Proof | a Choose Your Own Ending AbhiGya MMS track OS by mina - Page 3

MINA!!!!
Thanks for posting such a fantastic story!! I read all of the endings and personally loved the last one!! I loved all of them!! You are a great writer!! Thanks for sharing !!

Originally posted by: -mina-

Aww Diyu thanks for reading and voting! Thank you for your sweet words. You are making Mina di/Minamma/FBR/Shark fish blush ok! 😳

I am glad you had trouble choosing an ending - I did too, which is why we have all this 😆 And yeah the second two really do have issues, I can understand why the first one is appealing to more people. Somehow it didn't satisfy me so I kept writing, but then I do have perverse inclinations sometimes.

Thanks again dearest Chotu!! Big hugs to you :)

I hesitate because the three version are very good and amazing WRITING ... but I chose the first Version because when he started to touch and kiss he realized that she was her first time and she is only his wife ...the two other version was full of passion..mutual feeling between pragya and abhi and also proves that she will always be his wife

First f all although dis OS doesn't hav a title... Still 'choose ur own ending' sounds like a title to me!!!!:p:p:p lovely lovely n lovely... Sumhow m guessin u already knew wat m gonna vote for.. So i don't need to tell!! Bwahahaha... Prags also favors d fact k suresh just ain't d 'carry u in my arms' guy... Luved it.. Kaash KKB me bhi prags wud hav spoken sum sense instead f cryin!! Gud job my whitey owliee didu!! U became Shark too.. Ha ha ha... Well everythin is okk for me as long as its not u alredy knw what!!!! One f a kind OS by one f a kind writer!!:) i likes i likes... Ha ha

Mina I don't know what you say I'm speechless they are all brilliant and loved reading the stories and different ending were great, they all had different meaning for Abhi and Pragya, you are a brilliant writer I like how you write the stories and sensitive things so easily with out making people who are reading it uncomfortable or anything

Originally posted by: putturani

Mina what a treat to find this after my exam! My favourite thing about your stories is how they keep me thinking long after I've put them down (or closed the tab as it were). Your ability to get me lost in the world is fantastic - so much so that I want to get in there and write my own version of the ending! I really enjoyed the tension in all three versions, and the naked emotion on display. I could really feel the deep and complicated feelings they had for each other. You have the ability to really get into the mind of a character, like Pragya is so understanding of Abhi's good qualities although he makes all efforts to hide them!

In terms of endings, I like the first one the best, because Abhi doesn't give her a true choice in the other versions. Consent is not consent if there are terrible consequences for not consenting. But the second one was my second favourite because it is fun 😉 and Abhi doesn't need to go all the way to know the truth.

There are so many possibilities for endings:

-Tia's is great, although I'd probably move the action to the more comfortable bed

-I'd also like to see a version where she refuses and leaves the house, only for them to come back together in some way and then act on the desire that Abhi's original ultimatum (you seem fond of these!) ignited

-And the darker side of me that really dislikes the characters and the pairing now would want your original intention to be played out, with Pragya later leaving Abhi and him prostate with remorse but I don't think Pragya needs to be raped for Abhi to reform so maybe not this one

And of course I would love Pragya to get angrier in all these versions! Like I keep saying, Abhi gets off too easily a lot of the time (must be the rockstar charm...😉)

Anyway my essay of a comment is not to criticize in anyway but to let my thoughts run away with me.

Ok, I am always interested in your comments, so please always feel free to essay away! I especially appreciate your thoughts on consent, and thank you for letting your thoughts run away with you here so I get to read them 😉

I would totally endorse you trying your hand at an ending! Would love to see where you take the premise, and as you can see Tia already did so! Because I am greedy I will also suggest that if you write it but don't want to post it, you could just PM it to me 😃

Seriously though, if you have the time and inclination, I would love to see your version(s)!!

Thank you so much for your feedback on what works for you in my writing. I can't even explain how much it means to know that my writing affects someone that way! Mostly it's something I do as compulsion and to amuse myself, and to learn that I've actually succeeded in drawing someone into my imagined worlds is gratifying indeed.

As for me and ultimatums, maybe I need to go on some kind of mental cleanse to get away from this inclination to problematic marital sex scenes??? I think I do get easily invested in certain less than palatable spousal dynamics. Definitely I need to devote more time to exploring rageful reactions for my heroines!

As for a dark version, my vision was more along the lines of them actually being stuck together as a consequence. She stays because the part of her that might have wanted independence shuts down due to disillusionment. And he doesn't push her away, because he feels guilty, and because he's mired in self disgust.

Hmm. I couldn't write the actual sex scene with this kind of dubcon/noncon, but maybe I could write the aftermath? I'll keep that in mind for a darker mood...

But yeah. Mostly I need to work on punishing Abhi more. He deserves it, but somehow even when I'm super angry with him for what's happening on the show, he turns himself around in my fic worlds and I never can debase him quite as much as I'd like. I don't know if that's rockstar charm or a sort of delusional underlying belief in a version of the character that doesn't exactly exist...

Ahem, ok, thanks again for reading and commenting!! Means a lot to hear from you 😊



Haha we're both writing essays here. I think like you I also have to balance my interest in problematic romances (aka ANY Indian serial) with my strong feelings about consent and women's empowerment and I think that's one of the reasons I've been drawn to your fics because they really get at the tension between those two things in our minds.

Mina darling...loved all the parts...you truly are a wonderful writer...

If you force me to pick one of these three, i would have to go with Belief. The other two are too... unrealistic. (Though still in character. So, well done).

But if you really want to know what i think - then ending 4. The one you had set out to write but could not quite pen down. Pragya would agree, and in my view (different from the way you saw it), she would mean it too. But her heart wouldn't be in it. She would not respond, would not, could not engage in the act. And initially Abhi would be too angry to care, and later he would be too far gone to stop. Anger and desire are a very potent mix - and i am not at all sure, or perhaps i do not have the confidence you do in Abhi, that he is mature enough to handle the combination. So - the act would happen. And while technically it would not be rape, since Pragya agreed, she would still feel ... violated. Her trust eroded, her body abused.

Dark? Yes. Realistic? Way more so than even the first scenario here. And i really wish you would write it down...

(And no, i am not back on IF. Stole time from work to read these since you wrote them).

MINAAA!!!

I really loved all of them !! If you have written another OS can you give me the link please? Keep it on 👏