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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: Dawn Idol

Well Purvi .. ....... Since u wanted a cute & hilarious scene betwn R & K ........... I'm going to introduce lajjo once again.........
Deep breath ........ here goes ........

Bbr was relieved, the elders had bought her sob story that Lajjo had no where to go as her father was in prison and her mother away to stay with some sick relative. The agreed albeit reluctantly that she could stay here for week. Bbr was already thinking how to make best use of Lajjo's stay.
Lajjo's entry was 'dhamakedhar' to say the least. She marched into the house, 'ghoonghat' pulled down and promptly crashed in to Raj who was just leaving for the court. "Hai ma", she shrieked, while Raj took one look at her and fled with a hurried 'sorry' muttered under his breath. He was glad his job kept him busy till late evening. At least he would be away from that disaster of a female. "I hope she gets on Kranti's nerves too" he thot maliciously.
On the contrary, in the kitchen K & L got along like a house on fire. K recognised a powerful ally in L, i.e. to irritate Raj, at least. She smiled grimly as she watched L blundering about in the kitchen. And she began to plot. She decided that as of now she would give L the 'responsibility' of taking 'care' of Raj. And she would stand back and watch what promised to be an entertaining week. She went about her chores with a song on her lips.
But what she had not bargained for, was that she was also stuck with L till R returned. In the course of the day she saw L stumble from disaster to disaster aound the house. The only thing that kept her sane was the thot that she could unleash L on R once he returned.
R returned well after 8.00 pm exhausted and longing for a cup of tea. K's ears perked up at the sound of his footsteps. As he entered, she gave him a bright smile," I'll get you some hot tea", she said. He stared suprised, what's wrong with her, he wondered. Having no energy to pursue the matter, he went to freshen up.
After a few minutes, dressed in a cool, crisp, white cotton kurtha he was seated on his fav armchair, feeling quite at peace with himself and the world at large. Suddenly, before he could register anything L had breezed into the room, tripped on the carpet and bathed him in piping hot tea !! He stood there, unable to comprehend what went wrong in the span of a couple of mins. With a detached air he watched L shriek and felt her tugging at his kurtha crying out about the stain.
He slowly and painfully dragged himself back to reality. Firmly he pushed L to one side and went back to change his clothes.
After half an hour, he joined the family at he dinner table. K was bustling about acting very efficient and giving him innocent looks. He shot her a warning glare. It didn't seem to do much good. K was busy instructing L to take care of R. This led to a sequence of disasters with L & R involved in each one. At first it
was the piping hot curry served on his hand, then the roti on his shoulder, finally the dal on his lap. R sat there stoically, braving the ordeal, politely refusing the suggestions from Buaji that he should go and change.
Once dinner was done he retired to his room in a zombie-like trance and shut the door. After a while he heard a knock, "What ?" he yelled. "Milk for you Rajveerji", trilled L. "Leave it by the door", he snapped. After, what he considered a safe interval he opened the door , grabbed the glass and shut the door with a bang. He drank the milk and retired to bed turning off the lights hoping this was the end of the disasterous evening.
The door opened slowly and he saw K walk in silently, He saw her nervously look in his direction, and gave a grim smile. "So she was nervous, good", he thot, he was going to make her pay for spoiling his evening.
Just as she lay down, "Kranti", he called " You have not filled the jug, I need a drink of water". "Get it yourself ", she snapped. "Dont worry", he said with false sweetness, "I'll call Chaiji". " Oh shut up, stop being a
baby", she said.
Cursing him under her breath, she entered the kitchen with the jug. Just as she was filling the water, the lights went off. She sucked her breath and whirled aound, a shadowy figure was at the door. "Rajveer", she warned, "its not funny, turn on the light". The figure kept moving towards her silently. Wasn't it Raj ? she panicked. She had left him comfortably snuggled in bed, he didn't seem inclined to get up and
come downstairs.
Was it an intruder? "Stay away from me", she warned, grabbing a ladle. Before she could realise what was happening a hand clamped her mouth, another snaked around her waist and she was bodily lifted off the ground. She struggled in vain to set herself free. She was well and truly shaken now. The intruder carried her towards the door, and suddenly the lights came on.
She found herself staring at a grinning R. Her heart was racing and she was breathing heavily at the exertion. "Well", he said with a laugh, "how does it feel when someone plays a prank on you?". "Let me go",
she hissed. "OK", he shrugged and released her, she stumbled before she found her balance.
"Good night, my dear wife", he drawled and turned to go. With a swift move K grabbed the jug and sploshed the contents on a startled R. For the 3rd time that evening R was forced to change his clothes.
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How was that ???????????
Hope you all liked it............... 😃😃



👏👏👏wow! great👍🏼
I have no words in ur praise
here is ur score---------- 100/100
Loved the way u narrated it. I'll read it once more. Thanks for reintroducing Lajjo. Raj's face was worth watching whenever he was with Lajjo
loved the way Raj took his revenge from Kranti

last part of scene was best
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She found herself staring at a grinning R. Her heart was racing and she was breathing heavily at the exertion. "Well", he said with a laugh, "how does it feel when someone plays a prank on you?". "Let me go",
she hissed. "OK", he shrugged and released her, she stumbled before she found her balance.
"Good night, my dear wife", he drawled and turned to go. With a swift move K grabbed the jug and sploshed the contents on a startled R. For the 3rd time that evening R was forced to change his clothes."

thanks dawn. we r not able to watch new episodes. koi baat nahi
this FF is cool
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Posted: 16 years ago
#32
Am gald you liked it Purvi ............ 🤗
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Posted: 16 years ago
#33
DI... COOL and Intelligent answers 😃 What should I ask you, I am bad at asking questions.

Since you are an entrepreneur, ... so the questions are:

What is the best part of your work?

What you hate the most about your work?

...............

I love your signature quote: my question related to the two lines: is there a way out...?

................

Define yourself in four lines of poetry:

,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,

What is your favorite creative drink:

,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,

What would you like to be known as?

,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,

Enough for the day: will return with more later 😃


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Posted: 16 years ago
#34

Originally posted by: an12345678

DI... COOL and Intelligent answers 😃 What should I ask you, I am bad at asking questions.

Since you are an entrepreneur, ... so the questions are:

What is the best part of your work?

I am HR & Admin rolled into 1 - so best part is interacting with my young & energetic team 😃😃

What you hate the most about your work?
The financial part .......... absolutely at sea where money is concerned 😭😭😭 Typical Aquarian - no head for figures ............ My brother's the brain here ......

I love your signature quote: my question related to the two lines: is there a way out...?
Thanks An ..........Here it is ........
It's hard to wait on something when u know it might never happen,

But it's even harder to give it up when u know it's everything U ever wanted

Yes .......... you wait; if you want it bad enuf .............. there's always hope ......... after all the 1st line says "might" .......... that leaves you with a ray of light at the end of the tunnel !! 😍😍

Define yourself in four lines of poetry:
I love to dream
I love my team
I'm friends with all
Thru spring & fall


What is your favorite creative drink:

Adrak ki Chai .........

What would you like to be known as?

A person who made a difference for the better ............. where ever she could ............

Enough for the day: will return with more later 😃

Thanks An .............. I loved answering that ............😊


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Posted: 16 years ago
#35
That was a chatakdaar FF. Was so happy to read it esp when so much fell over him at the dinner table.
What I liked best in the story ...... my kudi emptying a jug of water on the Rat's head.
And.............. why do all of you like my kudi to stumble????
That was a smash bit of writing, sweetie !!
Edited by skeptical - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#36
Thanks Skep .......... that is precious praise coming from the Prof herself ............ 👏
Awww Skep ........... Not done ......... I empty the whole laddar on Raj ....... and not a whimper of protest I hear .......... 😭
But ...... I make Kranti take a slight stumble ......... and a complaint is promptly registered .............. 😆
Here ............. I'm fair you see ........
both get the "treatment" ........ from me ...😆
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Ok some more questions for you .......
1. Your work...is it a manufacturing unit or a service rendering unit?
2. Your options for breakfast .... which would you choose? Why?
Aloo parathas with buttermilk OR Fruit, toast and tea/milk
3. Is it true that in the business world, people can be pretty cold hearted? If yes why so?
4. Would you like to come and spend a day with my kids at school?
5. Someone in your life (other than yr family) has left an indelible mark on you and changed your thinking process for the better. What was that remarkable event?..... if you want to share it with us.
6. Once I was sitting and watching My Fair Lady. And Eliza began to sing "Lots of chocolates for me to eat ......" and I too felt like eating. I dashed to the fridge and went munch.... munch..... munch on my bar of choco. Tell me what do you like to eat while watching an old movie???
7. What would you prefer.....Audrey Hepburn in Roman Holiday or Audrey Hepburn in My Fair Lady?
8. One thing that makes you afraid......
9. If we were to meet (by chance).... I came up to you and said, Hi D_I, altho we've chatted a number of times with each other , this is the first time we're actually meeting. I am Skep. What would your reaction be?
10. In Indian homes, we always have an old help. I learnt from mine the meaning of loyalty, service and gratitude. There must be an old employee at your place of work. What can you learn from him?
Ok that's it for now .........but I'll be back with some more. 👍🏼
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Posted: 16 years ago
#38

Dawn... Cara, you rock !!! What an FF.. howlarious..and so crisp and fresh..I was laughing my way till the end.. Lajjo, R& K..what a team !! You are one creative woman.. Suggestion- Please keep writing.. you have an amazing flair for an amateur..

I logged in specifically to chk on you sweetie, so here's my list..

1) Whats your secret fantasy? (Only romance, bedroom, steamy hot fantasies to be listed. NO work related stuff) 🤢

2) Who's your favorite M&B author? (Hey, spooky again, my fav childhood author- Enid Blyton 😃)
3) As an entreprenuer, whats the biggest challenge you have faced when it came to promoting your venture?
4) This one might be a little in your face- Are you single/attached/ married?
5) Favorite Attire? ( Denims/ Pajamas/ Sarees/ Suits/ Dresses/ Beachwear) 😉
6) Staying home or going out?
7) Shy or outspoken?
8) Weekends mean _____
9) You are closest to ( which individual in your life) ?
10) Do you want to meet any of the MRD forum mates, in particular?( Please feel free to be as biased/ unbiased as you want to be)
Ciao Cara.. wud keep up tabs on you.. 😉
Edited by morningdew - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#39

Originally posted by: skeptical

That was a chatakdaar FF. Was so happy to read it esp when so much fell over him at the dinner table.

What I liked best in the story ...... my kudi emptying a jug of water on the Rat's head.
And.............. why do all of you like my kudi to stumble????
That was a smash bit of writing, sweetie !!

Haha.. chatakdaar for sure.. and anything which makes my Raj suffer (even if its the silly Lajjo) is ambrosia for you 😉
Hey Skep, have been missing your games/ prose/ anything.. please to oblige.. if you are not heavily worked that is.. your stuff aimed at Dawn is amazing, but please write something where the rest of us can participate too..
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: morningdew

Dawn... Cara, you rock !!! What an FF.. howlarious..and so crisp and fresh..I was laughing my way till the end.. Lajjo, R& K..what a team !! You are one creative woman.. Suggestion- Please keep writing.. you have an amazing flair for an amateur.. Thanks for the vote of confidence ..... I'm feeling 10 ft tall !!!!!

I logged in specifically to chk on you sweetie, so here's my list..

1) Whats your secret fantasy? (Only romance, bedroom, steamy hot fantasies to be listed. NO work related stuff) 🤢

......... Me & my Mr.Right ........Snug as a bug wrapped in a rug ...... on a cold wintery evening, in front of a blazing fire place ........ 😳😳😳
2) Who's your favorite M&B author? (Hey, spooky again, my fav childhood author- Enid Blyton 😃)
Lynn Graham, Penny Jordan ..... et al ..........
3) As an entreprenuer, whats the biggest challenge you have faced when it came to promoting your venture?
Corruption in Govt offices 🤢
4) This one might be a little in your face- Are you single/attached/ married? Single ........ 😳
5) Favorite Attire? ( Denims/ Pajamas/ Sarees/ Suits/ Dresses/ Beachwear) 😉 PJs & Dresses & Saris
6) Staying home or going out? Depends on my moods .......
7) Shy or outspoken? ..........Somewhere in-between 😳😳
8) Weekends mean _____ curling up with a good book or gossiping with a friend ....
9) You are closest to ( which individual in your life) ? My Mom
10) Do you want to meet any of the MRD forum mates, in particular?( Please feel free to be as biased/ unbiased as you want to be) ....... Oh yes ..... Quite a few .... some day .........
Ciao Cara.. wud keep up tabs on you.. 😉 ............. Thanks ........ this was quite good !!!!

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