FF: Bittersweet Allusions [Pt 13 pg.57]

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hello everyone! Ravz here. I've started a new FF. Yes yes you're all probably wondering why I would do that seeing how I didn't really want to finish my other one😆 Anyway, this one is for Meera, Shabz, Kimz, and Shifali =) Hope you guys like it. And thank you Kimz for coming up with the awesome title😃

Do tell me what you guys think😊

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Part 1 pg. 1
Part 2 pg. 8
Part 3 pg.18
Part 4 pg.28
Part 5 pg.31
Part 6 pg. 33
Part 7 pg. 38
Part 8 pg. 42
Part 9 pg.45
Part 10 pg.48
Part 11 pg.52
Part 12 pg.54
Part 13 pg.57

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Part 1
It was a beautiful day in the village with men working hard in the fields, children running around and playing, women looking after the house and doing chores. In the corner of the village was a huge house that belonged to the wealthiest man in the village, Balraj Mann. He owned most of the land in the village and it was his ancestral land. Even though he didn't have to do any work, he still chose to work in his own fields and even opened up schools in the village.

The sun's rays peered through one of the windows and shone on a sleeping girl's face. She squinted her eyes and turned to face the other way but was disturbed by the noise coming from outside.

"Yeh ladki bhi na. It's already 10 and I bet she's still sleeping" the girl quickly got up hearing her kaki's voice from outside and rushed to get ready. She ran down the stairs with her dupatta dragging on the steps and hurried to the back door before Kaki could yell at her.

"And where do you think you're going Heer?" The girl stopped in her tracks and bit her tongue, realising she had been caught.

"Uh...nowhere" she said while looking away from Kaki.

"Nowhere eh? Then why were you running?" Kaki crossed her arms

"Running? Who me? I wasn't running"

"A kya hua?" asked a tired Balraj who was now familiar with this daily routine. He would usually walk in and find Kaki getting mad at Heer for running around or sleeping in and giving a lecture on how young girls should wake up early and do some work around the house instead of acting like a kid.

" You can ask your ladli daughter yourself. App hi ne begard ke rakha hain. This girl doesn't wake up before 10 and when she does, she'll go out and play as if she's still a child."

"Come on Kaki. I woke up before 10 today." Heer smiled innocently at Kaki. Kaki just rolled her eyes.

"Heer!" came a voice from outside

"Acha chachi ab main chalti hoon. Bye papa" and she ran off before Kaki could say anything. Balraj just smiled and shook his head.

Heer quickly went outside and grabbed Shabo's hand and ran while Kaki came outside and called after her to stop.

After a while, they started walking until they reached the fields where all the kids were playing.

"Didi!" one of the kids ran up to Heer with a cricket bat and stopped her. "Didi will you play with us?" he asked.

"Sorry Ayush I can't. I have to go" She said while looking at Shabo.

Shabo sighed. "I GUESS you can play for a little while." Heer's face lit up and she went to the field while Shabo just shook her head at Heer's childishness. "When will this girl grow up?" she wondered while she sat down near a tree to watch. Heer tied her dupatta to the side and got ready to bat. Watching Heer play and run like crazy when she hit the ball made Shabo smile. Even though Heer was 20 and acted half her age at times, she was a lot of fun to be with. After around 20 mins, Shabo finally got up and told Heer to hurry as they had to meet the rest of their friends. Shabo and Heer quickly walked to the shops and saw Meera and Ravz waiting for them.

They quickly ran to Ravz and Meera out of breath. "Woh-" Heer started to say but was cut off.

"Save it. Enough of your excuses. We've heard them all before. You were either busy playing cricket or woke up late. Again" Ravz rolled her eyes while walking away.

"Aww come on Ravz. I'm sorry."

"Hey! What about me? I was waiting too!" Meera pretended to look mad.

"I'm really very sorry that you two had to wait for me"

"Hey! What about me! I had to watch you play cricket!" said Shabo

Heer rolled her eyes. "Ok fine. Ravz, Meera, Shabo, I'm sorry" she said while holding her ears.

Ravz and them all smiled and they started walking towards one of the stalls and started looking at things. After a while, the start to head back. Heer was too busy talking that she didn't notice the figure in front of her who was busy talking on his phone.

"Why did I have to come and visit dadi? Why can't she just live with us? I hate coming here!" the guy complained on the phone. He was too busy arguing that he didn't see Heer in front of him and bumped in to her, causing both of them to fall.

Edited by -Ravjot- - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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mine! 😳 Will edit tonight sorry!

*edited*

I've told you before how much I love the idea/concept of this story/ff!😃 village ones are so much more fun!😳

Awww getting lectures about waking up late? no fun!😆😆 I get them in the summer all the time! 😔 But aww her dad's on her side! 😃 Mine's always opposite!😆😆

Yay! we're all there!😳 I'm super excited about this!😉😆😆

Yay! She bumped into someone! 😃 You already know I have a thing with ppl bumping into each other!😉😆😆 Can't wait to see/read what happens next!😃😃

Love you loads,

Meera!😳
Edited by indiandoll89 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Me ish here now!😆

First of all, 😆, LOVELY FF. I know I know, I am saying that because I already know the storyline but seriously AWSOME!👏
The part about naughty Heer reminded me so of yourself Ravz. Tu bhi aaise hi hai😆 *Statement*😆
Anways, I loved the part and when you said she bumped into a certain 'someone'....*Pretends to wonder who that person is*😆😆😆
Ab chal, show me who that person is..😆 and what kinda heated convo they will have unless, Heer like usual, gives him time to speak that is!😆😆 From her character in this part, I don't think she is someone who will let someone else speak...🥱😆 which is nice but itna bhi nahin...she'll get into trouble either ways.
Waiting for Part 2!😉😆

~Shifu
Edited by *Shifali* - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Reserved!!!!

*Edit*

OMG!!!! U started another FF!!!!! Yipeee!!! *Jumps up in joy* Teeheeeheee!!😆😆😆 well, as u can tell I'm kinda high right now 😉😆😆

Ek minute ek minute, why am I not in the meera-kimz-shabo-ravs-heer gang??? hmmm missy??? NO FAIR!
Me wanna be part of gwoup too *says in baby voice*....LOL jk jk!! luv ya!!!! I totally love the fivesome, they're so adorable!! BFFLS!!! hehe😆😆

Awww, Bechaari Heer has to be yelled at by her chaachi for waking up late! Poor her...actually my mom does that to me too, lol on the weekends and in the summer...hehehe

I love Heer's personality, she sounds like a sporty-ish type of girl!!! I love it!!! Ohhh!! Can't wait to see who she bumped into!! *Cough Cough* Prem!!! 😃 Byeee!! Luv you!!!!

~Gari 😳😳😳
Edited by Garima93 - 16 years ago
Posted: 16 years ago
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🤣

Only YOU Ravz....only you.....😆

Well first of all, glad you started another ff! 🤗Sounds amazing, specially because it's being blessed with all these beautiful girls alongside the normal gang...OH PLEASE MAKE ULLU ALIVE SO WE CAN PULL PRANKS ON HIM!! PLEASE!! *prays to (god) Preet*

Sounds like Heer is like Zaara from Veer-Zaara?? *sigh* Srk again huh? =] Loved the description of the two...and and fyi I don't like Chachi. But I lurrrrrvee this Shabo girl...sounds like she is amazing huh?😉

Loved how close all the friends are...can't wait to keep reading...and CLIFFHANGER ALERT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

--shabz
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Posted: 16 years ago
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oooh awesome ness!! 😃

lurved it, heer's too cute and kaki is evil!

shabz is course smexy as always 🤣 ah this was too cute!!

aww meeri and ravsie be rolling their eyesies 😆

ooh is lallu alive? if he is, make someone throw a bomb in his house! 😈 ah or u could let kimz and shabz deal with him...😆 its adorable! loving it..😳

-- Rinks

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Posted: 16 years ago
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nice super ff
loved the characters
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Posted: 16 years ago
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I'll reply back later =)
Thanks to Kimz, I have Jiya Dhadhak stuck in my head and I shall spend some time listening to it instead =)
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Posted: 16 years ago
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All the girls r looking forward to harm poor Lallu 🤔 ..pata nahi what is in store for him!!

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