Proof | a Choose Your Own Ending AbhiGya MMS track OS by mina - Page 2

Originally posted by: Lkb79

I picked the first one. I could see where you were going with this experiment and your writing was exceptional, as usual 👏. But I wasn't entirely comfortable with the last two scenarios. Mainly because I don't think Pragya has anything to prove at all. So to see her go that far, while intriguing, wasn't my preference.

Nice work. Wonderful concept and execution. I'm curious to see how the poll results end up. 😊

Thanks for your thoughts LK! I also don't think Pragya has anything to prove, and I kind of don't understand how this idea took such strong hold of my mind. Except I also kind of do - it's the warped kind of problematic romance that always appeals to me!

It was an interesting challenge to write. Not sure how I feel about myself for perpetuating some of the attitudes portrayed here, but I have yet to find that my politics really gets in the way of my fic-writing. This show keeps pushing me to new avenues, so we'll see if that continues.

Looks like your choice is leading the poll so far!

Originally posted by: renukha871

Res! And I haven't voted! Will be back after class and comment 😛

Unres!! Read all three of em and I chose the first although I wish she kicked him on the groin for even asking her to prove in such way😆!!!

Loved all three of the ending but because they are my one my OTP's and not just some guilty pleasure ships, I don't prefer them having sex under such circumstance.

I love your writing and the third one (2C) was very hot☺️ indeed!! I know now why you said that you find that one to be most fun. 😆 😉

Renu! So Abhi getting a well deserved groin-kick is an exception to your preference for non-violence, or??? But LOL the idea does make me think I should imagine another version, where she gets properly angry. There is never enough angry Pragya on screen or in fic! Will keep that in mind going forward.

Thanks for your comment and for reading all three!! You can probably guess which one was my favourite 😛 😉

Originally posted by: Cytherea

Hi Mina! I've been a silent reader of your fics for a while now but such amazing work definitely deserves to be praised hence my decision to break my silence. Just wanted to say how much I enjoy reading your work. I love the chemistry between Abhigya and the way you write the interactions between them is beautiful.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future!

P.S. I picked option A but option B and C were definitely more fun 😉

Hi Cytherea, thanks so much for your comment! It means a lot that you've taken the extra step of commenting 😊 So pleased to know you like my versions of AbhiGya and thanks for your input on the endings here. I totally get what you mean in that post script 😆 👍🏼

Originally posted by: -Tia-

Hey Mina!!!
I didn't know these were the choices for the poll! I was thinking more in terms of Prags leaving/staying back!
But you caught me there!
What do I choose now? I would want it to be something between first and second options.
I will vote for 2 though- it's like 51 percent 2nd option and 49 percent 1st. Definitely not 3- because I believe if they are to consummate it will go sweet for them not the rough passion that 3rd option has. Abhi is a sweetheart at heart.
But I loved reading them all because your writing is impeccable.
Can I suggest something I thought about after this episode?
So, like you described, it goes like that until the rough kiss. In my version, Abhi if not burning will still throw away the pillows and tear off the blankets. Coming back to the kiss, what starts as a rough kiss ends up being the sweetest kiss ever after a while. Pragya who does not respond initially ends up sweetly being a part of the kiss. And the tears in her eyes, her hesitant sweetness and the very feel is enough for Abhi to know she is untouched and that was her first kiss. So he apologises and leaves and just lies down on the balcony sofa. But on the other hand Pragya realizes his jealousy, possessiveness and the love with which he kissed her. She finally realizes his need of her. She gets her answer to why he gets lost in her eyes, why he sees moon in her eyes, why he protects her from the policeman and why he beat up
Suresh. She follows him to the balcony and sits by him. When his eyes question her, she lays her head on his chest hugging him.
So the passion that started with the kiss continues in the balcony with her approval and with his burning emotions.
Would you like a scenario like this? It's pro Pragya as well as pro Abhi?!
And some balcony fantasy! ;-)

Oh Tia!! What a lovely series of moments! You so have your pulse on the true-love side of AbhiGya. Can I goad you into writing this out more?! It doesn't even have to have smut. Just more elaboration of this breathtaking sequence of emotions. Oh I hope you find the time - please please!!

Balcony fantasy would be fun too...not my vision of their first time, but you could probably make it work if you wanted to 😉

...The more we have these kinds of exchanges, the more I'm beginning to fear that after I finish The Hookup I'm going to have to follow it with a series of one shots about the various fantasies that they act out after getting remarried, many of which actually come from your very slight suggestions. Oh God, the last thing I needed was another such fic idea!! Uff!! 😆

But yes, thank you so much for reading all versions and offering your thoughts. Really appreciate it! And thanks for voting, hehe!

HAILA!!! SHARK FISH YOU KEEP BLOWING MY MIND AWAY WITH YOUR WRITING!!!!!

Originally posted by: -mina-

Renu! So Abhi getting a well deserved groin-kick is an exception to your preference for non-violence, or??? But LOL the idea does make me think I should imagine another version, where she gets properly angry. There is never enough angry Pragya on screen or in fic! Will keep that in mind going forward.

Thanks for your comment and for reading all three!! You can probably guess which one was my favourite 😛 😉

Mina what a treat to find this after my exam! My favourite thing about your stories is how they keep me thinking long after I've put them down (or closed the tab as it were). Your ability to get me lost in the world is fantastic - so much so that I want to get in there and write my own version of the ending! I really enjoyed the tension in all three versions, and the naked emotion on display. I could really feel the deep and complicated feelings they had for each other. You have the ability to really get into the mind of a character, like Pragya is so understanding of Abhi's good qualities although he makes all efforts to hide them!

Mina! Here you go- I have used some of your lines in the beginning. Hope you don't mind.

awesome work! i liked them all :D
you write it- i like it! simple yaar ;)

Wow Tia BEAUTIFUL!!! 👏 👏

Aww, Tia, thank you so much! That was just what I hoped for from your initial description. So powerful, and exquisite in the way that is unique to your hand. Loved the way you described Abhi's retreat and Pragya's choice to advance. The whole thing just vibrated with emotion. You really made me feel Abhi's vulnerability here, when I have generally had trouble seeing past his anger. Thank you thank you for writing and sharing this! Much love!!

Ohoh thank you so much Mina and Diahh! Hugs!

Originally posted by: Diahh

Hey Minamma!!! 😉 🤗

Okay I couldn't pick and choose and read all three! 😃And I voted for the first ending.

Coz for me it felt like the closest to the reality(and least fun too😉)

All 3 endings were super amazing and more than anything they bring out your caliber as a writer. Same situation three endings. It was amazing and I am having a hard time choosing what was the best ending.

But still I went with ending 1 coz eventhough the other 2 endings were super hot I am having mixed feelings about the whole situation. But that doesn't mean I don't like those. I loved reading them just as ending 1 but still... Err... Now I am just blabbering! Hope you get what I mean Behena.😕 😆

Before I go... Minamma strikes again!!! 👏 ⭐️ 👍🏼

Aww Diyu thanks for reading and voting! Thank you for your sweet words. You are making Mina di/Minamma/FBR/Shark fish blush ok! 😳

I am glad you had trouble choosing an ending - I did too, which is why we have all this 😆 And yeah the second two really do have issues, I can understand why the first one is appealing to more people. Somehow it didn't satisfy me so I kept writing, but then I do have perverse inclinations sometimes.

Thanks again dearest Chotu!! Big hugs to you :)

Originally posted by: -Martinski-

HAILA!!! SHARK FISH YOU KEEP BLOWING MY MIND AWAY WITH YOUR WRITING!!!!!

ASDFGHJKL!

Loved the first choice erm actually loved all :P

Lol thanks Mumma!! Aapke dimaag ude gaye kya?? 😲 How undutiful of me, I should stop causing that to happen 😆 😉

So glad you loved all 😃

Originally posted by: putturani

Mina what a treat to find this after my exam! My favourite thing about your stories is how they keep me thinking long after I've put them down (or closed the tab as it were). Your ability to get me lost in the world is fantastic - so much so that I want to get in there and write my own version of the ending! I really enjoyed the tension in all three versions, and the naked emotion on display. I could really feel the deep and complicated feelings they had for each other. You have the ability to really get into the mind of a character, like Pragya is so understanding of Abhi's good qualities although he makes all efforts to hide them!

In terms of endings, I like the first one the best, because Abhi doesn't give her a true choice in the other versions. Consent is not consent if there are terrible consequences for not consenting. But the second one was my second favourite because it is fun 😉 and Abhi doesn't need to go all the way to know the truth.

There are so many possibilities for endings:

-Tia's is great, although I'd probably move the action to the more comfortable bed

-I'd also like to see a version where she refuses and leaves the house, only for them to come back together in some way and then act on the desire that Abhi's original ultimatum (you seem fond of these!) ignited

-And the darker side of me that really dislikes the characters and the pairing now would want your original intention to be played out, with Pragya later leaving Abhi and him prostate with remorse but I don't think Pragya needs to be raped for Abhi to reform so maybe not this one

And of course I would love Pragya to get angrier in all these versions! Like I keep saying, Abhi gets off too easily a lot of the time (must be the rockstar charm...😉)

Anyway my essay of a comment is not to criticize in anyway but to let my thoughts run away with me.

Ok, I am always interested in your comments, so please always feel free to essay away! I especially appreciate your thoughts on consent, and thank you for letting your thoughts run away with you here so I get to read them 😉

I would totally endorse you trying your hand at an ending! Would love to see where you take the premise, and as you can see Tia already did so! Because I am greedy I will also suggest that if you write it but don't want to post it, you could just PM it to me 😃

Seriously though, if you have the time and inclination, I would love to see your version(s)!!

Thank you so much for your feedback on what works for you in my writing. I can't even explain how much it means to know that my writing affects someone that way! Mostly it's something I do as compulsion and to amuse myself, and to learn that I've actually succeeded in drawing someone into my imagined worlds is gratifying indeed.

As for me and ultimatums, maybe I need to go on some kind of mental cleanse to get away from this inclination to problematic marital sex scenes??? I think I do get easily invested in certain less than palatable spousal dynamics. Definitely I need to devote more time to exploring rageful reactions for my heroines!

As for a dark version, my vision was more along the lines of them actually being stuck together as a consequence. She stays because the part of her that might have wanted independence shuts down due to disillusionment. And he doesn't push her away, because he feels guilty, and because he's mired in self disgust.

Hmm. I couldn't write the actual sex scene with this kind of dubcon/noncon, but maybe I could write the aftermath? I'll keep that in mind for a darker mood...

But yeah. Mostly I need to work on punishing Abhi more. He deserves it, but somehow even when I'm super angry with him for what's happening on the show, he turns himself around in my fic worlds and I never can debase him quite as much as I'd like. I don't know if that's rockstar charm or a sort of delusional underlying belief in a version of the character that doesn't exactly exist...

Ahem, ok, thanks again for reading and commenting!! Means a lot to hear from you 😊

Originally posted by: rutu83

awesome work! i liked them all :D
you write it- i like it! simple yaar ;)

haaye rutu, thank you!! really appreciate how often you take the time to comment. thanks for being so supportive. much love to you 😊