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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: coolgal270

Oh! Thanks for the wonderful update!
I can't take heer's pain anymore...She is so alone in the world..And to think she has to see those people every day of her life who ruthlessly took away her life from her! *wipes tears*..This must be one of the most difficult situation one can face in life! sigh.. yes...i feel for her too...*helps wipe tears* ๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†...but kya karein...them seeing Heer in so much pain is giving them pain...and they deserve every bit they are getting ๐Ÿ˜ก๐Ÿ˜ก๐Ÿ˜ก
really happy that manmeet is a good char..that he loves veera..and I really like maya..she is a true frnd to heer who understands her pain without heer saying it out loud.. yes...no evil manmeet in this one...he is a stand up guy...kind of like Shahid's character in Vivah...only...a bit less cute cuz Shahid is so CUTE..*drool* ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ

and this Preet mehta, is he prem? like u know, he changed his name, surname and went out to earn so much wealth so that he can get heer back?,,
i know u wont tell now but just cant wait for the update!..
lovely update and jaz, u r a grt writer! seriously!hats off to u! tu bhi..speculating...๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜† everyone had a million and one ideas...so many possibilities...not many answers...๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰

dont forget to add me to ur PM list..I will be eagerly waiting for the next update!
love,sumi will add you to PM list...no worries ๐Ÿ˜ณ



Originally posted by: aati1429

nice part.. liked the way prem expressed his.. feeling

it was a very painful part!!!

Is prem alive? Please disclose something


thanks for reading & commenting ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ...im glad you enjoyed it...next part will be up soon ๐Ÿ˜ƒ...a writer never reveals her secrets ๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰

Originally posted by: maha_k

๐Ÿ‘another great update yar.really emotional romantic sad ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘the way you describe heer pain was awesom

but ab ye preet mehra kahan sy aa gay๐Ÿ˜ก
i hope he is prem otherwise i will be like๐Ÿ˜ˆ
but seriously yar you are a great writer.plz disclose something about prem.we can not see heer in such pain.hope you will update soon and dont worry about delay
thanks for pm and plz pm me about next update๐Ÿ˜Š


thanks yaar...you are too kind...so sweet...im so blushing ๐Ÿ˜ณ...i dont know ke Preet Mehra kaun hai...but Preet Mehta is a new character in this story...๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰...next update will be posted soon...thanks for being so understanding ๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

Originally posted by: angel82

Jaz , as usual beautiful update..... thank u ๐Ÿ˜ณ

I love it how the three sister-in-laws are more of sisters to the heer and veer .....their suport ,love and bonding....are soo touching.... yes...bhabi's can be awesome...but then again...sometimes...not so much
Veera is so fussy but still cute... like any girl ๐Ÿ˜‰
Absolutely loved Premeer's first date....romantic, innocent and sweet.... haye...i wish someone woudl do that for me too...๐Ÿ˜
I have always told u ,I love ur style of writing ..how you explain the scenes, the dialogues , the way you bring out the emotions so effectively , everything....
I loved the dialogues you wrote here...they all sounded so realistic...( hmm I thot you are from bangladesh, if yes , then how do speak hindi so well)
I loved how you brought out Heer's emotions, her loneliness, her sorrow .....like the scene where she's herself in the mirror dressed up or the scene where she sees love in manmeet's eyes for veera...all written well...
Heer's story here is soo heart-wrenching...she has to live with the pain of loosing her love,her life, with the ones who took it away from her..... thank you...im happy you appreciate my obsession with detail...๐Ÿ˜†...im glad that you enjoy my writing ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ
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Preet Mehta....Jaz , no plz dont even think of pairing Preet with Heer .... ๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†....no comment...i dont want to die ๐Ÿ˜†
Preet MEhta better be Prem Jhuneja in disguise....and let him be prem itself after he gets his heer back ....plzzzzzzzzzz..........
Balraj and his sons appears as typical hindi movie landlords here...beautifully described thanks ๐Ÿ˜Š



Originally posted by: Anhdara13

I'm crying now. I'll come back when it stops hurting. such a drama queen...I LOVE IT! ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

*edited*

You have this ability to write in such a way that the readers' innards get twisted about until they're feeling for the characters. It's at the same time, brilliant and horrible. Brilliant, because that just shows what an excellent storyteller you are, and horrible, because everytime I read something by you I wanna cry. ๐Ÿ˜†
...brilliant and horrible...nice...love that description!! ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ...thanks for your kind words ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

I love the fact that Heer is there for her sister, despite everything, she hasn't let her hurt and pain destroy her relationships with her Bhabhis, Mom and sister. And you know the bit where she gets all teary after talking to that buddhi aunty about being a vidva? I was so thrilled that she glared at her brother there. So so happy. She needs to remain angry at them. she doesnt blame the women for what the men have done...she doesnt blame the world for that either...she blames those responsible...you will see her wrath...SOON...trust me ๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰

And then the flashback, oh, their first date, and already they're planning their wedding? So like PremHeer. When she came back to reality, I had a hard time stifling my sobs when she wondered why her family couldn't be happy for her, for her being lucky enough to have someone who loved her so much. And why they're happy for Veera. omg...if i could get a first date like that...haila...meri toh life hi baan jaati...Prem jaise koi mil jaiyeh...๐Ÿ˜...i'd be so happy!!! ๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

Entry of Preet now? I'm expecting him to be a good guy. hmm...good or bad...you be the judge of that ๐Ÿ˜ˆ

I cannot wait for more!

Love, love you too Raddzie!! โค๏ธ
Radz



JAZ
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: yasu09

another amazingggggggg update...........๐Ÿ‘

loved the romantic premeer scene...................๐Ÿ˜ณ

the ending was so saddddddddd.......................๐Ÿ˜”

can't wait 4 prem 2 come back 4rm the dead and claim his heer.............๐Ÿ˜

but who is this preet!!!!!!!!!!!!!..............๐Ÿค”

plz update soooooonnnnnnnnnnnnn.....................


thanks...glad you read it and commented...i really appreciate it...next update will be up soon ๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

Originally posted by: 9rpatel

awesoem update

continue asap
thanks for the pm
pm me!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


thanks for reading & commenting ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ...im glad you enjoyed it...next part will be up soon ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

Originally posted by: loveabletwinz

*mine mine mine*

BTWWWW,, PREET MEHTA???? okay, this BETTERRR be prem jhuneja! varna tumhari khair nahiiii!!!!! *sticks tongue out at you*
we'll be back for more...but all i can think of right now is that this preet mehta guy definitely plays a verryy important role! hainaa?! and i was going to ask you why preet wasnt in here :-( BUT YESSS! finally! preet aa gaya..but we want PREMMMM!!! *sob sob* ..
okay okay, time for class! will be back!


so...my twinnies....kahaan kho gaye ho tum dono? ๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†...its ok...ill let it go because i love you both...๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ...vaise...im expecting a doubbly long update next time...to compensate for this one ๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜›

Originally posted by: fungrl

Wassup Jazzy Jazz, I would say ok update b/c me Prem still did not maar an entry, beside that a pretty rocking update๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘, nonetheless there were somethings that made me go hummm....so here hey go: bring it on! ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

1) ok so why did Veera wait till the last minute to decide what she is gonna wear to her engagement, aren't Maans supposed to be uber rich, wouldn't Veera have a bunch of spare new cloths lying around, what about time management with all the bahabis??? very bad Veera and very shopaholic bahabis lmao....well...Veera not having something already is my fault...i needed a bhabi and nanad bonding scene so there it was ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

anyhoo, my heart went awwww, when poor Heer thought that Veera was upset about something else, something serious, and our Veera nikli materialistic......no one is as nice as you Heer well...i dont really blame Veera...any girl would freak out on her engagement day ๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰...id be doing the same thing ๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

2)So if Veera freaked about kapraas, what about the facials and other girlish getup thingamajigs??? didn't she wanna get her nails done??? ha ha...Veera is a girl like me...gets her mani and pedi's every two weeks so she was set in that respect ๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰...

3) so how dense can these engagement visiting aunties can be, if younger sister is getting engaged and older sister is wearing white, it should be clear that she is a widow, why pour salt over beechari Heer desi aunty's ka kya kaarein...they are besharam in many if not all aspects ๐Ÿ˜ก๐Ÿ˜ก๐Ÿ˜ก...been there done that...actually...been there as recently as friday night

4) So are the jallad Maan brother's ashamed of their behavior or their pride is nicked b/c they have a widow sister at home.....I wonder "jallad"...AWESOME word!!! ๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ completely fitting ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘

whatever, now the big part.......the first date was soooo๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜, I mean it was perfect, if Matt Damon would ever take me on a date, I wish it could be just like Prem's, I do wish I could go out with me Prem, but unlike Prem, I am afraid of all the Prem dewaanis they might just assassinate me and then console Prem for the tragedy.....well what if I hijack Prem and we go on a date, or better yet Prem, Matt, Luke Malby and I go on a date,,,,yum yum, oh we can go to "Cheese Cake Factory" or better yet a secluded romantic corner ha ha...cheesecake factory...first date...๐Ÿคฃ...been there and done that too...lmfao...same to same thoughts ๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†...hey..for me...i'd go with harshad...mat damon...hmm...soochna padega ๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰

ok enough of my fantasy,btw I was so sorry for Heer, I mean she loves her sister to death, but she also feels envious of Veera's happiness and then feels guilty for the thought๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ, enough of the torture, please give Prem back to Heer, let her be happy you Jallad.....oh wait Preet Mehta???, is this our Prem doing a Gurav-- the guy with hole in his heart.......so Prem is back......bring out the fireworks๐Ÿฅณ, Jazz Prem should be back....warna!!!! ๐Ÿ˜ฒ๐Ÿ˜ฒ๐Ÿ˜ฒ calling me a Jallad too ๐Ÿ˜ฒ๐Ÿ˜ฒ๐Ÿ˜ฒ omg...now im hurt...im hurt...like so hurt!! ๐Ÿ˜ญ no body loves me!!! ๐Ÿ˜ญ

back to the point, the date song was the best ever and so apt, also the love dovey conversation was brilliant.....I mean the whole update was mind blowing, thank you for writing a good sized update, this'll hold me like for a day so you better start writing another 17 pager update, b/c I can't wait.....kapish i love that song too!!! i totally want that song for my wedding...๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ...just gotta get HIM to listen ๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰...as for kapish...you sound like Michelle tanner from full house ๐Ÿ˜†...that was an awesome show!!
๐Ÿ˜†
oh btw on the topic of Maan Men punishment, what if we hang them upside down, make them smell cow dung and force them to eat moldy cheese..... easy punishment right, let me think of more, you get busy writing Missy๐Ÿ˜Š yes...another easy one...we need something more horrible...more painful!! after what they did to heer...even killing them wont be enough!!! ๐Ÿ˜›



Originally posted by: --Sarah--

fabulous update as usual from you Jazโ€ฆthe start was amazingโ€ฆ ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ โ€ฆVeera was crying for a second I thought she is not happyโ€ฆbut what she was crying because she can not decide what to wearโ€ฆwas very funnyโ€ฆ.and the flash back was awesome...โ˜บ๏ธ โ˜บ๏ธ โ˜บ๏ธ I do also feel to cry to heer remembers her old days with prem ๐Ÿ˜ญ ๐Ÿ˜ญ โ€ฆ..and then the old lady scene with Heer was very touching..i almost criedโ€ฆshe miss Prem a lot.. ๐Ÿ˜ญ
you have described her feelings beautifullyโ€ฆloved it Jazโ€ฆbut I'm saying this again as I can't stand Heer's pain
BRING PREM BACK BRING PREM BACK BRING PREM BACK BRING PREM BACK
Can't wait for the next partโ€ฆ


wow...someone is demanding...๐Ÿ˜‰...thanks for reading and commenting....glad that you enjoyed the update...next part will be posted soon...watch for the PM

JAZ

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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: Suhana Ahmed

do i really need to tell you time and time again that you are an awesome writter???

simply beautiful...
want to say much more but time is very short i have my paper tomorrow i cudnt resist your FF thats why read it...
regards,
Suhana.


thanks for reading & commenting ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ...im glad you enjoyed it...next part will be up soon ๐Ÿ˜ƒ...hope the paper went well โญ๏ธ

Originally posted by: bd670816

oh my god, this is really sad.
the flashback was so romantic and cute....loved it
cant wait for the next part...continue soon.


thanks...next part posted soon ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

Originally posted by: nadia.s

Hey Jaz! hello! *waves*

Great update. Very happy for Veera but at the same time very sad for Heer that she has to be part of all the celebrations that she wished he had done with Prem. ya...this is a bitter sweet happiness...you cant help but smile...just like you cant help the tears ๐Ÿ˜ญ
"You don't love her because she is beautiful. She is beautiful because you love her." I'm in love with this sentence. I even shared it with my boyfriend and he loves it too. He says its so deep. I put it as my msn pm, I hope you don't mind. Did you come up with on your own? (Don't mind, just curious) hai naa...omg...i love that line too....i cant really remember where i got it...but when i saw it...i was like omg...gotta use it!!! so clearly...no...i didnt come up with that on my own...not that deep ๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†
The last paragraph is really touching. It actually explains to us how much Heer is hurting since Prem left her. Waiting for more!
Nadia
P.S. Ramzam Mubarak to you and your family! thanks...i hope you had a good Eid with your family...๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ



Originally posted by: prempadmasujal

nice and touchy update yaar


thanks for reading & commenting ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ...im glad you enjoyed it...next part will be up soon ๐Ÿ˜ƒ


ok then ๐Ÿ˜•

JAZ

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Posted: 16 years ago

jaa...diya...yeh tera ๐Ÿ˜›

Originally posted by: stunninstar

edit later...

hey jaz... hi ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

ooh...finally i got time to write comments...usually i dnt leave a long comment fr any ff that i read...but now that yr ff is an exceptional story i should be different in ma commenting style too..ryt????๐Ÿ˜‰ of course! all comments...are appreciated...but honestly...i love reading the longer ones ๐Ÿ˜‰ so thank u!! ๐Ÿ˜ณ

where will i start now..i will go in the order of the story itself... that works ๐Ÿ˜Š

veera is freaking out for her engagement dress...you said it so well..how the sis-in-laws also made it a point that they too went shoppping ..!! and man.. they blackmailed their husbands into givng them the credit cards..!!๐Ÿ˜ƒ..๐Ÿ˜† women have so much power...men are all wrapped around the finger of the women in their lives...the men...gullible as they are...have no idea ๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰

and premeers first date...wah wah...he booked the whole place fr them...he is a sweetheart...๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ.i doubt whether there are ppl on earth who are so sweet and caring n loving as prem... saachi baath...not many..if any...are as sweet and wonderful as Prem ๐Ÿ˜ณ

that saree was so nice..๐Ÿ˜Š..i liked it very much too.. was telling mama i want a saree like that..!!๐Ÿ˜ƒ omg me too...i want one...and i love green...the print and stuff was awesome!! ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ

and maya's excuse..lol..she is so clever...even in serial she is..but never uses fr good purpose naa...!!..๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰ ya...my Maya is nothing like serial maya ๐Ÿ˜›

that song for their first date was perfect.. i simply loved it.. all those words went so well..!

and she said 'yes' to the marriage at the age of 15..!!!.. ooh..ooohhh.... ๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ˜Š..๐Ÿ˜ณ well...if Prem asked u to marry him...would you turn him down? i think not! ๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜›

and i loved the fact that heer was in her widow atire..! and her dialogues to manmeets grandma.. i had those dialogues in my mind for a long time...but i was so happy when i put it all down on paper ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ

and why did balraj say that heer wasnt married..i guess he plans to get her married off..!!๐Ÿ˜กbut now that heer is strong i dnt worry..!! she can tell her opinion anywhere..she has the guts now..i wish that she had that 7 years ago..then prem must have been with her..!! balraj is the root of all evils...usse toh main dekh lungi...๐Ÿ˜ก...the guts she didnt have before have come out roaring...dont mess with Mrs. Heer Prem Jhuenja โญ๏ธโญ๏ธโญ๏ธ

and preet is making the entry...i guess..preet will help heer to get her prem...someway or the other... ha ha...u wish...actually...everyone wishes ๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰

i cant wait to read the next update...love yr writing..if i am asked to select the best ff writer in the forum i will not have to think twice..! aww...you are too sweet...thanks for your vote of confidence ๐Ÿ˜ณ

your ff has gt a maturity feeling in it.. u know..nothing is made "huge".. everything is in the ryt quantity,...romance, tragedy, anger, love,...everything...all the relations are so well potrayed.. wow...that is one of the best compliments i have ever gotten...thanks so much ๐Ÿค—

thanx fr the pm.. no problem...happy to do it ๐Ÿ˜ณ

with love...sandy..๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ˜Š love you too โค๏ธ




Originally posted by: Cess-

*reserved*

hey jaz.... hola yaar! whats up? ๐Ÿ˜ƒ
hows everything going... i hope u had a great weekend... mine was boring to say the least... ๐Ÿ˜†.... i have a really bad feeling me will stop commenting on tanhai, after reading this part... me will sach mein stop... me warning u... ๐Ÿคฃ.... u give me too much tears and i am unable to bare it... arrhh, u are simply a great writer.... my weekends have been ok...just finished with Eid and stuff...๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ...how has your time been passing...as for me making you cry...he he...i think that is one of my specialties ๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰
okie, now without my bak-bak, me will start commenting on the part... my first reactions: ๐Ÿ˜•.... *nahin*.... ๐Ÿ˜ฒ... veera, poor girl, what did those idiots do now?? phir... ๐Ÿ˜•.... kya?? ๐Ÿคฃ.... omg, *pinches veera's two cheeks hardly* aww, poor baby, she must so awfully in dismay after all the nervousness, shyness came together... and a wardrobe full of clothes, yet nothing to wear? we girls bhi na, shopping ke liye koi bhi bahana chalega.... ๐Ÿคฃ.... and i just loved the 3 tailing along... ooh, they are the typical bhabhis... and i love them... ๐Ÿ˜ณ ya...that was the reaction i was looking...PREFECT!!! you are the only who thought something happened to her...but really...it was just a color problem ๐Ÿ˜†...but saachi yaar...main hoti toh yehi kaarti...๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰ bilkul sahi bola tumne...girls will do anything to shop!! speaking of which...i totally need to go shopping ๐Ÿฅณ
omg, heer, *wipes her tears*... poor, poor girl.... i just know how she feels right about now... what was her mistake? what did she do wrong? what crime has she commited? she too is a girl, with a lot of dreams, who wants a lot in life.. she too wanted to share her hapiness, her shyness, her nervousness, her love, her life with her family... she too wanted to feel the pamper and importance her little sister is getting, she too wanted to feel the little joy of being teased before her wedding, she too wanted to see love-filled eyes of her family, who is estatic because she's happy.... she too wanted to wait for her groom in a horse, who'd take her away to heaven, she too wanted to get married with happiness and tears at the same time... alas, this would never happen.... and why would this be taken away from her? because, and only because she loved a middle-class guy, who couldnt offer anything but love to her family.... damn these juneja men, they are completely shameless, arrogant creatures... ๐Ÿ˜ก haye...you have summed it up perfectly....only one simple mistake...there is only one Jhuneja man and he is prem...whom..im sure you love ๐Ÿ˜ƒ...i think u meant the Maan men...๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†...unless you really hate Prem...do you?
credit cards... ๐Ÿคฃ, ooh, classic men actions... i love it!! and their shopping would never have ended so... umm... ๐Ÿค”... early if it wasnt for the engagement nah? ๐Ÿคฃ... women.... *thinking if i'm not exactly the same* ๐Ÿคฃ... okie, we all are such shopping maniacs... i know i am the same! all i need is an excuse to go shopping...no matter how trivial the occasion may be!!! ๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜›
ohh, heer.... poor girl... even thoda makeup, and she felt uncomfortable... poor girl, come on... it's totally fine if u put on a little make-up... prem would be happy up there seeing you dress up a little bit... he also wants to see his heer become what she used to be.... a girl in real terms! (and no jaz, absolutely not what ur thinking.... if u think i'm believing prem is dead, think again.... ๐Ÿคฃ, i was just writing what heer should feel, believing prem is no more.... not at all what reality actually is... me will not give up as easily as u think!! ๐Ÿคฃ)... haye, prem, your heer needs u ever so badly, pls come back soon (dont ever listen to that ebil jaz... ๐Ÿคฃ) if only u were'nt writing this ff, i'd have stopped reading it in depression of my prem not being there... but trust u right? me is trusting u, if u let me down.... it's gonna be worse than just an andolan... well well well...๐Ÿ˜›...yes...Prem would want to see her happy...where ever he may be...but...Heer does more of this for her family...the men...so that they suffer!!! ๐Ÿคฌ...you hang in there all you want...but kya paata...who knows what will happen...more power to ya! ๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜›
on a more serious note; aah, veera must have looked stunnigly beautiful... oh, isnt she a sweet heart unlike the one in the show? and manmeet... haila, i never imagined i was ever gonna say this, but if i cant get prem, then manmeet chalega.... *dreamy muh*... haye, he's a prince for veera, an absolute prince, and me loving the fact that even if there's a business deal going on, there is still that emotion of love all over the place... it's spread through... i just think it's perfect... if i just forget what happened to heer, i'd have thought this was the most ideal relationship of all; everyone was happy; mann family, manmeet, heer, and most importantly, veera... oh, it's just so perfect to be true, and that's exactly why it isnt.... heer and her sadness, her pain, and tears, they over shadow even veera and manmeet's true love... at least for me... or maybe i'm just being baised? dunno, but i feel a moment's happiness for veera, and a stream of pain for heer... if only prem was here... i'm sure he'd be.. by the wedding? ๐Ÿ˜‰... ๐Ÿ˜†... come jazzy!! pretty please, with honey, roses and all the sweet things ever to be brought in the face of earth!! ๐Ÿ˜† maan jao na!!
this manmeet is compeltely different from the manmeet in Ek Paal ๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜›...Prem...by the wedding...forget that...Prem at all...hmmm...dont think so! ๐Ÿ˜›...hmm....trying to patao me...what else you got....hmm...a nice song dedication perhaps ๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰...im just saying ๐Ÿ˜›
flashback : ooh, did i ever mention how much i adore maya... kaash she'd like this in the show... i can totally imagine her, as the sweet and caring bhabi she is in tanhai.... *sigh*... oh well, if not there then here i guess.... i just loved her idea... so well thought isnt it? i mean going to meet her dad, and heer.... ๐Ÿคฃ... ooh, maya, my simpathies with u all the way.... "It took all of Maya's self control to keep from smacking Heer upside the head".... jaz u totally rocked in those lines, that had me in splits... heer can be so... so .... so dense... ... totally the exact word to describe her behaviour in that scene... and harmu... ๐Ÿคฃ... what a chicken he is.... just had me in more splits... omg, that particular scene was hilarious to say the least.... ya...Heer was bit of a ditzzy girl in that scene naa...ruining everything herself...ha ha...and i admit...Maya is one of my favotire characters in this story...she is like the ideal bhabi...actually...all three of them are ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ
aur aye haye... saree.... ooh, too cute... and demanding (๐Ÿคฃ) for heer too... but prem, u are an angel.. haye, *prays* when will an angel in my life come... preferably that would be prem.... ๐Ÿ˜ณ.... ..."tu nahin aayegi?"...heer u totally crack me up... it's your first date, with your dream guy, and you ask your friend why she isnt comming over for tea?๐Ÿคฃ, ooh, do you want her to be the proof of your first kiss? โ˜บ๏ธ...ookie i have lost it nah? god help!.... and the pendant... oh prem, i just love that love of his... so pure, so real, so deep... omg, even if he doesnt have money, he bought heer that.... ooh, angel, jaz will bring u back... haina jaz? ๐Ÿ˜›..... ooh, and u just dont know how much i love that song... everything... aye haye, sooo.. romantic... so reminds me of premeer this particular song, after u wrote it on them... omg, loving it to bits... even more than i used to now....she was nervous...sometimes i feel like i should take my friends on my dates with me...especially the first date...first of all...its kills some of the stress...and number two...if the guy is a jerk...you have a way out ๐Ÿ˜‰
"dont trip on the saree"... ๐Ÿคฃ, oh heer u innocent little thing,.. oh how much i adore these simple gestures... *sigh*.... and that "daar" dialogue... omg... am so gooey over that... so cute.... and "Tum kissi aur ki hojao, yeh main khabi nahin seh sakta. Tum mere ho, sirf mere,"..... *dies*......omg, omg, omg, u think u wont kill anyone by writing this? well u just got ur first culprit.... *dies again*....... ๐Ÿ˜... omg, prem, kitne haq se bola... seriously... i was just day-dreaming all along... ooh, and i felt a hard pinch when prem thought heer doesnt reciprocate his feelings... and that sad gesture, and when she said "i love u too".... i totally loved that scene.. haye... and that kiss... โ˜บ๏ธ...... ooh, it was just so inncoently written... ag ain, amazing...but the shaadi ki baat made me ๐Ÿคฃ... it was a little premature wasnt it? ... but cute none the less on prem's side.... OMG...ek nahin...doh doh baar mare ho...๐Ÿ˜ฒ๐Ÿ˜ฒ...someone call the world record people (i cant spell the name for the life of me ๐Ÿ˜‰) ...wow...you missy are going in the record books...just dont forget to mention you died while reading my story...and pls...dont haunt me in attempts to bring back prem...but if you wanna say hi...you are more than welcome ๐Ÿ˜†...the shaadi...not premature only because they have loved each other forever...heer admitted she loved him from day one...and prem loved her...he jsut didnt know it yet ๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰
"You don't love her because she is beautiful. She is beautiful because you love her."
oh, so well written these lines... it completely descibed what she was feeling at that moment... so real... me loves this line... really.... i love that line too...*swoon* ๐Ÿ˜ณ
"Tum hi mere daulat ho, paisoon se mera kya lena dehna,".... oh did i also mention that i hate u jaz? well if i havent i do now... omg, how can u kill (not really, but that's what ur trying to convey ๐Ÿ˜†) the guy who said thse beautiful line.... i wanna kill u now.... *hmph*... but, but, but, u'll bring him back wont u? *kaan pakding for repeating this line numerous times*... i just cant help myself... ๐Ÿ˜†... me missing prem... ๐Ÿ˜ญ.... hmm...dont think so...you havent said you hated me in the last few paragraphs...good to have you back ๐Ÿค—...lol...
my comment is getting way out of control, i'd have written about what manmeet's daadi said, but my comment is getting tooooo long, so in short, i just love this daadi, coz i thought she'd make a hugama on what a widow is doing in a marriage... and whose horrid villains.... i felt bad for a split second for them but that moment already passed!! ok...you are under strict orders...and i mean ORDERS...to fully complete you comments no matter how long they go...I LOVE YOU COMMENTS!! always...so agli baar...no short cut...you go all the way...for me naa ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ...as for the bhai's...there is more to the story than what meets the eye...hang in there...you will find out...๐Ÿ˜‰
and, and, and.... i have completely, without notice ignored these lines... "Preet Mehta nahin aaya?" ... i know exactly what u are trying to convey and trying to do at the same time, but nooooooo way we will accept that... noooo way!! preet?? u did this in "heer's secrer" but there prem has gray shades, here prem is an angel and alive, so no preet or anyone can come take his place.... never.... *folds hands and shakes hands for a firm no*.... but i'll buy that, if prem would come back in preet's name ๐Ÿคฃ... it's totally acceptable.... ๐Ÿ˜†.... yaar...ignore PReet all you want...but he aint going anywhere ๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜›....aage aage dekho...hota hai kya (omg...i've used this line so many times ๐Ÿ˜•) ...
omg, very long coment this is.... but i totally enjoyed this update... next would have prem in the present right?๐Ÿ˜‰.... here i go again... ๐Ÿคฃ.... expecting an even better (and longer ๐Ÿ˜‰) update... for now, take care... and enjoy ur week!! loved this comment...thanks for taking the time to write it...i really appreciate it!!! ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ
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๐Ÿ˜†...Garu...where u at ๐Ÿ˜‰
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Originally posted by: -Pooji-

Awesome update
the flashback was sooo cute romantic
the way you describe the feelings amazing
the ending was sad emotional
loved the update ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘

thankz for pm


no worries on the PM...happy to do it...thanks for commenting and reading...next part will be up soon ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

JAZ

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^Ohhh Im soo sorry Didz! =[

God! I feel sooo bad for not commenting! I'm just soo damn busy these days! BUT. Do not worry, cuz this time when you update I'll comment on chp. 4 and 5! and that is a PROMISE! oh! btw, I commented on chp. 3 its like on pg 25 or something...yeah lol! Im sooo sorry though! *kaan pakading!* I will try to comment ASAP on your next chp. k?

Luv yaaa! *hugs*

Garima =)
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Posted: 16 years ago
jaz

tu ne tu muno dedita pher main ki karaan....school hon hon shru hoya te main bhi bohto pagal vah honeh honeh kuch bhi bol jandhi aan


trust me...I got the punjabi thing goign on since thats my background

o o o eid mubarak forgot to wish you!!...mine went ok-ish!

hope yours went good!
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: Additi...

THAT WAS VERY ROMANTIC ANS TOUCHING UPDATE

I HAD TEARS IN MY EYES WHEN I WAS READING THE LAST PARAGRAPH
AND PREET MEHTA SEEMS TO BE THE NEW HERO IN HEER'S LIFE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


thanks for reading & commenting ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ...im glad you enjoyed it...next part will be up soon ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

Originally posted by: luv_kdmhmd

Hi Jaz hello yaar...how are you? ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

You have selected perfect name for his SS. I read it all in one go. I can't believe this, you made me cry three times while I was reading it (though I was trying hard not to cry)๐Ÿ˜ญ. And then I knew I have to comment for this SS. thanks...i was so confused about what to call it...but then i head a song...Roya Re...and the line "Tanhai...saang dil tanhai"...so it clicked...๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ

I loved it truly. The way you have described heer's emotions, it was mindblowing. In the first part itself when heer woke up saying "Nahin Bhaia, nahin! Usse maat maro! Woh marajyega" you got me hooked then and there. I had a chilling and creepy feeling and suspected something bad to happen. I always had loved prem's character a lot, as a result could not imagine him dieing. You can imagine what I felt when he was killed so brutally. aww...๐Ÿค—...sorry for killing Prem...everyone is after me for that...lol...but that is one of the major elements in this story...without him being dead...a lot of the parts dont work out...but im glad the first line hooked you...๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ

I love their each and every moments that they shared, especially when kid prem said to heer 'yeh ab bhaiya kahan se aayega'. I was laughing like anything. Does not she have enough brother that she even wanted to make prem another one in her life. ๐Ÿคฃ i know...she was after to make Prem her bhai too...thank god Prem mein kuch akal aaya...๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†

You ss is very tragic. Its not good that now when he is no more in her life then she remembers all those beautiful moments with him. I really hate her brothers. They killed their sister's love in front of her. They didn't even give them a chance to lead a life together. I felt really sad when heer said "Meri suhagan aur vidva tak ka safar baas kuch ghantoon ke the" all of the lines from that entire scene were in my head for such a long time...im so happy that i finally got to use it...im glad you enjoyed it...๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ˜Š


So preet is coming. Plz get prem back somehow, he is the one for heer and not preet. She only belongs to him and has waited for him and somehow I have a good feeling with the entry of preet. I hope he brings prem and heer together. Preet is coming...aage aage dekho hota hai kya...is he good...is he bad...is he important...is he not...everything will come out in due time...just wait and watch ๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰

Plz add me in your pm list for this SS and for heer's secret ff too. I can't describe right now how I feel about that ff as I am in a very sad mood and when will comment for that ff sometime later.will add you to the PM list...next part will be updated sometime tonight or tomorrow...we have a few guests coming today so ill try but no promises...thanks for commenting...really appreciate it ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ

Sia



Originally posted by: brainychild92

i cant believe heer even stays with the maan family.. i know she has nowhee to go but still.. i felt so bad for her and she has every right to curse her bros.. they killed h im.. i mean really??!!

i wonder what role preet has.. preet mehta.. is he someone they were lookong for heer?? ugh.. but i hope he is pos and helps heer..

continue soon!!


thanks for reading & commenting ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ...im glad you enjoyed it...next part will be up soon ๐Ÿ˜ƒ...we have dealt with the family issue...she has nowhere else to go...besides...story doesnt work if Heer isnt with her family ๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜›๐Ÿ˜›...Preem Mehta...aage aage dekho...what he is all about ๐Ÿ˜‰

Originally posted by: Palkih_08

Hi!........just read ur fanfic....... its totally awesome!!!..... it makes me cry i can't believe her brothers did that to her!!! such selfish dictators!!! ughhhhhhh......waiting for the next part...plzzz update soon!!!

-Luv Pari


thanks for reading & commenting ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ...im glad you enjoyed it...next part will be up soon...hope you are not crying anymore ๐Ÿ˜‰... ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

Originally posted by: PremLeoManav

WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!AWSOMEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!I simply loved every bit of it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Very nice................waiting for next part plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzpm me.................๐Ÿ˜Š


thanks for reading & commenting ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ...im glad you enjoyed it...next part will be up soon ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

JAZ

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hey guys...next part for Tahnai is here...sorry for delay...but been busy with Roja, Eid...and over all just being a lazy bum during my time off from school...so here is the next installment...hope you enjoy...๐Ÿ˜ณ...

Recap: Veera is getting married to Manmeet...Heer over hears her father and brothers talking about Preet Mehta


NOTE: Gudiya and purplestar22...im working on your comments...will be posted soon ๐Ÿ˜ณ

Part 5

Heer had woken up hours ago, but she had just been lying on her bed ' she wasn't ready to go out into the 'real' world again. Prem and the love she had shared with him, lived in the safety of her own room. Their memories, their laughter, their tears, their hearts and their souls all resided in that one room. Heer was just lying on her side staring out the window as a new day began with a fresh note. Heer was lost in her thoughts until she hears someone knock lightly on the door. It was Veera.

"Didi?" she called quietly as she stepped in.

"Hmm," Heer responded, letting Veera know she was up.

"Good morning."

"Good morning Chutki." Heer felt the bed dip down as Veera got in and laid down next to her.

"Didi, aap tik toh hai naa?" she asked, softly.

"Hmm. Kyun?" Heer asked. Heer knew exactly why Veera was asking. After the way she disappeared from the engagement party, it didn't take a rocket scientist to figure out what happened.

"Nahin woh'kaal raath'" Veera stopped because she didn't know how to finish her sentence.

"Chutki, main tik hoon. Saachi. Tu chinta maat kaar," Heer said, her back still turned at Veera as she started out the window.

After a few minutes of silence Heer heard Veera say, "I'm sorry Didi."

"Kyun?" Heer asked. She didn't have the slightest clue as to why Veera was apologizing.

"I'm sorry that I'm happy," Veera said.

Heer literally sucked in a breath as the words that Veera said, passed her ears. She had to turn around at this point ' when she did, she was face to face with Veera. In her sister's eyes, Heer could see that she truly felt guilty and sorry for being happy when Heer wasn't.

"Chutki'" Heer began to speak.

"Main jaanti hoon Didi ke yeh tik nahin hai. Meri zindagi mein itni sari kushiyan aa rahi hai aur aap'" she couldn't finish.

Heer sat up as she said, "Chutki, tu aaisa kyun sooch rahi hai?"

"It's just not fair," Veera repeated.

Heer pulled Veera so that she was sitting too. "Dekh, mere saath joh hona tha, woh hochuka. Kismat mein joh likha tha, usse toh hona hi tha. Lekin tu aaisa maat sooch, ke tu kush hai, issi liyeh main dukhi hoon."

"Magar Didi'" Veera began to say, only to be cut off.

"Jaab main tujhe dekhti hoon Manmeet ke saath toh main bohot kush hoti hoon. Joh kushiyaan mujhe nahin mili, main chati hoon ke woh saare kushiyaan tujhe miljayeh. Aapni zindagi ke bees (20) saal mein maine aapni saari kushiyaan ji li hai'Prem ke saath. Haan, jaab jaab main unn paloon ke baarein mein soochti hoon, ya phir yeh soochti hoon ke woh paal dobara lautke nahin aayenge'toh dard toh hota hai. Bohot dard hota hai. Lekin iska matalb yeh nahin ke main tere liyeh kush nahin hoon. Prem ke saath maine aapni zindagi ji li hai. Prem ne meri zindagi ko zindagi banaya tha. Uske saat bitaya haar ek paal bohot khaas hai'mere dil ke paas hai," Heer said. "Aur ek baath main tujhe batadoon'I wouldn't trade one moment I spent with Prem. Never."

"Lekin Didi, jaab main aapko dekhti hoon toh mujhe lagta hai ke yeh kushiyaan mere liyeh nahin hai. I don't deserve it," Veera said with her eyes down cast; the tears shimmering in the light from the sun.

Heer lifted Veera's face so that she was looking right into her eyes. "Hey Chutki'you deserve it. You deserve more than this. Never doubt that."

"Oh Didi!" Veera said as she wrapped her arms around Heer.

Heer embraced her baby sister tightly. It amazed her to see how much Veera had changed. She had gone from the annoying and spoiled preteen to an understanding and caring adult ' she had become a woman. Heer truly prayed that she got all of the happiness in the world.

"Chal, kuch hi haftoon mein teri shaadi hai. Ghaar mein bohot kaam hai. Jaldi utt," Heer said as she pushed Veera away.

Veera fell back onto the bed and pulled Heer with her. "Baas Didi, thodi dehr aur," she said.

"Magar Chutki'" Heer began to protest.

"Please," Veera said with her head tilting to one side and her lips displaying a smile.

For a split second, Heer could see Prem doing the exact thing when trying to get her to do something she didn't want to do. "Tik hai," Heer said, as she laid down beside Veera.

The two Maan sisters just laid in bed silently for a few minutes. The peace didn't last long because soon Meher was at their door yelling at them about being lazy and sleeping in when there were a million and one things that needed to be done before the ceremonies that night.

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The house was a complete mad house. Veera and Manmeet's wedding was to take place in just two weeks time. The pundit-ji had said that if the wedding didn't take place by this time then there wouldn't be another auspicious time for at least 7 months. Everyone at the house was busy with making all of the preparations. Even the little kids had but given assignments ' the older ones had to make sure the younger ones were occupied and didn't get in the way. Of course, they had to be bribed to babysit their own brothers, sisters, and cousins because the family had no other choice.

It was the day before Veera's haldi/mehndi ceremony. The house looked absolutely superb. The family had decided that the wedding would take place at the Grand Hyatt Hotel, but the other functions would all take place right there at the house. The entire family members were al gathered around the dining table ready for lunch. The kids were settled and creating a mess as they waited for food, the brothers and their wives were all arguing about reading newspaper at the table.

Veera and Heer were in charge of getting the food out, so they were working in the kitchen. They were laughing at something that Rohan had said about a cartoon that he watched in the morning. Heer had to admit, in the atmosphere of Veera's wedding, she caught herself smiling more and more often than she had in the past seven years. It felt good to smile and be merry with her family after such a long time ' well most of the anyway. Heer was bringing out a dish to the table when she noticed Preeti missing.

"Bhabi," Heer called at Maya, "Preeti kahaan hai?"

As if on cue, the little girl in question came running into the room screaming at the top of her lungs. "Massi! Massi!" she yelled as she saw Heer.

Heer quickly rushed to her as all the other adults at the table got up from their seats as well. Preeti looked absolutely terrified as she ran into Heer's arms. Heer lifted her onto her hip and began to check her body to see if she was hurt. "Kya hua Preeti? Kahin pe chot lagi hai kya? Gir gaye the?" she asked.

"N'nahin," Preeti cried.

"Phir?"

"Daar lagta hai," Preeti said between her sobs.

"Daar? Tum toh mere bahadur baachi ho naa? Tumhe kis se daar lag raha hai?" Heer asked.

"Woh, vahaan pe'." She pointed towards the playroom.

"Koi hai vahaan pe?" Harman asked.

"Haan Papa."

"Kya hai?"

"Bohot bada'khatarnak'chuha," Preeti said.

For a moment everyone was quiet and then, less than a second later, they all burst out laughing.

"Joh iss ghaar ki Dadi-Amma banke ghumti hai, woh aaj ek chuha se daar gayi!" Balraj laughed.

Preeti's eyes filled with more tears as she grabbed onto Heer's neck tightly.

"Nahin rote. Tum toh meri aachi baachi ho naa? Aura aachi baachi nahin rote," Heer said as she soothed her.

Everyone continued to laugh and joke about Preeti's new found fear ' everyone except Heer and Maya. While everyone else laughed, they shared a knowing glance. They shared a split second of pain, they shared a moment, they shared a weak smile ' they shared a moment with Prem.

*~*Flash Back*~*

(Heer = 16 & Prem = 18)

It was the summer time and the Maan house was buzzing. Rishab had been on his way to Mumbai for a business conference when his car had met with an accident, when it collided with a huge cargo truck. The doctors revealed that he had broken his left leg in 4 places, a few ribs, not to mention other cuts and scrapes. However, his most serious injury was the internal bleeding that was caused by the impact. After being in the hospital for just over one month, the doctors had finally given him the news that he could go home.

It was welcome news for everyone because most of the family had been out to Mumbai to watch after him. Of course, Kulraj had been there along with Teji, Nihaal, Meher and Heer. Heer was off from school so she was more than happy to help, after all he was her brother. However, the down side was that it had been over one month since she had seen Prem. In all of their years as friends, and then some, they had never spent more than a week or two away from each other. Heer was going crazy and so was Prem. So when the new came that Rishab was going home, neither of them could have been happier.

They had gotten home to see Maya and Harman working hard putting together a pooja at the house. They had prayed for Rishab and has promised to have a pooja at the house when he was well enough and returned home. As Kulraj took Rishab up to their room, the rest of the family got to work. Heer knew that she needed to call Prem so they could meet, but she also saw that Maya was overwhelmed with all that she was going. Heer promised to be back in 20 minutes, just as soon as she was changed out of the clothes she was wearing.

Heer went up to her bed room and dug in her closet for something to wear. The entire time she was humming a song in her mind ' it was the song she had dance to with Prem on their date. Finally settling on an orange and rust colored salwar suit, Heer headed to the bathroom. She took the quickest shower she had ever taken and quickly changed before coming out. She was at her dresser just drying her hair with the towel when she heard Maya calling out to her.

"Heer?! Kahaan reh gayi!?" she called.

"Baas, abhi aayi Bhabi," Heer yelled back.

"Jaldi!" Maya said. From the sound of her voice, Heer could tell she was just down the hall in her room.

Heer was humming away when out of nowhere she felt a sudden draft of air. She thought it was weird because she could have sworn that the window had been closed the entire time. Maybe she had opened it and didn't realize it. Without giving it much thought she walked over to close it. As soon as she closed the window, she felt someone grab her from behind.

"Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhh!" Heer screamed.

Heer kicked the person behind her, as if some kind of reflex, and managed to get out of their hold. Turning around she saw who it was.


"Prem tum!?" she yelled. "Tumne toh meri jaan hi nikal di!"

"Aur tum," Prem said as she grabbed onto his leg, "Tum kaab se karate jaanti ho? Tang thodiya mera."

Before Heer could say anything she heard Maya Bhabi, "Heer? Kya hua? Tu tik hai?" she called.

"Maar gaye!" Heer said as she smacked her head. "Tum jaao yahaan se! Iss se pehle ke Bhabi aajaye, jaao."

"Magar kyun?" Prem asked. "Darti ho aapni Bhabi se?"

"Bhabi se nahin, Bhaia se. Aagar mera kissi bhi Bhai aagaye toh mujhe maar dalenge," Heer said.

"Haath lagake toh dikhaye," Prem said with a grin on his face.

"Prem, yeh macho banne ka waqt nahin hai," Heer said as she held his hand and dragged him towards the window. "Jaao please."

Heer managed to get one of Prem's legs out of the window when Maya barged in and she too yelled, "Ahh!"

"Shh Bhabi," Heer called.

"Maya?" Harman called. "Maya kya hua? Saab tik hai?"

Heer instantly panicked because she was sure her brother was already half way up the stairs.

"Bhabi please," Heer pleaded.

"Main tik hoon Harman," Maya called.

"Phir, tumne chilaya kyun?" he asked. His voice wasn't louder, that meant he has stopped coming towards Heer's room.

"Kuch nahin, baas ek chuha tha," Maya said as she looked Prem up and down, "Bohot bada chuha."

"Chuha, iss ghaar mein? Chi, kaal hi terminator ko bulake uss chuha ko maarna hoga."

Maya watched as Harman walked away, before she came in and closed the door. "Iss chuha ko tum nahin maar sakte Harman. Yeh chuha toh tumhari behen ki jaan hai."

"Bhabi," Heer said as she blushed.

Maya noticed that half of Prem's body was still hanging out of the window. "Aab chuha sahab, andar aane ka irada hai, yah phir khud kushi karne ka irada hai?" she asked.

Prem too blushed as he stumbled in, nearly falling over but grabbed onto Heer just in time.

"Heer," Maya said in a condescending tone, "Yeh saab kya hai?"

"Bhabi woh'Prem'milne'." Heer just stuttered.

Maya walked past Heer and looked at Prem. "Oh ho, toh yeh chuha Mr. Prem hai?" she asked. Looking him up and down again, this time with more scrutiny she said, "I approve. Heer, tumne khabi nahin bataya ke Prem itna handsome hai. "

"Bhabi," Heer admonished.

"Kya 'Bhabi'? Aapni Prem se nahin milvayegi?"

"Oh, haan'Prem yeh hai Maya Bhabi aur Bhabi yeh hai'.Prem." Heer blushed one hundred shades of red as she said his name.

"Toh aap hai Prem, jisne meri nanad ki dil churaya hai?" Maya asked.

"Guilty as charged," Prem said as he bowed slightly. "Aur aap hai Maya Bhabi. Heer ki dost zyada aur Bhabi kaam." Prem then bent down to touch Maya's feet.

Maya jumped back, "Yeh kya kaar rahe ho?"

"Ashirwad leh raha hooon," Prem said.

"Haan, toh loh naa. Lekin abhi main itni budhi nahin hui hoon ke tum mere pair choo kar ashirwad lo," Maya scolded.

"Phir kaise?" Prem asked.

"Aare, gale lag kar bhi toh le sakte ho," Maya said.

"Bhabi, you are the best," Prem said as he embraced Maya. "Heer, tumhari Bhabi'haye'awesome! Aap mujhe Heer se pelhe kyun nahin mile? Aapki toh jawab hi nahin!"

"Baas baas bohot hogaya," Maya smiled, as Heer frowned. "I'm sorry Mr. Chuha, lekin aapko aab jaana padega. Heer ne vada kiya tha ke woh meri madat karegi pooja ki tayari mein. Chal Heer."

Both Prem and Heer's hearts fell as Maya walked towards the door pulling Heer along with her.

"Magar Bhabi'Woh Prem'" Heer began to say.

Maya turned and looked at their faces. She couldn't help but laugh. "Mil le, mil le aapni Prem se," she said as she let go of Heer's hand. "Koi poochega toh main kehdungi ke tu soh gayi hai. Main laddoo khud hi bana lungi." As Maya left she called out one more time, "Aur haan'tum dono'BEHAVE!"

Heer blushed as Maya closed the door. When she turned around she saw Prem with an odd look in his eyes.

"Kya hua?" she asked.

"Laddoo? Ghaar mein laddoo baan rahe hai?" he asked.

"Haan toh?"

"Mere liyeh kuch leh aao naa," Prem pleaded.

"Main kaise'"

Prem turned around and folded his arms across his chest. "Kya Heer'main aapne jaan pe khelkar yahaan taak aa sakta hoon'aur tum mere liyeh laddoo main mangva sakti?" he said.

"Prem baath ko samjo'" Heer said as she faced him.

Once again, Prem won this situation. He smiled at her, tilted his head and said "Please."

"Uff, tik hai!" Heer said as she gave up. "Tum se toh main khabi nahin jeet sakti!"

Heer quietly opened the door just in time to see Maya coming out of her room, and luckily no one was with her. "Psst! Bhabi," she called out.

"Kya hai?" Maya asked in a hushed tone.

"Woh'aapke uss chuha ko laddoo khana hai," Heer said.

"Aare wah, usse laddoo bhi pasand hai." Maya smiled as Heer looked utterly exasperated. "Tu jaa, main abhi leke aati hoon."

Heer walked back to her room and closed the door. "Tum mujhse milne aaye ho ya laddoo khane?" she asked, in mock anger.

"Obviously'" Prem began to say, when Maya walked in, "'laddoo khane!"

"Prem!" Heer yelled as she threw two pillows at him.

"Haye haye, usse kyun maar rahe ho. Bechare ne kya kiya?" Maya asked as she handed Prem the plate filled with laddoos.

"Haan aap hi kuch kahiyeh Bhabi. Yeh humesha mujhse aaise pesh aati hai," Prem said as she stuck a tongue out.

"Bechara'yeh koi bechara vechara nahin hai Bhabi!" Heer said. "Aur Bhabi, aap kyun aaye phirse. Kissi aur ko bej deti."

"Main kaise bej deti? Yeh chuha joh yahaan hai," Maya said. "Tu naa Heer'budhu ki budhu hi hai."

"Haan Heer, tum toh budhu ke budhu hi ho," Prem teased as well.

Maya turned to leave but then remembered she forgot something. She came over and handed Prem a small tiffin box. "Prem, yeh ghaar lejana tere aur Maa-ji ke liyeh kuch laddoo pack kiya hai. Heer ke hatoon ka gajar ka kalwa toh nahin hai lekin phir bhi, chake batana ke kaise bana hai."

"Aare Bhabi, yeh toh gajar ka halwa se bhi aacha hai!" Prem said. "You are the best!"

"Oh, I approve! I definitely approve. Major plus points."

"Bhabi pe line maar rahe ho!" Heer yelled as she felt jealous.

"Bhabi hai hi itni aachi. Can't help it," Prem said with a wink.

"Prem Jhuneja!" Heer yelled as she grabbed more pillows. "I'll kill you!"

Maya stepped out and closed the door behind her, making sure to lock it so no one stumbled inside.

Heer and Prem continued to fight until Prem put down the laddoos and grabbed her. He held her arms down and brought her body close. He started into her eyes for a while until he finally brought her in for a hug.

"God, I have missed you," he said as he held her.

"I missed you too," Heer said. She pulled back only slightly and placed a quick kiss on his lips before hugging him again.

*~*Back to Present*~*

When Heer snapped out of her thoughts the kids were still laughing at Preeti. This caused Preeti to cry even more because she was being made fun of. It didn't help matters that even the men at the table were still snickering and not even trying to hide it. Just as Heer was about to interject, Kulraj stepped in.

"Bachoon, aaise Preeti ko math tang karo," she said. "Ketan aur Rohan, khas kaar ke tum dono."

"Kyun Mamma?" Ketan asked.

"Woh iss liyeh kyun ke tum dono uske bhai ho." Kulraj began to serve the children food as she continued to talk. "Tum doho ki yeh zimedari hai ke humesha aapni behenoon ki dekhbhal karo. Samje?"

"Haan, aaur uppar se kaal Raksha Bandhan hai," Meher added.

"Woh kya hia Mamma?" Rohan asked.

"Raksha Bandhan woh din hai jaab saari behene aapni bhaiyoon pe rakhi bandthi hai. Rakhi bandne ek baad bhai aapni behen se yeh vaada karta hai ke woh humesha aapni behen ki hifazat karega. Humesha usse kush rakhega. Bhai yeh vaada karta hai ke woh khabi aapni behen pe koi aanch aane nahin dega."

"Oh," Rohan said. "Matlab ke kaal Roshni, Diya, aur Preeti mujhpe, Dhruv pe, aur Ketan Bhaia pe rakhi bandnenge?"

"Haan. Aur tum dono ko saab ko gift dena hoga," Maya said.

"Gift? Magar mere paas toh paisa nahin hai," Rohan said.

Everyone giggled at his comment.

"Tum chinta maat karo beta," Nihaal said, "Hum saab sambhal lenge."

"Aur Dhruv? Woh toh abhi bhi baby hai." Rohan reminded everyone. "Woh behenoon ke liyeh kya kaar sakta hai?"

"Dhruv ka hum sambhal lenge," Harman said.

"Yeh bandhan toh humesha ki hai," Meher said. "Dhruv aaj chota hai, kuch nahin kaar sakta lekin jaab woh bada hoga, taab karega."

By this time Heer had managed to call Preeti down, so she set her in a chair and proceeded to the kitchen to help Veera bring out the rest of the food.

"Heer beta, tu bhi aapni list deh deh," Teji said suddenly.

"Kaunsi list?" Heer asked as she returned to the dining area with a plate full of rotis.

"Aare, Veera ne toh ek lambi list di hai. Usse kaunsa gift chahiyeh Raksha Bandhan ke liyeh, saab kuch likha hai. Chal tu bhi deh deh."

Heer stood silent as did everyone else present at the table. In the past seven years, Heer did not tie rakhi to her brothers even once. Never had anyone even mentioned it. On that day, Heer either stayed locked in her room or she made some excuse to go outside. Heer didn't know why her mother was bringing it up suddenly.

Heer looked at her three brothers. They were all looking at her, and Heer could have sworn, just for a brief moment, there was a spark of hope in their eyes.

"Mujhe kuch nahin chahiyeh," she said as she headed back to the kitchen. "Innse toh kuch bhi nahin." Heer had said it under her breath but her mother was close enough to hear it.

"Heer, aaisa maat kar," Teji pleaded.

"Kya kaar rahi hoon Maa? Mujhe kissi se kuch nahin chahiyeh. Joh mujhe chahiyeh woh toh koi bhi nahin deh sakta. Vaise bhi, yeh log mujhe deh bhi kya sakte hai," Heer said as she looked at her brothers in disgust.

"Heer'" Teji began to say but was cut off.

"Aap ko kya lagta hai Maa? Pichle kuch dino se main aap saab se mil-jul rahi hoon toh iska matlab ke main saab kuch bhul chuki hoon?" Heer asked. "Nahin Maa nahin! Main kuch nahin bhuli hoon. Aaj bhi saab kuch mujhe yaad hai. Jin logoon ne mujhse meri kushiyaan chini hai, woh mujhe kya desakte hai?"

It was after Heer made that comment, that Nihaal slammed his paper down on the table and yelled, "Baas Heer baas! Saath saal beit chuke hai. Tu abhi bhi humse naraaz hai? Humne kitni baar tujhse maafi manga hai."

Knowing full well where this conversation was going to end up, Veera, with the help of Ketan, rounded up the children and rushed up stairs. This was not an argument the children needed to hear or see.

"Aapko lagta hai maafi mangne se saab kuch tik hojata hai?" Heer asked. She was in utter shock that they would be so stupid to believe something so ridiculous.

"Hum toh baas tujhe lehne aur usse darane gaye the," Rishab added. "Hume kya paata tha ke Prem'"

Hearing the man who killed Prem take his name caused Heer to feel a sudden burst of fury that she had never felt before. "Maat lo mere Prem ka naam aapni zubaan se!" she yelled. She grabbed to the chair so tight that her knuckles were turning white and her breathing became labored.

"Heer," Harman said as he got up. He walked over to her and placed a hand on her shoulder, "Joh kuch bhi uss raath hua, saab ek glahti thi."

"Ghalti!?" Heer screamed. Was she hearing right? Were her brothers trying to find excuses for what they had done? They were trying to pass on the worst moment of her life as a mistake?! A mistake?!

"Haan, ek bohot badi ghalti," Rishab joined in. "Jaab Nihaal ne Prem ko dhakka diya tha, toh woh achanak mere bahoon mein gira. Woh chaku'woh chaku ghalti se lag gaya tha."

"Kya!? Ghalti se?!" Heer was beside herself with rage, it just seemed to pour out of her body. "Aap theeno ne mere Prem ko maardala aur keh rahe hai ke woh ek ghalti thi?"

"Heer tu sun toh'." Nihaal tried to say. He explained that when Prem stepped on his feet, it was like a reflex so he just pushed Prem away. Rishab had been holding the knife but didn't mean to stab Prem with it.

"Tik hai. Chalo, maan bhi lete hai ke woh ghalti se laag gayi," Heer said, as she folded her arms across her chest. "Lekin aap logoon ne mujhe usse bachane kyun nahin diya!? Kyun usse hospital nahin leke gaye!? Kyun usse aaise pekh diya jaise ke woh insaan nahin, janwaar ho?! Kyun bhaage aaye?! Kyun police ko phone nahin kiya?! Kyun usse nahin bachaya?! Kyun?! Kyun?! Kyun?!" Heer now had tears streaming down her face as she remembered her last moments with Prem ' as she remember the last breath he took. "Kyun mujhe vidva banaya?!"

Heer nearly fell to the floor as all of the emotions overwhelmed her. Before she hit the floor she was supported by Maya and Meher. Her mother and her brothers stood silently.

"Kaal raksha bandhan hai, lekin aab woh bandhan mere liyeh koi maeiyne nahin rakthi," Heer said once she found some strength. "Yeh ek aaisa vaada hai joh ek bhai aapni behen se karta hai. Yeh sirf behen ka raksha karna nahin. Yeh aapni behen ki haar saapna, haar iicha aur haar kushiyaan ke raksha karna hai. Jissne mujhse saab kuch china hai, woh kya raksha karenge? Jissne khud mera haar saapna thoda hai, woh kya raksha karenge? Jissne meri jeena ka iicha hi khatam kardiya hai, woh kya raksha karenge? Jissne mujhse meri kushiyaan china hai, mujhse mera Prem china hai, woh kya raksha karenge?"

No one spoke for at least a minute. It was Rishab who finally said, "Hume maaf karde Heer."

The sadness, dejection and remorse in his voice would have broken most people, but not Heer'not after what they had done.

"Maafi mangne se kuch badal toh nahin jayega naa? Mera Prem, vapas toh nahin aayega?" Heer asked. "Aap saab," she said as she pointed to the four men in the room, "'aap saab mere gunegar the, mere gunegar hai aur humesha rahenge. Maafi mangne se kuch nahin hota. Kuch nahin!"

Heer was about to walk away when something her brother had said finally stuck out to her. "Aap keh rahe the naa, ke joh kuch bhi hua, saath saal purani baath hai?" she asked Nihaal. "Saath saal purani baath hogi aap saab ke liyeh, lekin mere liyeh nahin. Mere liyeh, yeh toh jaisi kaal hi ki baath hai. Haar paal, jaagte hue ya sohte hue, mujhe Prem ki kaami mehsoos hoti hai. Jaab bhi aapni akheen baand karti hoon toh uska cehera saamne aajata hai. Jaab bhi main akeli hoti hoon toh uska ehsaas hota hai. Jaab bhi usse yaad karti hoon toh akhoon mein asoon aajate hai. Aaj bhi jaab main uss raath ke baarein mein soochti hoon toh wohi dard vapas aajata hai, kyun ke uss raath ko maine sirf Prem ko nahin khoya'uss raath ko maine aapni Bauji aur bhaiyoon ko khoya tha. Ek hi paal mein mera saab kuch khogaya. Main uss paal ko kaise bhool jaoon'kaise bhool jaoon?"

Heer went to her room as once again, she relived every moment of the horrific night that took Prem from her. No one said anything, they just stood around. Heer knew that they had all noticed that she hadn't addressed her brothers directly by calling them by name or even by referring them as "Bhaia". She knew they noticed that this was the first time in 7 years that she had even spoken to them, directly or indirectly.

The last time she had spoken to her brothers had been the night Prem died. She had begged and begged them to let her go and help him, but they hadn't allowed her. Then she pleaded with them to let her at least make an anonymous call to the police to tell them what had happened so that they could at least save Prem. She had promised them, she swore to them that if the let her save Prem then she would never see him again and get married to Rajveer. As long as Prem was alive she didn't need anything more, she'd learn to live with out him even if it killed her. Heer tried everything, but nothing worked.

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Veera's mehndi ceremony and haldi happened on the same day. The haldi was in the day time with just close family and friends, while the mehndi was later in the evening and was a grand affair. Thankfully, it went off without a hitch. Of course there was still tension between Heer and her family members but for Veera's sake, she put everything aside. It was Veera's day ' she wasn't going to ruin it. All the festivities and rituals went off beautifully. Veera was getting her mehndi done, as were Heer's sister-in-laws. Heer watched form the corner as all the married women put on mehndi for their husbands.

Prem had loved it when Heer wore mehndi. Her hands were always red, the reddest of the red. As she watched, she remembered the time she first put on mehndi after her and Prem were officially a couple.

*~*Flash Back*~*

(Heer = 16 & Prem = 18)

"Uff, Bhabi! Mujhe nahin lagani mehndi!" Heer complained as Meher dragged her over to where the other females were getting their mehndi done.

"Kyun nahin lagvani?" Kulraj asked. "Shaadi wala ghaar hai, mehndi toh lagana padega."

It was Heer's cousins wedding, which just happened to be held at Maan Estates. God knew it was big enough, but Heer had no interest in the wedding. She did at first, since her oldest cousin, Ashlesha, was getting married. However, since the day of the engagement all of the aunties had been after her trying to fix her up with either their own sons or sons of family/friends. Enough was enough! It was like there was some guy thrown at her face every few minutes. To make matters worse, she hadn't seen Prem all week.

Ever since he had graduated she saw less and less of him. She knew that she wasn't going to be able to see him regularly since Prem no longer was in school. Just because she knew what to expect, didn't mean she had to like it.

However, being the good girl that she was, she didn't have the heart to say 'no' when her chachi asked her to sit and have her mehndi done. Heer nearly held her breath the entire time because she couldn't stand the smell. Finally, when all of the festivities were finally done 4 hours later, and she was excused to her room, she ran straight for the bathroom and washed it off. She came out wiping her hands and threw the towel on her bed.

In the darkness of the room she heard someone say, "Hey!"

She stopped in her tracks. "Prem?" she asked, as she turned on the lights.

"Aur nahin toh kaun?" Prem asked as he moved the towel off of his face. "Dekh ke nahin phek sakti?"

"Mujhe kya paata ke tum iss waqt yahaan ho. Tum toh jaise mujhe bhool hi gaye," Heer pouted as she sat on the edge of the bed.

"Oh ho, kya meri girlfriend mujhse naraaz hai?" Prem came up behind her and hugged her tightly. "Main tumhe kaise bhool sakta hoon? Pichle doh ghanto se yahaan pe baita hoon tumhare liye, aur tum thi ke uppar aati hi nahin."

"Doh ghante?" Heer asked, shocked. "Woh, main kya karti? Saab itne busy the Di ki shaadi ko lekar. Aur aaj toh ghaar mein mehndi ki rasam thi'haan, sangeet bhi."

"Mehndi ki rasam? Tumne lagaya mehndi?" Prem asked as he rested his head on her shoulder and tried to look at her hands.

"Haan, Meher Bhabi ne zabardasti lagva diya. Mujhe mehndi bilkul pasand nahin." Heer made a face as she talked, which caused Prem to laugh.

"Aacha? Mujhe toh mehndi bohot pasand hai," Prem said. "Zaara dekhoon toh, tumhari mehndi ka rang kitna gehra hai." Prem held Heer's hands from the bottom as she held her palms up for him to inspect. "Wow!" he said, "Tum jaante ko ke mehndi ke rang ke baare mein kya kehte hai?"

"Nahin toh. Kya kehte hai?" Heer asked, not really interested.

"Kehte hai ke mehndi ka rang jitna gehra ho, tumhara paati tumse utna zyada pyaar karta hai."

"Saachi?" Heer asked, now she was totally interested. "Phir, mere hatoon se kya pata chalta hai?"

"Tumhari hatoon se yeh paata chalta hai ke main tumse bohot pyaar karta hoon," Prem said as he kissed her palms.

"Tum kaise, tum paati tohdi naa ho," Heer teased.

"Haan legally nahin hoon, toh kya hua. Maan se, dil se aur aatma se toh hoon naa. Baki ke toh saab formalities hai. Baad mein dekh lenge," he said with a wink. "Dekho, mera naam ka 'P' bhi hai. I'm yours forever!"

Heer was shocked when she looked closer and saw a simple 'P' in the middle of other exquisite designs. "Yeh kissne likha?" she asked.

"Tumne nahin kaha likhne ko?" Prem asked.

"Nahin maine toh nahin'." Heer smiled as she remembered something. "Maya Bhabi," she said. She remembered that while the lady was working on her hand, Maya had come over and whispered something in the lady's ear. Both women giggled but then went about their ways, doing what they were doing. This is what Maya must have told the henna artist.

"Gotta love Maya Bhabi!" Prem said as he smiled as if he had just won a prize in a game or something. "Gotta love you too." Prem hugged Heer tighter and kissed her cheek.

"Love you too," she said as she snuggled closer.

Suddenly there was a knock that interrupted their calm silence. "Didi? Kya kaar rahi ho, darvaza kholo?" Veera said from outside the door.

"Loh aagayi tumhari 'chutki'!" Prem said. It seemed like every time Prem got a little close to Heer, Veera ended up coming to interrupt.

"Aayi Veera, baas change kaar rahi hoon!" Heer yelled to Veera. Then she turned to Prem and said, "Sorry. Lekin ghaar mein itne saare mahman hai. Veera mere saath kamra share kaar rahi hai."

"Tik hai baba, main jaa raha hoon. Vaise bhi bohot raath hochuki hai," Prem said as he stood up.

"Sambhal ke," Heer warned as she watched Prem.

Prem headed towards the window and was half way out when he stopped and gave Heer a quick kiss before disappearing into the darkness of the night.

*~*Back to Present*~*

A smile crept onto Heer's face as she remembered the fact that after Prem's graduation, whenever they had to meet, 8 out of 10 times it involved him sneaking in through her bedroom window. It was hard to get out of the house for Heer and Prem was busy with his studies as well, not to mention the fact that he also had a job which helped pay for school. Heer didn't know what would have happened to Prem after his mom's death but like the great human being that he was ' he pulled through with flying colors. His one aim in life was to finish college because his mother had always dreamed of that for him.

Heer always left her bedroom window unlocked because she didn't know when Prem would be popping in to see her. Many times it just so happened that he came in during the early hours of the morning after everything else was taken care of. Sometimes, he would just come to see her and then leave because he was so tired. One night he had been so tired that he had fallen asleep as Heer talked about her day. She didn't bother to wake him since he was sleeping peacefully. Instead she removed his shoes and covered him with a blanket before snuggling up next to him. Heer knew what could potentially arise with having Prem in her bed, but she didn't worry about that. She trusted Prem and she knew he would never do something like that with her. After all, if sex was what he wanted from her, he could have taken that advantage long ago.


Heer was reminiscing about how Prem's body felt as he slept. She remembered the warmth she felt as she lay next to him; she remembered the steadiness of his breathing and the gentleness of his hold. As Heer remembered her moment's with Prem, she was brought back to reality as commotion suddenly broke out in the hall.

Turning her head Heer saw a crowd of girls huddled around someone at the entrance of the hall, while smaller groups surrounded other people. Heer looked towards Veera who seemed to be blushing. Finally, when the people calmed down, Heer could see that Manmeet had just crashed the party with a few of his friends. Everyone began to tease Veera and Manmeet about how impatient he was, that he couldn't wait a few day for the wedding to pass.

A group of Veera's friends brought Manmeet over so he could sit with her. Heer gave up her seat happily so that the new couple could enjoy a few moments together before Manmeet got kicked out by the ladies of the function.

Heer quietly slipped away into the darkness behind the pillars as she imagined her and Prem doing the same thing. She knew for a fact that if her wedding had been as joyous as Veera's was, then Prem would have crashed every function he was not invited to as the groom. She could imagine him making excuses as to why he was there, she could imagine him teasing her, just as Manmeet was doing now to Veera.

Heer's eyes again became blurry with tears when she looked down at her hands, which were void of any mehndi. As she quietly headed up the stairs, Heer saw her brothers and her father huddled in one corner discussing something.

"Preet Mehta aaj bhi nahin aaya?" Balraj asked.

"Nahin Bauji," Harman replied.

"Tum logoon ne tik se invitation toh diya tha naa?" he asked.

"Haan Bauji," Nihaal said, "Maine khud jaake unke secretary ko diya tha. Woh ek meeting mein busy tha issi liyeh unhe nahin deh paya. Lekin baad mein phone pe baath hui thi, aur unho ne kahaa ke card milgaya aur woh zaroor aayenge."

"Kaal phone kaar ke paata karo ke woh kyun nahin aaye?" Balraj ordered.

"Ji Bauji," Nihaal said.

"I want this deal done!" her father yelled as he walked away.

As the Maan men dispersed, Heer couldn't help but think what was going on? Why was her father so upset that a guest didn't come? What deal was he talking about? And most importantly, who was Preet Mehta?


JAZ


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Edited by jnawaz - 16 years ago
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I am here!!!!๐Ÿ˜ณ I know you missed me!!!!!! because... of course jaani... i miss you 2!!!!๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ Ur like my next door neighbor and we hardly see each other!!!๐Ÿ˜ญ wat an outrage this is!!!!๐Ÿ˜ญ

Anyways no more getting all emotional now.... we always doing that!!๐Ÿ˜† nothing new for us.... but still.... wat can you do!!!๐Ÿ˜‰... awww what a cute update!!!! and haila 2 flashbacks!!!!๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘ so proud!!๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘ deserves 2 thumbs up!!๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ....
aww Prem was called a mouse!!! man๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†.. i can so imagine us in that picture!! DJ would come and see me..... and if u were in Maya's place.... oh man!!! DJ would be a goner!!! and i mean big time!!!!!!... but then he would think wisely and smartly of how to come in if he knew that you were around! ๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜‰ aww.... thats cute how Maya likes him!!! and Prem is such a sweet heart.... actually we all like him as well!!!๐Ÿ‘โญ๏ธ he's a keeper!!!! but then "someone" just had to kill him off in this story..!!!๐Ÿ˜ก wont mention who.....๐Ÿ˜ก
Aww..... Heer told her brothers.... but they so deserved it!!!๐Ÿ˜ก i swear..... they are saying sorry?! man sorry wont even cut it... like totally not.... they didnt do a little thing... they done a huge thing and damage is already done and you cant go and fix it!!!!........ what heer told them was true!!!! way to go!๐Ÿ‘
Aww... 2nd flashback was hella cute as well!!! i so liked it..... but the way he sneaks up in the bedroom.. let me tell u.... man... i might get a few ideas ๐Ÿ˜‰.. hmm maybe i should leave my window open as well in india... hmm.......... thanks for the great ideas babe!!!!!... ur one of a kind!!!!๐Ÿ˜† .....
and omg.... during that 1st FB... i soooo couldnt help... but this line....

Originally posted by: jnawaz

"Prem Jhuneja!" Heer yelled as she grabbed more pillows. "I'll kill you!"

omg๐Ÿ˜† the whole i'll kill you.... man i couldnt help it.. but reminded me of that skeleton... Akhmed or however you spell his name!!!!.... ๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†.... the only part that was missing the "SILENCE" ๐Ÿ˜†
awww i so loved this update.....๐Ÿ‘ cant wait for the next part!! plz cont soon!!!!! and i mean soon... now like a year!!! u've been getting lazy these days... not good!!!!๐Ÿ˜†..
luv u babe!!!!โค๏ธ๐Ÿค—
P.S. As you can tell this is long again!!! which means that I wrote this at work!!!!!!๐Ÿ˜† finished all my work like a good little girl now have 3 hours to kill now!!!.... time needs to go fast now!!!!.... hopefully it will!!!!!๐Ÿ˜•
Edited by *Guli* - 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: purplestar22

I had a feeling it was gonna be Premeer,( When i read the prologue i was already hoping it would be Premeer) Anyways the whole part was just Omg.. like the way you wrote it. It was soooooo good!! And the way you explained the childhood and their love it was really sweet!!
Im already loving this story!๐Ÿ˜Š


it is all about Premeer...or lack there of ๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰...he he...im evil..i know๐Ÿ˜ณ...thanks yaar...you are too kind...thanks for the comment...thanks for taking the time to come and edit it...some people just dont do it anymore...i appreciate that you did ๐Ÿค—

Originally posted by: purplestar22

I dont know how many times I read this chapter.. Probably like 100! ๐Ÿ˜† I absolutely loved it!!๐Ÿ˜Š wow...100...no way...its just impossible...the part was so freaking long! even i was like holy crap...i'd never read something this long ๐Ÿ˜† The first line of the chapter i was like whattttt is going on???? Then i realized towards that actual part and then i was like oh! I love the Mother and Daughter relationship...Its sweet and funny how only Heer remembered her mothers b-day and nobody else did. I love how Heer is so close to Maya! Veeras nickname is Chutki?? ๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜† Im trying to picture that.. but im glad Veera is good in here and shes Heer's sister! ya...Veera is chutki...its hard i kknow...cuz she was always more of a b*tchy than a chutki on the show...but all my characters are totally different ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜ณ What is with these men???? They just decide anything they want??? After Heer said she doesnt want to get married they are standing there and making a guest list and which will help them in their business๐Ÿคข. How dare that Rishab slap Heer?๐Ÿ˜ก. men are annoying...and stupid...simple as that...they swear the run the world and people will just do as they want...reality check...NOT HAPPENING!! ๐Ÿ˜ก๐Ÿ˜ก๐Ÿ˜ก I was sooo glad to see Prem come. Maya is sooo nice, she herself is telling Prem and Heer to runaway. The marriage between Prem and Heer was sooo nice. I loved how they talked about their future plans and how Prem wanted to name his daughter Chahat! i love maya...she is one of my favorite characters in this story...and yes...in my story its Prem's idea to name their child Chahat...haye... ๐Ÿ˜

Oh mannnn why did these brothers and father have to come?????๐Ÿ˜ก How dare they do this.. ๐Ÿ˜ก I cant belive they killed Prem??๐Ÿคฌ Why did they punish Heer like this? ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ I hope all 3 of them die๐Ÿคข you are not the first one to want all of the brothers to be dead...and balraj for that matter...many people are already plotting their deaths ๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†
Ps:Even though Prem might not come back I hope he is still alive! all i can say is...keep hope alive ๐Ÿ˜‰



Originally posted by: purplestar22

I again read this chapter like 100 times๐Ÿ˜† omg...yeh bhi 100 times...haila...aur kuch kaarne ka time milti hai ke nahin...๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰...im just teasing
This chapter was sooo sad, the way Heer was remembering all her moments wih Prem from the day she met him! Its so sad how Heer doesnt sit in the pujas anymore and she didnt even really remember her moms b-day. I really loved this line "The daughter in her hated that she caused her family such pain. However, the other side, the one who had been Prem's wife, felt a strange sense of peace at seeing them suffer." I loved how Preeti calls Heer Massi! I loved the halwa flashback!! Oh great now the so called brothers want to ruin Veeras life as well??? Btw why arent they in jail??? They deserve to rot there forever๐Ÿ˜ก. Im sure Heer will make sure that nothing happens to Veera!! glad that you enjoyed the update...heer has lost her zest for life...she is a broken person...all that she has is her memories and her pain...day in and day out...that is all she has ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ ...i like that line too...it shows that even though she doesnt want to see her family in pain...she can never forgive what they have done ๐Ÿ˜ก๐Ÿ˜ก...Heer has Veera's back...dont worry... ๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ
Ps: I hope Prems alive!๐Ÿ˜ณ ๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†...ok then..



JAZ

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