing...hero...RAJBIR....😳*CEETIYAN....*😆😆
Raj: Calm down...sanjay....catch your breath first...why r yew lukin' so pale??what's d matter??
Sanjay: I want 2 talk to you...its very urgent....
Raj: nuthin' can b more urgent den catchin' ur breath at first.....inhale...exale.....inhale...n' exale....its a stressbuster...😆😆
Sanjay: Stop....foolin' around raj..its serious....
Raj: okii....talk 2 me...(raj asked vaguely....without much interest)
Sanjay: Ur dad.....
Raj: Dad???...what about him??(a sudden line of fear tookover raj's face )
Sanjay: Ur dad......is being attacked by a group of people....who call themselves as freedom fighters...
He knew it was cumin....it was destined 2 take place...after all those misdeeds that his dad has performed....by being disloyal 2 d nation.....he knew dat his dad will have to paii one dai or d other.
Raj: Wen did dis happened......
(raj inquired with no expressionz....on his face)......but no one knew what was he feelin' 4m inside...😭...he knew dis day will come....n' he will have 2 go thru dis experience....he was prepared...buh it was a weired feelin' ...it felt lyk....his heart was sinkin'........his throat was dry.....may b its just because...HE STILL LOVES HIS DAD..😳😭
Sanjay: Dis afternoon...when he was on his way to home....
Raj: Is he okie?? (asked concerned raj ...hoping 2 hear "yes" as an answer)
Dreadful Silent conquered the conversation...neither one of dem...spoke 4 few seconds...
Sanjay: umm....actually...raj...he is....
Raj: he is.....[asked impatiently]
Sanjay: He is in emergency rite now....doctors are sayin' dat his situation is very critical at dis moment...and dey cannot say anythin'....about dis...rite now......*PAUSE*..umm..raj...he wanted 2 see you...i think u shud go...
Raj looked at sanjay ...with the tearfull eyes....
Sanjay: I noe raj..what is goin' in your mind........i noe...dere r problems and differences between ur dad n' u...but buddy...its tym 2 listen to ur heart...4 once....he needs you....lets go...
Raj nodded....to confirm...dat what sanjay was sayin' is right...
SCENE ENDS WITH THEIR EXIT..................😳
Do comment guyzzzzzzz....both good n' bad comments r welcomed...😃
Luv
neha😳
i'll continue soon guyz...if yew like it...😳
do comment....
luv
neha...😳
PART II
SCENE II:
Emergency Ward..
City Hospital
Delhi
In the unconventional silence of solitude,he was standin' near d emergency ward...lifeless...constantly starin' @ his father........thru d lil' glass window...as if his eyes have forgot 2 blink..........n' d tears have announced their stike.....not ready 2 moist dose sad eyes...he felt like his ears have not even drunk the enuf of his dad's words .....he wanted him 2 speak...no matter what......
Sanjay: Raj....
*No response...*
Sanjay: Raj....(dis tym shakin' raj's quiverin' cold body)
Raj: Dad!!...(den realized d reality...dat its sanjay...not his dad...)
Oh....i thot......(stops....in dismay)
Sanjay: Raj...i just talked to the doctors ...n' dey saii that ur dad iz not completely out of danger...dey will have to keep..ur dad...under observation for 24 hrs....and see how he will response...to dere treatment.....(Sanjay informed raj...with a bit of uneasiness)😕
Suffocation...was overwhelming him........he felt like....as if he wanted 2 scream his heart out......but dere was no one...to listen ....😕
Raj left without utterin' any word...leavin' worried sanjay behind.....😕
Does he deserve what he is goin' though??raj questioned himself....
another minute....he revive his senses back..."well may b he does"......he said...he is reapin' what he sowed...it was meant 2 b lyk dis....its fair to be like dis....(raj quoted...with certainty)
Sanjay: Raj...what are you thinkin'??
Raj: nuthin'...tryin' 2 choose the path...what ma heart is showin' me dis tym....
Sanjay:*Confused*..I am not sure if i am getting what you mean..?? 😕
Raj: Am leavin'....(said raj...firmly)
Sanjay: What?? do you even know what are you sayin' ??are you otta' ur mind??(sanjay questions raj..in disgust)
Raj: yes!!...i noe what i am sayin'..n' m completely in ma mind....its tru dat...i got distracted from my principles for a short period of tym...but now...m back...(cold hearted raj said..)😳
Sanjay: wHAT YOU THINK YEW ARE DOIN'....HUH,...???leavin' ur dad in dis condition 2 die...??
Raj: YES.....[raj confirms in furious tone)..😕...if he can leave several ppl...of his nation...mercilessly...to die....js to fulfill his selfish n' selfcentered desires.....y cant i??? God has cursed him of what he did...2 d worderful creation...of his.......he deserve dat...[said raj... in a very strong n' adamant tone)😕
Sanjay: I noe how yew feel raj...how you feel for the country you love.....buh do you think..he deserve ur hatred....to dis extent???do you even realize..dat he iz ur FATHER...DAMNET.......😕
Raj: The people who lost their lives......just because of his deeds, were also someone's fathers ....DO "YOU" REALIZE DAT???[fumin' raj...questions sanjay....)
*COMPLETE SILENCE....*
Raj: n' yew r defencin'..that man...who has no regrets of what he did?? D man...dat wants me to forget my principles n' join him in his foul deeds...as well....???
Sanjay: raj....listen to me...(raj intrupts)
Raj:No...sanjay....yew listen to me....for the last tym..."I DONT CARE WHAT WILL HAPPEN 2 DIS MAN...I HAVE NO RESPECT FOR D PERSON...WHO DONT RESPECT HIS OWN COUNTRY"
Doctor intrupts the conversation...
Doctor: Excuse me....rajbir.....
Raj looks at the doctor...with no expressionz...
Doctor: Mr.Rajbir....m very sorry 2 saii buh...we could not save ur father...he is no more....😲
ONCE AGAIN...SILENCE TOOK OVER...
Raj leaned towards the wall..n' said " take care of him god"😭😭😭
Doctor: ummmmmmmmmm...Mr rajbir....we found dis letter along with his other stuff....sooooo...
HE HANDOVER DAT PIECE OF PAPER TO RAJ....
Sanjay: Raj.....
Raj: (stops him)....leave me alone...sanjay.....!!
Sanjay...leaves...in remorse...
Raj..gently...unfolds the perfect folds of the letter....and reads....
Dear Son,
I am writin' you dis letter...because i noe..dat i hv made numerous enemies because of ma misdeeds and may b i'll not b able to give dis letter to you personally...cuz i dunno...even noe...if i am goin' 2 b alive even to next hour...
I noe yew hate me...and i cannot take dis anymore...I noe i shud have done dis long tym back...buh dere was sumthin' dat was stoppin' me -...may b its ma own guilt......i want to admit..dat what ever i did was not forgivable...no one will ever forgive me...not even god....Buh..son, its a request...will yew plzzz just try ....to forgive ur dad...somedaii.........it will b enuf 4 me...
I wanted you to become a politician lyk me....buh now..i have realized....you deserve sumthin' better...Hope u will discover... what you wanna doe......dat yew think iz right 4 you...
js rememba'...i will always love you...n' support you...even if m not around you...
luv,n' seekin' 4 forgiveness...
ur dad...😭
Raj......got stunned...readin' dis heart wrenchin' letter of his dad...which was truely...from his heart...for the first tym...he felt...if he could goe bac in tym...N' CHANGE THINGS...BUH.....😭😭
SCENE ENDS ON RAJ'S STUNNED FACE....😭
Sorry..guyz...if yew found dis..part lil' short(specially skeptii)😃...buh i have a class rite now...so gotta rush...😃...will continue soon...
do comment...😃
luv
neha😳
Edited by *mesweet neha* - 16 years ago

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