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Posted: 17 years ago
#91

Originally posted by: j&b84

Hi yaar

wht to comment on jigs.. as alway no words for her. but i just feel tt jigs also like bani but she is just nt happy tt bani got married to jai.. any way yar can u pls make jai talk mean really talk with bani,i just hope everything work out fine..

have a gr8 weekend 😊


thanks...

Originally posted by: ejazanita

wow!!!!!!!!!!!!! great part

loved it totally......................great written.................👏 thanks

bt why was he doin this now if he feels that he wasnt guily wn he made love to her...............he is such a selfish person...........i had ever see.............coz even if that nite Bani was in a happy mood tn instead of acceptin her he hurt her n shout for tony n didnt talk to her.............

hey plzzzzzzzz solve the things between them............. hahaha 😆

bring JB closer n make her realise that he loves her..............

plzzzzz update soon

bye n tc

btw irts Nikita n nt Nihita😆😆 thanks... i had confusion while typing... 😛

Ejzoo (Nikita)



Originally posted by: coolgurl_2005

Hey Abhilasha,please do forgive me for being able to comment earlier,just been really busy with college and thank you for the pm. 😊 its okay... no problem 😉

just caught with all 4 parts,just simply amazing.I really have no words to describe how well you write.you have penned down both Jai and Bani's point of view so beautifully.I really like how with each update a new layer of the story comes out,very well written.looking forward to the next part. 👏
thanks... hope u are liking it... 😳

preet 😳



Originally posted by: btkr

Man, you are as quick an updater as our K!! who is that??? 👏 So Jigs doesn't hate Bani, is just confused. Don't blame her, Jai is totally confused too...sheesh, talk to the girl, will u?! well...let me give u a clue.... or ask u a question... if he talks will she...now???



Thanks every one...
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Posted: 17 years ago
#92
Here goes the next part: I know its small... but i need it before narrating Bani's side of the story...

Previous Parts:
Part 1 - Page 1; Part 2 - Page 3; Part 3 - Page 6; Part 4 - Page 9;

Part 5

Bani sat on the floor shattered at the sudden discovery. Tears were flowing continuously. Jai… Jai did not marry her willingly… He married her for Krishna aunty… Why didn't her tell me before? What is the need for marrying her? Did Krishna aunty force him? Why did Krishna aunty do that? But… but she was not even alive at that time. Then how? If Krishna aunty was not there… then… did she force him to promise? Is that the reason he waited for her to come to age? Is that the reason, he proposed her after seeing her the first time after seven years? But what is the reason for sacrificing his life, just for the promise (if it is)? He could have convinced his mother. Krishna aunty doesn't force any one… Does she? Did she? Is that why, Jai is avoiding her? Is that why, he doesn't even want to see her? Is that why, he doesn't even want to speak about her? Is she that bad? She thought he liked her? Isn't it? But is that so? Is she not even desirable? Does he hate her, that much? Was his life spoilt because of marrying her? May be, Yes… Jai could have married any one. But… he married her… She always longed to be with him and his family… Even Krishna aunty has teased her… A slight smile came on her lips drenched in tears.

"Ek na ek din tumhein shaadi karke jaana toh padega naa?" Krishna asked.

"Aunty, mujhe kahin nahin jaana." 12 year old Bani said firmly. "Main shaadi nahin karoongi. Main yahin rahoongi." She said in a firm voice innocently and lied down on her lap.

"Toh ek kaam karte hai. Mere hi ghar aa jaana. Jis ghar mein bhi tu jaayegi roshan hoga woh ghar. Humare ghar aa jaana shaadi karke. Main khayal rakoongi tumhari hamesha ki tarah." She pinched her cheeks.

She thought of the fate. A sarcastic smile came on her lips. She came to the same house. But the person who longed was no more and she was alone now... And her words were proved incorrect. She became the darkness in the house. And she spoilt her son's life…

At that time, she heard a mild knock at the door. Before, she could answer, the door was opened. She saw Tony entering with a tray in his hands.

"Ma'am, aapka breakfast?!" Tony said.

"Uh!!!" This was the only thing Bani managed to say.

"Kha lijiye. Aapne kal raat dinner bhi nahin kiya." He said patiently.

Bani slightly nodded her head.

Tony excused himself and left the place.

Bani kept on staring into empty place in searching of something. She then blinked and looked at the tray. She remembered Jigyasa's words Woh humare saath nahin khati, bas. Lekin zaroor kha leti hai… She shook her thoughts and extended her hand to the tray. She took a toast and had a bite. She sent them into the stomach by sipping tea. She ate half bowl of 'poha' and kept the remaining in the tray itself. She called Tony by intercom and asked him to fetch the tray.

After the tray was fetched, she went to the balcony and fetched the incomplete sketch from the folding. She brought it into the room. She opened the cupboard and fetched the folder from the lower shelf. She closed the cupboard and sat on the floor. She looked at the incomplete sketch. It was like her incomplete life. She looked at the sketch. She hadn't finished the girl alone. What a coincidence!!! Everything is perfect except the girl as if it was meant to be. Bani let out a sad laugh. As Bani looked at the picture, she asked herself whether she had anything to ask the shooting star if it falls. She did not have anything to ask, that was the truth. She spent the next one hour to finish the sketch. But she couldn't. So she stopped and looked at it.

At that time, Tony came and called her for lunch. She thought for a while and declined politely that she was not hungry because of the late breakfast.

After Tony left, Bani lied down on the floor with the sketch beside her and her thoughts reeling back to the past wondering what went wrong and when it went wrong…

Thanks ppl 😳
Edited by abhilashasharma - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
#93
Hi abhi,
Really feel bad for Bani, and there is no communication btw her and jai or the family, things are really in bad shape she really misses Krishna, doesnt she? 😭
I hope Jai comes soon to talk to Bani 😕
it was a small update, do update longer parts, please
cont soon 😃
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Great update. I feel really bad for Bani. She feels so lonely in a house full of people who only care about themselves. I really hope there would be some kind of communication between her and Jai because it's killing both of them. They both have so much love for each other, yet there is no communication at all!

Update soon and get rid of this misunderstanding and bring JB together!

Awesome update and thank you for the PM!

Anam
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Oh my, so many negative thoughts are spinning in her head. I feel so bad for Bani, poor girl is so lonely and upset. So Jai proposed to her after 7 years of not seeing her?-- I really want to know the reason behind this. 😕 I'm sure Krishna does hold a huge part in that. She seemd like a wonderful kind person.I love reading the flashbacks. 😃 Please continue soon! This FF is awesome! 😳

Love,
Dil

p.s. Thanks for the PM!😃
Edited by Indian_Goddess - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
#96
oh God
tooo many things to think 😕
my head would blast if i think like that
gr88 part 👏
plz cont soon
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Nice update!! But too many mysteries... hope you tell us about them soon..
Waiting eagerly for the next update
Regards.
Sangeeta
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Posted: 17 years ago
#98
Very nice update. I really love the flashbacks, Bani had a wonderful relationship with Krishna. I feel bad for her, she seems so alone and lost. Hope things get better for jb soon.

Please continue soon.

BD
Edited by bdev - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Hi Abhilasha,

I read both parts 4 and 5. Awesome update. Really liked them. Poor Bani, suffering in silence - and I am not sure I like Jai too much, he can't just make love to her and ignore her - it does seem he cares for her and he doesn't have qualms about physical relationship with her, so may be some communication the morning after would have been nice.

Also Bani should open up and spill her guts about her insecurities.

Why did they even marry each other? 😕 😕 Was it because some circumstance forced them? 😕

ANyways, the story is intriguing...
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Posted: 17 years ago
Hi Abhi wonderful part again.....felt so bad for Bani....she shared a very good relationship with Krishan...she is in dilemma right now about Jai's behaviour towards her and all the marriage things....would love to read more flashbacks and JB's POV....hope you update soon 👏

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