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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: lian

👏i dint found any word to praise u&ur wrtiings its awsome Di&the charecters r tooooooooo good,i love all the charecters Prem,Heer,Veera,Preet,Ash every1 is soo good&one more thing u discribe each&aevery part sooooo beautifully tht i can imagine it😳

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Heer was very Helpless but cant blame Prem as he always meet those Sanjana type girls😡&soon i think Heer will also fall in love with him☺️☺️☺️&i believe this Mansion night will change Heer's mind😳Impatiently waiting for part 9😃

awwwww cutie.......thanks for the constant love and support dear........i m touched😊......well abt this "Mansion night"....lemme give u a hint so that u can prepare urself beforehand😉.......lets just say that, "ppl don't have control over their hearts😳"......got anything??!!!!😉

Originally posted by: @nup@m@

Hey!!

I was a silent reader of both ur ff's but this time I culdnt keep myself from being silent anymore...I luuuuvvvveeeeddddddd this part and not to mention the whole story has an aura abt it... Its diffrent and unique and the way u switch from present to past and back is fab...
Cant wait to read more
plz do continue soon

ouuuuuuuuu!!!!!!.......i m soooooo goood😳.......i did make my silent reader to push their fingers on their keyboards.........hehehhehhhehe......fine!! i admit i m crazy.......ok jokes apart........i m pleased to see some of my silent readers writing down for me😊.........I honestly thank you for appreciating my writing skills and creativity.........love u dear🤗

Originally posted by: ruexangel

that was so brilliant!!!!!😲👏👏

i love this FF, one of the best seriously. You described it so well!, & the emotions and what they were thinking..wow its all so intense!..& so glad he knows about her, he's fallin in love wif heer😳 loved it! sooo gooodd, will look forward to more premeer, please continue soon.. will be waitin!😳

thanks cutie.....luved ur feedback......it's my pleasure to entertain such wonderful ppl.......😊.....speaking of entertainment, "ekta!!!! you should learn from our ff writers, how to create a storyline, coz urs simply sucks!!!!......get over that same lame crappy storyline of killing the admirable character in the show......damn!!!.".......sorry rue dear cudn't help

Originally posted by: ashpush

great part rehana...long 2...(n i totally loved it being long)
prem got a cut on his hand???poor prem..
n poor heer 2...she must hav been really shattered..
totally loved d 'wife' like concerns of heer.
beautiful part dear..
dis part was updated faster dan usal na..guess u r also as impatient as us😊 ...we 2 read d next part n u 2 c r response
k keep going..update soon

thank youuuuu🤗.......yesh i m impatient to write this package😃😳........and to read ur feedbacks.....loved it hon.......
luv
rehana😊
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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: angel82

I'm speechless...You left me with no other option but writing such a beautiful part...I can just get drown in your fic for hours reading it over again and again....
*returning to read your last part once more*
😳😳😳😳😳😳.........
*coming back to comment*
The part was soo beautifully written...everything so clear and well described...the situations, the characters, their activities, their reactions and emotions ,everything..simply loved it....👏👏🤗

Do I have to say how much I love the Prem and Heer in this fic...they are simply adorable...

nope i got it😳

He didnt even have to take a look to know it was her voice...Her asking for help gave him a chance, not to prove her wrong but to prove himself wrong...Deep inside he always had a feeling that she was different from all the other girls..But he wouldn't believe unless she proved it to him that she was actuallly different ....Right?

rite........woow great analysis di.........you guys are too good at analyzing my fiction😊
Loved the way you brought out her helplessness and her pain while accepting his proposal...
His anger and disbelief on being proved wrong that she was different, then his guilt, frustration and anger at his himself for misunderstanding her, his restlessness and concern for her after knowing her reason..mindblowing
''to his surprise, he didn't even feel the pain of his blood that was running down like a fountain.....'' ....'' as the uncontrollable pain from both his heart and hand was killing him...''

That says it all, she is already in his heart

glad i cud express my thought😊

Heer is a pale yellow saree ...😍I can just imagine how gorgeous she must be looking..She is such a sweetheart..She was ready for the sacrifice at a time when she was completely emotionally broke only becoz she didn't want to be considered disloyal.... 👏

awwww thanks di........i m really honored😊.......love you for appreciating my writing skill and creativity....means a lot to me😊
Why does the doctor's words give me a feeling that her father isn't going to make it..Or is it her words to Veera that keep echoing in my head ''I have lost everything'', that gives me a feeling that she will loose everything despite her sacrifice..But girl don't worry, your pain and sorrow is only temporary coz you have the most desirable Prem madly in love with you..
even though you are the third person to guess abt heer's father but u the 1st to provide a proof for it......so hats off to you👏
Sky blue shirt, loosened tie, unbuttoned from top, sleeves rolled up -just perfect?😊

'' seeing her for the first time in saree, he just couldn't take his eyes off........as if he could live the rest of his life by staring at her........even though, he wanted her NOT to come but somewhere in his heart, he was pleased to see her as if he had been waiting for her since ages.''

He's lost his heart to her -the purity in her beauty and character...and you have put it beautifully..👏
yesss he did😳
Her concern for his wound...She surely feels for him deep inside..after all they are made for each other..

''he wanted to yell at her to get lost from here........her presence was killing him........he was being attracted towards her........before things get too far he wanted to save her from his desirable passion that was growing inside him........he had never felt like this for anyone.......closing his eyes, he turned his face down in order to interrupt his own overpowering emotion, at the same time, clenching his fist inside his pocket......''

Once again you have beautifully written his emotions -his concern, love, passion, yearn for her..
She surely is going to loose tonite.... Rainy night, pale yellow saree alone with sky blue shirt....don't you think that's a deadly combination?
Dead...Dead......Dead.....i m one freaking damn fan of this combination😳😳😳

Loved Prem's interaction with Mrs. Bregenza ..and her words to him simply says how nice a person he is....

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Veera is soo sweet here..the way you compared her to a kitten was cute..And Prem having a sweet sisterly affection to her...
awww di thanks for liking it......however the idea was inspired by the very first hug scene of veera and prem in kdmhmd (it was the epi of premeer dance on bolna halke halke)........i absolutely adored that scene and Veera as well, the kiddish way she ran into the protective shell of her brother was amazingly presented.....and premu was just tooo cute.....mashallah😊.....the beautiful relationship in the world😊
Sorry, wrote a long comment , couldnt help it...Eagerly waiting for the next part...
awwww i was expecting a long one......since i provided with a long part😛....once again love you for the constant support and love di🤗
Luv
Angie

luv
rehana
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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: Parth Garewal

hey rehana awsum outstanding...fabulous..fantastic...my my...i m just falling in love wid ur ff dear...i love ur ff....rele its fantastic...just superb...i ll rate it..if u dont mind...

of course i won't mind considering receiving a rate from my sweet bro😛

its...123234546675899334567 / 10.....hey i hope u understand now that how much i liked it...its superb...ur ff is one of the best ffs i have ever read...keep it up n plz tell when r u going to update...
so sorry today i cant clap coz clappings r not enough for ur ff...
awwww that was touching dear......i m honored😊

i waz feelingthe pain of heer n when prem said to cum his home... i wanted to kill him for that(no offence)..how can he do that but i m happy that he realised his mistake...when heer came n how prem saw her i imagined every thing...u described everything so perfectly that i waz imagining it infron of my eyes...hey u r a awsum writer dear,,,its a pleasure reading ur ff...plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz update soon...i ll be waiting....
awww glad that u liked the storyline so far.......n next week i'll be a bit busy so i will post the next part tonite and the following one on friday😃

wid love
PARTH😊

hey rehana glad to hear that u ll update today but plz update jaldi..coz i cant wait..its terrible to wait for ur ff...and sis dont worry at all..u r a fantastic writer...u ll be honoured everytym u write sumthing...ok then ...

waitinggggggggggggg...

wid love
PARTH😊

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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: ruexangel

that was so brilliant!!!!!😲👏👏

i love this FF, one of the best seriously. You described it so well!, & the emotions and what they were thinking..wow its all so intense!..& so glad he knows about her, he's fallin in love wif heer😳 loved it! sooo gooodd, will look forward to more premeer, please continue soon.. will be waitin!😳

thanks cutie.....luved ur feedback......it's my pleasure to entertain such wonderful ppl.......😊.....speaking of entertainment, "ekta!!!! you should learn from our ff writers, how to create a storyline, coz urs simply sucks!!!!......get over that same lame crappy storyline of killing the admirable character in the show......damn!!!.".......sorry rue dear cudn't help
lol aww thanks ur to nice! & pretty wonderful urself 😳
& dts ok i understand ur frustation, i was lyk dt a min ago. hate harshad leaving , hope its just a stupid publicity stunt🤢, for the tym jus be positive, reading ff's lyk urs always makes me happy 😃
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Posted: 17 years ago
awesome part cont soon plz!!!!!!!👏
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Posted: 17 years ago

Shot #9

Totally surprised to witness a personal Prem, who is utterly different from the professional Prem......"Here is the towel.....and if you want, you can change yourse...." interrupting her, she assured the woman with a half smile, "No, it's ok thanks!!"......quite impressed by this young sweet girl, Mrs. Bregenza affectionately touched her cheek, "as you wish beta.........I will leave now.....hope to see you in the morning" smiling at Heer, she left the room after closing the door behind her...
As if she felt a touch of motherhood......she had never seen her mother......and if destiny becomes cruel to her then she will never see her father again........holding the towel close to her, she stood by the window as her eyes filled up with tears........she silently weeped........as if the rain and tears were competing against each other on their ability of stream.....none of them decided to stop.......even though the heavy rain was drenching her upper part of the body, she decided not to move from there as she wanted her tears to be washed away by the rain.......
Resting the right ankle on his left lower thigh, Prem casually settled himself down on the comfy couch in his bedroom while lying his head back on the head rest........then placing the right wrist against his forehead he tried to calm himself down.........closing his eyes, hoping to get a short nap, when he felt something in his heart.......as if someone dear to him was in deep pain.......unable to control himself, he felt this sudden urge to check up on her.....
She startled at the sudden thunderstorm, then looking at the direction of the door, Heer hoped to see a sight of someone as she had always been afraid of loneliness ......but to her dismay, she couldn't see anyone.......turning back to her earlier position, she found herself sobbing from heart.....but this time, the tears rolled down her face out of fear........she wanted to cry her heart out......but found herself powerless to do so due to the different circumstances that were surrounding her at this moment.......she silently pleaded her late mother to send an angel to share her pain as it was too hard for her to bear.......gently hugging herself, she made her way to the bed still sobbing........then helplessly broke down, holding her face with her palms she uncontrollably sobbed.....all she was hoping for a warm shoulder to cry on.......
how he wished he could fight with those every single drop of tears coming out of her heart........how he wished he could hold her into his arms forever, protect her from all the black evils........how he wished he could shower her with happiness and LOVE.......he didn't know whatever he was feeling could refer to love or not.......but all he wanted to do was take her into his arms and love her........love her until all the pains apologize to her for even thinking of hurting her......love her till she smiles........love her till she forgets all about her sorrows......
Incapable of bearing her state, Prem slowly went up to Heer........then gently sitting beside her, he reluctantly held her shoulder to comfort her.......feeling the sudden warmth on her shoulder, without thinking twice she hid her face into his chest, mistaking him of being the angel.......taken aback by her instant act he couldn't hold his sentiment as he firmly held her close to his heart while gently caressed her head.......he let her cry to her content assuming this to be the last time she would ever see those tears in her eyes.......
As if all his grudges against life had faded away from his heart........as if a huge burden has melt away from his heart......as if a part of her immaculate heart had transferred into him as soon as he felt her heartbeat close to his........for the first time in his life, he was feeling purity.......
Thanking the one above, she held herself close to him as if feeling the soothing warmth of devotion........somewhat calmed, she picked up her red face to look up at him........unable to believe herself, she stared at the person in front of her as she felt another flow of her tears down her cheeks.......sitting on her spot like a statue, she kept on admiring his intense and passionate eyes.......holding her face in between his hands, he gently placed soft kisses on it, wiping off the painful tears........touched by his gesture of concerns, she closed her eyes, letting him take over her heart and.......surprisingly her soul....
Early Morning
Gradually openning her eyes, she read the time on the wall clock, 4:30 am........then slightly she removed the silky locks away from her face when Heer felt a sudden flush on her cheeks.......she didn't know why she was feeling pure.......may be because she saw a glimpse of love in his eyes......may be because she felt love by him and not lust......blushed at her own thought, she turned back to his side only to see a single glimpse of his face when she found her heart breaking into million pieces......
Seeing her in a peaceful sleep, he kept staring at her innocent and angelic face........she indeed was the angel in his life.......he felt so content, so loved.......but again being carried away at the wrong time was killing him......that's when he decided to quietly get up from the bed to take in some fresh air.......coming up to the terrace, he cursed himself for not being able to control himself......to control his passion......to control his heart........'I will have to apologize to her........no matter what I will apologize to her.....'...making up his mind, he quickly went to his room.....
He already left her???......what else she could expect from him??......what did she expect? that after spending a night with her, he would even bother to see her face for a second??........'How could I even think of him loving me???.......How could I be such a stupid???'.......all heart broken, she ran out of the Mansion, crying, promising herself not to see his face ever again.......
Taking out the dynamic mangulsutra of his mother from the cupboard, he smiled to himself thinking of asking her to spend the rest of her life with him.........unable to hold his excitement anymore, he left for the guest room........staring at the last symbol of his mother in his hand, he felt the tears rolling down his face when he saw the empty room........she too left him........first it was his mother whom he loved unconditionally......now it's her with whom he wanted to start a new life..........but now leaving him all alone to live his life in the dark.....yet again.....
Coming straight to the hospital, she made her way towards the ICU.......she didn't know what to say or what to do.........first it was her mother......then him......and now her father too........sitting on the floor in front of the ICU room, she sobbed like a baby while calling her friend, "I have lost everything Veera.....you take care...."
end of flashback
back to present
he never meant to talk rubbish with her or hurt her, that was just an attempt to get rid of the emotions that he was feeling for her at that time......her presence kills him inside to be with her.......to look at her.......to be lost in her......never in his life, he felt like this for someone BUT her.......coming out of his thought, he again looked up at the 9th floor window to see a glint of light in the room........his eyes were twinkling, expressing the ray of hope to see her after 2 years of seperation.....
All of a sudden, feeling damn nervous to meet her........standing at the door he was debating within himself on whether to press the bell or not......then noticing the prop-open door, he decided to sneak in as his level of patience has hit its hight.......slowly opening the door, he took a couple of steps forward.......looking around the apartment, Prem felt proud of her sense of style......very few stuffs but yet perfect and elegent........everything neat and clean......his eyes became soften as soon as they fell on her delicate figure........there she is standing by the window, looking out while talking on the phone.....slipping his hands into his pockets, he waited for her for some time when he felt a sudden touch on his right feet then, it was climbing up to his leg......he felt like someone was trying to climb up on him with the support of his pant, thinking of him as a pillar or tree, when his eyes fell on the 25 inches tall little creature......
Quickly opening the door of her apartment, she turned on the light, then running towards the corner table where the telephone was ringing non-stop, she picked up the phone to answer it while keeping the little bundle of love on the clean shiny tiles on the floor.......
Feeling tired of practicing his walking skills, he decided to explore the floor by his own way......then looking down at the shiny floor, he was crawling with his tiny knees and hands when suddenly a pair of black shoes appeared in front of him, finding them pretty cool, he touched it with his chubby hands, as if experiencing a new invention........then holding the black cloth, the little creature decided to stand up with its support to show his mommy the sudden discovery at their living room.......climbing up to his height, he was surprised to notice the length of his support, when he looked up to see the face of the person to flash his few-toothy close-up smile.......
Before he could react to the sudden shock of his life, Prem quickly grabbed the hand of the little baby, who was about to fall on his back due to the lose of his balance.....
luv
rehana😊
Edited by tania86 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
Ooh i'll reserve anyways.. tehehe..

*edited*

This was a treat to read... I loved every bit of it... Now lets continue on with the details. 🤓

Ms. B is so nice... There really aren't maids like that anymore.. *stares at the girl sleeping on my bed* Poro Heer, she's lost her mother too. And when she felt the motherly affection from Ms. B, Ms. B left too. *sigh* If only she could stay to comfort her... Wait nooo.. I take that back. ☺️

On one side there's a broken, lonely Heer, and on the other side is a guilty and.. err hurt? Prem. I loved how you put in the 'dard ka rishta' in here. Oh god, that is seriously what i love about this couple. I love how they know when the other is in trouble...

I loved how you kept changing POV, it gave us detail on what the two were thinking about at that moment, and made much more nicer to read, cuz you could imagine what both of the people were thinking. I loved how you described Heer's pain, and her longing for a shoulder. And then they both get there angels, Prem is Heer's angel, and Heer is Prems.. *sigh* Perfect, na?

I loved how he comforted her, and what I loved even more was that what they did wasn't out of lust, but pure love for eachother. That moment of affection, that one glance in eachothers eyes, they knew how much they loved eachother. And what was even better was, how you described... it was brilliant... 👏

Oh noooo... Misunderstanding, she thinks Prem just left her, and he thinks she left him. But he wouldn't let her leave him, will she? I'm just confused about one thing, so has he been searching for her for 2 years, or did it take him a while to clear the misunderstanding? Other than that, poor Heer. She lost her father too... I had a feeling this would happen. Arghhh.. why didn't she run back to Prem... stupid girl with to many good morals.

OMGOMGOMGOMGOMGGGGG!!!!... YESHHHHHHHH!!! Heer has a lil kid, what's his name, is it Arjun? ☺️ I'm sorry, i'm in love with Arjun, the lil kid from shabz fic.. tehehe.. So whenever i think of a cute kid i think of him. I loved how you put in his lil innocent thoughts... Awwwwww... I wonder how Prem's going to react to the kid, hope he doesn't think any thing wrong and run away before Heer can see him.

I'm sooo soo sooo curious now... AHH! Can't wait for the next weekendd!!.. 😃

kimz
Edited by kimmu - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
me too reserved!!

whoa..wow..awesome..super..fantabulous..what else can I say..man..r u for real??he he..really it was such an amazing description of scenes..how do u come up with these stuff?really good..I really am speechless..it was that good..pls continue whenever time permits...eagerly looking forward to the next part..
Edited by ranrags - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
wow amazing
heer has lil kid so cute
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Posted: 17 years ago

Rehana, loved it.....Me was waiting for your update past midnite...crazy na?

Heer at the mansion, witnessing a completely different Prem...The kind of Prem she likes to see...😊
But poor thing was in such a miserable state...her deep pain and sorrow...her fear for her father and fear of loneliness..her praying for an angel...that was a wonderful part...
Premu trying his best to calm himself but how could he when his heart could feel her pain...
''how he wished he could fight with those every single drop of tears coming out of her heart........how he wished he could hold her into his arms forever, protect her from all the black evils........how he wished he could shower her with happiness and LOVE.......he didn't know whatever he was feeling could refer to love or not.......but all he wanted to do was take her into his arms and love her........love her until all the pains apologize to her for even thinking of hurting her......love her till she smiles........love her till she forgets all about her sorrows......''
You have beautifully brought out his feelings..
Loved the way he tried to comfort her and her feeling the warmth in his arms...
Premu had no intentions to do anything , he's such a good guy😉 but what to do , all of a sudden he was sooo much in love that he couldnt control loving her...But since his feelings were genuine, he wasnt wrong...😳
She was lost in his love and concern that she saw in his eyes but later his absence killed her..😭
She misunderstood him😭 she thought he just used her... 😭
Oh so sweet of him, he was ready to marry her or atleast propose to her right then and there...
Oh felt bad for Prem, he just missed her and felt bad for Heer ...poor thing lost her father and him too....they both are soo lonely, found each other but lost each other...
'' that was just an attempt to get rid of the emotions that he was feeling for her at that time......her presence kills him inside to be with her.......to look at her.......to be lost in her......never in his life, he felt like this for someone BUT her.......''
For him it was love at first sight...But i have a feeling even she was attracted to him in the
first meeting...
Oh his nervousness in meeting her again was sooooo sweet...
Each and every sentence you wrote to describe the baby and its little movements were simply awesome...very sweet and lovely...You had done it earlier in your other FF and now here too...
you make the whole thing sound extremely adorable..🤗
I told you ,while eagerly waiting for your updates, I try figuring out what would be next..I had a feeling if the ONS happens then the baby part might come up...loved the idea...👍🏼 Its become more and more interesting.....and adds to cuteness and depth of the relation...And after reading your previous FF , I can say you are very good at it...
Very eager to read the next part...to know Prem's reactions, Heer's reactions , what will they say to each other...But me will wait till next friday for your update...
luv,
Angie 🤗
Edited by angel82 - 17 years ago

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