Dil Tujhko Hi Maanda (ficmix added pg 39)

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Hey all! I'm Radz, as some of you may know. I currently have another FF floating around IF (thanks to Rinkz, I now know where it is! 😆), but that only has the character sketches up. Hopefully will update that soon, probably within the next couple of weeks? Having exams, and I probably shouldn't even be posting this, but I'd written it out some time ago, and finally got down to typing it out. B, a friend of mine (outside IF) helped me edit it, cos my Hindi is quite frankly non-existant, and I didn't want to bug anyone else here again with my inconsistent PMs and stuff.. I'm so nice na? If any mistakes are found in grammar/language, please inform me via PM and I'll make the necessary changes (and throw things at B, but that's another story! 😆)
Dil Tujhko Hi Maanda
This story takes place a year after the Delhi bombings, and disregards the episodes after that. Told from a third-person narrative, there will be many flashbacks to fill you in on what happened over the year that led to the beginning of the story. It is, ultimately, the eternal love story between Heer and Prem, and how they are meant to be. After all, Prem-Heer-are-one. 😉

Disclaimer:
I do not own anything to do with KDMHMD. If I did, we wouldn't be watching the track that is currently showing. We would be seeing loads more of the ande scene type, so that we from the IHP club can research EPE/EPHE more effectively.

[Oh, remember to keep fighting to bring HC-as-Prem back!]

Please let me know if you are interested. Will be posting the first part in just a bit. Also, this is in part dedicated to Estee, because my PM conversation with her regarding the Prem-death track and various methods for him to be brought back spawned the plot bunny that refused to die. 😆
Love,
Radz
*edited*
Parts
Part 1 - Page 1
Part 2 - Page 5
Part 3 - Page 9
Part 4 - Page 12
Part 5 - Page 15
Part 6 - Page 17
Part 7 - Page 21
Part 8 - Page 24
Part 9 - Page 26
Part 10 - Page 29
Part 11 - Page 31
Part 12 - Page 33
Part 13 - Page 35

Ficmix - Page 39
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Posted: 16 years ago
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So I thought it would be best to post part 1 now, rather than later, lest I forget about it. The idea of using song lyrics I got from 'Ek Paal' if I'm not wrong. Amazing fic, go read it! And this part is dedicated to Nans, who unknowingly gave me a song to use through her wonderful VM.

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Saans Leti Hu Yaara, Main Tera Naam Lekar
Keh Dungi Is Jahan Se, Tu Hi Hai Mera Dilbar
Zindagi Mil Gayi Hai, Bas Tere Dil Mein Rehkar
Aur Rab Se Kya Maangoo, Haath Aapne Utha Kar
Yeh Tera Dil Hai Sanam, Jo Mere Sine Mein Hai
Tujhse Hi Zinda Hu Mein, Keh Rahi Hai Dhadkane
Chahta Hu Itna Tujhe

Heer made a face as the sunlight streamed through her window onto her face. She tried burying her face into her pillow but it was of no use. She was already awake. Yawning slightly, she rose from the bed and blearily made her way to the bathroom. About five minutes later she returned, fresher and more alert. She hummed slightly as she quickly got ready.
"Di! Nashta!" Meher called from the floor below. Smiling at the sound of her sister's voice, Heer marveled at how Meher had gotten back her bubbliness and outspokenness, though she had matured at the same time.
"Di-"
"Arre baba, bas. Main yahi hoon," Heer cut her off as she descended the stairs. "Baki sab kahan hai?"
"Ash kitchen mein hain, Veera ke saath. Harman aur Nihaal Bhaiya office ka kuch kaam kar rahe hainn," Meher replied.
"Aur Preet?" Heer asked, noting Meher's exclusion of the youngest of the three men.
"Voh to hotel chala gaya." Meher braced herself for Heer's reaction. She was not disappointed.
"Kya? Bina kuch khaye, bina kissi se mile chala gaya? Kaunsa kaam tha usse ke itni jaldi nikal gaya?" Heer questioned angrily. "Main Ashlesha se puchti hoon."
"Di, Preet ne kaha ke use naya lead mila hai," Ash informed her visibly annoyed cousin as she came out of the kitchen, a plate in hand. She knew how particular Heer was about everyone spending time together.
Heer nodded in acknowledgement, still upset. Ash grinned slightly and hugged her with one hand. "Ab muskurao please? Meri bachchi apni masi ko khush dekhna chahti hain. Muskurao to," Ash coaxed, placing Heer's hand on her stomach.
Shaking her head at Ash playfully, Heer asked Veera to call the men for breakfast. The next twenty minutes were light-heartedly spent with the family surrounding her, joking and playing around. 'How much has changed in just one year,' Heer thought to herself, grinning slightly as she spotted Harman unsuccessfully trying to steal some of Meher's food. Her gaze landed on Prem's photo, and her heart ached in longing.
'Kahan ho tum Prem? Bas teri kami hai yahan. Vaapas aajao Prem.'

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Dark brown eyes searched the sky, looking for some answers, albeit unsuccessfully. His heart ached, but he did not know why. He was missing someone, but he couldn't remember who. He felt as though someone he knew, someone he cared about, someone he loved tremendously, was hurting. This feeling had plagued him for the better part of the last year, but he did not understand why.
"Prem," the female voice broke him out of his reverie. He turned around to smile at the owner of the voice. "Tum yahan ho? Main kab se tumhe dhoondh rahi thi.." She approached him, shaking her head in affection. "Kya hua? Khayalon mein phirse kho gaye?" she teased.
Prem shook his head, slipping his hands into his pockets. Turning back around to look out the window, he replied, "Mujhe aaisa lag raha tha jaise koi mujhe bhula raha tha. Pata nahin kyun mujhe aaise lag raha tha."
"Main bhula rahi thi, silly," she giggled, hugging him from behind. She placed her head on his shoulder. "Tum bhi na, Prem, kabhi kabhi bas kho jaate ho."
Prem nodded, glad she could not see his face. He was not sure of her explanation, though it made sense. But her looking for him did not explain the desperation he felt, or the loneliness. It made no sense. He was far from alone, he was here with a beautiful woman who adored him, for god's sake, but still he felt as though something was wrong with this picture. Something, some very vital thing, was missing.
"Shayad tum sahi ho Sanjana," Prem answered quietly, but while this answer pleased her, it did nothing to quell the feeling that the name that was to be joined with his in a number of months should be someone else's.
Har Taraf Tu Hi Dikhe, Tu Hi Tu Dil Mein Rahe
Kya Kahon Tere Bina, Ek Pal Bhi Na Kate
Yeh Meri Saason Mein Bhi, Teri Hi Khusboo Rahe
Tu Lahoo Ban Ke Sanam, Jism Mein Mere Bahe
Chahta Hu Itna Tujhe

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Hope you enjoyed part 1! Let me know what you think. And part 2 should be up, well, sometime this month! 😆 I have it all typed out, just need to work out a few kinks.
Love,
Radz
Edited by Anhdara13 - 15 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey this looks great... i hope this is what they show in kis desh as well, really well written, didnt see any language problems at all, but pls do not leave us without updates for too long :(
Wonder what veera s doing still at home, and have u gotten rid of bauji and gaya3, is heer the elder of the household???
wonder what sort of lead preet is following, see you have left so many questions... now dont leavve us guessing for too long
i am really impressed by all of ur writing skills, you all seem very young, i checked after everyone started celebrating 16th birthdays... and all of u, Jaz, Rinki, Kimmu, Rehana, ashpush, amana (hope i didnt leave anyone and i dont know evryones names ) have very good writing styles, the style of writing is very proper, mature
thanks for entertaining us, :)
Edited by fj08 - 16 years ago
Posted: 16 years ago
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🤪

*runs around screaming* Yayyy yuo posted! Rinkz found Chupke Chupke?? Link me!!!

Anyway the concept sounds amazing, can't wait to see all these flashbacks. And I can't comment on the first part because I can't read it properly.....🤔Mind PMing it to me?🤗

*reserved*

*unreserved*

OK thanks for the PM, don't PM me every poart, I'll just let you know if I can read it or not, and then you can PM it to me! BTW, great timing for starting a FF🤔right in the middle of mid terms....🤓

Now getting to the part....I LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!! Just a lil less then I love you!!!🤗It was very will written di, loved how Heer got up and was ghussa when Preet had already left! I'm guessing that it is a lead on where Prem is? So in this FF, do they think he is dead or missing???😕

Hayye Ash is pregent, Preet you got busy fast!!!😆I think it will be a boy don'y you?😆But then you wrote "meri Baachi" awww I always imagined Prem with the girl and Preet with the boy...but hey, you are the boss!!

OMG, that line! Pulled at the strings to my heart...was so saddening, awww poor Premu, lost his memory...I hate Sanjana...I don't care if she's not knowingly taking advantage of Prem, but still, she TOUCHED HIM....no one besides Heer *cough*and me*cough* are allowed to do that!!!!!😳Ughhhh HATE HER!!!!😡

The way you described Prem's lonliness, was so heartbreaking. He knows that there is someone out there waiting for him, and he desperatly wants to get to her....hayyee.....ye hotha hai pyar....*nazar utharing*

That song was really good, I love that song....!!!!😳

Amazing first part di! No worries about sending me a "PM notification", just when you update let me know through our chatting PM's or drop a comment in my FF...😳

Update whenever!!

Shabz
Edited by shabo24 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey
awesum part 1
looking forward to it

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Posted: 16 years ago
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aww radzie...ill come back to this...

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okayz, a year after the delhi bombings? hm kay sounds good! whooohooo, its gonna be on premeer's love 😃 hehe cant wait 😉 ooh la-la! i wish you were the one taking care of the show, then me would be helping estee and you with the analyzation on prem 😉😆 ey missy! course im interested 😆 but yea take your time with updating both of your fics! 😃 and good luck with your exams, dont think i've wished you luck yet 😆
Part. 1-
kay love the song 😳 hm meher still bubbly yet more mature now, sounds good, maybe now i will re-start liking her like i used to in the beginning 😃 preet is at the hotel already? i guess lallu's words have effected him in such a way that he is now showing how he is maturing 😳 ahh lekin you didn't show preet 😍 ah koi baat nahin, next time 😉😆 aww heer is so sweet, worrying about preet leaving without eating breakfast 😆 aww ashie ish preggers!! 😆 abey oy! mere preet ko baap banadiya? 😲😲 tsk tsk koi baat nahin. aww harman's stealing meher's food? how cute! are they married now? 😃
PREM!! he's here! aww his beginning paragraph was soo 👏 suited him and his situation 😃 um yeh ladki prem ko kyun touch kar rahi hai? 😡 grr yeh sanjana ki bachi ka main khoon kar doongi!! oooh i kinda have an idea of the whole thing that happened 😉 hm cant wait for next part! i wanna see premeer interact 😃
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rinkz
Edited by ~Rinki~ - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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awesomeeeeeeeeeeeeee too god do update soon
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: fj08

hey this looks great... i hope this is what they show in kis desh as well, really well written, didnt see any language problems at all, but pls do not leave us without updates for too long :(

Wonder what veera s doing still at home, and have u gotten rid of bauji and gaya3, is heer the elder of the household???
wonder what sort of lead preet is following, see you have left so many questions... now dont leavve us guessing for too long
i am really impressed by all of ur writing skills, you all seem very young, i checked after everyone started celebrating 16th birthdays... and all of u, Jaz, Rinki, Kimmu, Rehana, ashpush, amana (hope i didnt leave anyone and i dont know evryones names ) have very good writing styles, the style of writing is very proper, mature
thanks for entertaining us, :)

All your questions will be answered soon, some of them by the next part actually. Hope you can wait a few days for that? Sorry, am actually having my finals at the moment. And I only have three parts written out. Until my finals are over, I'm not sure I'll be able to write so much. Hence me planning to spread the updating a bit over the next few weeks. And thank you so much for the compliment! (I'm 18 by the way, and I've always wanted to write, hence my particularness about no grammar or any other mistakes 😃)

Originally posted by: pooji123456789

hey
awesum part 1
looking forward to it

Aw, thank you! Hope you enjoy it as it goes on..

Originally posted by: sweta2005

awesomeeeeeeeeeeeeee too god do update soon

Aw, so glad you think so! Will update in a few days maybe?
Thank you all so much for the sweet comments! (Shabz, Rinkz, waiting for your edited posts! 😆)
Love,
Radz
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Posted: 16 years ago
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yay!! new ff. its amazing.
so ash is pregnant huh?? soo cool
prem with memory loss....humph!!!
and gthat too with sanjana??
so is sanjana evil or nice. as in is this her big plan to get her prem or just innocently in love with him without knowing his past??
pls continue soon
love ur ff
amana
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Loved ur FF . Hope dis happens in the serial too. Anyways gr8 part simply awesome.
BEST OF LUCK FOR UR EXAMS

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