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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: nityatarlapally

wow!..your ff is fab! Thanks😃

i just read it..and i was wondering why i've never seen it before!..now i know...probably cuz you updated after two months! lol Yeah....Oops?😆
well...the update was short..but funny!😆I think the next one is a bit longer😆
the way heer reacts whenever she sees prem is...i don't even know what to write...my mind is kinda blah right now...so that's it for my comment on this chapter! but it was an aweesome chapter!! Thanks for liking it😃
update soon!
~nitya

Thanks for the comment Nitya😃
@ Kimz: Unreserve😆
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Posted: 16 years ago
@ yoyojazzy: Will add you😊

Originally posted by: brainychild92

hey.. great fanfic.. i just started reading.. im just curious.. does kaki mean mom or nanny(or caretaker)?? Thanks to Meera, Kaki means aunit. My mind drew a blank when you asked😆

i really like ur fanfic.. is preet entering anytime soon? Maybe, maybe not =) love preem-heer's fights.. they are so cute.. i am a lot like heer losing my temper.. that one line, ur jealous, is like my cousin's such a pig! Aww really? I use it on my friend all the time🤣 lol but that don't mean prem is cuz he is too cutee only that one line matches.lol

continue sooon!and please dont make me a month or longer!!im not a good waiter..lol..pm me when u do continue:D I'm going to post the update soon. I'll be sure to add you to the list =)

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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: aati1429

I am new to forum and read ur FF.. really nice and different concept.. please do continue

Welcome to the forum😃 And thanks for liking it.

Originally posted by: happybrar

awesomeeeeeeeeee

great part
update soon

Thanks for liking it =) I'll continue soon😳

Originally posted by: shabo24

My birthday was last week? 😳 Seems longer that that. :P Well now it's been 2 weeks😆

That was awesome, still fighting huh? 😆Yeah😆 And why the hell did YOU leave it at a cliffhanger. You do it all the time. you shouldn't be complaining. I swear woman, if you take two more months to update.....*threatening* Gimme 10 mins and it'll be up😆 But awesome part! Thanks😃

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Posted: 16 years ago
I gooooooooooot to read the next part! *dances*
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: zaibun

hey yeh u update i hope balraj is fine keep up da gud wrk

Thanks for liking it =) As for Balraj, you'll see

Originally posted by: Anhdara13

Ravzie, you updated? You told me to. Shoot, and I'm updating late. Heh. But I shall update this week. Loved the update😃 Haven't commented back yet😆

Ooh, cliffhanger! You'd better not leave this for longer than two weeks. *glares* We already talked about it and you were shocked😆

And Mimi, go update Hungama. And I shall wait for DYTM. Flood her inbox😆

Love,
Radz

Originally posted by: Star-Crazy

omg

i love this ff
love the way prem and heer fight a lot
hope balrajs alright though

Thanks for liking it😃 Prem Heer fights are interesting aren't they?😆
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: noneeM

Hello Ravjot, this is Nonee. Hi Nonee😃 *waves*

I always stumble upon awesome things after everyone's been there, read it! Either I'm too slow or blind or both...Sigh! No you're not😆 I haven't updated i forever so that's why you never found it. And I'm the slow one😆

I just read the whole fic and have this huge smile on my face:- You are really really witty. Your sense of humor is fabulous and I love the way you've written this story. It's totally entertaining. All the characters are awesome, P&H of course are amazing but so is everyone else. Thanks😆 Glad someone likes my sense of humor. My gr.9 teacher once wrote "Ravjot has a dry sense of humor" on my report card😳 I love the characters too😃

I love the way you've written the bonding between Heer and her girl friends (all of you:) And Chandu and Chandni are awesome.😆 [hope I remember the names correctly!] I forgot all about those two😲 They should make a re-entry😆 Thanks for liking it Nonee😳

I also love the way you end each chapter, making the reader stare at their desktops/laptops wondering if the next chapter will appear if they stare with enough focus (or desperation!😆) I do? Oops?😆 To those that stare, I'm sorry but it will not appear😆

I love that P & H are at loggerheads at the moment and I would love to see how you make them fall in love... I have that worked out in my head and it makes me laugh😆

I am glad I ran into this one... Thanks for the wonderful comment😃

Love:-Nonee

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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: Dark Love

I gooooooooooot to read the next part! *dances*

Stop showing off😆
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Posted: 16 years ago
Part 8
While talking, Prem didn't fail to miss the flash of blue that went past him and the worried look on Heer's face. He frowned slightly. He was used to seeing the Heer who got worked up and argues a lot, especially with him but not this Heer. It bothered him. He saw Shabo quickly go to Meera and them and they exited out soon after. Something was up. Prem didn't know what it was and he decided to leave it. It wasn't any of his business and he didn't want to intrude. Moments later this was all in the back of his head as Dadi introduced him to more people.
"I'm sorry. We could not save him." As soon the doctor said these words, Heer went numb. Her Bauji was no more. She thought of all the times Balraj had supported her in her arguments with Kaki, how he had taught her how to ride a bike, learn to walk, helped her with her homework, told her stories before going to bed and how proud he had been of her whenever she got good grades or wn a competition. He had always been there, as a father, mother, and a friend. And now he was gone.
She could barely feel the tears streaming down her cheeks and the voices floating around in the air. She was all alone. She felt an emptiness inside. Words flew past her. Heartattack, Heer, Balraj, though none seemed to register. And then it all went black.
"Heer." "I think she's waking up." "I'll go call the doctor."
Heer opened her eyes to see all her friends surrounding her. She opened her mouth to call out Bauji but then stopped and her eyes were filled with tears. Her friends rushed to her side to console her while Kaki came in with the doctor. She didn't know what was going on. She was stuck in her own little bubble and registered nothing.
She was discharged later on that day and brought home. Kaki immediately took over everything, looking after her and preparing for the funeral. Meera and the others also stayed over to help Heer deal with it but she just wanted to be left alone. She spent her time by herself in her room or the few times she went outside for walks. Kaki was worried about Heer's loneliness but there wasn't much she could do. Many people from the village came by to offer their condolences but Heer ignored them. She didn't want their sympathy. It wasn't going to bring her Bauji back.
Days after the funeral Heer was still the same. It was late at night when Heer went to the lake. She visited there often and it sort of made her feel better. She was sitting on the grass looking at the water when a tall figure walked up to her and sat down next to her.
"A bit late to be wandering around isn't it?" he asked.
She turned to face him, a bit surprised to see him. "Leave me alone. I don't want to argue with you Prem." All she wanted was to be alone, away from everyone.
"You ok?" Prem asked with concern.
"I'm fine! Just leave me alone!" She yelled, with a few tears in her eyes.
Prem looked at her for a moment before getting up. " You know you'll feel better if you let it out. Keeping it in will just make it worse and it'll distance you from the people you care about." he said before walking away.
"Don't go. Please." Though her words were barely audiable, Prem somehow heard her and sat down beside her again.
They sat in silence, looking at the calm water.
"I miss him." Heer spoke, after a few minutes of silence. "Why did Bauji have to leave me and go?" Tears were streaming down her cheeks. It was the first time Heer was letting these words out and Prem was surprised that she was telling him this. He expected himself to be the last person she would share her feelings to but was glad that she was opening up to someone. He noticed she had become quieter over the past few weeks and a bit pale. While Heer let it all out throught her tears, Prem wrapped his arms around her.
"It's ok Heer, it's ok. Just let it all out." he whispered. A while later, when Heer's crying was reduced to sobs, they realized the position they were in and Prem removed his arms and the air was filled with an awkward silence.
"Heer tumhe pata hain, jab koi hume chodh ke chala jata hain, woh ek tara ban jata hain" Heer looked at Prem in surprise. "Your Bauji is up there looking at you and I don't think he'd be happy to see you like this, lonely and distant from everyone with your heart filled with grief. Your Bauji is hurt by seeing you like this. Is this how he would want to be?"
Heer knew Prem was right. Balraj would never want his Heer to be upset. He always wanted to see Heer smiling and she knew that if he saw her now, he'd be heartbroken. Though she missed him, Heer realised that she shouldn't distance herself from everyone else or cry over Balraj's death. Instead she should think of all the memories and smile about that.
They sat there for another hour before deciding that it was really late and they should go home. Without saying anything Prem simply accompanied Heer home and she didn't object. He dropped her off to the front gates and turned to go.
"Thanks Prem. For everything."
"Anytime Heer" he smiled, before leaving.

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I updated in a week😃 Aren't you all proud of me?😃 And Radz, stop being shocked😆 Yeah so...Balraj died and for once there was no Prem Heer argument. Special thanks to Madz for proofing it for me =) And to those that care, I have the song Hawa Hawaii stuck in my head. Don't you just love Sridevi?😆 And Lajja came on t.v. again and once again, I missed the beginning. Anyone wanna PM me and tell me?😆 I had more to say but I forgot😆Oh and special thanks to Radz as well for agreeing to PM everyone for me. If you didn't get a PM please direct angry PMs to her😊
Edited by -Ravjot- - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
mine!

*edited*


I was first! *dances*

And I enjoy being shocked. I mean, a week! A week Ravzie! That's like, a record for you! *shocked muh*

But, but, but, such a sad part this was. You killed Bauji offf? *wails* How could you Ravzie, how could you?? *throws self on the floor and sobs*

Poor Heer, she's so broken inside. I love that Prem's the one she confides too. It's so sweet. Though I have a feeling they're going back to fighting soon.

Update within a month kay?

*edit add*


See if I ever help you again Ravzie. *pouts*

*edit end*


Love,
Radz

Edited by Anhdara13 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
mine! 😳

*edited*

Sorry for taking so long! *holds ears* But damn Ravz, that might be one of the BESTEST chapters I've read!!!👏

The emotion you used was so raw and perfect, Heer withdrawing from her friends and everything and only confiding in Prem because he didn't know her so well was awesome! 😃

Continue soon! 😃

Love you,

Meera😳
Edited by indiandoll89 - 16 years ago

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