RM SS: Fireflies in a Jar (Chapter Three Posted on 24/04)

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Maria

@Valar.Morghulis

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Bun

@KazBrekker

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Posted: 9 years ago

#102

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Yh gonna do it now even though it might not be the best idea but then i tend to really delay my feedback😆 Not intentional though hahah

Gosh Madhu is a maniac! 😆 An evil and hilarious one 😆 And RK honestly is such a sissy 😆 Well she turns him into one i mean. Like is this the same guy who constantly fights heads on with Yuv...or the one one who wants everything at a grand scale...but becomes a little tiny mouse when Madhu opens her mouth 😆 I mean he couldn't even shake his head when she just called him out to Yuv! Actually there were multiple occasions throughout this chapter where Madhu's statement of him being a sissy and needing to grow a pair is true!

First, on his generous donations which he wasn't even aware of 😆 Madhu played him good! The way she just knows how to sweetly talk and with such a convincing tone that too that even Yuv was fooled at the start (well he would still be fooled hadn't RK told him later it was all her) 😆 And then came the blow with eye donations 🤣 at least she was kind enough to have told him to sleep on it 😆 But i didn't knw u could donate eyes for blind people...i mean u can't really give ur eyes to another person so that they can see again can you? Or is it just donated towards medical research? Just being curious here 😆

And aren't Dipali and Yuv a cute couple 😆 They r cute...and i like Dipali so far too. She's earned my respect too 😆 And yh looking forward how these two love birds unravel as u did say they will be the side couple. Madhu Rk the crazy ones and Yuv Dipali the mature and normal ones 😆

Okay back to RK being a sissy, now this guy is being manipulated by her to seduce a middle aged woman with a daughter his age i presume!! I mean come on that speaks a lot right there...u can't even say straight up no to her! 😆 I knw he tried and madhu is just has her way with words and knws how to play the situation...still doesn't change the fact he couldn't man up, even if threatened 😆 Gotta LOVE Madhu though during this scene! I actually was laughing 😆 This girl is just...speechless! I mean she isn't even taking any of what he says in consideration...rather just jumps to the conclusion of his 'disability to do it' 😆 hahah or the fact that out of his whole rant the only thing she picks out is him misunderstanding that the daughter isn't blind 😆 Maria, u have written her character beautifully! If she becomes soft or any less demanding i am so pointing that out okay! Keep this Madhu going! 😆

And another point why RK is indeed a sissy...she didn't just threatened to call ur brother's engagement off but her own sisters too!! She won't go through with it! She might be evil but she still loves her sister...and even if she is threatening to go through with it...he just got scared right away! I mean..maybe her starting to ring up her dad to pull her threat through would be when maybe u back down and into her game...but all she did was dare him to say no 😆 Even later when Yuv is saying he doesn't have to do it...he still doesn't back down because he is too scared of her going through with it and doesn't want to risk it 😆 For me RK, u have proven urself to be a sissy 😆

Hahah btw, not criticising ur story...just proving what Madhu said about him 😆 U r doing a fantastic job with this story

Okay office middle aged woman scene, i already gave u a review to that...should i just copy paste that here? Yh let's do that and add stuff to it (i am being lazy i knw [LOL]) There wasn't much of the woman flirting...just interested really so it didn't feel cringe really. Ur spacing it out..get her more into the game as the day/days progress...making her clingy right from the start would of felt more like a comedy and u taking the mick...and really that's Madhu's job LOL The woman doesn't match the description madhu gave earlier as her jumping on him straight away which actually makes sense and fits the her character as Madhu exaggerates a lot! So keep this pace going! I knw ur not that particularly happy with that scene but it turned out pretty well...and u will learn with time but still u done a splendid job with it!👍🏼

Edited by Mentally-Insane - 9 years ago

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k.atrina75

@k.atrina75

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Posted: 9 years ago

#103

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Well I was still lost in the story of second part and I got this treat of third part suddenly... Wahoo..

Well.. Madhu is a real fun to read... And you can imagine all those expressions passing on her face.. She is a real treat.. And as for RK.. I am quite sure we are going to get some real funny stories of RK and Madhu's childhood... 😆 and Madhu giving him a good reason for calling him a sissy..

I pity poor RK... He has to seduce a middle aged woman.. Going against his morals..

I am glad you didn't bond madhu in the stereo type of a blind girl who was tooo innocent to be human.. Your approach is really commendable.. Like it's a reminder that someone's handicap doesn't mean that he/she has to maintain some moral ethics code and be angelic... She is a human and acts her age.. Lovely...

Edited by k.atrina75 - 9 years ago

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sapana

@sapnaf52

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Posted: 9 years ago

#104

superb & long update.
madhu is such a brats,crazy & evils.
rk ,he is sissy.
dipali &yuv are so cute.
awesome update.

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Tinku2015

@Tinku2015

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#105

wow amazing update...love this naughty madhu...she;s a girl who doesnt believe that any loss isnt worth sulking about it...but still one thing is still suspense is how did she get blind...the reason please...and how rk and madhu end up together...please..reveal this

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Chitra

@-QueenlyChitra-

Trailblazer

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Posted: 9 years ago

#106

nice update
gosh this madhu is so naughty bratty evil
i guess Rk is so damn right she knows how to make her work done poor rk 🤣
thanks for pm 🤗

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SOUWMIYA MURALIDARAN

@vishuv

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Posted: 9 years ago

#107

OMG OMG what a brattish Madhu you have created ? I go by RK. She is nothing but a satan in disguise, a manipulative one. Her sisters know about her very well. Their parents looking at her like an innocent angel, oops a porcelain doll😆😆

Madhu wants to be a piano tutor. Very good, blind doesn't mean they should teach braille. Well she aims to achieve it by playing dirty. and forcing rRK to seduce a middle aged woman ?😉 hell it feels creepy ! poor RK...

Dipali and Yuv make a good pair. Yuv siding Madhu was unbelievable. Madhu used her disability to earn points, wow !

Her dog Ben exactly portrays Madhu's emotions and expressions! That trained it seems...

Do continue dear Maria ! enjoyed the weekend becoz of your update !

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jalebi

@madhurish

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Posted: 9 years ago

#108

Incredible writing! Take a bow dear!

Just loved this update! U made my sunday!

Yaar! This Madhu is pure evil!!!

I pity this Rk... Like he said to Yuv.. He IS little bratish but not Madhu! If we call her a brat then its an insult to her... She is An Evil! A Satan! A monster! A manipulator! A wicked witch! Haha... she is one enigma!

The way u portrayed this Madhu so far is just brilliant! Its not so easy to show someone with so many shades... She is one complete package... A mysterious mischievous girl she is! I just love her! I really enjoy her wicked games...

Poor Rk got stuck with her... He worries that this crazy girl might f**k his brother's & own sister's engagement... So he is doing everything told to him...haha!

Whoa! What an act she pulls in front of her dad? Malik truly believe his daughter is one innocent sweet little angel! Lol

Haha... I was laughing my ass of when she dragged rk along with her to the academy saying he volunteered to help her with the fundraiser & to donate his eyes! Dear, i just hope & wish this story gets a happy ending... I dont want this Rk to die & Madhu gets his eyes! I m telling this in advance bcos thats the first thought came in my mind when madhu said he will donate his eyes after his death... I cant ever contemplate the thought of Rk dying... I want this couple to have a happy ever after! Lol

Car scene was cute! Yuv & dips are one adorable couple... I like this dips... She is sweet unlike her two bratty sisters... Yeah trishna is also a brat but no where near to Madhu's league...haha! She is one epic creature!

Haha... As i guessed in my last update comment, Rk & Madhu tagged along with Yuv & Dips & almost spoiled their second date! But gladly Rk was in his good behaviour... He didnt try any of his epic crap! He just apologized for previous night & got acquainted with his bhabi... Thats nice!

Rk is indeed Sissy! He often proved that to Madhu... Hehe! Even i agree with madhu... Rk sounds good than Rishu... Rishu suits to loverboys not to this playboy! But sadly he couldn't play much of his charms with Madhu... As she had other plans for him... She made him seduce... No correction... Flirt with an old witch ... Haha! I really loved that portion a lot in this update... Madhu acting hurt & making him feel guilty when he said he cant believe he alomost proposed her... She just kept twisitng his words yaar...

You cracked me when Rk said "yes i have a problem" & madhu assuming that he has a problem to DO IT! lol... She is so funny yaar... Never seen or read such a character before in my life... She is such a novelty to me...

And that flirting scene was too good... Rk acted pretty well & he also realized madhu was right in stating the old witch a cougar! Her blush, her eye f**king rk, her excitement to meet rk again all r the proofs!

God! I really had so much to say while reading the update... But i forgot now... Sorry! But trust me i really enjoyed this update like anything... Will go & re read the update just to warm my heart... Thank u so much for this lovely story dear... Will be waiting to see more of Madhu's evilness! And some Romance btw Rishbala too! Thanks!

Edited by madhurish - 9 years ago