FF: Ishq Wala Love(LAST PART) 10.10.13 pg-136 - Page 65

Originally posted by: twinkle-star

hi star

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intelligent girl😊

Originally posted by: aishwish

This time I'll give my views on the happening in the order they appear. So, the opening scene'..loved the idea of dwelling into their thoughts, during the car ride. And moreover I loved how, dutta and nakusha kept going back in their thoughts as they moved ahead. I really like nakusha being so close to nature'..the way she enjoys it to the fullest, it gives a freshness to the update as well. On a whole I really love the idea of improvising nature in a way or other in most of your works..thank u so much now waiting to know what u didn't like . So, she has been discharged'..the hospital's description is so very apt, I myself suffer from white coat syndrome, can very well underastand what she must be feeling'.but now I want to feel, how it feels when dutta is around in hospital. *pouts*😳 and one more thing I loved is how dutta took care of nakusha, well I always love a nursing dutta because he always remains in his limits..right ..lol.., remembering that he is one woman's (read aishwarya) man..hmm why not , no harm in dreaming ☺️unlike when he's being nursed and people try to take unethical advantage of my sweetu😡. But what I loved the most that life showed a full circle, when dutta was injured naku was worried in the very same way na😳..yes you get what u give , pyar do pyar lo ..lol..''nakusha has been loved so rarely in her life, that she was happy with whatever little attention she got from supriya '..loved how she is finally sensing supriya's selfish approach towards her..ONLY when she had dutta's selfless care. And what I really respect about nakusha is that she is completely okay with supriya infact she respects the fact that supriya keeps the baby above her and yet secretly enjoyes dutta's concern..who wouldn't be okay on getting his undivided attention , concern n lub 😆

Now dutta's part''as you know I have certain issues with it, but first thing first. Awww'..he sounded so cute while being careful during driving❤️'..koi meri aise care kyun nahin karta..for that u need to get pregnant ..oh i forgot u r dying to get pregnant with his child 😒''I'm noticing that flashes of the consummation night which use to bother him, now have been replaced by nakusha's pain sticken face And the ultrasound sequence'..see I loved it, it had everything required, the correct proportion of emotions and what not. Loved how there was a little touch of twist''when he thought something happened to nakusha. Awww'..why is he so cute man😳. But still if I felt something was missing, it's because may be it was a part of narrative..you are right it was a part of narrative had it been a full fledged scene then things would have been different but somewhere i was bored of writing scenes related to ultrasound so this time didn't emphasis on it much , I feel the impact of the sequence could have been enhanced to a much more greater extent if instead of "telling" the sequence , you have showed it taking place'on a whole I felt the portion of narrative in this update was little more than required'..but but but this is only my personal opinion and strong chances I might me wrong...no no u r right ..i was just taking the easy route and u caught me ..naughty girl 😳 But now get happy as I found something which is really praise worthy in the sequence all the three characters were so entact to their present mindset during the scan'..nakusha only concerned on bringing dutta close to the child'dutta always worried about nakusha's health and supriya oblivious to everything except for the baby even to the new bond his husband and this other woman is forming, Dutta is quite worried for her, even the joy of seeing his child was short lived in front of his concern for nakusha'..will have to see how will he keep a positive environment around nakusha. And supriya, she is so engrossed with her scheming that she doesn't even realize that her husband is lost in someone other than her's thought, wonder will she gain more at the end or loose..unknowingly she has already lost him 'for the time being she is looking quite admant on staying in mahabaleshwar.

Next, subbu, I lovehow you have portrayed this lady throughout'..and in this one as well, her whole take on this issue is so real..thanks even i quite like her character she gives that outsiders view on the relationship of tasha n sups 'anyone in her place will feel the same uncomfort as she is but still her concern about nakusha is the same and I respect her a lot for this...there is more to come in the future updates

The dinner sequence was a really lovely tiny winy break from the usual tension that's going on in the story..i am glad u liked i thought u would say what was the need for this ''.and awww'how he caught her peeping and served some more helpings for him. Leave alone whether it's love, care or whatever but they have a bond. Aura ab aa gayi kayamat ki raat🤢'next time please make sure that whenever you make dutta go out he has a cot with him, so that he should't have to share bed with some chudail😡 in the absence of couch but hayee re mera sweet sa adorable sa vishwamitra '..majaal hai jo thoda sa bhi phisla ho..see always guard his izzat ❤️. On a serious note'.this one is brilliant, the coldness that's being creeping in their relationship has been described so very well and the fact that supriya is unaware of it''that's how their relationship is progressing...personally me too liked the scene a lot especially the fact that he didn't shrug her off instantly ..that would have been an over reaction and yes he is a dutiful husband 😳 making him all the more adorable

LOLzzz'.for a quiet person like dutta it's certainly hard to handle two ladies talking to him😆. But this whole sequence pulled out supriya's manipulative talents so very well'she has manipulated nakusha perfectly and turned the whole situation in favour of her''but as usual she couldn't fool dutta, however supriya is right in her place for a place like patil wadi, I guess you can never make understand the concept of surrogacy leave alone making it accepted, if there is any surrogacy business it has to be the way supriya has planned but the problem is dutta is not a kind of person who'll bend his principles for a reason called society..he will have to bend his rules , maybe keep things under wraps for as long as possible , it's shallow enough for him to discard. But I guess if he chose to keep mum when the plan was being executed then he has no right to ruin it now when it is implemented, he did reacted late'let's see how he handles the whole situation now, an extremely manipulative and cunning supriaya an equally stubborn nakusha with a delicate health and his extreme anger and lack of patience'.this is gonna be tough...this story was n will never be easy babes In the whole sequence they both are fighting with each other for each other'..loved that now slowly your making them do that openly. I just loved the whole part but expecial mention to the last part'this recent development of this story'I'm just loving 'this is fun, he is like angry to the extent , anger spitting from his whole body and yet he has to control it'he sounds so cute while doing that'.even supriya use to test his patience but he gave up on her'.here the problem is he cannot give up on her, even if he want , his heart won't allow...thank u so very much , its like walking on a soapy floor where chances of slipping are high and i will fall at some points but hopefully don't end up hurting your expectations from this ff

I loved the update inspite all the little issues and eagerly waiting for the next..now me waiting for ur next set of comments ❤️

Chapter 22 (see even I keep tracks😉)

Oh my my…….okra, so American haan!!😛😆 Waise I must say me and my sweetu have quite similar preferances…..mujhe bhi lambi masaale waali bhindi pasand hai…aur haan masaala zara tez hi hona chahiye😳 :P….and you know what masaala bhindi is one of the few things I can cook very well…so I was happily imagining myself cooking it for him😳 ….and tell me one thing, why in every work of yours dutta gets to eat lentils😛….I mean there are so many other types of pulses as well as in chane ki daal, tuar ki daal, maa ki daal😆 okay okay before people start thinking that this is masterchef's forum, I must go back to commenting business.

Look a reader has nothing to say when what happens in a story…..but how it happens, with every progressing chapter a reader's share of saying increases. While the story is in the establishment is taking place…you may make any character react in whatsoever way you wish to….but once its been established, one has to keep all the characters within the frame established, even if any character attempts something unpredictable, it has to be predictable in certain terms….so as the reader can relate with the character, they must identify the character as the one they have been knowing from the very beginning…….and I loved this ff in this term. And next….the way you have used subbu, you are milking every possible potent of that character…..brilliant. Subbu in a way represents the outer world…the society, which gets hushed in front of power (patils definitely have that power) but can't be quieted. And yet feels great to see that the soft corner naku has nothing to do with any power or anything for that matter, it's plain motherly affection…still sometimes I doubt her, don't know why…I guess ACP pradyuman's spirit has gotten into me😆. Subbu at present is the only one worried about the future of this trio equation…..and as an elder she can very well sense how disastrous it might be….I quite like the symbolism with the shattered plates……one out of the three or who knows all of them gonna have a destiny similar to it….what I super liked is inspite of all this she is intact to her maid characteristics….loved where supriya caught her eavesdropping. Poor lady she is so baffled with these three's equation that she desperately wants to know as much as possible.

Aww…..the way she was dreading about his leaving, left me in tears (you know when I say this what I mean😉) and the way she was cooking for him…….savoring whatever proximity she can have. Seems subbu is yet to figure out that she loves him.

But loved the sequence…..absolutely loved it. Seriously seriously loved it to the core (stop laughing I know you find me being nice funny😉)this is what I was desperate to know, this is what I always looked forward…..Dutta is absolute dutta…..in your words only or may be supriya's, once let his guard down….then not giving a damn about anything. Supriya does know a lot about him..if only she could learn to respect and admire those traits….life would have been much different. Seriously rose I'm so relieved to see dutta acting in this manner, it was he who chose to maintain a distance and now it's he only who chose to yell her name like anything……if he is worried for nakusha…..once he has admitted this to himself, he has no problem in admitting this in front of ANYONE……you know when it comes to dutta…..i'm very rigid and sensitive regarding some of his traits and can't compromise….I'm very happy with dutta's characterization in this particular piece.

But why didn't nakusha had a cell phone earlier? So that you can pen this particular sequence?.😛 But loved the sequence….so so endearing. Infact this endearing aspect of their relationship I have always been loving……. nakusha of this ff…..sometimes compensates baaji's absence. Do try to incorporate more sequence of such texture…for me this is one of the USP😳. I just love how dutta tries to be as angry and stern yet couldn't help but get amused at her antics….and ek baar phir se…..dutta sterning reminding her to call that too in front of sups…thanks a lot rose for keeping my lion roaring ..if even for once dutta would have thought to do it behind sups or everyone or anyone's' back….you can't imagine how disappointed I would have been…but I can see you are walking very well on the soapy floor.😉.you know the thanku and bellcome were really funny…reminds me the sequence where dutta says "aati hai par tere jaisi achchi english nahin aati" 😆but strange I found "issse baat bhi kar sakte hain" …even more funny.😆😆😆

And aww…the dinning sequence but wow aspect of it was supriya getting aware of their secret bond and even more infact super wow aspect…she thinking it's temprory….oh! now I understand gadhe ki ardhangini hai…thoda gadhipan toh banta hai boss😆😆.

And the last one……..it's absolutely so touching to see him relishing the 'saab address….they are creating a new bond…no may be they have already created….now it's being strengthen. It was heartwarming the way she asked that whether she can call with without any purpose….and they the way she mused about how bad she used to feel bad when dutta used to call sups….and dutta sticking to his buddhu avatar still caan't understand what she meant….I guess now they need to have a phone call conversation to know much more about each other's feelings…….I just loved how naku initiated the convo….these are those small things which supriya has been failing on from years. I just loved how dutta wanted her to stay his craving for holding the moment was amazing…..as if someone thirsty from ages is trying to quench his thrust from whatever drops he can get…..quite similar to our reaction to Mishal's small glimpses😆. Dutta still is concerned more for her than the baby…….you know when he asked her about her decision to carry on the pregnancy ….I was like come on dutta you need to distract her from it….but then came the golden words from the horse's mouth…seriously now I realize how important it was to ask that question……yes his determination can make anyone jittery….but I want to trust his trust.

His going back was something, I wasn't expecting…so now I can't wait to know what happens next…wicked you…always know when to freeze the update. So far this is one of my fav updates…with no twist n turns, no drama…..simple with a constant flow with each sequence properly worked on. only one thing I want to know how he follows doctor's advice of keeping her and environment around her happy

Waiting for the next❤️

Originally posted by: Nakusha

thanxs twinkle luv the song😊