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Originally posted by: sinak

Awesome update.

Originally posted by: aamirkhanfan

awesome update

Originally posted by: chithoo

okie the nightmare continues😆😆😆 D wanted to fight his feelings for Nakku by sleeping off😃 but has been pulled back by Shalu😡 to continue with it

champ i am not letting u off the hook 😡 just because u wrote "nakku's eyes lock with D for a 'brief moment'" i have had enough of their eyelock ...do u hear me...hello😆😆😆
meri dazzling star ...aaja *hugs* ...haaahaaa omg u know when I wrote brief moment I honestly thought of you LOL...and correctly you have picked up on it lol too bad viji unfortunate for you and fortunately for me I have selective hearing...
so now imma give them a background song for you..now this is what you will remember when their eyes lock..ready: anbe anbe kollathai ...kanne kannai killathai😆😆 there is another line that suits ur situation ...hmmm ...oh ...satrae nimirndhaen thalai sutrip poanaen😆 ANBE ANBE KOLLATHE!

hmm i seem to like varun, seems spunky, nice intro😃... so, he has a degree in psychology, i am sure u have something in store for him😉 anyways i am not commenting on the two love birds🤢 lost in each others gaze🤢🤢 at this moment 😡 u fixed that yourself by sending Roops in😈😆😆
haa after Abhay now Varun is spunky I guess he grew up ;) Now with varun I am not entirely sure what to do with him so if u have any suggestions i will surely without a doubt be all ears for that :P

nakku is banging pots and talking to herself 😈 yedi pagal ho gayi😃 OMG ganpat and jagtap dada think her to be their "innocent sweet little one"😕😕😕 and i thought Jagtap dada was smart😔 he is talking about dutta being like 'ice' and nakku being the one to melt him with her warmth...u too dada😒
She is not crazy just annoyed lol ...i mean you would be too in her situation but then I also expect being u there would be no time wasting when it comes to being with Dutta.

hmmm SP thinks everyone needs a break and they go on a picnic😃 but no one cares about giving me a break from "DN gazing " torture😆

jokes apart, champ loved yr desciption of the picnic site...yup will sure be great for camping😛. ahaa D has to offer his hand to haul up nakku 😳 he is mighty scared of varun😆😆 but after all the ignoring he did of nakku the whole week he is highly offended when she does the same😆 the boys teach the girls to skip rocks on water and it is nakku's turn...ofcourse she cannot and D is there to teach her 🤢🤢🤢 yeah he loves teaching stuff when it requires stance, form, angle (remember the MAA training) 😡😡 saab 😒 next time u teach it should be done only with a board and marker nothing physical😭
Yeah Dutta surely doesn't leave a single chance eh ...hauls her up ...teaches her rock throwing...LOL viji why don't you buy him a board and marker then maybe he will use it ...

Finally baaji😳 comes to my rescue😛 as usual😆 loved his 'trouble releasing hand' remark🤣 i told u he is the smart one😃. The group decides to play volleyball and nakku leaves to impress the oldies🤢 dava deni hain 🤢... ek bhi mauka nahi chodti..she has all the tricks up her sleeve😆

of course baaji is my favo character...i love his presence anywhere haha

oh i loved the cute puppy 😛 my favourite😳 hmm at least nakku and i have something in common😆 so she picks up the puppy and bumps into Morey😲😲😲 thank God she was spotted by the watchful eyes of Arjun and D, oh the fear of re-living the darkest day of your life her desire to run away from it blindly is totally justified, but poor Arjun is shot in the process only after beating Morey to pulp though😈 and that is not the end of it for D swears to hunt him down too later😃 can't wait for that day😛
ooh yeah i imagine the same puppy as ur dp ...yes so now morey here...arjun shot...and D with Naku...and of course the day will come surely where D will give him his end...

nakku is trembling and D pacifies her and calms her down😳 but gadha😕 tries to pull her off when she is finally in his arms hugging him for dear life😆😆

lovely update champ😛 but u sure know when to scoot😡 bring your bottoms back here and continue😆😆😆
well yeah i dunno i got mental block and figured why not end it...
endings are great when left on a good part muhaha :P
now i will bring my bottom back here again when the UD is ready 😉😆
spark meri dazzling star... love you 24/7
thank you for the lovely comment...love it always ...my biggest fan hai tu 😆
you have been there through all three FFs ...we are getting old together lol
haa see you lovely! take care...phir milenge chalte chalte

love u 24x7

spark 😛

Originally posted by: Pushpa95

Hi daya , awesome update dutta annoyed with is feeling and naku annoyed with dutta for avoiding .everybody know about dutta and naku feeling but this two do not know they are still confused and avoiding each other .omg what happened naku saw morey .morey saw naku in her true colour and arjun got shot .i hope he will be fine naku and dutta in jungle hope he can consul naku take her fear out of her and teach morey a good lesson it going to be interesting will be waiting thanks for pm lots of love take care

Originally posted by: Hamlet53

Hello to the genius who quoted their reserved spot and commented elsewhere
Eee *ducks* don't hurt me ...just pulling ur leg don't make me really pull it so you fall!
Ok me back now ,just finshed reading it...kaise hai tu? bunged up lardki, hope you are better than ,yesterday...
better than yesterday yes but not completely better yet :( At least i have somewhat of a voice now! haaa much to your dislike 😆
listen,I did not read your promo..me not watch trailer..me go straight into the real thing...so have to say good UD, parts of it very appealing,sort of a fresh feeling, sweet smelling ...so
oh u don't like getting ideas before hand ...straight to the real thing...chal thats good and glad you liked it :)

NTL,eyes that dupe!...chapter 19.

~ have to say pappy, Varun's auto-biography made an impact on me, more so his current vocation,clearly to me the guy accepts a challenge, and certainly makes a difference to people! Roops arrival,and to top it all, previous brief acquaitance with Varun,surely spells out a possible pairing?..
did it...lol i wasn't really sure what auto-biography to give the dude...kinda spun it off on the go lol ...but yes his entry was actually only because some requested pairing for Roops too :P

~ haa haa, Dutta's cold war brings about the clatter! bang of pots! from Naku ..well quite a normal reaction from her end..may be he needs a smack !he's certainly calling out for it!..fun to read Daya.
bum pe laat! de de😉

~ So the family and close friends interest in Dutta's undefined relationship ,con tinues to be a hot potato! it's interesting how well wishers consider it their business toget involvedin people's private affairs,even though they play it by ear!...😆 .You brought out this truth in an amusing way ...enjoyed it..
oh glad you liked that bit...actually had it in for another reason but then ended up changing plans so was a useless scene altogether 😕

~ now pappy , for me, one of the elevation points has to be the vividly described picnic spot...so imaginative it was, very well written ,my senses stirred!
oh great! i was trying to let all picture what I am ...so i tried to describe it the same ...so that the scene can be visualized easily

~ the rock climb scene is yet another reader's delight ...with his subtle emotional snippets which tell us the man softens, and reckons certain unmentionables even to himself...and her on the other hand gives him the blank ,cut out snubs!😆 loved it! I was quite fascinated by spin the rock activity,the complete bit kept my attention going,well described Daya ! however the highlight is when Dutta attempts to instruct her,complete with actions supported by reasons to achieve a desired out come! which they both achieve, together! very LTL1 ,feel to it..
i enjoyed writing this bit but I had re-write that part as I lost it in the middle :S and was so pissed ...and then re-wrote it but i like it better the second time...haa of course u like a her blanks and cut out snubs hahaa teri style hai ...😛

~ the little boy looking for his lost puppy,the arrival of a certain police man was a ,fine idea of honing readers into the dramatic turn of events,so well done Daya👏.Also how interesting in the volley ball game scene ,who would look out for Naku,the beau! and her brother! awwhh.
yeah i needed reason for her to wander about and made one haha ...oh yeah loving bro and the beau who can't seem to keep his eyes away from her yet he says there is nothing between them...haaa he's quite annoying ...i need him to make up his mind ...

~ now the exciting text ,every word strung together Morey, the immoral! ..high drama for me ..just one question ,comes to my mind oh the lie about her true idenity will it be washed revealing ,the pure truth?..pause ..well my speculation or it it every one else's as well?...and so I read on ,Arjun launches a third degree attack on this policeman,and bang! gets shot himself!
yeah drama ! yeah her color will be gone..after this and just the explanation about it left...
Dutta finally understands ,the penny drops, Naku!, goes after her ,finds her..surely he can sense her body reactions in his embrace! yand much to my relief he responds in a manner we all want him to reciprocate in... TLC! now he can feel that this embrace goes beyond "we are just good friends"!😉..for here in this moment he is Adam and she is his Eve, even though Adam as expected, is likely to act dense, later on... but Eve as always will emerge stronger both in her heart and mind! in comparison...
brilliantly worded hammie! yes this hug defo something more natural...just right...only for each other :)

Thank you ,my dearest sharmilee,papsi, phisti and the rest...for a lovely update ,enjoyed it immensely..please continue...look after your self too...much love xxhammie

thank you hammie...for the wonderful comments...always love reading it...love you lots...take care...

Originally posted by: sona89

HI Daya

wonderful UD ...loved it dutta & naku avoiding eachother ...each scared to acknowledge the love they feel ...morey entery suberb he got right & left from arjun ...dutta can only help naku through this ...jungle scene reminded me of ...Ltl jungle mein mangal 😊...Think abt it if you can corporate .UD soon

Originally posted by: uwith

hi daya

liked everything the ud was awesome regards uvi

Originally posted by: brvr

Hi daya,😉

Bharathi! Welcome welcome...

What's happening wth the two, is it some kinda game, the two staring n glaring at each other n the bet would be who blinks first, right? haha !!! you know I used to play that game with my brother as a child 😆 I can understand dutta is confused with his feelings n fighting against the tide but why isnt naku taking some initiative if she finds it all annoying. I guess she is blank too. Its that she is torn between her genuine concern for his well being n the irritation of not knowin his odd behaviour towards her. yesh and these two are driving everyone bonkers...With varun around n his closeness to naku is adding fuel to fire for dutta. He is quiet an interestin character. He is already familiar with roops, that's something.yes but don't think too much into his entry ...nothing spl he was brought for roops on request. 😆 but who knew he would be so handy lol ...i can use him well i believe but lets see if i will need to

Naku is lucky that both ganpat n jagtap r cool with her interst in dutta, actually me surprised too, but its not helping her as she has more people after her life pulling her leg at every opportunity. Yedi hain she refused to take their help, as if she was making any headway herself. Now i guess only dutta's parents n the new entrants r left out of this.

lol you know actually reason I had them find out was because i had something else planned but i chugged that out and changed the plan a bit so that scene became quite random and useless...but ur right only D's parents and soon they will realize too...thanks to D himself 😉 *hint hint nudge nudge)

The day long break has helped all to cool their heels n relax, dutta too slightly less agitated n ever ready to help naku n not leaving her out of his sight but without expressg much, silly pig! 😡 He is already showing signs of possessiveness when he extended his hand to her at the rock b4 varun could n teachg her the jumping stones with one stroke ha? perfect!!! Ok, now naku showin some attitude, wandering off only to come face to face with Morey, gosh! she is in the water. Liked how arjun was all raged to see him n took him on. Dutta's sensibly went after naku who was on the run like she had to escape frm the whole thing, getting hysterical. Luckily for her dutta catches up with her. OMG! arjun's shot, now this is got out of hand, hope the poor guy is well. So dutta is aware of naku's tormentor frm the past, it would be interesting how he would handle this.

yes and you will definitely see how he will handle it later ...but right now...its just D and N then come all the rona dhona when she finds out about Arjun ...

So daya continue soon n sorry for the delay, hammie is to be blamed partly for it, haha! 😃

thank you for the wonderful comments...love reading them...always a pleasure...take care mate...

phir milenge chalte chalte

Originally posted by: jagrutid

Okay hello there!😉 Back after your crash course I'm giving your ff a go I guess this is kind of test to see how I did on your crash course partner!So nakusha seems to be that little annoyed at dutta for behaving the way he is after his drunk state. They do say ignorance is bliss yaha toe kuch aur hein hai. I feel awkwardness as well as lots of irritation from nakushas behalf. Sounds like the patience ran out and she now too is angry 🤔at him.

Partner ! I am so glad you have come to read my work 😳 so lets see how well my crash course has informed you ...Naku's irritation is only because she does not know the reason behind it...so it makes her more frustrated esp when he won't even give her the chance to speak about it...

I can just imagine nakusha storming up to dutta and asking what the issue is, would have loved to seen that but no..Control nakusha ..control !😆

LOL she has done such bold moves with him...and surely I will make her do something like what u have mentioned to...but for the time being she will remain controlled 😆

Aw jagtap and ganpat teasing her bitchari the whole world seems to know and at the end of the day that is bound to happen ankhon😍 akhon mein joe batien hoti hai in dono ke beech loved the rock climbing potion. Baaji is so sweet bless him, I want my own baaji! lol:) oh jagruti! i too want my own baaji haaa he is the character i give all the mast and love too ...such a sweetie he is and that adorable little boy krish, trying to put a face to him but there is so many adorable little kids out there lol oh i had not thought of any kid 😆 you picture whom ever you wish .. Got to admit this moment of yours daya is very natural you see a child and your heart just melts be it a child who is smiling, making fun of you or just upset they have this amazing hold on you from the second you put eyes to them! 😳 yeahh tell me about it...kids are just soo adorable...what ever they do...its that innocence

Okay so them mysterious man turns up and poor nakusha is angry but how is her make up coming off? Aw atcha paani mein ghir gayi sorry! I guess morey is getting what he deserves but I kind of wanted it to be dutta who does the honors here. oh he was not done with...Dutta will defo do those honors eventually but for now...his eyes mind soul heart everything is behind Naku only... Anyways I'm sure that too will come as dutta seemed worked up about it however nakusha is the priority here. In the process Arjun gets hurt im sure this is enough reason for dutta to build on his anger. you are right! but they do not know he got shot yet...

Im kind of glad nakusha ran away into the jungle of course its not very safe but at least they get share a moment together without the family watching over them. the whole reason for this picnic scene was to pave way for the jungle scene 😆 more importantly nakusha seems very vulnerable after confrontation with Morey. This has to be my highlight the update, dutta and nakushas interaction. You've totally aced it here with nakushas sensitivity , her upset, bless her she just wants to hold on to him. totally feel my self getting emotional. Yaar aaj kal I'm becoming such a big softy..more than usual just get teary all the time and this last potion to the update..aw'! you cant leave it like that..awww next time i shall give you a tissue box ahead of time ...glad you liked that bit...i definitely felt that was necessary for in her vulnerability she finds the one who can truly bring her out of it all...and everything comes naturally for these to...the ease the comfort..the love...all of it ...

Looking forward to a bit of an emotional phase in the next chapter.
glad to have you on board mate...

Thank you very much daya, ive not done to badly at all everything made sense thanks to your crash- course.

yes seems to me you are on track ...ready to go with the flow :P

thank you for the lovely feedback...loved reading it...

Loved the update

Jag

take care partner...phir milenge chalte chalte !

Originally posted by: chithoo

okie got to go now champ😳...getting late have to fix dinner😕 and hammie😛 i was kidding😳 u know i love u too right 🤗...had to go after you for u r not writing to me