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Posted: 18 years ago
#31
thiss is a dope story
pls cont 😛
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Posted: 18 years ago
#32
ur wish is my command 😊 here's the next part...


Part 7:
Bhoomi looked around for help but no one was around. Abhir had brought Joydeep to a very secluded area & they would be lucky if someone happened to walk by.

Fear was overtaking Manthan as he neared the beach. He prayed that nothing had happened to either, Bhoomi or Joydeep. He raced to the parking lot and almost ran over a couple who seemed to be in their own world walking towards their car. Manthan yelled at them to move out of the way and they heard him just in time. He got out & ran in the direction of the sea as he had heard waves crashing while on the phone with Bhoomi. He knew they had to be somewhere near the rocks. Then he remembered that Bhoomi had mentioned a phool wala & concluded that if they had gone past any phool wala then they must have headed east. He ran looking wildly around for any sign of them but could not spot them. He was still clutching his phone and put it to his ear to see if Bhoomi was still there. The line was not disconnected & he could hear Bhoomi's distant cries. He kept moving further down the beach in hope to see them.

Abhir lost it completely now. He looked menacing as he made his way back to the two again. He was disgusted to see Joydeep in Bhoomi's arms & outraged at the concern Bhoomi was showering him with. He closed the gap between them and looked down at Joydeep with eyes full of hatred. Bhoomi looked up and instantly clutched Joydeep tighter. Joydeep was trying to get up but hardly moved an inch. He didn't care about himself at the moment as he was more worried about Bhoomi. And to his horror, Abhir pulled Bhoomi up and dragged her away from him in a second. They were only a few feet away from Joydeep when Abhir stopped and pushed Bhoomi down. She fell & before she could react he was on top of her holding her down. "Maine socha tha ke tumhe yahan se lekar jaoonga lekin shayad tumhe kuch zyada hi jaldi hai. Ab main tumhare so called 'pati' ke saamne tumhe apna banaunga. Aaj to tum meri hokar hi rahogi.(I had thought of taking you away from here but it seems as if you're in a hurry. Now I will make you mine in front of your husband. Today, you will become mine no matter what)." Bhoomi screamed with fear flashing in her eyes as Joydeep, mustering all his strength that was left, crawled to Abhir's back and tried to drag him away from Bhoomi. Abhir without much effort turned back and landed a heavy punch across his face, knocking him out completely. The last thing he heard was Bhoomi screaming his name & then everything went blank.

As Abhir tried to pull Bhoomi's pallu off her & tried to kiss her, she fought back. So Abhir pinned her arms down with one hand & held her hair with the other. As he came close, Bhoomi started crying uncontrollably along with screaming. She tried to move her face away as Abhir came closer but he was pulling on her hair so tight she couldn't. As Abhir was about to kiss her lips he was yanked back with such force that he almost flew back and landed a few feet from Bhoomi. Before he could register what had happened, a heavy fist landed across the side of his face and he saw stars for a few moments. He slowly opened his eyes again to see Manthan glaring down at him. His eyes clearly said that he wanted to kill Abhir. Abhir was furious. Every time he came close to taking Bhoomi some Virani or the other managed to ruin his plans.



kaisa laga? do leave comments...
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Posted: 18 years ago
#33
awesome part 👏 👏
ahhh this abhir 😡 good thing manthan came on time
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Posted: 18 years ago
#34
wow... go manthan.. cant wait to read more.. plz continue..
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Posted: 18 years ago
#35
dat was sooooo gud...plz continue.
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Posted: 18 years ago
#36
sorry...haven't been able to update as regularly as i would've liked to but once again...computer problems...it should be sorted out by sometime midweek...but i do hope to post before that...but no promises...and i might be able to post tonight so keep checking 😉
Edited by ladoos - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
#37
plz continueeee.and continuee manthan / kt stroy as well 😳 😳 😳 hehe..i love this bhoomi/abhir/joy track as well..hehehe 😳 😃
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Posted: 18 years ago
#38
here's the next one...sorry to make you all wait for so long...my computer problem got fixed today so hopefully i'll be able to update regularly 😊


Part 8:
Manthan left Abhir for the moment & went over to see if Bhoomi was ok. She was sitting now & shivering & tears refused to stop spilling. Manthan slowly lowered himself and as soon as she looked up his face softened with concern & pain. She took a second to register that it was him and the next second she was in his arms, crying uncontrollably. Manthan held her close & soon his eyes were moist. Then he saw Joydeep lying unconscious and as he got up to go over to him with Bhoomi clutching him, he felt a firm hand on his shoulder. Without turning he asked Bhoomi to step away from him and go over to Joydeep & Bhoomi acknowledged. He turned around slowly with eyes burning with hatred. Before Abhir could open his mouth to say something, Manthan had knocked the wind out of him by landing a powerful fist in his stomach. And Manthan didn't give him a chance to recover again as he rained punches after punches on Abhir. "How dare you touch my sister!" roared Manthan. "I had warned you to stay away from her but today you crossed your limit. How dare you touch her, you @#%*#@!" Before Manthan knew what was happening, he was dragged away from Abhir. Someone…no not someone but many people…were trying to hold him back. But he didn't seem to care. His eyes were fixed on Abhir & the only thing he could think of was how much he wanted to kill him.

Manthan had lifted Joydeep up and was walking to his car with Bhoomi by his side. She still seemed to be in a shock but Manthan didn't say a word to her. He knew that she needed time to recover. It turned out that it was the police that were trying to hold Manthan back from Abhir. They had been notified by the traffic police that a guy was driving at top speed & breaking all road rules. They had been able to get his license # while he had hit traffic and the patrol had immediately confirmed it when Manthan had crossed them on his way too. They had chased him but he didn't notice and had finally been able to catch upto him at the beach. The inspector had witnessed the scene of Abhir knocking Joydeep out & then trying to rape Bhoomi far a distance & had realized why Manthan had been in such a rush. After clearing everything out, Abhir was arrested under the charges of, attempt to kidnap, physically abuse, kill, & rape. The inspector let Manthan go free and asked him to take his relatives home.

Manthan put Joydeep in the backseat with his head in Bhoomi's lap. She kept staring at Joydeep & again, Manthan didn't say anything. He knew he had to get them home soon. Manthan drove carefully and upon reaching home he didn't find anyone outside. He got out & picked Joydeep up & headed inside with Bhoomi following behind. All the family was in the lobby and when they saw the 3 at the door they let out gasps & rushed to them. Manthan asked them to step aside so he could take Joydeep upstairs to their bedroom. Manthan laid Joydeep down on the bed & took off his shoes & socks & then covered him with a light blanket. He turned to find the family looking at him with eyes full of questions. He searched for Bhoomi & spotted her by the window. He went over to her & held her close & she broke down finally. Manthan was crying too now and asking her to let it all come out. Tanya couldn't see her daughter in such a condition & rushed to them with tears in her eyes, "Manthan…Bhoomi, kya hua? Kuch batate kyun nahi? (Manthan...Bhoomi, what happened? Why aren't you saying anything?)" Karan walked over & Bhoomi rushed into his arms. Tulsi said, "Koi doctor ko phone karo. Joydeep ki halat achchi nahi hai (Someone call the doctor.Joydeep's condition isn't good)." Manthan replied, "I already called the doctor. He should be here any second now." And they heard Ramu kaka bringing in the doctor.

After the doctor left and Bhoomi had calmed down, Manthan told them everything from how Bhoomi called him & how the police had turned up. Karan was furious and wanted to go see Abhir at once and talk to the inspector to insure that he didn't get bail but Manthan said he already took care of it all as he had called Vijay, their lawyer, from the beach itself & had informed him in detail of all the happenings.



hope it was long enough to make up for being late 😛 but do let me know ur thoughts...i know it was a bit boring but i'm trying to make manthan's character stronger than it is portrayed in the show...give an explanation as to why he is the way he is besides him being all money minded...and there also has to be some incidents that will bring about a change in his attitude & personality...in short, i want to justify the changes in manthan...hope i haven't left anyone confused. be patient & trust me...you'll be in for a treat 😉
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Posted: 18 years ago
#39
does anyone else want me to continue?
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Posted: 18 years ago
#40
thanks Rock_Star! will post the next one tomorrow night...come back here tomorrow night to see what's in store next 😉

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