FF: PALLAVI by Jalebi Jane SEE NOTE PAGE 117 - Page 52

Originally posted by: hatelove2012

Beautifully written. Love your version of Pallavi. Can’t wait for more.

Thank you, Sister. I appreciate your comment.

And am pleased that you are enjoying the tale.

In writing PALLAVI this past month I've grown really fond of her character.

Particularly the way she doesn't fight her attraction to Raghav.

Originally posted by: ReemShah

The way you spin the story around Raghav and Pallavi- there is something attractive about it. It just attracts my attention. I really loved the way how he asked her permission before smelling her hair.

This ff is so much better than the show❤️

oh and love the taunt Raghav gave using the name of Baji rao

and this created a doubt- is Pallavi student of Baji rao or Shivaji or arey they both the same person??🤔

Maha episode was maha cute especially the ending

Thank you, Sister, for your thoughtful comments. I love reading them.

I'm not sure about Baji Rao-Shivaji connection. As I note on the episodes where Pallavi cites Baji Rao, she is actually referencing Sun Tzu's -Art of War-. I'm asking us to suspend our disbelief accepting she is speaking Baji Rao's words because I wanted there to be a clear Maratha reference---and the symmetry of Raghav RAO vs Baji RAO. Unless my plotline is disrupted (which could happen!) Pallavi's love for the historical Baji Rao will have meaning at the end.

Oh!---Sweet of you to notice that he asked for consent before smelling her hair. One of my fave moments from MHRW was that time when Pallavi confronts RR: "Did you just smell my hair?" And he looked guilty. This Raghav Rao has no guilt. He's like: "Yes. I did."

Originally posted by: mayabhi

I wonder if our hero has something to do with the sales boost that day.. but i guess that wud b too soon..

It hurt me that Baba showed no consideration to all the effort she had been putting in the shop for them.. But i guess that’s the kind of person Baba is.. I’m do glad Aayi spoke up for her..

I’m still reeling from wat happend in the end.. Raghav Rao came all the way to her house to meet her to talk abt her text?? And after all the talk, he smelled her hair?? Wow! I don know wat I’m feeling. But I’m smiling..widely

Funny you should mention about the sales boost, Sister, because when I first began plotting this tale, the through-line was that of two people determined to damage each other but ending up helping each other without consciously willing it. That was there in a nuanced way in MHRW at the beginning.

Hence the tagline on my website: -pallavi- is a tale of enemies who inadvertently assist each other at every turn.

And--yes, that was good how he came over to find out why there was that 180-degree shift in her plans. It shows interest in her. Because---I'm sure you noticed---he didn't ask anything about whether her change of mind would affect her promise to help Kirti. I wanted his curiosity to be solely on her.

Want to say that I'm really chuffed that you are still reading PALLAVI despite not having come to it as an MHRW viewer. Thank you for your support.

Originally posted by: BlueJayFire

Beautiful piece. I just read all episodes in one go. your attention to detail with emotions tied to them makes us visualize the environment the feelings..thrilling..Keep it coming..

Oh! Thank you. What a nice comment.

But congratulations---that is a lot of reading to do in one sitting. Approximately 35000 words as my word count tells me. Now go and rest your pretty eyes, Sister. hehe

Originally posted by: PinkOrchid

I’m behind and just finished Episodes 8-14. Your intro of Harish has got me laughing so much, my Gorilla! Love it! Love him💕. Look forward to reading the rest as see a girls versus boys thing going on perhaps.

Also want to mention how I loved the way you wrote Episode 9-10 when ring was returned. Amused me how they realised they were duped by Pallavi in disguise of a cousin who is expecting😂

Thank you, Sister---those episodes you mention---“Where the Nizam housed his polo ponies”---are amongst my favourite in terms of writing experience.

You also love Harish which shows you are my kindred spirit. I think it's quite apparent that Krishna is my favourite character---but Harish---"my Gorilla"---is a close second.

I can never resist a list so here goes:

1. Krishna

2. Harish

3. Sulochana

4. Farhad

5. Nikhil

Originally posted by: sosweetsumi

oh wow i am so in love with these two

please do continue

bye sumi

So happy to hear that you are enjoying them.

Originally posted by: Vibrant_Ana

Dear Maya - I am fangirling on your story ... hehehee

Gosh!!! that was another amazing beautiful update..... ❤️

When will Baba know the truth about Mandar, when will he realize that his autocratic behavior is stifling the lives of his children( or will he ever?)... Thank god for Nikhil who is as much a sweetheart here as in the show..

But I am loving this PALLAVI... and she will definitely come with some solution with Raghav's help for the future of DSE. For now let her revel in this new found sensation...

Eagerly always waiting for your updates...

Love - Moi

Thank you, Ana. I just adore Nikhil. I hope he announces himself to my imagination and grabs a bigger share of this tale because I'd like him to be a bigger character. On the level of Krishna and Farhad.

When I read your comment, I remembered that after writing Episode 23 my strongest feeling was "to hell with DSE and to hell with Baba." I'm not sure how it will go but I'm at the point where I want Pallavi and Krishna to have their own business with nothing to do with Baba. Hmmm---I wonder where they might find the capital for such a venture? ;-)

Thanks for reading, Sister, as always. Your smiley profile pic is always welcome.

Originally posted by: LyssaPie

Well that was an unexpected surprise, ohhh Sulochana I wish I could smack her

But she may have just helped Pallavi to never doubt her plans for the DSE brand in the future, if this video was to come out to the family whilst she was working hard on expansion she’d be way more shattered.

But she’s received the blow early on which means she can deal with anything once she realises what Baji Rao would do

oh look who’s here sitting beside her... he smelt her hair and she smelt his jacket.!

That's such a good point, Sister---the timing of Bindi Aunty's actions will perhaps serve Pallavi's future. I must think about that. And---yes---this episode was quite smelly ;-)

Originally posted by: Hannaan

Wow.. it was nice as always. liked how thing are heading totally loved it. You always end your chapter with us wanting more 😢

Cant wait for the next update!!!

Thank you, Sister---happy that I am keeping you wanting more.

Keep reading.

Originally posted by: Inese_20

Oh this is perfect! This is how love stories should go. How beautifully you write ❤️

What a lovely comment. Thank you, Sister.

Your words made me realise that that is what I seek to write---a love story---not a story about a family but about two people finding a life together. It's easy to drift away from that central idea when writing FF but you brought it back for me.