FF- Tere Naam Last Part pg. 15 - Page 5

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Posted: 17 years ago
#41
sry guys ill try to make them more longer. anyways herez part 6 (in my opinion the best part yet)

PART 6-

Recap- Bani gives Jai his tie and they both realize how much they miss each other.

Meera: "Aap ne Jai ko batadiya ki mein busy thi?"
Bani: "Ji maine batadiya."
Meera: "Tekh hai, aab chaa peelo."
Bani: "Ji"
Jai: "Meera mujhe meri chaa dho."
Meera: "Ji"
Jai comes and sits besides Bani. Bani gets scared.
Jai: "Toh, kaisi hai Bani Rani?"
Bani looks away.
Jai: "Arre tum tho dargayi. It's okay, don't get worried. By the way tum kaal ko office oungi right?"
Bani: "Ji"
Jai: "Good"
Meera enters with Jai's tea.
Jai: "Thank you my darling wife."
The color drains from Bani's face. Meera is startled.
Meera: "Um… your welcome?"
Jai smiles and starts drinking his tea.
Jai: "Arre Maithali Ji, aap chai peongi nahi?"
Bani: "Ji"
Bani takes a sip of her tea. Just then Ganga comes in with Vidya limping behind her.
Ganga: "Mama."
Bani puts her cup of tea down and motions to Ganga to come sit next to her. Ganga sits between Jai and Bani.
Bani: "What are you playing?"
Ganga: "Nothing. I'm bored. We can't think of anything to play."
Bani: "Aap jacks kehdlo."
Ganga and Vidya: "Jacks?"
Meera: "Haa is tarah Vidya ko bhi jada hilna nhi hoga. Vaise bhi usko chhot ayi hai."
Ganga: "Tekh hai. Mein jacks lekhar aati hu. Vidya kaha hai jacks?"
Meera: "Tum dono yaha ruko mein lekhar aati hoon."
Ganga: "Thank you auntie."
Ganga smiles and starts talking to Jai.
Ganga: "Hi Khudoos Uncle. How are you doing today?"
Jai: "Fine, thank you."
Bani watches the two talk and realizes how much they look alike.
Bani: "Same eyes, same smile, same nose."
Ganga turns around.
Ganga: "Kya kaha aapne?"
Bani realizes what she said and quiets down.
Bani: "… Kuch nahi beta."
Jai meanwhile heard Bani crystal clear and starts to wonder about Ganga.
Jai: "Ganga, kya meri beti hai?"
Ganga turns around to Jai.
Ganga: "Aabh apne kya kaha?"
Jai: "Kuch…nahin."
Ganga: "God, mujhe lagda ki meri hearing ko kuch hogaya hai. Mujhe teekh kardo jaldi."
Meera comes back with the jacks. She hands them over to Ganga. Ganga and Vidya start playing with them but neither one of them are able to catch the ball along with the jacks.
Ganga: "Mama aap bhi kehlo. Mujhe kelhna nahi aata."
Vidya: "Haa auntie. Please."
Bani joins the two and starts to teach them how to play. She catches the ball and all the jacks. Jai observes the three and a smile slowly starts to form on his face.
Ganga: "Wow, mama aap tho bahoth achi tarah jacks kehd leti hai."
Jai: "Krishna bhi bahoth achi tarah kelti thi jacks ke saath."
Jai realizes what he said and he becomes sad. Bani's eyes get teary and she excuses herself to go to the bathroom.
Meera: "Maithali Ji ko kya hogaya?"
Jai leaves for his room. He passes by Bani who had left the bathroom door open a crack. He saw her leaning over the sink sobbing like crazy."
Jai: "…Bani."
Jai slowly approaches Bani and wipes her tears away. Bani buries her faces into Jai's chest. They stand there, in each other's arms, comforting each other with tears running down both of their faces. No words are spoken, they don't need them to understand each other. Jai realizes what he's doing and slowly backs away.

o yea plz do reply lol. ur replies inspire me. idk how but it feels nice to noe that someone actually likes what i write. i honestly think it sux 😆
Edited by aangelis - 17 years ago
Niroo thumbnail
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Posted: 17 years ago
#42
aww finally.
they both.. are together.
well not together.. together.
but.. their.. pain.. always..gets them together..
continue soon please
moonlitnight thumbnail
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Posted: 17 years ago
#43
awww so sweet 😳
the last part's soo emotional 😭
nice part
plz cont soon
momtajbegum1 thumbnail
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Posted: 17 years ago
#44
awwww that was a brilliant part loved jai and bani's part especially the end part 😳

plz cont


Taj
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Posted: 17 years ago
#45
Great part.
liked it.
so Jai heard Bani comparing Ganga and Jai's features...hope he will start to see the point.
awww...last para...but all 😭 😭
plz bring JB close soon
plz cont. soon
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Posted: 17 years ago
#46

awwww that was soo sweet!! like i wish that happen in KS i havent seen JB hug in AGES!! but ya hopefully we'll see it soon..wish balaji read some of these fanfics there like 10times better than wat they make lolz look forward to next update:D

cheers
isha
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Posted: 17 years ago
#47
hey yaar...i just read all the parts and loved them...jai and bani consoling each other about krishna...aww...but haila...no one remembers atharva...poor baby...cant wait for next update
JAZ
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Posted: 17 years ago
#48
haila

sux ki bachi...

i love this!!!! this is good..

but yaar longer parts please!!!!!!!

plz plz plz!! 😳

dont u luv me? 😭
amiee thumbnail
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Posted: 17 years ago
#49
hey i like what u write and never say that you suk because u dont u r a wonderful writer
pls cont soon.......
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Posted: 17 years ago
#50
Hey just read all the parts and I must say its awesome..

Loved the way you are taking the current track..this is what we all want to see 😕 😕

Pls do continue and your writing is really good. 👏 👏 👏

Rama

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