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Posted: 9 years ago

Shalet kase 'ekaach vishaya' war sarva mulana 'nibandha' lihayala sangatat, tasech 'DDD, S2' mhanje tyach (S1 chya)' vishaya war dusarya mulani (kanekar, khankar, nurkar, dadarkar, etc) lihilela nibandha watatoy ani to hi 'ardhawat' copy kelela!!


😕


IMO, 'DDD S2 serial' writing, direction and acting hya tinhi babtit purna pane fasaleli aahe

Amen

Edited by dlip - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Tarantella

Everything does seem rushed, there's no solid plot, zero character sketch, loads of over acting and OTT dialogues. Even though it doesn't seem like it, I hope they make every character act like a normal person and not exaggerate each and every dialogue.

Anyways, this not-so-good season prompted me to watch old ssn1 episodes and I couldn't help but write a short drabble on SuShma. Is it alright to post it here? Or should I post it on the Creative's corner thread where all the previous ffs are also posted?



I think you can post it here also...

And I request you to..

S2 of 3D is not gripping one...👎🏼
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: mishkil88

Can someone tell who plays sakhi's dad ? He was also in bnsn and fu Bai fu


Mishkil, he is Vijay Patwardhan
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
Hello..! Kashe ahat sagle?

Presenting a Sunday Spl. short SuShma drabble which I wrote right after ssn2 started.
I hope tumha sarvanna awadel.
Story cha setting - 'Goshta ek - Lekhak anek' chya ending nantar when Paltan is back in Mumbai.
PS. Mi khup divasanni story lihili ahe, overlook the typos and mistakes😊


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"Sujay, jara break ghe... Kiti vel asa laptop samor basun rahnar ahes? Sakal-pasun tu uthla nahis jage-warun."
Kitchen madhun Reshma ordun mhanali. Tine aj kitchen ghetla hota awarayla. Akolya-la ti sadharan teen-char divas hoti, ani ithe Maajghara-chi awastha bhayanak-ch mhanavi. Don divas tiche kitchen awarnyatach gele.

"Ho. Evdha ha ek mail karto. Jhalach ahe."

"Bara." Reshma ne kitchen madhun baher dokavle.

"Kay he Sujay. Kiti kaay thevla ahes tya tujhya table var? Ani khaun jhalyawar tari plates uchlun kitchen madhe thevat ja..."

"I am really sorry, but evdha ek mail... " to bakar-wadi tondat takat mhanala.

Ti hasli. Sujay ani tyacha office work!

" Tu ka hastey?"

"Kahi nahi. Chalu dya tumcha.."

Aalas det, Sujay ne laptop band kela.

"Khup kantala alay ga.. "

" Kay karu sangshil? Mi mast ala-takun chaha karte. Pohe pan karu ka?"

"Nako. Tu bas ata. Khup awara-awar jhali aj. Mi karto chaha."

"Chaha nako, coffee kar."

Radio-war mand awajat juni gaani suru hoti. Coffee ani biscuits cha tray anat to mhanala.
"Sandhyakali mast hatat coffee cha mug, ani juni gaani. Waah! Fakta kami ahe ti pavsachi..."

O mere dil ke chain
O mere dil ke chain..


"Paus pan padel," coffee cha mug gheun ti khidki javal jaun basli.

Maajghar aj khup shant hota. Sujay cha 'work-from-home' aslyane to ghari hota. Baki sarva ap-aplya kamavar gele hote. Reshma cha cooking class sakalcha aslyas, bakicha vel ti ghar awarat basli.


Chain aye mere dil ko dua kijiye
O mere dil ke chain
Chain aye mere dil ko dua kijiye..



Her eyes gazed around their beloved Maajghar, only to come at rest when her eyes met his.

Aapla-sa vaatnara Maajghar...

For a moment, neither said anything. Their eyes glittering with incomprehensible feelings, stared hard, as if trying to decode their souls' thoughts.

He coughed, breaking the moment.

"Ek sangu, Thank you very much Reshma..!" Khidki-javal, tichya bajula jaun basla.

"He kay? Thank you kashya-sathi? Khara tar, mi tumha saglyanna 'thank you' mhantla pahije."

" Nahi. Tu parat Mumbai-la alya baddal Thanks."

"Ashi maitri ahe ka apli, Sujay?"

"Ag tasa nahi. Pan gele kahi divas, goshti itkya patkan ghadlya, samjhe paryanta to kshan nighun tar nahi jat, asa vatat hota. Tula mahit ahe, Ek moment asa-hi vatla ki tya divshi, mi tula station var sodayla alo hoto...ki ti station var chi apli bhet kadachit shevatchi asel."

"Tu khup kaljit hotas na?"

"Tula parat Mumbai la yenyach kahi karan navta na tevha..." He trailed off.

"Karan nahi kasa?"

"Mhanje?"

"Tu ahes na.. " Ti hasli.

He choked on his coffee. Kay mhanali Reshma? Mi neet aikla na?

Tyachya chehrya-varche bhaav pahun ti ajun jorat hasayla lagli.

"Reshma, tya Kaivalya chya sanidhyat rahun tu pan ashi maskari karayla shiklis..."

She raised her eyebrows.
"Maskari nahi re.. Mi seriously boltey."

"Asa hasun bolnar ashil tar tula vatta mi vishwas theven?"

"Vishwas thevaycha ki nahi he tujhyavar ahe. Mi khara boltey. Tujhyamule ale mi parat Mumbai-la."

"Ho, tasa pahila tar mich tujhya baba-na convince kela."

"Sujay, tu asach hotas ka re adhi pasun? Evdha scholar ahes tu, ani hee ek choti goshta tula samjhat nahiye?"

"Tu kay boltes? Kashabaddal? Majhya knowledge cha kay sambandh ahe ithe?"

"Tech tar!" Ti parat hasayla lagli. Tila asa manmokle panane hasat pahata tyala khup chaan vatale.

He thought for a moment. The thoughts his heart was putting forth were rapidly stepped on by his mind. Pan ti asa ka mhanel? Majha mann je mala sangat ahe, tasach asel tar? Attach evdha motha incident jhala ahe richya ayuahyat. Ti ka karel majhyavar prem? Prem??
He could feel his heart pounding furiously. His eyes desperately tried to read her face, her calming smile.

Tiche khidki baher laksha gele. "Bagh, Sujay. Tula paus hava hota na?" Tine patkan window open keli.


Chookar Mere Mann Ko...
Kiya Tuney Kya Isharaa

Badla Yeh Mausam
Lagey Pyaara Jag Saara
Chookar Mere Mann Ko...



The sky, darkened in various shades of grey, thundered. It would rain anytime now, he thought. Before he could say anything, the soft pitter-patters fell on his ears and the smell of fresh wet mud filled the room. He had always imagined this perfect setting for his confession. Seeing it all turn into reality in such an unexpected way, felt so surreal. The only one person, whom he ever loved, was right in front of him, beckoning him to accept the reality. Accept his feelings, accept her in his life.

This is the right time, she thought. Speak up, Sujay.

Taking a deep breath, he got up and held out his hand.
She took it wordlessly.
Waltzing around he sang along the song that had come up on the radio.


Humein Tumse Pyaar Kitnaa
Yeh Hum Nahi Jaante..
Magar jee nahin sakte
tumhare bina
Hume tumse pyaar...
Edited by Tarantella - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
Tarantella, your story made my day!! 😃❤️
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Tarantella

...Presenting a Sunday Spl. short SuShma drabble which I wrote right after ssn2 started.
I hope tumha sarvanna awadel.
Story cha setting - 'Goshta ek - Lekhak anek' chya ending nantar when Paltan is back in Mumbai.
PS. Mi khup divasanni story lihili ahe, overlook the typos and mistakes😊


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Wow, Tarantella, you made me nostalgic

Very nice. You changing track of narration from Marathi to English and vice a versa is so smooth! 👏

Keep writing (and ... keep posting 😊)
Edited by dlip - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Manasi_MD

Tarantella, your story made my day!!😃❤️


Thank you Manasi 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: dlip



Wow, Tarantella, you made me nostalgic

Very nice. You changing track of narration from Marathi to English and vice a versa is so smooth! 👏

Keep writing (and ...keep posting 😊)


Thank you Dilip 😳 Your words always encourage me to write more. If time permits, I'll definitely try to write more stories, though currently I am completely out of ideas.
Season 2 is simply boring.
Aplyasarvanna jar season 2 develop karayla dila asta tar definitely khup changli story lihili asti 😆
Edited by Tarantella - 9 years ago
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