OS : One Last Leaf - Page 4

Originally posted by: LadyMeringue

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Yep, all good things certainly have to come to an end. 😳😳 It is only when that happens that you moved ahead and discover better. 😛😛

Yes, I must admit that ideas come to me pretty fast. Penning it down and converting it into a passable story is where all the trouble arises. 😆😆

And don't worry, I will tell you. 😃😃

Originally posted by: _priyaa_

Hmm..realized that I am too late here... Well just read now... I am gathering words to form my sentences..hmm.. ha ha... u always have this effect on me... the entire scenario that u recreated in this OS -it was just magnificent & very deep... To be honest I actually did not like that suicide plot in the episode at all... It just made Ranveer look like more coward & foolish rather than showing his despair ... But dear I just loved this OS.. You showed us an entire different scenario in the same plot , a very meaningful & powerful... I must say a very matured writing... I am not gonna talk about ur writing skills now as I know I will just keep going.. ha ha..the way u have penned their inner desperations ,confusions & all of those emotions was just brilliant... It was quite natural yet a complex scene... & there was a lot of wit even in this serious story... Very skillfully handled...I really liked that..it reduces the heaviness...& Ishani's portrayal was the highlight for me...& Ranveer..i can't forget him yaar... he he...seriously dear I cant but keep admiring u for that...

& I always wanted to ask u how do u write so beautifully... I mean how the characters behave in a particular situation ,how they approach to a problem & their way of thinking - it's really amazing & very understandable... & very realistic... It also explains how much u understand the characters & their reactions in a certain situation... very impressed with u sweetie... I have learnt a lot from these ffs & from u too... 😳😳

Well... it was yet another brilliant piece of work from you..In the first place I really wanna thank u from the bottom of my heart for writing it.. u know it just relaxes me..& as u know I am no longer watching the show it just reminds me of their beautiful story & why I got addicted to them...May God bless u dear...I just pray u keep writing like this always & u deserve all sort of recognition & appreciation ...u have a long way to go...⭐️⭐️😳😳

Thank you so much, sweetheart! 🤗🤗 I'm so, so happy that you liked this so much! And don't worry, you are not that late also. 😆😆😆

That's the main reason why I chose to write this OS, for this is more of what I actually expected to see in the show, but alas. The show never fails to disappoint now, does it? And coming back to your review, seriously, you people praise me so much, it makes me feel that I'm still to work far harder over my writing so that I an stand up to these praises.

And this means so much to me that my stories have touched you the way they have. You've kind of left me a little speechless because I really don't know what to say after this overwhelming response. ☺️☺️ But all I would love to say is that I love you loads too! ❤️❤️ And I don't know about the show, but I will certainly keep writing.

Originally posted by: kimnana

lovely dear specially the last line 👏 if someone really loves u they will never let u go

it was a complete story for me ...u portray it so well love is caring for each other even when u r angry

its hurt to see ur loved one hurt ...continue soon

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Originally posted by: NidsJ

Hey LM... 😊 😊

awesome writing... 👏 👏 👏

at least u gave the two the much needed conversation... coz this lack of convo is the root cause of all their problems... (obviously after deducting her highly logical brain😉 😉 😉) they need this... but inke pass shanti se baat karne ka time kaha hai...

the actual suicide scene was really really pathetic... and specially his last dialogue... 🤢 🤢 I think it's better to leave that... but ur version is really really good... pehle hi likh ke cvs ko bhejna chahiye tha... shayad thodi sense use kar lete vo... 😉 😉

but 2 slaps for him... and that too so much harsh... ekdum sunny deol style mein... poor him... bas yahi nahi kia tha Ishani ne aaj tak and u did that also... physical damage is also done... 🤣 🤣 but as I always say in dono ke jhagdon mein bhi chemistry hoti hai provided they are together...

and now ishani in hospital... God... iske bina to jaise inki koi baat khatm hi nai hoti... one has to go there... always...

u know such angsty writing has a charm of its own... don't know why but they create a completely different aura... and I love it... and u are a master of this art... 👍🏼

but on a serious side I always feel that him not trusting her is more her fault coz I still remember he clearly said during Chirag murder case that ek baar tum par bharosa na karne ki galti kar chuka hu, dubara nahin karunga... but ishani to ishani hai... she made sure that he believe all her blabbering and hate her (which she know he can't but still left him to live a life without her). Since the day she started loving him she only lied to him... i know her intentions was good but brain bhi to use karne chahiye na... He could've handled the murder case in a much better way but...😕 😕

but chalo all that is gone and i really wish that cvs have something better (but the way rumours are going i think they are in for some crap again...😕 and I still don't understand why this divorce... 🤢)

after all this the part I liked the most in ur writing was the end where they finally accepted the damages done and now atleast will try to undo it... that is what we all want... coz whatever may happen they are entwined by souls and will always be... hope to see them together soon...😳 😳

great work LM... keep writing more... 🤗 🤗

And yes, that suicide scene was actually pathetic. 🥱🥱 And the less said about the original scene, the better. 🤔🤔 CVs as it is copy enough from us. Let them learn the meaning of creativity too. Bhej bhi deti toh scene ka aachaar hi bana dena tha unhe. 🥺🥺

Those two are damaged goods from all angles. Hospital and jail is their maayka and sasural respectively. Have to take blessings from there before they take a step ahead in resolving and creating MUs.