New SS: Tanhai Part 9 pg69 Dec 27 - Page 22

Hi Jaz

You have selected perfect name for his SS. I read it all in one go. I can't believe this, you made me cry three times while I was reading it (though I was trying hard not to cry)😭. And then I knew I have to comment for this SS.

I loved it truly. The way you have described heer's emotions, it was mindblowing. In the first part itself when heer woke up saying "Nahin Bhaia, nahin! Usse maat maro! Woh marajyega" you got me hooked then and there. I had a chilling and creepy feeling and suspected something bad to happen. I always had loved prem's character a lot, as a result could not imagine him dieing. You can imagine what I felt when he was killed so brutally.

I love their each and every moments that they shared, especially when kid prem said to heer 'yeh ab bhaiya kahan se aayega'. I was laughing like anything. Does not she have enough brother that she even wanted to make prem another one in her life. 🤣

You ss is very tragic. Its not good that now when he is no more in her life then she remembers all those beautiful moments with him. I really hate her brothers. They killed their sister's love in front of her. They didn't even give them a chance to lead a life together. I felt really sad when heer said "Meri suhagan aur vidva tak ka safar baas kuch ghantoon ke the"

So preet is coming. Plz get prem back somehow, he is the one for heer and not preet. She only belongs to him and has waited for him and somehow I have a good feeling with the entry of preet. I hope he brings prem and heer together.

Plz add me in your pm list for this SS and for heer's secret ff too. I can't describe right now how I feel about that ff as I am in a very sad mood and when will comment for that ff sometime later.

Sia

Originally posted by: *Guli*

Dude so you like update a while back and I just barely read it!!!!!😳 Hey look on the bright side.. at least i came and read it!!!!!! Better late than never!😆 omg babe! i miss you...havent talked to you since sunday...tauba...not cool...SO NOT COOL!!! 😭

So anyways haila.... awww... the FB was sooo cute!!! awww.... loved the sari she wore!!!.. it was nice and aww he was all dressed up as well!!! cute little couple... doing thier stuff!! Haila can you believe even Prem proposed to her?!😭 Babe.... i swear..... i sooo think Jij should do the same thing!! Ur so right....... arranged marriages... hey maybe i can tell DJ to propose to me in India..... hmm....😛 let me think about that!😉 lmao...when u said FB i thougth it was FaceBook...😆😆...as u can see...im addicted to it 😉😉...lmao...hmm...Jiju propose to you...chalo...ill see what i can do 😉😉😉

Aww.... she had kept the promise but too bad ... it never lasted!!! Poor her!!!! Stupid Brothers!! Man i swear... if i had brothers like them... uff.... let me tell u they wouldnt be able to tell the difference between day and night!😡 ruining ur sister's happiness!! bunch of selfish people!!!!!!😡 anyways lets not even get started on that cuz then that will take up even more time!!!!! from this i take it you dont like the brothers...right? 😆😆 lol...so much hate for these people...but you know the deal naa 😉

Preet entered the picture....... haila....... man... if only he was with Meher.... Wouldve been nice!! but oh well its okay!!.......... no problem!😃 But plz jaani... dont make him the love interest for Heer!!!... But then... she wont agree..... no one can replace Prem!😉.... Preet is Preet...a sweetheart and the main guy in the story for now...aage aage dekho...hota hai kya 😛

Haila jaani... i read it now... you can now happily update the next part!! and that too soon cuz i dont want to wait sooo long! you have a bad habit of doing that and its just not fair!!!!😡 and then on top of that ur at home no skool.... write some more!! wouldnt hurt!😛... hehe before i get in trouble let me go!!!!😆 it has been a while sine i updated naa...will try for tonight...but then again...Ata/Liana, Doha/Tisha and Pinky Di/Faran Bhaia are all coming for dinner...and so is Irfaan 😳😳😳 my lil jaanu!!

plz cont soon babe!!!

p.s. when u comment on my comment.. please use another color!! man on the last one.... i wrote in blue and ur comment was in blue..... i was like huh!!!.... lets change colors!!!!!! dont make everything the same!!!!!😛 well...i use this blue all the time...😛😛😛...but see...you used pink...nice and easy!! oh oh...btw...news is out...bhabi is telling people now about the bun in the oven! 😉

bye.......

oh yeah.... i luv u!!!!😳 me too!

u know i really do!😳 yuppers~!

oh babe... we need another party!!!!!😳 hell ya! we do!!!!! 😃

oh.... i know next month!! when parents go to mexico!!!😳 lets start planning!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!😃 hmm....kya karein? 😊

Originally posted by: lovely_lady

oh my gosh, this is really sad ;_;

poor, poor heer..

why did prem have to die?

she is so unhappy without him..😭

anyways, great update jaz..

i really liked the way u showed heer's emotions..

poor girl, her brothers should b ashamed of themselves..

how can they even look her in the eye?

sick man, sick..

anyways, when are u gona update heer's secret?

Originally posted by: premeer928

amazing update....👏👏👏 the flashback was so romantic and cute....loved it....😳😳😳 the ending made me cry...it was so sad... 😭 u described her feelings to beautifully....👍🏼 I hate her brothers......shame on them...😡😡😡 Just wish prem comes back very soon bringing back the old heer and her happiness....😃 cant wait for the next part...continue soon...and thanks for the PM...😊



love
Afreen

Originally posted by: Premeer_chahat

Wow amazing update!!! The first date was sooooo cute!!!! 😳
It is really well written!!! I love how u describe everything!!! Update soon!!! I wanna knw who this preet guy is?! Can u plz add me to ur pm list??

Originally posted by: masin

reserved!!!! (awesome part btw :D)

kk back to editt..LOL..a whole day later that is xD its better than most..trust me 😉

well once again u've blown me away jaz api..no surprise there :DD

loveedd this partt soo muchchc!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i cracked up soo much while reading about veera...i mean tht girl will never change...i think she'd throw the same tantrum even in kis desh!! well thats veera..and thanks to ur ff i LOVE HER!!!!! to be quite honest...i think i wud freak out like tht too if i didnt have something nice and impressive to wear on my engagement!!..LOL😛 ya...me too...Veera's reaction was a universal girl reaction...hell...i freak out if i dont have anything new for a date...😉😉...engagement...tauba...of course we need new clothes 😛

as for the flashbackk!!! maan i think thts what keeps us readers hooked!!!!!!!!!!!! loveed it soo muchc!!!! heer's sari was really pretty..tho it took me a while to imagine heer wearing tht particular outfit...but trust me when i say tht after sometime i had a beautiful image of heer wearing the saree in my head!!!!!!!! the necklace was too cutteee!!!!!!!!!! and how prem said mein pehna doon.......HAYEEE!!!!!!!!! hai naa...haila...if prem said that to me...id be passed out on the floor or stuttering like a man woman...Prem just has that effect on me 😉 their date was soo cutee and i completely agree with what prem said!! my family and i practically live off of tht motto LOL..."money is meant to be spent on our loved ones" and its soo truee!! i mean yea one shud be careful with their spendings, but once it comes to the person ur love (whether its urr gf or ur mom) there should never be a limit.. :) ...what do u have to say about that api??? its true in one sense...spend on your loved ones...i completely agree...but kuch toh limit honi chahiyeh...you dont wanna go bankrupt...vaise bhi economy bohot kharab hai...😆😆 and kk u wrote this song in ur ff ek pal as well, but i still haven't listened to it...i'll check it out as soon as possible..but i must say the lyrics are sooo lovelyy!!!!!!! meant for premeer!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! song is awesome!!! one of my all time favorites...its such a llovely song...fits so many situations! 😳 o and rewinding a bit..i also liked maya and heer's lil convo!! it was too good!!!!!! LOL...but i could imagine the old harman's face..not this new freak toy we have...im sorry...but this new guy shud get the award for best expressionless face!!! hmm...well once again..my short term memory loss has taken over again so i cant remember all the details from their date...but i simply loved it!!!!!!!!!!! as usual words cant express my feelings..but trust me!!! their date was soo brilliant, romantic, light and tender kiss (HAYAYEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i was screaming at like 1 am last nite), and the dance!! o and of course...THE PROPOSAL!!!!!!!!!!! its ironic and sad ("cough cough" murderer api😆) how heer actually lived up to her promise... 😲..me murderer...NEVER...it was all the Maan men i tell ya...im INNOCENT 😉😉😉...as for Harman...i'm picturing old one as well...not the new one...tauba...he is HORRIBLE!!! 🤢🤢🤢

hmm.....what else did i like.......o yeaa..the widow scene!!!!!!!!!!!! OOO THAT WAS WRITTEN SOOO BEAUTIFULLYY!!!!!!!!! mann that biji type lady was too good!! she knew exactly what to say..and i loved how heer gave simple and honest answers...i mean it wasnt like she sounded devasted, nor was she hesitating..she was telling the story of her life from of the bottom of her heart, with complete honesty....altho after hearing/reading her say all that she said to the biji lady...i felt really bad for her!!!!!😭 ya...heer isnt ashamed of her past nor does she want to hide it...her past is her life...her past made her who she is...iss mein chupani wali kaunsi baath hai...👏👏👏...i have those lines in my head for a long time....finally i got to use it 😳😳😳

but my most favourite part was when she turned around and found her bros!!!!!!!!! oo them three a**holes got one big slap in their face!!!!!!!!!!! i mean as stonehearted as they mayb..im sure they mustve felt bad when they saw heer's red eyes filled with tears!!! then again im sure they felt sad because they actually heard their sister's sad story in words, not because they took someone's life without a valid reason!!!!!!!!!!! and im sure it didnt even hit them that it was their faultt!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (kk im not sure if i made sense their..LOL...but basically..i dunt think the three bros feel truely sad..🤢) 😲.. haila...my baacha is using such language...a**...but go for it...its true...😆...the brothers...well...there is more to them than meets the eye...you've gotta wait to find out what is up with those three 'killers' 😉

kk and now who the heck is this preet mehta!!!!!!!!! some next kabab mein haddi.....is he the same preet from heer's secret..they guy who the family wants to hook up with heer!!!!!!!! better not be!!!!!!!!! or i'll def. murder him before he even steps into the Maan household!!!!!!!!!!! im not lying api...its sad enuf to not hav prem in the ff (at least not yet 😉) but if u introduce a kabab mein haddi b/w premeer...then watch...us deshians will be after their favourite di/api with belans and cricket bats!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!😆😆 lmao...you are right...Preet ka double role in my ff...😆😆...haar FF mein he is trying to patao Heer...chalo...lets see if he is successful this time...😉😉😉,....as for coming after me...i am moving to timbuktoo...you lot will never find me...😉😉😉...*running away now* 😆...hey hey hey...Prem hai naa story mein...sure...its all in flashback...but something is better than nothing...hai naa 😈

......and just cuz im laughing doesnt mean im not serious!!! im dead serious api.......(at this point im hoping that ur scaredd😛) now im laughing 🤣

hmm thats basically it from me...kinda tired and sleepy now..so imma hit the bed!!!!

kk before i go tho, im sorry if my pm bout the other two ffs was a bother....i know how annoying it must've been to have an overflowing inbox..lol honey...at least your PM's were cute and nice...i wasnt taling about u in the note...i was talking about a certain person who basically PM's me just this...over and over again... "pllllzzzzzzzzzzzz updateeeeeeeeeeeeee im waitingggggggggggggggggggggggggggg!!!!!!" ...now is it just me or is that like REALLY REALLY REALLY annoying 😡

neways, take care

much love

Samra haye...mind if i call u my sammy baacha? 😳

P.S. im not sure if ive mentioned this, and i hope u don't take me in the wrong way either, but i don't think ive ever liked an ff as much as ek pal..regardless it its some other writer's ff, or even ur other ffs (including tanhai)..my top favourite will always be ek pal 😃😳 raaz ki baath batoon...Ek Paal is hands down...my favorite too...it was completely original and one of my firsts....😳😳 im glad that feel the same 😃😃

Originally posted by: masin

neways, take care

much love

Samra haye...mind if i call u my sammy baacha? 😳

NOT AT ALL!!!! LOL...i'd be more than happy to be a sammy bacha :D:D:D

btw..update kahin gayab hogayi hai..ya phir..dog ate ur update????😆

Originally posted by: Kamal_23

AWesome pert

doesn't matter about the wait cuz it payed off

ihope heer's father isn't trying 2 get her married off 2 preet mehta

thanks for the pm

Kamal😃
thanks for reading & commenting 😳😳...im glad you enjoyed it...next part will be up soon 😃...balaraj's intentions will come out soon enough...hang in there 😉😉

Originally posted by: Intellienough

OMG ..i am just speechless...i can't bear heer's sorrow and pain..

by the way i guess preet mehra is prem juneja..am i right ???

wonderful update

Originally posted by: nuptalie

Amazing update jazz.
Loved it.
U kept up so long and gave a beautiful update.
I doubt that this preet can be prem , with a new name.
Hope it 'll be true.
and waiting for the next.

I loved the song u put for the dance, it 's truly very meaningful.
And prem's dialogues were awesome.
Loved it , and plz update soon.😊😊

Originally posted by: -Payal-

THANK YOUUUUUU!!!!!

No time for comments anymore, so will simply press the "like" for now until further notice, but you know I will get back to it at some point...sorry, thats the best I can do right now...haven't even read it yet actually...its 2 AM....will read tomorrow when i get the chance.....hope you're well...take care, sweetheart!

Jaan Leva Jhappi to You!
Love,
P

Originally posted by: Nitty2910

Very, Very Emotional update... I has tears in my eyes reading them.loved it,,, feeling very sorry for heer.. she carries alot of her withing her... and only person she can share with is Prem...

Will be waiting for the update.. and will wonder who is this Preet Mehta gonna be...