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Originally posted by: Hamlet53
hiya daya and missy ;apolgies from the late Latif... busy..held up ! okaay daya if this is the quality of work you produce when boarded on a bus,than I would give you an A# FOR effort,A# for creativity and expression... well done lady👏 lol aww thanks yeah this was what i wrote on the bus 😆 dunno what exactly inspired me but thank you for those kind, sweet, amazing words...means a lot...
~ the pangs of past memories and betrayal ,plus the helpessness of the existing undefined bond with Nakku were very well written and the words flowed easily to convey the mood👏
good mission accomplished then lol ...i worked hard on the wording of this update...well atleast for the very heartfelt scenes~ the bit where she is introduced to that side of his side which was subtteranean to her was quite moving ,in as much as it showed her complete vulnerability😭..but her desire to nurture this poor big mite, to care for him , was strong enough for her to contemplate that may ,per chance he might open up. but her constant fear of him was unhinging her, and you wrote it well Daya.😃 thanks again...i am glad u liked the way i wrote this one ...that was exactly the feelings i wanted to show with them...He,on the other hand did appear to be nothing short of a Bully doing exactly what he does best walk away,in stead of talking... I would say a certain degree of arrogrance or is helplessnessthat no oe would understand how he feels?😕 but this is what layers his persona, and as a writer yo have touched well on it⭐️ yup i thought it was so DSP to do that...so did it that way only ...i was initially planning an outburst but i thought this worked much better.~ discussion between the brother and sister on quite a weighty issue was interesting .. the young lad seems preety smart😛~ the kitchen scene was inevitable,the incident ,strikes the right cord to show some affectionand concern between the two,simple and sweet😊 yes i put this in there to show the concern/care he has from his heart for her...but the mind still dominates~ Wow so Baji takes us into the past! and what a past, very sequential ,very interesting the complete details...as a reader i was expecting from Ltl 1 Tthat thier will be her lover! but Daya😲you got me flabbergasted... but i liked it very clevery tweaked👏 ... lol yup supriya is not evil in this one...and i tried to make sure it was making sense i think this scene took longest for me to write... so now one can understand his two fold suffering ..losing sups and being blamed,and blaming himself for the tragedy! ..but makes you wonder..so what is this Nakku meant to do nurse himback to sanity? cure him from his boozing... yes I LIKE THE FEEL👍🏼 of where this story is going... yup evveryone has a better understanding of it all now...and u will soon see where Naku comes in and what is going to happen with the two of them now that all this is happening 😉~ the last scene was very touching ,no pun intended, very moving , very Daya style lol i have a style? LOL ...hmm glad you liked it 😳 no thingy migig! ho ha just simple speaking through the eyes,with a few in complete sentences... leaving us wanting for more ...😍thank you for a wonderfuly written piece of sheer delight... waiting for next... bit
aww thank you for you amazing comments...i have to say this was my fav...very touching words...thank you for that 😳😳xxxhammieoops forgot to comment on the sooongs😳...yes the first one personal favvy.. and appropriately used... ... missy ke shayeeri i know ,ar rather we all know... pyar me kuch bhibol sakti hai..own ye phir?
by the way sharmilee tim tim... for me your fantastic descriptivepassages were enough to transport hammie in the realms of rapture I mean literary raputureno Missy not panjer!😆 well done the pair of you👏aww thank you again ur wonderful words have me all woosy lol...am glad u liked the outcome of my writing...take care hammie...lots of love 🤗
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