Originally posted by: JCluvs srk
OMG OMG OMG OMGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG!!!!! someone knock the freaking lights out of meeeeee! how the heck on earth did i NOT read this beforeeeee! OMGGGGG!!!!!! JC----> u totally have ALL right to beat a book on my head! my freaking GOSH!!!!! this is beauttttiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiffffuuuulllllllllllllllllllll!!!! u brought me to tearsss! BOTH OF USSSS!!! haillaaaaa! literalllly! im not saying it just to say it! u really did! its beautifullllllllllllll! MANNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNN!! okay..now here goes the rest of it! i dont know if ill make it through without crying again! HAILLAAAAA!! jc ----> ive said it before, and here it is again...ur FABULOUSSSS!!!!! love ya tonnnsssssssssss!
They say when it is raining God is crying from above 😭😭could the beginning be any more beautifulll! JC---> i dont know how im going to write the rest of this..im speechless!
Heer felt his gaze on her she lifted the martini glass to sip...in hopes of quenching the sudden thirst that appeared. Her cheeks burned a delicate pink because of his gaze those soft brown eyes filled with intensity with a hint of naughtiness on the edges. How can a girl not drown in them it was as if he looked into her soul could read her deepest secrets. --- goosebumps alreadyyyyy! again, its raining today JC! and i dont know if its the rain...or what u wrote...i have goosebumps! from the very beginning! "in hopes of quenching the sudden thirst that appeared" ....."it was as if he looked into her soul..could read her deepest secrets" MY GOD! prem!!! uve made him perfect! his eyes - again...its hereeeeeee tooo!
Thunder rumbled above their heads before the clouds let loose. *i lOVEEEEE this linnnneeeeeeee...what the HECK are u doing in the world of citizens! u need to write a freaking book! the descriptions JC! its amazinnggggg! Prem looked up just in time to feel the first drops of rain fall on his face before it started pouring down. He made a run for cover thinking that heer was right behind him. *haha, boy ---...no she isnnnttt*
Prem wiped his face with a hankie and brushed off the few drops of rain caught on his shirt. When he turned to offer his hankie to heer he noticed that she wasn't near him. Confused he looked out onto the now completely wet terrace and felt his heart skip a beat. oh oh ohhhhhhhhhhhh!!! haillaaaaa! why isnt there a prem in the real world?!?! u make me want a prem like himmmm!!!There was heer standing in the rain with her eyes closed her face lifted up to the heavens and a sweet smile on her face. Was there anything more beautiful?*nnaaahh, i dont think soooo* Prem didn't know the love he felt for her seemed to grow day by day even death didn't stop that love from growing. *OMGGG!!! love the last linneeee! its beautiful JC! maybe i should comment when im more composed cos heck, i cant find the words..but i just want to rite..so here it is! u know how i feelllllll!!! *
Heer smiled as she enjoyed the feel of raindrops around her but that feeling in her chest came back that little flutter she felt every time prem was nearby. *soooo preeettttyyy! ... that little flutter she felt every time prem was nearby....ahhhhhh! its amazinnggggg! *Heer opened her eyes and saw prem standing next to her in the rain his hair completely wet like hers his white shirt sculpting his tones muscles.*ufff! prem bhiiiii!* Even in this chilly whether heer felt heat rise on her cheeks for the way prem was looking at her now his eyes not only held intensity but passion as well *OMGGGG!! i loveeee thatttt...even in this chilly weather heer felt heat rise on her cheeks... is that even possible! yeah, it is ... its premmmm! *
~Prem pulled heer into an empty room and shut the door locking everyone out. He looked at her her beauty shined even more in the bridal gown. He didn't ask why she was dressed like this and he didn't let her explain either for this one moment he wanted to forget the world and let it just be them only them. The fear flickered in her eyes but her racing heart calmed the moment she felt prem touch her hand and he didn't let go ~ *OMGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG!!!!! u need to be the script writer for KDMHMD! haillaaaaaa "He didnt ask why she was dressed like this, and he didnt let her explain either.... it describes the scene perfectly! man, i rmbr that scene...i love the camera angles..it was perfect!!! ...the fear flickered in her eyes, but her racing heart calmed the moment she felt prem touch her hand.... ughhhhhhh! JC~! what are u doing to usssss! the descriptions are mighty amazing! how the heck do u come up with this..no one...no one could have put a scene like that into words as such! the scene in itself is sooo good, i couldnt imagine anyone else writing it! haillaaaaa! *
Prem lifted up a hand for heer to take Heer understood perfectly *i loveee that! its a conversation only they understand* and placed her hand in prem's as he pulled her close swaying with the beats of their hearts.*ohhhh this is amazingggg* It was destined their love it went against all traditions all relationships all of society but their love was destined mannn! gossebumps again...this is something that would come right out of Jugni's mouth! im still not over the darned fact that we havent read this before! my God! shoot me with lightening! *
~"Koi haath tho laga ke dikahye maar ke dikhaye himat hai tho maar ke dkhaye!...gar dunga yahan par!" Prem's eyes glittered in fury as his held a crying heer by his side.*this makes the dialogue more intense! and u have the perfect flashback scenes* uffffffff! His gaze glared at the people around them challenging them to come near his love. No one dared the calm, quiet prem was nowhere to be seen in front them stood an enraged lover the obsession of love running through his veins~ ....the obsession of love running through his veins....its perfect! no words! jaw open! im done! no more to say!
Prem twirled heer and pulled her back to him. Their bodies collided...and the sparks flew. *oooooooo haialaaaaaaaaa koi mare mujheeee*His fingers trailed the side of her face his lips soon replacing his fingers *ohhhh! i HAVE to comment on EVERYTHING!!!!!*. Heer closed her eyes as prem's lips skimmed along her jaw igniting a fire in her. Prem then placed a soft kiss on her forehead right where he put vermillion not too long ago. It was as if he sealed their vows with a kiss love it loveee it! sealed their vows with a kiss! its soo perfect! makes sooo much senseeee! hailaaaaaaaaa!
~"Aaj mein Prem Juneja apni jaan se zyaada inn hawa ko sakshi maan ke inn fizao ko sakshi mann ke Heer tumhe apni patni mann tha hoon " Everyone danced around them, but all prem saw was heer as he circled her. He didn't say these words out loud but heer could still hear them "Mein Prem Juneja aaj apne naam ke saath apne astitva apne shareel aur apne aatma ke saath Heer Mann ko apne dharam se karam se dil se apni patni mann tha hoon " ~ okay, this is exactly the moment the tears flowed! this is ittttttttttttttttttt! MY GOD!!!! blesss youuuuuuuu! the dialogues are perfect in themselves...but could u have made it better! i didnt think it was possible for ANYONE to write it like this! haillaaaaaa! i dont know what to say JC! i really dont!
Heer looked up at prem their faces merely centimeters apart *ooooo u know what..im okay that none of this happened on the show... otherwise we'd not get this fab piece of work from you! im happy imagining this! its beautifulllll *Unn dono ka pyaar ek bagawat ban gaya tha ek aisa junoon ke zamana aur rasmo ko unke agge jukna para Lekin shayaad kismat ko kuch aur hi manzoor tha *hailaaaaaa ----> prepared for some more cryinggg?!??!?!?!!*
~"Mein jaa raha hoon.." *NOOOOOOOOO - i hatteeddd thatttttt* Heer ran to the tv screen where she saw her love tears running down her face not willing to accept the truth yet not willing to say goodbye yet. "Khud ki zindagi jeena heer " Heer shook her head stubbornly, whispering between sobs, "mein tumhare saath zindagi jeena chati hoon Prem" *okay, and this is where i dieeeeeeeee* its amazinggggg! i didnt even cry as much when i saw this clip on screen...but just the way u wrote it! haillaaaaaa! im going to read this part over and over again! Heer watched through blurry eyes as prem's pained face looked back at her, "Mujhe maaf kar dena alvida Heer agle janam thak" NOOOOOOOOO!!! agle janam thakkk! nooooooooooo! premmm! Nahiiiiinnnnn!Heer fell to the floor, her pain consuming her wholeher sobs now unstoppable. "NAHIN!....PREM!" Heer's heartfelt cry echoed throughout Juneja mansion it rained that whole night ~ my gosh..i need new adjectives! heer's pain..its unbelievable..."Heer fell to the floor, her pain consuming her whole...her sobs now unstoppable" ....it rained that whole night.. JC! im such a silly fool! ur making me cry! what the helllll! its fiction alrighttttt! but no... that tassalli doesnt work! this is beautifulll!!!
"prem" Heer softly whispered. He was actually here holding her in his strong arms. Heer wished with her whole heart that this wasn't a dream...life wasn't worth living without prem. A tear rolled down her cheek and mixed in with the rain drops. No one could even tell that it was a tear drop that rolled down but prem did.*FAINNTTTTT ---> water someboddyyyyyy* He softly kissed the teardrop away after all a true lover knew the difference between tears and water. *OMGGGG!!!! true trueeeeee! love this! descriptions O NAMA!!! heheheh! no laughing matter though, its beautiful* Heer cupped prem's face making sure this is real he's real. Her love has returned. *FINALLYYYY!!!!!!!*
~Heer ran through the dessert of rajasthan the storm pounding around her. But she kept running at that point the storm held more promise than the palace she fled from. *WOW ---> my whole world is spinning this moment*When her legs couldn't carry her anymore, she looked up at the moon with what little breath she had left in her body she said one name *hayeeeeee*"prem mere lahoo ke har khatre mein tum ho meri aatma mein tum ho iss heer mein tum ho prem" *why oh WHY did they even THINK of kiiling prem!*Tears rolled down heer's face as she called out to him maybe this time she'll get an answer "aa jao prem laut aao laut aao prem!...laut aao" When heer was about to fallstrong arms circled around her familiar arms~ THAT SCENE WAS FANTASTICCCCCCCC!! the way he ran to her! OH MY GOD!!!!!! it was absolutely gorgeous! and u...sigh! i already told u..id not be able to make it through this...its a shocker that I got this far...but I think u can already tell, ive run out of words!
That night, Heer's heart wrenching cry reached the heavens and it made God cry as well. Her pain was so great that even destiny bowed down to her *OMGGGGGGGGGGGG!! This is beautifullll! Heer's heart wrenching cry reached the heavens...and it made God cry as well... man, this is amazing! U told ME that the creatives had to read my work...HELLOOOO MISSSYYYYY!!!!!! Ive never read a line like that one... PHEWWWW!!!
Prem took heer's hand that cupped his face and placed a kiss on each hand. He knew what was going through her mind he could read it in her eyes. *true love true love! Prem knows exactly what Heer was thinking...it doest get any more perfect than this*
"Yeh sach hai heer hum saath hai humhe koi alag nahin kar saktha " prem gently murmured.
Heer sighed when prem captured her lips with his their soaking bodies so close that someone from afar might mistake them for one form OHHHHH!!!! That is CLOSEEEE!!!
The rain pattered around them softly they say when God is crying it rains the night Prem was stolen from Heer it rained and it rains tonight too but these are tears of joy falling from above and it danced around Prem and heer OMGGG!! This is the perfecttt way to end it! .... The night Prem was stolen from Heer...it rained...and it rains tonight too! Its gorgouessss! I loveee the mention of the rain...now that I KNOW u love the rain...only u could write about it so beautifully! Man, I could write FF over FF and never match up to u! this is amazinnnnggggggg! I loveeeee it!
JCCC!! Im crying againnnn! But not as much as I was when I first read it....only cos there are other people in the room now..so im hiding my tears...but this is ahhhhhhhhhhhh!!! Surprise I made it through.. I don't even know what to say...maybe I said too much..or too little...but hey, ur much better with the words! Gosh! I had goosebumps all throughouttttttt! I still cant believe ive never read this before!!!!! Hailaaaaa! I love you JC! With lots of prem, annjan!!!! *wink wink*
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