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@flowers4u

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+ 2

Posted: 16 years ago

#31

wow relly gud i think im gettin to understand wts exactly hapnin

luved it great do continue n could u plzzzzzzzzzzzzzz update heers secret thank you sooooooooooooooooooooo much

gud luk

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@asyasahil928

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 16 years ago

#32

hey
that was awesome. Loved the confusion prem was going through...couldnt stop laughing. 😆 continue soon. 😊

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purplestar22

@purplestar22

Voyager

Posted: 16 years ago

#33

This is soooo good... just wondering what happened though... please update soon!!!

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@shabo24

Rocker

Posted: 16 years ago

#34

OK, fast update, no complains here! 😉😉

OK, Heer either left Prem, died, or got married to Nihaal. 😆 But really didi, amazingly, fantiastically, perfectly written update. Ohh I hate commenting for you ff, I can really never find the words. 😳

"He could never forget that meeting just like he couldn't forget how to breath, just like he couldn't forget his love, just like he couldn't forget the painful ache in his heart that raced through his veins with every beat it took..."

o - m - g

wow. That was just....perfectly portryed, written in everysingle sense. That line (s) sent shivers down my spine, really shows that something tragic happened, and shows the real love for Heer from Prem. Wow di that was just......wow. 😆 Sorry, I sound like a badly recorded tape or soemthing. 😉😆

aha, Prem in shock with Indian rasams?? Jaan, ye hindustan hai....tumhara Canada nahin....😉 Loved his shock, it was so geniune, I was laughing outloud! 😃

HEER IS DRESSES UP IN A GUY'S OUTFIT! 🤣Phh god, his shock at discovering this person had breasts...bechara......apne biwi se kitne sawal karinga zara socho! 😆 Can't wait to see what happens next!! And if Kul and Nihaal really get married. Ohh I like Nihaal. 😆 Sounds sweet and doting. And please if Biji is the killing factor in Heer-Prem's lives......spare me. 😆

--shabz

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sugii

@sugii

Voyager

Posted: 16 years ago

#35

hey!i luvved & enjoyed each and every line of this part .awesome 👏updt.premeer scenes r soooooooooooo cute😛😛 and funny😆.thank u sooooo much for pm.

-sugi😊

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bd670816

@bd670816

Voyager

Posted: 16 years ago

#36

awesome.👏
👏loved each and every part of it.
cont.soon.
take care.

Edited by bd670816 - 16 years ago

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Aradhna

@Anhdara13

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 16 years ago

#37

Jaz, that was fast. So if we continue to give you three-three pages of reviews for each part, we get fast updates? 😉

From the first part, I thought maybe due to some misunderstanding, Heer left Prem, but now I'm thinking she's in a coma, or is missing or something, not her willingly leaving him. Because he's cursing God, and you don't really curse God if someone left you out of free will, but rather when you think fate has dealt you a bad hand, and has Prem been dealt a bad hand or what! First a drunken father who goes and gets himself killed, then his mother dies because they cannot afford treatment. When life seems to be settling down, he's successful, he has a loveing Biji and brother, he meets a girl (Girly Man or Manly Woman? Hilarious!) whose eyes captivate him, and finds himself losing his control on his life, or at least that's what I am assuming. Then once he starts accepting this, something happens to that love, that he didn't see coming.

Really, my heart is breaking just thinking about what may have led Prem to drinking, to this broken point from the man who seemed so much more alive in that flashback. The flashback really just makes it all the more painful as we see the changes in him.

Waiting to see where you take this!

Love,

Radz

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Zahra

@Pyari_Zahra

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 16 years ago

#38

Jaz!!!!!!!!!!! Another one- yayyyy!! 😛 I know I will love this one just as much as I loved Ek Pal and as much as I love Heer's Secret!! You already have me captivated by the story!! 👏 How you portray Prem's emotions as he sits there all alone drowning in his sorrows is just superb!! I love how as he reflects upon his the happy memories of his past, his successes and riches, he is brought back to the sad reality of life which states that he is surrounded only by utter loneliness. 😔

Gosh he is married?!! I wonder which lucky person he made an honest woman out of!! Yet why is he alone now? 😔 Something tragic has certainly happened!! I am dying to know what sorrow is eating away at his heart- why a man so happy and full of life became so melancholic and depressed that he had to turn to alcohol for support?!! 😭 It's sad how he has had to suffer all his life- losing his parents, and then losing the one person who he loved immensely!! Aaawww, I hope he gets all happy and lively soon!!!

Nihaal seems so nice and decent- respecting Biji's wishes and marrying Kulraj- this was one pair I never imagined, hehe!! So Kulraj has a younger sister- I wonder who that could be?? LOL!! 😆 But yeah, the relationship shared between the two brothers is very beautiful!! Prem finds out about the engagement at Starbucks- LOL- Frappucino came out of his nose 😆!! I love Starbucks- I am totally addicted to their Lattes and caramel waffles at the moment!! Okay, that was quite random, but oh well!! 😆

Back to the story, Prem wanting to go to a club and dance with hot girls was just too funny!! 😆 It's such a stark contrast to the Prem sitting in darkness and intoxicating himself!! Hmmm…ab yeh ladki kaun hai?? Who's this 'girly man or manly girl' who already has Prem engrossed and enthralled? That part was just absolutely hilarious- I could just about imagine Prem's face perplexed staring at her womanly curves!! Loved it!! I am sure it is Heer, Na??

Oh Jaz, I love the FF already!! I know you will delight us with your amazing writing skills- Great job!! 😉👏

Love Zahra 😃 xx

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Shagufta

@JanuaryEmbers

Dazzler

Posted: 16 years ago

#39

awesome part cont soon plz!!!!!👏

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Meera

@indiandoll89

Trailblazer

+ 3

Posted: 16 years ago

#40

Wow! such a fast update! 😃 *bounces up and down*

This part was superbly written Jazu!!! 😃 "Prem still remembers everything about that first, fateful meeting; he will never forget it for as long as he lives. He could never forget that meeting just like he couldn't forget how to breath, just like he couldn't forget his love, just like he couldn't forget the painful ache in his heart that raced through his veins with every beat it took………………" So intense and just simple perfect!! 😳

YAY! 😛 Caramel Frap 😉 The second best kind IMO! 😛

I've gotta say....as horrible as Lalit's death sounds....he kinda deserves it anyways! 😆 I'm so mean na? 😛 oops! 😉😛

Wah.... this is so not a Prem I'm used to! 😆 Questioning Indian traditions? 😲😲😛 I loved the way he argued with Nihal about it though! 😛 Loved the way he was chosen to be the guy to go into the function! 😛 What a sad way to become the bakra! 😆😛

OMG!!!🤣 I have nothing more to say about that entire sequence...😛

Awww he's blaming God? This must be something serious....I honestly can't wait to see what you have planned! 😃 😳 Continue super soon! 😃😛

Love ya,

Meera 😳

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