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Ash

@~sweet Ash~

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Posted: 16 years ago

#131

amazing update as always!

nice twist with heer leaving prem at the mundap

the way preet recognized his bhabhi was funny

thanx 4 the update

ayesha

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Sunayna

@x.sunayna.x

Dazzler

Posted: 16 years ago

#132

Hey!

That was an awesome update!

I loved how Preet recognised as his Bhabhi!

What a twist..Premeer engaged and then her leaving!!

Wonder whats gonna happen!

can't wait till the next update!

?xXx?

Sunayna

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Angie

@angel82

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Posted: 16 years ago

#133

Rinki,

Finally I made it here....I'm really sorry I'm late * holding ears* ....I did comment on your Mine epilogue last week...And now here....I will comment on Woh Mile the later ok...

I know I havnt commented on any parts here, so this is going to be long...I did want to comment on this earlier but I had to read it from the beginning as there were a few things confusing me...So I thought I will take my own time and do it araamse...

Coming to Part 1 A

Aha, so Balraj and Teji aren't together anymore...

and Heer is a quiet and sensible girl...Well in the first page where you have given a rough idea about the characters Heer was supposed to be kinda tomboyish.....Did you change it ??

Rinki is the naughty one😃 and she has caused their father to drift more away from the family…

Hmm wonder whats that big mistake Rinki made...Will get to know in the coming parts..

Heer got a job at a popular Magazine...Cool....

I loved the sisterly moments in the part...it was fun to read....

Part 1B

Heer is to work for Prem's company...does she know that she is going to work for Prem's company at this point, or she doesnt...from the sentence I thought she knows but as I read further I felt she doesnt know.....

Rinki gets a call from Rahul ...Rahul was Rinki's friend?? But becoz of Rahul Rinki had to leave her house and Heer had to come with her and its become difficult for Rinki to face her Dad...

This makes me eager to know more about Rinki's past and what her mistake was...

Kris?? Is he another friend of Rinki ??But Kris' Nana lets her know about him,does that mean he is a kid??...... oh no , another suspense....making me very anxious to know...

Heer gets appointed to work under Prem in Greece...sounds romantic...and the sisters need a change of location to get out of the past...it becoming very interesting...

Love the rinki -Heer relation here...

Wow Prem's introduction was cool ...hmm..sorry hot ...😆😆

Prem- in his mid twenties, white shirt ,sleeves rolled up, stubble ,Tough to work with.( ofcourse it would be tought to work with such a disturbingly handsome boss)

Aha ,Preet's introduction😃...prem's younger brother ...😕Again in the first page you mentioned that Prem doesnot have a family...😕I guess you changed that and brought in Preet for Rinki😉...I know Rinki has an eye on him...but that was cool to bring him in too....He is always fun...and here Rinki and Preet will rock for sure...

Now Part 2

Wow so they are on their way to Greece…cool..

Preet got to sit near Heer and Rinki near Prem…😃Liked the way he put off the lady...😆

Heer was reading Twilight …who isn't😆

Prem was her senior at college and Prem was in love with her and she too had fallen for him later...I like college romances...its fun...They were supposed to get married...and Heer never showed up at the mandap...Heer left the house with Rinki on the day before her marriage..And Rinki didn't know about the marriage??😕she wasn't there for the engagement….Nobody let her know, not even her parents…I want to Know Rinki's secret now.....ok will wait till you update it...

Prem had been in her mind for the last two yrs,she loved him and wanted to marry him but couldnt ...She knows what she has done was not right....hmm I assume she doesnt know she is going to work for HIM....its not going to be easy for her....

Oh Preet was soo funny when he realized who she was…Absolutely loved that whole scene..it was funny...and you have written it well...

''angry young man'' actually remimded me of Geet's dialogue in Jab we met…Rinki kinda resembles her....

Kulraj is Prem's current secretary....Heer is appointed to work as his secretary rite..So she will replacing her?

Teenage girls giving Prem flirty glances😉😆, can you blame him....and was he following her all the while or he just happened to notice her at that moment...

I know I have asked a lot of questions but what to do , me cant help it......sorry...but you need to answer them only if you are free ...

Eagerly waiting for the next part...but know you are busy..take your own time...

Luv

Angie

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Lamia Tasnim Liana

@-Liana-

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Posted: 16 years ago

#134

Hmmmmm,u had changed the story line but this 1is also really good👏this part was good i just loved the part whn Prem said Madam dont u think u talk to much😆🤣🤣but y did she run frm her wedding with Prem😕????will wait for the next part😳

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Priyanka

@cookies10

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Posted: 16 years ago

#135

Love Part 2!!

Mee Want To Read Moree..

Continue When You Can..😃

-Priyanka x

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Rinki

@~Rinki~

Rocker

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Posted: 16 years ago

#136

Originally posted by: rag-ran4ever
That was a great chapter!!!😊 Ok and the twilight thing made me laugh?? everybody loves twilight dont they?? 😆 *sigh* edward😳.. anyways update soon!!!!

thanks!! lolz yea everyone does! i added that part in for meera as she loves twilight and i was tlkin to her while writing the part so it was a good idea lolz ah yes edwad, mr. perfect! 😆 ill try to update when i can!

Originally posted by: ashpush
wow..another awsome update!!
that twist was fabulous...
premeer engagement n her leaving the mandap,...never expected it...n rinki doesnt know abt it??interesting...
heer in a blue anarkali suit..wow...
loved the way preet recognised her..lolzz it was sooo funny..😆
the wind caressing prem..*sigh* (if only i was that lucky wind😳😆)
and yaar..theres no pressure k...update whenever possible..will wait like a good girl..n I wont disturb u..pakka promise!!

thanks! hm yea rinks doesnt know yet because she was in london studying and didnt know who heer was getting married to...lolz yea i had fun writing preet part aw yea i know rite!! every girl wishes they were that wind 😆 thanks so much for waiting!! lolz i really appericiate it 😳

Originally posted by: Pyari_Zahra
Wow, that was completely unexpected- I really liked that!! Such an interesting story!! Hopefully Prem will forgive Heer for leaving him n love will be in the air!! But I have a feeling he will make her suffer as he is her boss 😉 Anyway, I really enjoyed reading that 👏

thanks, am glad u liked it! lmao yea he prolly will torture her...more like seduce her so she will crumple and tell him everything 😆 thanks for the sweet comment!! 😳

Originally posted by: fijiana
hey rinki thanks for the update even though you are pretty busy.to the update well loved how prem and heer had to sit with each others respective partners will be waiting for updates to know why heer never went to the mandap even though she was and is still in love with prem.well guess will have to find out whenever you update.all the best for the report and the tests and quizzes.you will do good.
.....marica..... [/QUOTE]

hey marica! hm yea prem sat with rinki nd heer with preet, she left the mandap because she was too caught up in finding a place for her, rinki and kris to stay that she never realized it was her wedding day plus you could also blame ballu for telling everyone to leave becuz heer wouldnt come to the mandap and it caused prem to be heartbroken...she does love him still and always will! thanks mari, i hope i do good...cuz exams are coming soon so these tests are pretty important 🥱
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Rinki

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Posted: 16 years ago

#137

Originally posted by: fj08
great update Rinki, now didnt u write the note for Kiran for her 'Khamoshi' FF, boy that was different language.... so is that the difference between u two???😉
promise wont pm u for updates..... have to go back and reread the first part again, sort of lost, but i think the second part does clarify the whole 'what happened 2 yrs ago'? somewhat apart from Rinki's part in all of it, but we can imagine whats happening there.....

a small tip, to avoid rewriting things over and over again, post them as soon as u r done the first time, saves ur time and makes us happier, nobody is really looking for mistakes, just enjoying the story 😊

good luck with ur project, will keep an eye out for updates

fatima

thanks, uh yea i did...hm what do you mean by "boy that was different language....so is that the difference between u two?" i am slightly confused at ur meaning behind this...

thanks for the tip, but i wnt be following it 😆 if u know me, then u'll come to realize that i always have to make changes to something....i write what comes to mind becuz i dnt have anything outlined that this wil be in the next prt...so its all abt what i think and what i come up with in my mind, i always have something changing in the storyline because i dnt stick to one thing...i like to just go with wat comes in mind...but still thanks for the tip

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Rinki

@~Rinki~

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Posted: 16 years ago

#138

Originally posted by: ruexangel
Hey
it was awsomee!

i love the idea dt they kno each other, they were even engaged? wow. i want to kno y she ran away, u always kno how to keep us in suspence & waiting😆.

& the mention of twilight made me jump up & down lol, coz im crazy for twilight these days😆, which is silly coz i hvnt even read the whole book properly😆, but iv'e read all extracts/1st chapter and everythin bou it i culd find on the net! lol & im already obsessed & eager to get my hands on it nxt tym so i cn read the whole thing 😆. newayyy (sorry bou dt)...i loved this update, culd picture it all, and hope they meet soon. i also lyked the idea of how Prem asked for her hand in marriage & already loved her. shoo shweet lolz. ok

& thanks for the updating wen ur so busy, & also 4 the pm😳

update wen u can ssoon plzz😳

hey rue! aww thanks, glad that u liked it! hm yea they were...hehe yea am evil like that...😆

ahh wow another twilight fan eh? lmao i havent read it yet but meera loves it nd i have heard its rlly addicting so wil be checkin it out later on 😆 nah its kayy i was hopin to read what someone thinks abt the mention of twilight 😆 aww thanks rue! rlly sweet of u...hehe yea he loves her still...hm am still coming up with exactly "why" she didnt make it to the mandap but i have a vague idea, its gnna have to do with rinks ending up in an accident hm that sound okay? 😆 ur welcome!

ill try to update soon! 😳

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Rinki

@~Rinki~

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Posted: 16 years ago

#139

Originally posted by: indiandoll89
YAY! You posted it!!!!
yesh i did 😆

I loved this ending!!! 😃😃 😃 You do know how fabulous you are right Rinki? Or shud I point it out again!? 😉

i was sure u'd love it 😆 ah no i didnt know i was fabulous! but thanks for pointing it out yet again 😆 rlly sweet of u meeru

I love LOVE LOVE LOVE this twist sooo much, which I already told you, just because it makes everything else more intriguing and perfect! 😊😳

hehe yesh yesh i know! 😆 ooh me needs to discuss with u some more twists and all that 😆

Now I know about the whole stressful life, along with the writing, so I won't say update soon, but do update asap! 😊😊

ah yes i ranted to u abt it 😆 ill try to update asap 😃

Luv ya loads and loads Rinks,

me loves u tons and tons too meeruu

Meera😳

rinkz

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Rinki

@~Rinki~

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Posted: 16 years ago

#140

Originally posted by: ~sweet Ash~
amazing update as always!
nice twist with heer leaving prem at the mundap

the way preet recognized his bhabhi was funny

thanx 4 the update

ayesha

hey ayesha, thanks 😳

hehe yea i thought ppl might enjoy this twist more 😆

ah yea loved writing that prt

thnx for the comment 😆

rinki

@ kis desh rocks- thanks...will try to update asap

Originally posted by: .xganga.x
Hey!
That was an awesome update!

I loved how Preet recognised as his Bhabhi!

What a twist..Premeer engaged and then her leaving!!

Wonder whats gonna happen!

can't wait till the next update!

?xXx?

Sunayna

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