Short FF..to survive weekend!

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Posted: 17 years ago
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Well with so many new topics and new ff's being opened..I thought even I could put down my version of Prem and Heer..when they're saved and so on and so forth..we also came by preview saying Prem saved Heer..trying to make her wake up and all..so here is my short ff..which I believe u all will like..and I guess to survive this weekend without KDMHMD..ok so here it goes..

The scene starts from Prem diving into the water..he swims further and gets hold of a white dupptta and is damn sure that Heer is floatiing very nearby..he swims further and comes to Heer..who is totally unconsious..and he pulls her gently towards him..caressess her face in the water and swims with her..and brings her out of the water..makes her lie on the soft lawn..people at a distance r searching for their beloved ones..and Prem's family doesn't know where Prem is and Preet is insisting one of the officer to go look for his bro or otherwise to let himself to go search for him.

Here Prem looks at Heer who is totally worn out..for a minute he doesn't know what to do..but he gathers himself together..and gently taps her cheeks..saying..Heer..Heer uto..dekho mein aaya hoon..tumhara Prem aaya hai..woh dekho..ma aur bauji bhi tumhara raah dekh rahen hain..tum mujhe yun beech mein hi chod kar kaise jaa sakti ho..uto Heer pls uto..all this while he is rubbing her palms and feet..and he grabs her by her hand..and lifts her..and runs towards his family..who r eagerly waiting for him..and tells them to take them to a nearby hospital..
On the other hand Meher is getting herself treated in one of the medical tent..and is wondering where everyone else r..and Nihaal on the other end..is burying his mother(Hamida) and all through that he is thinking of her last words..and wondering who his family could be..he sees Meher who is very confused as to what to do..and he goes to her and tells her not to worry and that he is there with her to find her sis and Prem..Biji also joins them..and they start to look out for their lost ones..

Heer is being taken to a medical tent..and doctors r trying their level best to save her..as her face is turning purple..one of the nurses comes to Prem and tells him that the doctors r doing whatever they can..but..since too much of water has been swalloed by her and since she was there in the water for a very long time..it's very difficult for the doctors to revive her..Prem is totally shattered with what the nurse said and just falls on his knees outside the tent..his parents run to him and tell him not to lose hope..

Gay3:Beta himmat mat haaro..uss bhayanak toofan se guzar kar Heer tumhe mili hai..woh tumhe yunhi chodkar nahi jaayegi..hum allah ke darbar mein hai..woh Heer ko hum sub se door nahi hone dega..

Lalit:Prem..tumhari ma teek keh rahi hai..uto yahan se..mujhe yakeen hai ki Heer waapas aayegi zaroor aayegi..abhi toh use mujhe maaf karna hai..humare saath zindagi bitani hai beta..woh humein chodkar nahi jaayegi..

Prem:Bauji..mujhe samaj mein nahi aa raha hai ki mein kya karu..he cries his heart out to his mom and dad..who r helplessly watching their child go through so much and that they can't do anything..

Finally Meher..Nihaal and Biji come to the medical tent where Prem and family r..and Lalit is glad to see Meher there..Meher runs to Prem and asks him about Heer..who doesn't speak anything..Preet comes from behind and pats her shoulder..and she grabs him by his t-shirt and asks Preet what's wrong..why is everyone crying..where is her sister..Preet takes Meher from there to a nearby bench and tells her the whole story..she is totally lost..all her moments with her loving sister is coming in front of her eyes..she remembers her parents and starts to cryout loud..and hugs Preet..Preet in return pats her shoulder and tells her not to lose hope..

Nurses and doctors r running here and there around Heer..checking her every second and figuring out what to do..she is on oxygen mask..Prem has not even flickered his eye lids for a second and is waiting for response from the doctors..the monitor starts beeping..doctors r administring medicines to Heer..one of the doctors come out and tell Prem and family that..here it is difficult to treat Heer..it's better if she is taken to a bigger hospital and that they've called for an ambulance and they'll send her to a different hospital..everything is ready..all the gang go to the hospital..leaving Prem with Heer in the ambulance..

Prem finally gets to see Heer after couple of hours and can't take his eyes off her..he gets into the ambulance with her holding her hands..while the ambulance drives off to the hospital..all the while flashbacks of him and Heer r coming infront of his eyes..their first meeting..their first hug and so on and so forth..and in his mind he thinks..Mein tumhe kuch nahi hone doonga..aur khabardaar jo tumne mujhe chod kar jaane ki koshish bhi ki toh..ab jab sab kuch teek ho raha hai..tum mujhe chodkar nahi jaa sakti..samjhi tum..abhi toh hamari zindagi shuru hui hai..ab mein tumhe kuch nahi hone doonga..chaahe iskeliye mujhe kuch bhi karna pade kuch bhi..
All reach hospital..and Heer is taken to ICU..doctors to Prem
Doc:dekhiye hum hamari taraf se poori poori koshish kar rahen hai..aap andar nahi aa sakte..hum in between nurse ko bhej kar aapko unki condition bataate rahenge..
Prem:par doctor usse kuch nahi hona chaahiye..woh meri zindagi hai..pls usse kuch mat hone deejiye..pls

Doc:aap himmat mat haariye..hum poori koshish karenge..
Prem goes to nearby idol and sits there with his hand on his forhead all tired and blank expression..the gang(Prem's family) comes to him and give him hope.Meher is all sad and crying profusely..where Preet is trying his best to calm her down.It's almost early morning and still no news of Heer.Later around sometime a nurse comes to Prem and tells him that ur wife is stable..and her heartbeat is normal..and that later the doctor will come and give him the details..Prem's mellowed face glows and he gives a radiant smile..and bows to the idol next to him..he has this amazing confidence in his face which everyone can make out..he tells his father

Prem:dekha bauji baghwan hain..unko humari baat maan ni hi padi..ab Heer bilkul teek ho jaayegi..
Doc:Mr.Prem..aapki wife ab bilkul teek hai..koi pareshaani waali baat nahi..haan lekin unhe hosh aane mein abhi kuch ghante laagenge..lekin sirf ek person jaa sakta hai andar unhe dekhne..so pls keep it in mind..

Prem:thank u so much doctor..aap nahi jaante ki aap ne hume kitni badi kushi dee hai..thank u so much again

Lalit:Prem..beta jao andar aur sambhalo apne Heer ko..
Prem goes inside with all smiles and he is so happy..he goes to Heer who seems to be sleeping soundly..with full peace..he caresses her hair and few strands of hair has come in front of her eyes..so he slowly puts those strand behind her ears..and gives her a kiss on her forhead..with his tears rolling down..he whispers into her ears..thank u Heer..thank u..mere liye waapas aane ke liye..he sits back on his chair..holding her hands..and tells her that today..he has got another birth..if anything had happened to her then he would have been living dead..he gently strokes his hands on her palm and cheeks and is content to see his life infront of him..

outside..Lalit comes to Meher who is still crying on Preet's shoulder..and pats her head..and asks her..

Lalit:beta..Meher..
M(Meher):looks shocked as he took her name..
L(Lalit):beta humse tumne is baat ko kyun chupaaya ki tum balraaj ke betiyaan ho
M:chaachu..woh chaachu..
L:haan bolo..daro mat..mein hoon yahan tum dono ka khayal rakhne ke liye..
M:chaachu woh Daljeet chaachi ne..
L:samajh gaya beta samajh gaya..tum daro mat..ab mujhe sab saaf saaf samajh mein aa raha hai ki kya hua hai..lekin ab mein bataaunga key aage kya hoga..he has this determined look on his face..he says..ek baar..bas ek baar Heer ko poori tarah se teek hone do..tab dekhenge..

Inside the ICU..monitors r beeping..Prem has not taken his eyes off of her..and still stroking her hand..it's been hours now and slowly Prem feels Heer's hand moving..he is full kush and immediately goes out to call the doctor..doc comes in and the typical..doc patient scene..then he tells Prem that everything is fine and that she'll be shifted to another normal room..and Prem comes out to give this news to everyone..and gets back in..Heer is awake..still weak though..she musters her strength and ..

H(Heer):Bauji..Bauji kaise hain?
P(Prem):shh..tum kuch mat bolo..abhi tumhe aaraam ki zaaroorat hai..he keeps his hand on her mouth gently to stop her from talking..
H:removes his hand from her mouth..holds his hand with her trembling hands..and asks him again..Bauji kaise hain Prem..
P:knowing that she is not going to budge..woh bilkul teek hai..unhone bataaya mujhe ki tum kis tarah se unhe bachaya..thanks..
H:ab bhi naaraaz hai woh humse?
P:nahi bilkul bhi nahi..balki sab tumhara intezaar kar rahe hain baahar..khaskar bauji..unhe pata chal gaya hai ki tum Heer ho..unki Balraj ki Heer..
H:haan..sorry Prem..mein tumhe yeh bataana chahthi thi par..waqt nahi mila..
P:woh sab chodo..tum teek ho..humare liye yehi khaafi hai..

Preet to Meher..ab toh rona band karo Heer bhaabhi teek hain..ab tum unhe jaldi hi dekh sakti ho..yeh dekho..mera saara t shirt kharaab kar diya..Meher..she looks lil angry because he is trying to crack jokes in the hospital..he knows her anger and holds his ears and gives a naughty smile..

now Heer has been shifted to a regular room..everyone have gathered around her..asking how she is and how she is feeling..but she is searching for one person..Prem's father..she asks gay3 where Lalit is..and in reply gay3 says that he is very embaressed that he mistook u and humiliated u..

H:arre maa pls unhe andar bulaayiye..
L:mein yahin hoon beta..pls mujhe maaf kardo..mein is des mein aaya tha tumhe bahu banaakar le jaane keliye..lekin mujhse itni badi galti..galti nahin gunaah hogaya..pls mujhe maaf kardo..
H:bauji..aap mere bauji samaan hai..aapne jo bhi kuch kiya..woh apne bete ke liye kiya..mein aap se bilkul bhi naaraaz nahi hoon..
L:dekha gay3 yeh hai meri balraaj ki parwarish..jis pe mein naaz karta hoon..Prem..Prem kahan hai
P:mein yahan hoon bauji..comes a voice from behind..
L:takes Prem's hand and puts it in Heer's hand..and says..woh mein hi tha jo tum dono ko juda karna chahtaa tha..iske liye mein bahut sharminda hoon..magar ab tum dono ko koi chudaa nahi kar sakta hai..yeh mera vaada hai..

Prem and Heer share a cute smile together..it's night and only one person can stay behind for the patient..so Lalit tells Prem to be there for Heer while they go and stay in hotel..

L:Prem..tum Heer ke saath yahan rukh jaao..hum sab yahin ek hotel mein rukh jaate hain..aur subah aajaayenge..
P:ji bauji aap jaayiye..mein hoon yahan Heer ke liye..

All leave..leaving Heer and Prem alone..now they can talk their heart out..
P:tumhe kuch chaahiye?
H:thoda sa paani..
P:yeh lo..helps her to drink it..wipes her lips with a cloth..
H:faint smile appears on her face..aaj mein bahut kush hoon tumhare liye..
P:haan mein bhi..aaj hume sabki manzorri bhi milgayi hai..warna tum toh mujhe chodkar jaane ki poori tayyari kar chuki thi..tears well up in his eyes..
H:yahan aao..mere paas baito..he comes near her and sits next to her..she wipes his tears..and says..mein tumse bahut pyaar karti hoon..mein tumhare begair jee nahi sakti..
P:mein bhi..jab maine tumhe paani mein dekha toh..meri jaan nikal gayi thi..tum mujhe yahan mere parivaar ke logon se milane ley aayithi na?
H:she nods her head in agreement..
P:lekin tum yeh kaise bhool gayi ki mein tumhare bina kuch bhi nahi hoon..mein tumhare begair mar jaaoonga..
H:aisa mat kaho..dekho ab toh sab kuch teek bhi hogaya..sach kehte hain allah ke darbar se koi khaali haath waapas nahi gaya hai..
P:haan sach kehti ho..mein tum se kuch maangu?
H:maangne waali kya baat hai..bataao..
P:mujhe gale laagaaogi..pls?
H:she says nothing but comes forward from her leaning position on bed to sitting position and hugs him tightly..
P:thanks..
H:kisliye?
P:mere liye waapas aane ke liye..he places a gentle kiss on her forehead..😳
oops I'm sooooo sorry it had to be soooo long..I know it is loong..but bear with it..hope those who read it..liked it..and pls put in ur comments.⭐️!!

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~Rinki~ thumbnail
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Posted: 17 years ago
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awww that was totally adorable 👏 tat was really good...plz cont i wanna kno wat lalit does to dj hmm hope he throws her out!!
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Posted: 17 years ago
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@Rinki..thank u so much for appreciating it dear..will try to continue it..
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: ranrags

@Rinki..thank u so much for appreciating it dear..will try to continue it..

no prob...have to appericiate anything thats good...rite? :]
i hope u do continue it!!
Posted: 17 years ago
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was veryy cute and adorable......i have to go otherwise i would have written a longer comment.....do continue soon....this weekend is soo long!!
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Posted: 17 years ago
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@Rinki..thank u again..

@Shabo..thank u dear..will try to continue..
I've a 2yr old daughter..who can be a handful..so will try to continue..when she's sleeping🥱or watching cartoon**🤓..
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Posted: 17 years ago
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very good.. man its truly romantic!!thanks a ton!
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Posted: 17 years ago
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very nice its very good hopw that u can continue the wonderful part
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Posted: 17 years ago
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hi di, i luved ur ff.its so gud that i fel its very short.thanks for writing it for us.thank u soo mich.
luv iqra
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Posted: 17 years ago
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wow!!!!.....u shuld start an FF n a bigggg one!!!...u really r a gud writer!!
loved it....👏👏👏

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