RM FF: Entwined - Thread II (Chapter 32 POSTED) 6/04 - Page 2

Maria thanks for the double update, no words to express how beautifully you have written, i was in trance while reading it, felt like watching a movie, curious to know what happens next. Please continue soon.

Maria thanks for the PM dear.

Congraatzz fr d new thread yaarrr. Wwoohhh wat an end. Rishaan unconsious!! Ab kya hoga. Wil dat bas*** use him against Rk??? Maya ab tak kyuu nahi Rk ko pehchan nahi rahe hai??? Yaarrr baki stories ki aage ki portion kabhi kabhi gues kiya abhi tak. But dis 1 !!!!!nooo ab kyaaa hogaaa. Kuch samaj mein nahi aaraha hai. Haaa waiting egrlyyy.

Originally posted by: blacklambo

Hi there 🤗 Congrats...how many more chapters to go?

Another beautiful chapter, a lot going on, things are moving, lot of actions and reactions!

The first scene was beautifully written, how you described Rishaan's emotions, what he felt, it shows how much sensitive this man is inside, the cold facade he shows the world is just a way to hide his vulnerability, I think he had some bitter experiences in the past, waiting to know more about that. I liked to see this side of him

Rudra seems quite strong in dealing with this whole matter, I mean anybody would freak out seeing what they just witnessed in the depths of that macabre lake, but I like that about Rudra, he built a strong personality, I also think it has something to do with his profession too, he must have the habit to deal with such things but still not an easy thing to witness yourself!!

I liked how much he cares for his brother, but it still seems he can't destroy the wall between them, Rishaan still insists on keeping the distance and not showing his pain. Moreover he is dealing with his pain and fear after all what he witnessed and he insists on trying to distract Shaurya so that Rudra gets time to get police working on the case! Poor Rishaan how much pain and how many fears he should still be dealing with, I really feel for him especially that after all this trauma, he might also have to deal with a heartbreak when he discovers that Maya and Rudra are made for each other!

The scene with judge Prakash is another good scene, what a man is Judge Prakash!!, very impresssive. Another strong character who dealt bravely with the murder of his young son and found solace somehow in Rudra, I like that both fill each other's void without forgetting the valuable professional advices from judge Prakash to our already smart Rudra!

Maya finally tries to start a normal life, enjoy, and make new friends, but she found herself stuck in the middle between Meera and Viraj, she didn't try to interfere at all but she understood the feelings that Viraj has for Meera. But poor thing little did she know that she will also be part of the argument (referring to the kitchen scene between Viraj and Meera), her peace couldn't last for more than a day seems, I really want to know her reaction after what she heard. Will she ponder over her relationship with Rishaan?! Where will this lead her to?!, I also noticed the dialogue between her and Viraj where she said that she just can recognize love lately though she has never been in love! Will that make her remove the dust off her feelings, will she accept her old identity?! will her new one develop feelings for Rudra?! had she already?! I mean I still remember that she started to trust him and she remembered his dialogue about her needing to live her life and open up?

Anyways I know you will come up with answers to these questions in your next chapters so I'll be patient 😉

Back to Meera and Viraj's scene, I think it was a good one. Love just happens it can't be controlled, one can even decide to move on, but they are never sure they would succeed. Viraj can't move on and at the same time Meera can't promise him anything, she knows she might be running after an illusion with Rishaan but still she can't help it and she can't afford to hurt her best friend Viraj, she told him she can only be responsible of destroying her own life but not his, I'm glad at least she is aware of what she is doing and she isn't delusional!

Bittuji and Maya's scene was endearing, I hope he can become a real father figure to her, she never had one! she dearly needs love!


Rishaan's scene in the bathroom, poor thing, he is hurt physically and emotionally!! how much more can he take?! I also think like Hiya, maybe his breakdown isn't far anymore!


Shaurya is just his creepiest, shrewd self, unfortunately he was one step ahead of the brothers, and now we have an unconscious Rishaan, what comes next, torture?!! Poor Rishaan!! but I know Rudra will come to the rescue I just hope he comes at the right moment.

Waise why do I think that Shaurya will talk to Rishaan about Rk and Madhubala thinking he is the Rk Maya was referring to?!!


Eagerly waiting for your next chapters, you better buck up, two years reading this FF, we need a closure soon!!! 😆



P.S : as usual ignore any typos, so lazy to go through my comment once again 🤣

Congrats for new thread.Awesome updates. Lake scene is like something is happening in front of my eyes.Poor rishaan ,Has he some painful past.

Originally posted by: Valar.Morghulis

Hi anita!!! 🤗

How are you?? What's up??

Thanks! Around ten... maybe ... I don't know for sure though! 😆

If you are going to read it, I would love to have your feedback! 😳

Beautiful chapters Maria. A long update.. Sorry i could not comment last chapters because of lack of time. But this time i have to comment because we have reached a new thread and that calls for a celebration 🥳

Reserving my space for comment...I will read the chapters now and get back here again 😛

UNRES

OMG OMG!! That was way more intense than I could ever imagine!!

In my last comment in Thread 1, I was still in the catch up mode, so trying to understand the characters all over again. But now these two updates have been so eventful and action packed!!

First of all, the brothers going after the monster 're-incarnated' without taking much help with them was kind of reckless I suppose. But even then they were not exactly privy of what to expect...

Their accident was terrifying, but what followed after that was way more horrific. You won't believe me, I read the first part and that very night I had a scary nightmare which made me wait for some more time to get back to the story 😛 ...so you know how efficient you are to portray scenes with your words in your readers' mind 😳

So Shaurya is a diabolical character who lives two extremely different lives at the same time...no wonder Kapoor brothers would face lots of hurdles to bring his heinous crimes to light.

As usual, the conversation between the brothers is cold and detached even after the horrific accident, though it seems Rudra's persistent attempts at getting into his brother's head are coming to effect slowly.

Viraj was like a blow of fresh air in this assemblage of people haunted by their past...he loves Meera and does not deter from making it clear to her, as well as make her realise her futile attachment to Reeshan. I suppose now Maya will try to help him in her way, although it would not be accepted by Meera all too well. Or may be Maya will try to keep herself away from all this fiasco, as she already knows her position in Reeshan's life is all too complicated for her as well as Meera. But finally it was good to see her getting some sort of comfort from Bittuji.

And now, the showstopper...what was that? Shaurya must have been informed about the involvement of police in the dead bodies found from his property. Is he going to take Reeshan as hostage to get himself safely out of the way? Or is it going to be more gruesome than that? It felt as if I am sitting at the edge of my seat and watching this hair-raising thriller on a big screen.

You are a god-gifted writer...this story should get appreciations from a bigger population if you publish it beyond TV show forums..

Waiting for more...let's see what is going on in that convolutions of your grey matter
😉