FF: Ishq Wala Love(LAST PART) 10.10.13 pg-136

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twinkle-star

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Posted: 12 years ago

#661

Yeah dutta is sooo sweet Aish...Awesome update Rose dear...Will be back soon 😳😳

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aishwish

@aishwish

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Posted: 12 years ago

#662

You must be super amazed by my timing till now...let me tell you I was about to follow my usual schedule but as you asked me comment asap...see I'm here, someone too is getting too much importance...huh!!😛

Hmmm...so this is one you were so nervous about...lets see what there that's making you so unsure!!!😈 BTW, since you have re written it, I wonder how the first draft looked like. Anyways moving to this one, so you are not quite pleased with this one...why???? may be because it is a little short and it has just a glimpse of dutta but rosie dear consider this too na...it also has an ill supriya to compensate😆. Well on a serious note...I guess it's the execution you are having issues with. I'm not sure, I'm guessing. As far as my opinion as a reader is concerned, yes may be I have a little (actually only one) complain with this one ...but I've a lot of praises for you as well.

So, starting from the firsts sequence...kaafi hara bhara ff hai ye, I must say.😛 No you chose a perfect place for their debate...somehow, I didn't wanted to take place it in the kitchen. Now my only complain is I felt that there were not enough verbal confrontation shown, somehow I feel a little more exchange of dialogues should have been taken place between these two. The sequence ended a little early, perhaps you yourself don't realize that what a brilliant job you have done while characterizing subbu...I understand a sidey character like subbu cannot be trusted enough to be assigned to hog majority of the space but it's a wonderful character that you have created...trust her rose and moreover trust you abilities.

Now time for praises, I know they make you so proudy, still, you leave me with no other option. So, I just loved how your take on subbu's take...She is being judgemental...bingo, very good, If she would have shown trying to understand everyone's point of view, in just one go, that would sounded a li'l inappropriate to me...I liked how she passed the verdict against dutta that too so hastily...quiet realistic...it was so human of her to do this...she had spent time with supriya and nakusha, it's only dutta she is foreign to...so quiet justified that she found it easy to accuse him, and also what I loved was how as a woman she sided these two ladies...and most striking, nakusha still occupies the same place for subbu as she used to before, and her being a prostitute has nothing to do with it...may be because she herself comes from a lower strata...may be poor in monetary matters but they are far rich than these so called society people when it comes to sensitivity. But still like most of the people she failed to see dutta's pov, his pain and agony and I like it...fair enough,it should take place like this only...motherly instincts do make you biase.so applauds to you. You were brave enough to write it...take the oiling scene for instance...she's playing a KMH...readers's wrath are sure to shower her, still you made her react the way it should be. Brilliant.

OMG...he brought mangoes for her...this should be the highlight❤️. Now my hubby must get me mangoes as well when I'm pregnant😳. Anyways...this time I liked that you kept this scene as apart of narrative instead of showing it happen...dutta would have have sounded too cheeky.😆 But her possesivness was very cute.

And wowho...Dutta scene❤️.aah! a sweaty dutta is equal to a sexy dutta☺️. But this scene took my heart away. Do give us some more tasha scenes..plz plz plz...I'm sick of this sick sups!😛😆! Nah! I like aspects other than tasha as well...but you knw, na then I don't get anything to imagine😳. I just loved how it took a while to him to realize she was talking about the baby...fatherhood is still in the process for him. And it also because he doesn't spend much time with her or speaks a lot about the baby. Awww,,,,do I need to say how much I loved this scene. Yes? Okay so I absolutely loved it...esp. when he dismissed the contracter or whoever ...coz he was busy with the mood swings...and how he knows it, coz he reads parental books..awww...can somebody be more cute!!❤️ But why was the shopkeeper so shocked when he asked for the book...is wasn't like he said I need a book coz I'm pregnant😆. Nah ! I know what you ment, I was just kidding.

I quite liked the feet symbolism..subbu is quite right!!! Being an aged person she can see what thses three can't or wish to dn't see...now that I know she has nothing to do with her on screen husband I found her more right,😆 questions that bugs her, bugs me as well and knowing that even the writer doesn't know the answer or if she knows doesn't tell me...they bug me more

Kisi aur ladki ko ma bana deta hai...well she is right at her own place but why does it cracks me...as if dutta nahin hai koi virus hai🤣

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twinkle-star

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Rocker

Posted: 12 years ago

#663

Wow awesome update dear….Loved it a lot…. Your starting description was awesome dear…..Loved Naku & Subhu ki talk❤️…Wow…Naku was proud about Dutta's social works…..Loved her reactions while talking about Dutta….Oh Nooo😲!!! Don't say like that Subhu!!!...Our Dutta is sooo sweet…Poor Subhu😳…She couldn't digest the facts….Loved Naku ki Immediate reply…Poor Subhu😳…She went through lots of shocks😲….Now she was more worried about Naku's Future😳…Love this lady❤️…Awe this Dutta is sooo sweet❤️❤️❤️…He bought huge box of mangoes for Naku❤️…..Awe sweet Naku❤️…She didn't share those mangoes with anyone❤️…Supriya suffering with food poisoning😆!!! I'm very Happy😆…She need this punishment😆…Wow…I really enjoyed Dutta Naku ki Phone conversation…Oh Man!!! This Dutta is sooo sweet yaar…Can't find anyone like him...Loved his care & concern dear….Loved Dutta's smile…Awe Dutta reading books about parenting…..He is a perfect man yaar…Oh Subhu!😡!!!...Please believe Dutta yaar…He is the gem of person...This Subhu spoiled our Tasha's Phone conversation…Now I hate her😡

Totally awesome update dear..Loved it a lot❤️...Thank you sooo much for your wonderful update...Waiting for the next update😳😳 ...Please update soon dear😳😳

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Hamlet53

@Hamlet53

Sparkler

Posted: 12 years ago

#664

hi Rosie posie..
What a refreshing update, calming , brimming with warm summery weather and references to palatable delights .. mangoes, gol gappas.. yummy..all the things I have occasionally,when I can make time.. mangoes of course cost a fortune , and don't smell as good, but still do have them and wish I was home.
IWL~ Chapter 23
Rosie, loved the subtle comparisons between the hubbub of inner city and the tranquility of the outer city areas. It is notable that Naku has formed quite a comfort level bond with Subu, so much so that, she confides in her matters that pertain to , the master and mistress. But I am impressed that later on Naku realizes her folly , and holds herself, rather honestly and gracefully, responsible wholly on the subject of surrogacy. It is not difficult for Subu to calculate that Naku is bit too interested in the master. Loved the reference you made to seed, nurturing and the fruit .. it was very apt.Subu ,is very tough in her opinion about the whole issue revolving around her master, mistress and this girl.. It's like Subu epitomizes how most people would see this rather odd circumstance,with a raised eyebrow and lots of idle talk..
Dutta and Naku's phone call was typically Dutta.."what"? but still bemused by her in his quiet shy manner..
Thanks Rosie,once again a delight to read, great descriptive pages..continue please.. much love, hammie.

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-bharti-

@-bharti-

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#665

Res..

Dear Rose

Terribly sorry for taking this long to post my comments. But must admit such is the beauty of your writing it was a pleasure reading all the 4 updates back to back including the promos, Brillant work indeed!

Chapter20

Dutta n nakusha both begining to realise their true feelings for each other moreso dutta.

Huh, love seems so simple but can really be a very complex emotion. It is the most powerful thing yet the most painful too when its not reciprocated n the most fulfilling when realised. Only the choicest see n experience it. Naku was ready to sacrifice her love, her whole being just to see him happy, to see him n supriya happy... that was true love.

She was well aware of the strong emotions she felt for him but since he never reciprocated she tried to maintain a distance n hide her feelings. Even thou Dutta cared for her wellbeing more than the child from the very begining there was no evidence of something beyond, wasnt sufficient to assume he loved her. But Ofcourse now he is slowly n surely certain its nothing but love he feels. It would be interesting to see how he handles supriya now onwards. Bechari Supriya still confident of pulling off her plans even thou she sees a sea change in him.

Aww, dutta,s thoughts looking at the newborn babies was indeed well written, very cute. Im surprised naku didnt faint seeing him holding her hands n dozing off near her bedside lol... Rose, the lyrics of the song fitting really perfect with their emotions. . 👏

Chapter 21

The return from the hospital has changed so much between the trio, one can sense the strong undercurrent of simmering emotions ready to spillover..

Nakusha absolutely on cloud nine but i wonder if she is aware that this new found happiness is goin to burn supriya,s house? Its indeed sad that even thou she,s deserving of all the love n happines its coming at a price, a very heavy price. Dutta too unmindful of the looming hurdles is letting himself for the first time to experience n feel the most elusive thing in his life, love

Hmm supriya now tryin to make him see reason somehow, to avoid the embrassment of making it public the true facts of her pregnancy, she will pull all stops to set things right for herself err for her so called family. But dutta has already emotionally receded, n now physically too he finds her company suffocating. It will be a uphill task to convince or change his mind now. He is ready to face the world or rather doesnt care for anything except naku n the baby. So Love conquers all, lol.. Even nakusha is finding it difficult to help supriya. Ab kya hoga supriya?

Chapter 22

Sahab biwi aur ghulam title i gues should fit the story Rose.. Lol... Or gharwali baharwali lol..

Human beings rarely find peace... nakusha is worried for him, dutta unhappy she,s leaving, supriya worried of his growing closenes to naku, subbu unnecessarily bothered with the confusing complex relations... Lol...

Haiinn? Its like dutta pampering a small child with her first Mobile lol.. Supriya is left out of the excitement. But on a serious note its like handing her the powers which only a wife can demand, rights over his time n attention.

Naku,s childlike excitement cooking for him n his relishing the food, should have sent alarm bells ringing for sups... But she is under a false sense of security. Dutta is a lucky man according to me, lol.. two ladies vying for his attention, Gadha not taking advantage at all, sigh!

Meanwhile its amusing to see subbu goin crazy over tasha,s growing cosiness. Haye haye, what a romantic interlude on the terrace.. saree ki pallu muh pe, lol... Ab toh ek romantic gana banta hain, nahi toh kuch karega i was anticipating, lekin nahi Uff! Romeo, Majnu etc.. wali dialogues by dutta, "tujhe itni asani se jaane nahi doonga" and finally both staring at lambi judai, naku waving goodbye like a loving wife. Maaf kardo rose kuch zyada hi filmy hogaya comments 😆

Chapter23

Is it Nakusha,s craving for golgappa or Rose,s lol...

Hahahaaa .. cleanliness freaks weak tummy, hilarious but so true, europeans know better..

But the counter reply of subbu to naku,s praise of dutta was stunning n i find it difficult to disagree in its entirety with subbu,s conclusion of dutta? He is totally preoccupied with naku,s thoughts, is hardly ever concerned for supriya,s needs.. ofcourse she has more than contributed for this degeneration of their marriage which subbu is not aware.

But dutta,s preoccupation with naku,s pregnancy has shocked even pw,s bookstores lol.. Hmm No wonder western nations have long begun paternity leave for fathers, as well... so that they can bond with the babies.

Does naku need any reason to call him? As ever her childish ways must be amusing as well as endearing to dutta who is all ears to her banter, err ok, harmonal imbalances i gues does play havoc lol..

Subbu has a valid point thou when she says that nakusha n dutta,s attraction for each other will surely end in heartbreak for someone not sure who ?

Rose, Hopefully you can find sufficient time to go throu this mammoth four comments long banter of mine. Also wish to Thank you for your kind words of encouragement n support during my absence..

take care.

Edited by -bharti- - 12 years ago

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uwith

@uwith

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#666

hi rose awesome ud...naku told truth to subbu...she feel naku will hurt herself falling in love with married man...her fears are right...naku called dutta ...it did make her happy...waiting for next ud...regards uvi

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Nakusha

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Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#667

Hi rose

Loved the ud,naku is missing PV actually dutta..She had best time of life out here with dutta treating her as human

subbulakshmi represent the general view ,you portrayed it too well..it does cross mind wht future naku has falling in luv with a man who is married & does have his principles, he won't be unfair to his wife ..Initially too he wasn't ready to get child out of wedlock

naku is in luv & dutta do care & luv her too..Waiting to see how things unfold..plz ud soon

a rose for a rose

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FASSBEN

@FASSBEN

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Posted: 12 years ago

#668

HI Rose

Loved the UD so subbu now knows the truth but she still worries for Naku that will be the one at the end of all this that Is going to get hurt. Dutta and Naku conv on the phone was nice and the mango bit I loved.

Thanks as always Pls UD really soon