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Posted: 16 years ago

Madz, Meera, UNRESERVE!😆

Originally posted by: mimi0295

OMG NO WAY YES WAY

Wait, let me unshock myself. Have fun with that😆 RESERVED
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NO WAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
^Do you know how scared I got when I read that😳 You can even ask Bhav. Scared the crap out of me
Cookie DONT BE SHOCKED? I believe that's what I told you. Macaroni, COOKIE IS DAMN SHOCKED 😲Dude what did I say? Did I not warn you ahead of time and tell you not to be shocked. I swear you don't listen to me. The Macaroni updated her FF IN A WEEK 😲😲😲Yes it's true. As hard as that may be to believe *dies* Don't die😊 WHERE IS MY MACARONI AND WHAT HAVE YOU DONE WITH HER -Ravjot-? 😡😆For your information mimi0295, this is indeed your Macaroni. I'm very disappointed in you mimi0295 for doubting my identity😆 I know my macaroni is lazy, I'm not that lazy but I like her the way she is Aww thanks😃 (although the fast updates are something I would not change 😃Then why are you complaining right now?😆) I IS SO OVER KHUSHI-FIED ATM 🤣 and dont go all "wtf is khushi-fied because fyi, I dont know I've learned not to ask😆
ANYWAYS @ the part-
HE DIED 😲 How can he DIE? 😭Heart attack 😔 OMG poooooor Heeer!!!! You described her feelings perfectly...in just a paragraph or 2 😳I know😎 If I tried that, it'd take me the whole FF to get one feelign across 😆I know. I can't BS and write a lot😆 I tried but failed😆 But it was SO sad, the way the lively, bubbly Heer distanced herself from all the people she loved I know=(
I LOVEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEED the Premeer lake scene...BY GOD 😍You remind me of Nupur😆 OMG he wrapped his arms around her, and they sat like that ☺️
And when the "look @ the stars" part came up, I had lion king/Kuch kuch hota hai flashbacks running through my head 😭I love KKHH😲 And now I feel like watching the Lion King😆
I LOVED IT!! And no, sorry, haven't watched the movie ur talking about ... but u know what they say..when in vain, GOOGLE IT 🤣 Google it for me😆

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Posted: 16 years ago
hey nice ff..........plz add me to ur pm list
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: indiandoll89

mine! 😳

*edited*

Sorry for taking so long! *holds ears* I forgive you But damn Ravz, that might be one of the BESTEST chapters I've read!!!👏Thanks😃

The emotion you used was so raw and perfect, Heer withdrawing from her friends and everything and only confiding in Prem because he didn't know her so well was awesome! 😃I was trying to make it seem realistic. Glad it came out right

Continue soon! 😃I shall =)

Love you,

Meera😳

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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: 9rpatel

great update
very sad but great
continue ASAP
pm me



Thanks for the comment😳

Originally posted by: shabo24

You weren't kidding. 😲I know😲

So this is what happens when you update so fast? You kill people? Gosh, I really should stop talking to everyone on this forum, it really is bad for you guys. No. That's was part of the story all along. I told you before😆

Ouch. You just BROKE Heer's heart. That was so sad, I still can't believe he died. I'm sorry... Lake side scenes rock! :D At least there was something happy about the update

As for the movie, it's something about woman rights and how Madhuri is abused I think? I dunno😆 It has stories of different women and Madhuri's in it😆

*sings* Kehte hain mujhjo....*dramatic pause*.....hawa hawaii! I love that song 😃

--shabz


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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: happybrar

awesomeeeeeeeeeeee

update soon



I shall try =)

Originally posted by: brainychild92

heer's bauji died??whatt?? Yes he did =( but thats bringing prem-heer together..:D:D
no fight!that was beautiful even tho i like them cuz their cutee..lol
continue soon!!! I will =) And thanks for liking it =)



Originally posted by: aaminaman

hi your ff was really nice i read it for the 1st time and it was really nice it is a differewnt till now wat i read so congrats and pls update the next part as soon as possible



Aww thanks for the wonderful comment😳 I'll try to update soon😳
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: noneeM

Hey again! HI😃

My Spot!

Be back in the morning!

Editing time:
I just loved the way you wrote this Ravjot. The emotions, the helplessness, the anguish, you have expressed Heer's feelings so beautifully, it touched my heart. Above all, the way you described it was so natural, so free from drama but so unbearably wrenching! I could feel Heer's pain and that's a salute to you as a writer....Aww thanks Nonee. That means a lot😳

I simply love your Heer. The way you've written her is amazing. Throughout this fic.

This sentence just stays in my mind. 'Many people from the village came by to offer their condolences but Heer ignored them. She didn't want their sympathy. It wasn't going to bring her Bauji back.' Makes me want to weep! Really? Glad I did a good job of describing her feelings😳

And it was so wonderful that Heer could grieve in front of Prem. He was able to reach behind her shield of grief and pull her out. That surely established a bond between them, one I hope Heer will remember later....Yeah I was trying to show how vulnerable she is to have opened up to someone like Prem. It's a start to their relationship

Really, well written Ravjot. I loved this part.

Will you please pm me when you update next. Add me to the list. Thanks. Thanks for the wonderful comment and I'll add you to the list😳
Love:-Nonee


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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: Palkhi_08

hey......

lolzzz that really is a surprise!! :P:D..hehehe Why is everyone so shocked?😆
awwwwwwwww Balraj passed away nd now Heer's alone......Well she still has Kaki and her friends😳
the premeer moments was really cuteeeee.....waiting for next update!...nd plzz make it a teensy-weensy bit longer...thnkz! I can't make any promises😆
-Luv Pari



Originally posted by: nityatarlapally

Is it that big of a shock that you updated early?!... going by what everyone wrote..apparently it is! 😆 Check when my last update was and you'll know😆

aww..poor heer!..her bauji died..feel so sorry for her! 😭 it's like now she stopped living or something. and you protrayed her emotions very well! kudos to you! :) Aww thanks. Glad I could write that as convincingly as possible😳
the lake scene was very touching!..for the first time..prem and heer didn't fight! :D
I was just as shocked as prem when she opened up to him!...aww...they watched the stars together!..shooo shweet! I know😃
well...I'm going to say update soon..but I don't know if it's going to happen! lol Maybe it will, maybe it won't😆 Anyway thanks for the comment =)



Originally posted by: happybrar

hey

add me to your pm list
thanks



Added you

@ sanju_veni: added you =)
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Posted: 16 years ago

Part 9

As Heer walked inside, she felt a bit better having let all that out. It felt as if a huge weight had been lifted off her shoulders. Talking to Prem made her realize that Bauji wouldn't want her to be like this. He wouldn't want her to think of the past and be upset about him not being there with her. He would rather have her remember the memories and smile. And even though he wasn't here physically, he would always be in her heart so in a way, he's still there with her. Thinking about it that way made her feel a bit better.


The next day, as Heer came down the stairs for breakfast, Kaki noticed a change in her. Her friends came shortly afterwards and noticed too but realized it was a good change and that maybe Heer was beginning to feel better and were glad. The next few days, Heer started to smile a bit more and talk to everyone more. She even ate more and she no longer looked pale or fragile. Slowly the old Heer was coming back. The Heer who always smiled, pulled pranks and was carefree.


Kaki felt relieved at this. She didn't want Heer to drown in memories of her father and not be able to take care of her. Heer was like her own daughter and it had hurt to see her like that. She smiled thinking how everything was turning out for the best.


Little did Kaki know that all that would change. A few days later, Kaki came home with bags of vegetables and was going to make dinner. She opened the door and stood frozen to the ground. To say that she was shocked was an understatement. In the middle of the room stood Daljeet, Heer's bua. She also saw Heer sitting on the couch, head bent down as she stared at the floor. Kaki knew how much Heer feared her Bua and the effect Daljeet had on her. During Heer's childhood when her mother had passed away, Daljeet had come to live with them. During that time Daljeet had mistreated Heer by making her do chores and hitting her, and had instilled fear in her. Every day she would look terrified whenever she crossed Daljeet's path, something she always tried to avoid and tried not to make her mad. Heer had confided in Kaki when Kaki had found Heer hiding in her room, crying. Heer made Kaki promise not to tell Balraj, as she was scared of what Daljeet might do to her, but Kaki couldn't bear to see Heer like this. Kaki had then made up an excuse to Balraj, saying how Daljeet should be looking after her daughter Vishakha. And since that day, Kaki had been living with Heer.


"Daljeet? Tum yahaan? Is everything alright?" she asked.


"I'm fine. But what about Heer? As soon as I heard about Balraj's death I came running here" Kaki could tell that the tears Daljeet was shedding were fake. "But don't worry Heer" Daljeet went on as she shifted her attention to the girl. "I'm staying here now. I'll take good care of you."


"But what about Vishakha? And Balwant? Aren't you needed back home? I'm here to take care of her." Kaki tried to assure her.


"Well Vishakha's married now so she's at her in-laws. And me and Balwant got divorced 5 years ago, don't you remember?"


Poor guy can live in peace now. Kaki had always wondered what Balwant was thinking when he got married to Daljeet. Divorcing her was the smartest thing the man had ever done. Of course that meant they were stuck with her. "Oh…So how long will you be staying?" Kaki asked, trying to be polite.


"Jab tak Heer ki shaadi nahin ho jati" Daljeet replied happily. Heer and Kaki looked at Daljeet, shocked at what they were hearing.


"Sh-sh-shaadi? Heer ki? Don't you think it's a bit early?" Kaki tried to reason with her.


"Nonsense. She's old enough to get married now and you can't keep a single girl at home forever. Fortunately I've found a boy for her."


"Don't you think you should've asked Heer first?" Annoyance evident in her voice.


"What's there to ask. I know Heer will never say no to me, right Heer?" Daljeet turned to look at Heer. "Shaadi karogi na?"


After a moment of hesitation, Heer replied. "Ji bua." Her eyes were filled with sorrow while Kaki tried to comprehend what was going on.

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I updated in a week and few days😃 2nd FF to be updated today. And this one is for Meera as well =) And everyone, please don't be shocked😆 And yes this is Ravjot and I haven't been replaced by an alien *cough* Cookie *cough*

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Posted: 16 years ago
RESERVED Edited:
Sorry for taking so long, I was overjoyed last night when I got the PM and then somehow fell asleep on the computer table 🤣
OHMYGOD I dont believe you 😲
YOU ARE NOT MACARONI.
YOU IS AN ALIEN!
And don't be all "I told you not to be shocked, blah blah." STOP GIVING ME HEART ATTACKS! ALL 3 FFs? 😲 YOU UPDATED ALL THREE FFs? NO FREAKIN' WAY 😲 *rubs eyes*
I loved this update! I love how Prem made Heer realize that her dad's always with her.. in spirit. I love how the old Heer's coming back, but then WAM! Here comes Daljeet 😡🤢 WHY MACARONI? WHYYYYY DO YOU DO THIS? 😭
And GET MARRIED? NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!! Well... YAYY!! As long as it's with Prem 🤣 but I wonder who the dude is that she's talking about 😕
Update soon alien 😳 🤣🤣
Edited by mimi0295 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
hey first of all thanks for adding me to ur pm list....i must say a reallly nice update indeed.plz update soon

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