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Posted: 16 years ago
Part 54:

Cut to: Excel College – Classroom

Samrat is sitting with books open in front of him, all set to impress Gunjan. The class is strangely full of students – strange considering the next lecture is Shukla's. Samrat looks out of the door time and again to see if Gunjan is there but he hasn't had luck so far. Benji, who is sitting with Pooja, comes over to Samrat for a while, whistling at the sight of the open books.

Benji: lagta hai dude, aaj chand pashcim se nikla hai.
Samrat: subah subah chand nahi, suraj nikalta hai Benji. Aur wo bhi purab se, pashchim se nahi.
Benji: oho suraj chand gaye dustbin me! Yaha kaun nikalne wale hai aur yeh books kiske liye nikli hai, yeh mujhe ache se pata hai.
Samrat: (smiles) tujhe nahi pata hoga toh kise pata hoga dude.

Benji catches sight of Gunjan coming towards the classroom.

Benji: actually mujhe thik se nahi pata, soch raha hu yaha baith k ache se pata kar lu.
Samrat: (surprised) kya pata kar lu?

Just then, Samrat sees Gunjan too and pushes Benji away.

Samrat: ja na Pooja ke paas. Chashmish aa gayi hai.
Benji pretends to look hurt.
Benji: wah Samrat, Gunjan ji aa gayi toh dost ko bhul gaya tu! Tujhe toh main –
Samrat: Benji, tu nahi gaya toh wo teri Pooja ke paas baith jaayegi. Phir hum dono Shukla ki class kiske sahare jhelenge?
Benji: han han ja raha hu. Tu baith Gunjan ke saath. Utha Dia ke class me na aane ka fayda!

As Benji goes back to his desk, Gunjan comes into the classroom and looks around. The only empty seat is beside Samrat. Standing by the door, she hesitates and fidgets. Samrat looks straight away but manages to steal a glance at her from the corner of his eye. Gunjan's decision is however hastened by Shukla's arrival.

Shukla: kya baat hai mahodaya? Aap is tarah dwar pe khadi hokar kya vichar kar rahi hai?
Gunjan is taken aback.
Gunjan: jee.. main.. bas ja hi rahi thi Sir.

She quickly goes inside and sits by Samrat. He is still looking in the other direction and when he sees her sit down, he pretends to look at her with great surprise.

Samrat: aarreeyy chashmish, tum yaha kaise aayi?
Gunjan smiles at his feigned innocence.
Gunjan: tum toh aise keh rahe ho jaise darwaze se yaha aane ke liye train leni padti hai.
Samrat: (grins) agar nahi leni padti toh itna kya soch rahi thi?
Gunjan gets a bit serious again.
Gunjan: mujhe laga k woh Dia..
Samrat: (irritated) Dia ke baare me baat karna tumhe itna acha lagta hai kya? Mujhe nahi lagta. Toh kya hum nahi kare toh chalega?

Since his volume was a little loud, Shukla overhears.


Shukla: Samrat mahoday, agar aane wale kuch waqt ke liye aap itihaas ke kaare me baat kare toh hi chalega. Kaisa laga vichaar?
Samrat: (seriously) bahut acha Sir.

He turns to smile at Gunjan and is relieved when she smiles back.

Cut to: Excel College Gate – Mayank and Nupur
She has managed to drag him to the gate despite his half hearted complaints about the classes not being over for the day.

Mayank: Nupur, main toh bas yeh keh raha hu ke abhi ghar jaane ki kya zarurat hai. Main ab better feel kar raha hu. Ek hi toh class bachi hai..
Nupur: (sarcastically) nahi Mayank, ek class kaha bachi hai? Agar tum abhi ghar nahi chale toh baalo ko kaise kheechna hai, punch kaise marna hai, in sab ki bhi class lungi main tumhari! (Softening down) Zid mat karo Mayank. Tumhe bahut tez bukhaar hai. Agar aaram nahi karoge toh aur badh jayega.
Mayank looks at her with a wondering smile.
Mayank: aur tumhe bahut bura lagega?
Nupur: (blushing) yeh kaisa sawaal hua? Mujhe bura toh lagega hi. Tum bimaar hoge toh main kiska sir khaungi?

She stops a passing auto and gets Mayank into it with her. As the auto starts moving, Nupur puts her hand over his and smiles.

Nupur: tum chinta mat karo Mayank.. maine kaha hai na, chutkiyon me bukhaar bhaga dungi.. Uday bhaiya ko bol diya hai Gunjan ko dekhne ke liye. Main tumhare paas hi rahungi.
Mayank: hey bhagwan! Itni bada saza kis baat ki mil rahi hai?
Nupur: (surprised) arey bukhaar hi toh hua hai –
Mayank: ek toh bukhaar hua hai phir pura din tumhare saath rehne padega.. (closing his eyes shut) sab pichle janam ke karmo ka fal hai Mayank!

As Mayank pretends to look pained and takes a deep breath, Nupur clenches her fist angrily. She is all set to punch him when she decides against it and looks out of the window in disgust. Mayank laughs to himself and wonders how long she will be able to keep up the act. He hasn't even counted to 5 when she turns towards him again.

Nupur: tum mazaak kar rahe the na Mayank?
Mayank: (raising an eyebrow) kyun? Tumhe nahi lagta mera pichla janam tha?
Nupur: (exasperated) Mayank!
Mayank: ghar aa gaya hai, chale? (To the auto driver) Yahi rok deejiye bhaiya.

Nupur shakes her head at him and sighs – "Bandar kahi ka! Huh!"

Cut to: Om Book Store, Andheri – Radz
She is walking by the shelves in the bookstore, a bag in hand. She comes down here often, when she is happy or sad or in the mood to spend some time alone. She likes the peace about the place and enjoys browsing through books of all sorts. Samrat would often tease her about her ability to devour books on all subjects as if they were chocolates. But Samrat was Samrat. He also teased her about her love for clothes and accessories. He just needed a subject to begin.. Her thoughts are interrupted by a sudden hand on her shoulder. She turns back and is surprised to see Aditya.

Radz: tum? Yaha?
Adi: haan, main, yaha.
Radz: kya haan main yaha?
Adi: tumne hi toh pucha.
Radz: ok baba.. uh.. hie!
Adi: (smiling) hie Radz. Yaha kya kar rahi ho?
Radz: main.. sabziyan kharid rahi hu.
Adi: kya?
Radz: Adi, bookstore me hu, books kharidne aayi hu. Obviously?

She spells out each syllable of the last word clearly and slowly. Adi grins.

Adi: maine tumhe disturb kiya right?

Radz thinks she was a bit rude and to make up for it, she decides to shower him with a big smile.


Radz: arey nahi.. main bas jaane hi wale thi.
Adi: (sighs) nahi bhi wali thi toh ab toh jaogi hi. Main jo aa gaya. (Leaning towards her a little) Kal kitna pareshan kiya tumhe hai na?
Radz: (giggling) apne baare me bahut achi opinion rakhte ho na tum?
Adi: khud ke opinion se kya hota hai.. pata nahi Pragya kya soch rahi hogi mere baare me..

Radz feels a surge of irritation go up in her. Now he's going to go gaga over her yet again. I am not listening to this, she tells herself. But she can't tquite excuse herself abruptly as Adi was very friendly and in his own way, sweet. What was he doing now? Oh yes, waving a hand in front of her eyes.

Adi: hello madam, kaha kho gayi aap?
Radz: nahi, bas.. tum kuch keh rahe the?
Adi smiles his dimpled smile again.
Adi: haan Radz. Thank you keh raha tha. Kal main aur Pragya date pe ja rahe hai. (Going red) Actually wo toh bas movie ke liye aa rahi hai.. main hi use date samajh raha hu.
Radz: that's so sweet Adi, I hope you guys have fun.
Adi: yeah..me too.

He sees Radz fiddling with her cellphone.


Adi: tum sachi ja rahi ho? Should I drop you somewhere?
Radz: nahi I will manage. See you around Adi..

Adi waves her a sweet goodbye and watches her go up the stairs, out of the bookstore.

Cut to: Mayank's home
Mayank and Nupur are standing outside the door and Nupur rings the bell.

Nupur: acha hua aaj aunty ghar par hai. Ab jee bharke tumhari shikayat kar sakti hu.

Mayank opens his mouth to start with his stereotypical dialogue – dekho Nupur – when the door opens. Nupur's face breaks into a big smile when she sees his Mum. Likewise for the Mum in question.

Mom: Nupur! Kitne dino baad aayi beta.. (glancing at Mayank) aur is khadoos ko college se jaldi kaise bhaga laayi?
Nupur: arey mat pucho aunty.. yeh toh aane ko tayyar hi nahi tha. Badi mushkil se kheech ke laayi hu.

Mayank gathers that this conversation has strong chances of going on and on. He walks inside and sits down on the sofa. Nupur notices that and walks inside too.

Nupur: yaha kyun baith rahe ho tum? By God Mayank, tum na sach me limit ho! (Looking at his Mum) Pata hai aunty, Mayank ko kitna tez bukhaar hai.. phir bhi ghar nahi aana chah raha tha aur ab bhi yaha baith raha hai.. aap ise bolo na jaake bed par lete.. tabhi toh hum temperature leke dawaai de sakte hai!

His Mum is now by his side and his hot forehead bothers her. But she knew how his son was prone to getting fever all of a sudden. Luckily, it usually died down within a day or so.


Mum: chal Mayu, andar chal.. tere bukhaar ka bhi kuch pata nahi chalta.. kal raat toh thik tha tu.
Mayank: main thik hu Ma. Bas zara sa bukhaar hai.
Nupur: zara sa? Kya chutkula maara hai by God! Aunty boliye na ise kuch!

When Mayank makes no effort to get up, his Mum winks at Nupur. They both come stand at either side of him. He looks at each in turn, confused.


Mum: toh thik hai Nupur, ab teen tak ginenge aur phir Mayu ko utha ke bed tak le jaayenge.
Nupur: haath me thodi chot aayegi par koi nahi.. apke liye yeh bhi done!

She winks back and they begin counting "one… two…" Before three can come into the picture, Mayank is up from the sofa and in bed. Mum and Nupur high five each other and go inside his room.

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Posted: 16 years ago
YESS Debbyji!!! I am the first one to respond today!!! muahahaha!!! Isse kehtein hain tumhara number 1 fan!!! But you should prepare yourself this is going to be a long commentary...are you sure you're ready for it Debs? Actually before I begin I have a feeling by the time I'm done someone else will have commented before me and then all that talk about me being your no.1 fan will go bhad mein....Acha Acha to I will now start. Ahem *clears throat* To sabse pehle the Benji-Samrat scene was too good!! Actually Debs your whole update iss bar was just too funnyy!! Just what I needed some humour to cheer me up and you did just that!!! I love Benji-samrat friendship!! And ohh maannn shukla cracks me up!! honestly he's one of my fav characters in the show!! his shudh hindi always makes me laugh and you did that so well!!! Mahodaya main to aapke iss prempurvak samachar (don't know how to say update!! 😆) mein itni vyast ho gayi thi ki ab iss upastithi se bahar ane ka mere paas koi samadhan nahin hai!! 😆😆 ok sorry if that was really bad hindi i tried!! The samrat gunjan scene was sweet as usual!! Aww and the Nupz taking Mayu home scene was soo realistic I bet that's what would happen in the show in that situation!! I love the "hey baghwan yeh kis janam ka badla le raha hai" dialogue!! 😆😆 That's what I love about Mayur they're not all mushy mushy all the time which is adorable!! You show their chemistry soo well yaar!! I'm swept off my feet!! And this time no it's not because of Mayu's killer looks!! Ok...fine yaar you know me too well...woh bhi hai...😆😆. And the radz scene was too cute a very imaginitive and cute story forming here!! I totally love it!! And I love Radz's character!! She is soo relatable!! And Adi has dimples awww....you chindi chor debby meri thoughts bhi churali?? How did you know I loveee dimples...ok now im fida over adi too!! 😆😆 Mayuu has competition yaar!! 😆😆 And the best part of the whole update was the last line!! The mom and Nupz duo!! Yeh dono to mayu se kuch bhi karwa saktin hain!!! 😆😆 I am already imagining when Nupz becomes a bahu...bichara Mayank will be stuck between the two sakshat devis!! 😆😆 I lovedddd their chemistry!! Ok have you had enough now or should I keep going?? I can write a comment as long as your update but I think ab main tujhe baksh deti hoon....main aaj bahaut generous feel kar rahin hoon na!! 😆😆 Love you Debs you always win my heart with your words!! You are to great jii!! A biggg jaadu ki jhappi for you!! 🤗
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Posted: 16 years ago
nice!!!!! really like your ff!!!!!!!! update soon please!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Posted: 16 years ago
hmmmmmmm dil khush kar diyaaa yaaar
aur kya boluuu sacchi BY GOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Posted: 16 years ago
Debby! What a part, seriously. I love the way you have characterised everyone. What I don't love is having to wait a week for each part! 😆
Firstly, Sammy-boy is hilarious. Sammy-Benji interaction is written so well, it's like I'm seeing them act onscreen only. Too good. And same with the way you've accurately written Shukla Sir. It's brilliant Debs! Sammy is so sweet to Gunjan, and of course, Gunjan is melting towards him because she also still wants to be his friend.
And then Radz, what to say about Radz. You made her like me only. 😆 Book-crazy, and teased by her family about it. My cousins used to call me 'book anaconda' rather than 'bookworm'. 😆 But I really liked the scene between Radz and Adi. The friendship is building, but I cannot help wonder who will fall first? Of course I have a lot of interest in that story. 😉
And the Mayank-Nupur-Mummy scene! Mummy and Nupur gang up against poor Mayu. 😆 They are seriously too cute. And Mummy still doesn't know that MayUr have admitted their feelings to one another right? Though she seems to have her suspicions. It's going to be so interesting.
Debs, do I really have to wait a week before the next part??
Love,
Radz
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Posted: 16 years ago
wowwww debs..........awesome updatess as usual......i liked radz-adi part specilaly!!!!!
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Posted: 16 years ago

Debby! do write more please cannot wait for the next scene!

-Vaish!
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Posted: 16 years ago
wow debby wat a part yaar!!!!!.....ive been waiting all week fr ur update nd u havent disappointed me at all infact uve overwhelmed me wid dis update.....keep going!!!....oh nd i loved nupz nd mayu's moms idea of lifting mayu....lozl😉
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Posted: 16 years ago

awesum debby...!!!!! hayye luved d sajan class wala scene.....sammy tryin 2 impress her chashmish...n mayurs auto wala scene....luved d way u Xpressed nupurs Xpressionz...!! hehehe

w8in 2 d nxt update....wish 2 c a lil more ov sajan too

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Posted: 16 years ago
awww thanx for the update debby.................
mayoo's mon n nupurs team is great!!!!!!!!!!!!!11
i feel soorry for mayank...........................hahaha
love ya
maria

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