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Posted: 18 years ago
#21
you are an amazing writer.. and i love where this story is going.. please keep both tracks going when you write.. i like the bhoomi and joydeep track a lot..

great job.. please keep updating.. love reading ...
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Posted: 18 years ago
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thank u for all compliments! will try to live up to all the expectations...
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Posted: 18 years ago
#23
OMG! its fabuloussssssssssssssss 👏 👏 well done.. 😊 i m in luv wid ur fanfic... 😳
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Posted: 18 years ago
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alright...this one's gonna be a bit longer...hope u don't mind 😉

Part 5:
It had been at least three weeks now since Joydeep had lost his marbles the first time on finally getting a reaction out of Bhoomi. And over the course of these three weeks Joydeep had continued to loose his marbles again & again. As a result, Bhoomi & Joydeep were now good friends. While Bhoomi was still very much hesitant to take their relationship further, and as always, Joydeep waited with patience, it was the elders that, despite being elated at Bhoomi & Joydeep's friendship, seemed in a rush to expedite the relationship. Manthan had by now called a truce with Joydeep and had also become good friends with him. Surprisingly, it was Manthan that initiated this friendship, much to Joydeep's shock & to the amusement of the rest of the family. Manthan had felt a change in himself for quite some time now but these days he didn't know what had come over him. This change became more apparent after a very significant incident.

The day had begun on a good note, with the family witnessing Bhoomi & Joydeep fighting over who would do the flower & light decorations in the garden for the Lohri party being held that night. Joydeep didn't want Bhoomi to do it as he didn't want her to over exhaust herself till the party because if she became tired by the time of the party then he would loose his chance to dance with her. They had not had an opportunity to dance together since they had become friends and he knew he would like nothing better than to dance with her all night long. And Bhoomi didn't want Joydeep to do it because he had been involved in almost all the preparations that had been going on for about a week now. The argument had started during breakfast and apart from the arguing couple, the rest of the family looked on fondly at the two. Finally the family couldn't take it anymore and the elders assigned both to the task. While Bhoomi was tempted to retaliate, Joydeep, being the more sensible & respectful of the two, agreed to the elders' decision without a thought.

Joydeep ended up having to go out to the market to get more flowers & lights, thanks to Bhoomi's elaborate & larger than life designs. But Joydeep wasn't complaining. He had enjoyed every minute of it because Bhoomi was with him and even though Bhoomi didn't want to admit it, even she was happy with working along with Joydeep. Bhoomi had insisted on coming with Joydeep but Joydeep had refused her saying, "You rest till I get back and then we can finish this. I don't want you to be tired tonight because we're all going to have so much fun!" Bhoomi being stubborn and still not convinced that Joydeep would actually be able to find what she wanted decided to follow him. Joydeep had to look around a little before coming across what Bhoomi had wanted. He was happy that he had found what he was supposed to bring but more than that he was excited about not letting Bhoomi down. Bhoomi had been following him at a safe distance and now was parked two cars behind his and had a clear view of the shop. She was surprised that Joydeep had infact understood what she had wanted and had not given up till he found it. She smiled to herself and was about to head home before he caught her here that she noticed a car pull up to the shop.

She recognized it immediately as Abhir's. Fear flashed across her face and she froze. She saw him get out of his car & make his way to Joydeep who was busy putting all the shopping in the trunk and as he closed the trunk & turned around, he ran into Abhir. Joydeep was surprised at first and then immediately tried to step away from him but Abhir caught a hold of his arm and said something to him. Bhoomi couldn't hear anything and she knew that if she got out then Abhir would surely try to go after her and that could put both her & Joydeep's life in danger. Maybe Abhir's just here to scare off Joydeep but she was wrong. She saw Joydeep hold his ground without a trace of fear. This obviously seemed to anger Abhir & he in a fit of rage started dragging Joydeep to the nearside beach. Bhoomi panicked & got out the car & started following them. She dialed Manthan's cell on her way as she knew that Joydeep alone would not be able to handle Abhir. And if she tried to intervene then he might loose it completely and god knows what he'll do then. Manthan didn't pick up the 3 times that she tried calling him. She cursed her fate and decided that she would have to do something. But she decided to call Manthan one last time and this time he picked up.



i'd like to hear ur thoughts on this please! dil khol ke share karo 😛
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Posted: 18 years ago
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wow .. fabulousssssssssss..

plz continue soon 👏
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Posted: 18 years ago
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thanx for liking it so much😊...anyone else wanna share their thoughts?
Edited by ladoos - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
#27
wow dat was gr8. cant wait 2 hear da nx bit.
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Posted: 18 years ago
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posting the next part soon...
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Part 6:
Before Manthan even had a chance to say hello Bhoomi shouted, "Manthan, I need you! Please come fast." She then broke into sobs as she saw the sight in front of her. Abhir was beating Joydeep up left, right & center. Manthan became tense and asked where she was and all Bhoomi could utter was, "beach…phool wala…" Manthan asked her to hold the line & not hang up as he grabbed his keys & ran out to his car. The family members that had been in the lobby and by the entrance looked at him worried as they tried to ask him what had happened. He didn't hear a word they said and sped full speed to rush to his sister. Bhoomi was now running towards Abhir, shouting at him to leave Joydeep alone. Manthan heard Bhoomi and knew what was happening as he stepped down on the gas peddle. Thanks to the festival the traffic was horrific. He kept on taking a short cut after the other till he was finally on the freeway leading directly to the beach. He heard Bhoomi scream at Abhir to let Joydeep alone but her efforts seemed to be going to waste. On the other hand, Bhoomi was still trying to catch up to the 2 figures. Once she reached, she grabbed Abhir by his collar & tried to get his attention. Abhir hadn't noticed or heard her till now. One look at her & he let go of Joydeep. Bhoomi could make a few ugly bruise marks on Abhir's face and realized that Joydeep had managed to land a few as well and that too some heavy ones. Abhir grabbed Bhoomi as he let go of Joydeep who fell with a thump on the sand. Bhoomi tried to push him away but he was too strong. "Tum kyun meri jaan lena chahti ho? Tum kyun mere pyar ko nahi samajhti? Is Joydeep main aisa kya hai jo mujh mein nahi hai? Maine samjha tha ki ek na ek din tumhara gussa thanda ho jayega aur tum mere paach chali aogi lekin tum nahin ayi. Maine kitni baar tumhe samjhane ki koshish ki lekin tum nahin maani. Aaj tum chaho ya na, lekin main tumhe apne saath zaroor lekar jaunga. (Why do you want to kill me? Why don't you understand my love? I had thought that once you had cooled down you would come to me but you didn't come. I tried to make you understand countless times but you didn't listen to me. Today, whether you like it or not, I will take you with me." With that he started dragging her while she tried to fight him off. Finally she bit his hand and as soon as he let her go, she ran back to Joydeep. He was still conscious but badly bruised. Joydeep told her he was ok and tried to smile to make her feel better but Bhoomi saw the pain written all over him. She glared at Abhir as more tears ran down her face. She wanted to kill him right then but decided to stay with Joydeep. Abhir couldn't take it anymore & came over to grab her again. She screamed as he came near but before he could get a hold on her he started to back away. Bhoomi looked up to see that Joydeep had thrown sand into his eyes. She tried to get that opportunity to help Joydeep up and get away but Joydeep was in no condition to move a limb.



how was it? please do leave comments...and i promise to make the next part longer! 😊
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Posted: 18 years ago
#30
great part 👏 👏
i love the new side of bhoomi...this abhir is too much 😡 😡

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