FF*ll Meri Kahanill* part 4a(heer's POVupdatedPg11

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey guys!! so lol 😆😆
i got bored hecka bored and thot of writing something.. yeah i know its not good as others but i tried...so i m writing something different with same characters... but from Heer's POV... okai... i want yuh guys to tell me if i should continue to juss leave it here.. kay.. but be honest okay..... coz i know i m not a good writer..... 😆😆😆
okai here it starts ;
Part I
" Staring at the sky during night time has always fascinated me. You may be thinking what's so fancy about the dark sky that makes me so excited right?. Well, the thing is even me myself have been wondering the smae thing from the day i started doing this. You know like why can't we see the clear shape of the stars like we do of the Moon, like we why sayTwinkle Twinkle Little Star, when stars are not little at all and its the wind that makes the shiny dot twinkle....(Weird ..right) But the most important thing is it reminds me of someone.. I totally don't know who, where is he , but I do know he is there and may be thinking about me too. 😳😳 .What??? You know like every girl dreams about their Prince and all... Yeah ! in the same way I am dreaming. Wait!! 😲 Are you thinking I m crazy or something ? 😡 Anyways 😆 Where was I , Yeah, does that really happen tho?? You dream of someone and they may be dreaming about you too? Its atill a mystery no one knows.. still left to be answered .
Heer!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (Uff there flew my imagination... Wait wait.. okai the voice is of my mom Teji!!! She is the greatest mom in the world.. She loves me soo much that sometimes i get annoyed like you know...praise you whenever and wherever. and talk about my marriage with whoever she finds on the way... and blah blah... But anyway i love her alot.. More than anything.. )
Yes !! Maa...
Maa: Chal bauji bulaa rahe hai! (Holding hands)
( Talking about bauji, no words to describe him.. he is the sweetest , amazing dad in the whole entire world....he understands me soo well. Oh and his name is Balraj.. Balraj Maan.)
Bauji: Heer Beta! *(Hold on there.. Did Iintroduced myself to you guys? No.....?? What !! really.. If so then Sorry okai... so I m Heer Maan.. Its M A A N okay not MAN . Sometimes my teacher calls me HEER MAN.. Why do they do that, can't they see the two A's between M and N ,, that annoyes me a lot. I am 19 Years old.. "OLD" yeah Old..and the eldest daughter of Maan Family...... We have been living In Ambala for almost and century.. hold on... i was talking about from the time of my great great great great grandparents .. what you thought huh.. we r vampires who can live upto thousands years 😆😆 i wish i was one of them tho.. .. I m all dreamy kind... may be you guys already noticed that 😊 okai back to Bauji ) Idhaar aajaa!Main tujhse kuch baat karna chahata hoon!
Me: Ji Bauji kahiye !! ( As if i don't know what is he going to talk about)
Bauji: Soon Beta! tujhse yaad to hoga na.. k mera ek dost tha jo Canada chala gaaya tha...Woh wapas aaraha hai... Tere Prem ko lekar..
(Tere Prem ..thing made me go 😲😲.. Did bauji really said Tere Prem....I remember Lalit Uncle and Gayatri aunty and also their children , but i never knew one of them's name was Prem.. may be i knew but don't remember its been soo many years.. But Mera Prem ???? )
tuh yehi soch rahi hain naa .. maine Tera Prem kyun kaha.... Ajj waqt agaaya hain tujhe saab baat batadein... woh baat kyaa hain naah.. barso pehele hum me teri aur prem ki saadi tey kardi thi... aur wada kiya tha ki jab tum dono bade hojaaoge aur baatein samajh ne lagoge toh batayenge.. aaj hain woh waqt... teri aur Prem ki dosti humne dekhi.. Ek doosre ko kaise samajh the dono.. ek ko chot lagi toh dusra rodeta tha.... saath saath khate the.. share karte the... isi baat ko dekh kaar humhe lagaa k .. tum hi ek doosre k liye bane ho.. isi liye humne usi waqt ye faisla leliya thaa.... aur woh wapas aaraha hain.. ye wadaa ko poori karne..... parso aaraha hai kaal bahot jyaada kaam karne hain .. jaa soja.. yehi baat kehene kiliye bolaya thaa tujhe....
(*walking towards her room)*: Hold on.. I know i need to introduce Juneja's to you.. But atleast let me come out of the thing i Just heard....okai..Juneja.... Lalit juneja my dad's best friend.. long ago he went Canada for better lifestyle .. sometimes iwonder why didn't my father go with them but nyways... They already fixed my marriage with Prem 😲😲.. i know nothing about it... well now i know...... okai that makes me wonder.. Is Prem the one I always Dream about.... without seeing.. without knowing i knew he was there... is Prem is the one??? But .. Did his father told him abt me.. does he thinks about me too?? i have to wait until they come back.... till then chao!!)
End!!!
Okai guys now ur turn.. tell me if i should continue... but be honest .. if yuh don;t like.. say it yaar.. i'll not get hurt or something.....
but i'll try to improve lol and see most most movies.... well this is not frm any movies. but i can take some ideas nah!!! 😆😆
okai waiting for ur decisions....
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hi alisha
wow u r writing ff great.u should continue its amazing & really i m telling this honestly.
wait 4 the next update soon.
if u have pm list then add me also in it.
luv
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hiiii
it was awesome👏
i loved the way you described things using heers' pov
plzzz do continue
do add me if you create a pm list
eagerly waiting for the next part
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: -fsn-

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Hi alisha
wow u r writing ff great.u should continue its amazing & really i m telling this honestly.
wait 4 the next update soon.
if u have pm list then add me also in it.
luv
Fatima

Thnxx Fatima for liking it.. yeah me somewhat being writer lol😆😆 juss a try.....
i'll update other part relly soon ...
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: premeer4rever

hiiii

it was awesome👏
i loved the way you described things using heers' pov
plzzz do continue
do add me if you create a pm list
eagerly waiting for the next part

thnak yuh soo much for liking it... i'll surely update another part for yuh guys....😃😃
i'll update soon
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Posted: 16 years ago
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awesome update
continue asap
and u should definately continue
if u can pm me when u update!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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okai guys!!! here is my another part..... sorry i don't know how to make Pm list without adding yuh guyss.. so ... anyways here it is....
its starts with where i left off
Part II
" What if Prem doesn't like me? Its not that I have started liking Prem but somewhere i feel he is indeed the guy i have been dreaming about....and is made for me !"
Heer di! Kahan Ho aap? ( She is my sister Meher, cute. chubby and sometimes annoying.. she's here so early 😲. I mean she always visits my cousin's house and won't return till 10 pm .. but today its just 8:30. and she is home!!!! okay i get it.. she surely heard about Prem and my marriage thing thats why... wonder who told her about it..) Toh aap yaha ho.. kaha kaha nahi dhoonda aapko... waise kyaa soch rahi hoon ..Jijy k baare mein ... ( okai this is the thing i hate about her.. she doesn't miss any chance of teasing me .. which indeed annoys me like hell ) Chinta maat karo dii.. sab thik hi hogaa.. Parso aarahe hain naa woh.. hum bhi dekhe ye Canada waale hain kese.
Achcha achcha soh jaa aab... waise bhi itniraat ho gayi hain.. ashlesha k ghae mein kyaa karti reheti hain.. din bhar.. *( Talking about Ashlesha she is the cousin i was talking about... she relly likes us because she doesn't have any siblings... she has been close to us like from the time we started to talk.. or even b4 that... we have a special sister bonding... My sister meher likes her a lot.. She likes to spend her time with Ashlesha ... ) Meher!!! Meher!! Itni jaldi sohgayi ?? (Touches Meher's hair)
(Switching off the Light) : Can't wait to Meet you!!! * I whispered.....
Next Morning!!!
As usual getting ready to go to the Temple.. Shiv Mandir..I feel relly relief when i go there..... (Phone rings) No one is around uff how i hate picking up the phone...
Heer: Hello! Heer Maan .. Here..... Hello! is anyone there.....
The other side of the phone: Hello.. Main Juneja House Ludhiana se bol raha hoon
( Hearing Juneja made me feel as if i am jumping From tree to tree ) Ji boliye.. par aap koun
The other side: Ji main.... Main Prem Juneja.... ( Prem Juneja ......was I really talking to him.. its not dream right??? ) Maine yeh kehene k liye phone kiya tha ki.. maa aur bauji aaj raat ko yaha pauhach jaayenge aur kaal subhba hi hum waha Ambala aajayenge...aur mein bhi unke saath hi aajaoonga....
Heer ( I don't know what to say.. My heartbeat is racing... God help me !! Please ) Aap India mein hain??
Prem: Ji ! woh mein kuch kaam k silsilay mein yaha aaya tha .. isliye...!! Toh aap balraj uncle se kehe dijiyegaa.. ki hum kaal subhba hi aajayenge .. thik hai...
Heer; ( No No Prem .. don't put the phone down please please) Thik hai mein bata doongi...
( Both of them stood in silence... still holding the phone..)
Prem: hello.. you still there??
( How did he know i was still here... wow!! i m lossing for real) Woh!... Woh..! achcha toh main rakhti hoon .. mujhe mandir jaana hain... kaal baat karenge thik hai byee!!
Prem: Bye!!!
( No i didn't want to keep the phone but.. *smiles* )
Now i need to leave for mandir... day dreaming is bad Heer.... go go !!!
Heer!!!!!!!!!! ( Bauji called me again.. again 3rd time when i leaving for the temple )
Ji! bauji !! .........
Kiska phone tha, he asked me!!!
( I am not gonna tell him its prem.. that i tlked to.....but should I.....) was it Prem?? he asked again.!!! ( Woahoo 😲😲 did he read my mind or something.. how did he knew it was Prem... if he already knew why is he acting as if he didn't 😡)
How did you know ? i asked.....
Then he said, " woh actually subbha hi mere Lalit se baat hui thi.. woh kehe raha tha ki Prem kuch kaam k liye India aaya huwa hain.. toh humare yaha phone kar sakta hain toh.. waise kyaa kehe rahatha??
Heer ( sab kuch toh pata hain phir bhi pooch rahe hain... i think he wants to know if we had any talks about that matter may be ) Woh kehe rahatha ki Lalit uncle or family aaj raat ko ludhiana aayenge aur kaal subhbha hi yaha aayenge..... Achcha bauji mein mandir jaa rahi hoon... baad mein baat karenge...( I knew if i styaed any longer with him.. he would have asked me, if that was all we talked about or was there anything else... i wish there was anything else but they it wasn't ..How could i talk anything else besides hi and hello.. he is still a stranger right?? )
At the temple
heer Praying ( Bhagwaan , Main hamesha apni baatein aap se share karti hoon na... aaj bhi yeho karne aai hoon... Prem ko aapne hi mere liye bhejaa hain naa.. issi liye toh itne saalo baad woh log India wapas aarahe hai.. humrahi so saadi teh huwi thi.. usko saach karne aaye hain.... bhale hi maa bauji ne usko mere liye choona tha.. banaya toh aapne tha na.. usko sirf mere liye?? lekin kyaa woh waisa hi hogaa jaise mere khayaloo mein aata tha.... mujhe bahot ghabrahat ho rahi hain.. please meri madat karna huh??? thank you bhangwaan )
On the way home
Arey Heer beta! Ajj Balraj nahi aaye Mandir!!! One of my dad's fren asked me...( sometimes i wonder why is my father soo famous in entire Ambala... why does each and everyone has to know him..... I have no problem him being famous but the problem is wherever i go people ask me about him.. why don't they visit themselves... tabiyaar poochne ki natak karte hain,,,, ....) Ji! woh humare ghar mein kuch mehemaan ane waale hain kal ... usiki tayari kar rahe hai.... , i replied.......
Achcha .. thik hai.. usse kehe dena mein pooch raha tha,,,,,
Ji jaroor..... i said in anger ......
Home
( okay!!! there you go... yesi tayari ho rahi hain jaise raja aane wala ho.. itni karne ki kyaa jaroorat.. and i m sure its my mom's plan.. she likes decorating house.. the only thing is dad soen't allow her but today was special day.. well tomorrow is thts why my dad didn't say anything to her... he loves his frend very much......i knew that.. but this much.. ruined all house 😡😡 But anyways anything made by my mom is wonderfull )
Heer tuh agayi .. chal aaja meri help kar, mom requested me....!!!
haan thik hai maa.. lekin Meher kaha.. hain use koi kaam nahi karni . i asked her...
Haan woh!! Meher tera saman dusri kamre mein shift kar rahi hain... ( what!!!!!!!!!! i am being shifted .. I.. I???? why why?? is it because My room has the priceless view of ambala..... thts why>>> but its not fair... if they had to make me migrate like refugees, again and again thenn why did they gave me that room.. they should have made it guest room......)
Maaa!!!!!!!!!!!! Kyun!!! Kyun!! ( I made sound as if i was crying )
Woh room mein Prem rahegaa.... usko woh room bachpan se pasand thi .. isi liye... .. samjha kar beti .....
( Hearing Prem's name made me goo wohooo.. i mean i became calm .....why was he or his name habing soo much effect on me ..... 😳😳)
Thik hai maa.. i said her....
and she laughed at me.. as if she knew what i was thinking... she may hab known coz she is my mom.. and she understands everything even before I speak about it to her .... and i went to help her)
Night:
Phew!!!! sara din ghar ki safai karne mein chala gaya.... itna ganda tha ghar......... This is gonna be my room for how many days 😲😲 its soo boring..... Meher is still at ashlesha's can't wait for her today.... and also hab to wake up early tomorrow... have to go mandir... cook food with mom and all.... .. so goodnight guys!!
End!!!
Part 3 : Precap... heer and Prem come face to face at shiv mandir but doesn't recognise eachother... Heer yells @ prem for dropping her pooja ki thali,,,
heer back at homa and sees prem and is shocked 😲😲.... heer is introduced with Juneja's and viceversa with prem..
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Posted: 16 years ago
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awesome
continue asap
can't wait till prem and heer meet

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Posted: 16 years ago
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wowww ur ff is just fab. Just awesome i mean i just luvd ur writing style its gr8
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: hafsa_2u

wowww ur ff is just fab. Just awesome i mean i just luvd ur writing style its gr8

thank yuh soo much soo liking it... means a lot to me 😊😊😊

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