FF:AT FIRST GLANCE- The End on pg 88 - Page 2

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Posted: 18 years ago
#11
A big cuddlyy huggy 🤗 forr u to strat another fanifc !!
the first part was absolutely amazingg !!!! u r just simplyy fab at writingg !! i am soo amazedd !! nad left gaping ta the screen !!! simplyy woowoww !!!!
i cud soo imagine jai ..with those jeans and tee !! and bani gettin all attracted towards him !! awww ! 😉
thnksxxx hun !!!
plzz cont soon ! will be waitingg eagerlyy !!!
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Posted: 18 years ago
#12
yay another one!!
ur gonna spoil me one day!
Ohh a rugged jai with his intense stares 😳
i can just imagine him standing there uff, ok ive stopped drooling now! 😆
brilliant start plz continue soon

Luv Taz
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Posted: 18 years ago
#13

Originally posted by: ziddi

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Very interesting, attraction and love at first glance
Bani owns a small store in Mt. Abu, and she rides a horse different and interesting plz write soon

thanks u so much ziddi, what an encouraging first reply to receive. I will definitely continue soon.

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: sweetu144

Heya,
Wow....nice and interesting start😳.
I love the stares...nice and intense😳...imagined it all!
HMMM...so does this mean that Jai has already taken an interst in Bani...so has he seen her somewhere before? Gosh...i am so happy that you started a new ff, was waiting...for a long time! I love the way your words flow...really capture a reader and hold them...until the very last...
Truly to me your an author😉...who gives her readers what they want!
Amazing... Am so happy you decided to write another ff😆😆😛!
Continue soon...will be wiating impatiently!
Luv ya ......Sweetu
P.S. Funny....just sent you a pm...and mentioned something about "you and a ff"😆😉 BTW the wait was worth it...thank you🤗

hey sweetu,

thank u dear, am glad u liked the start, that is half the battle won.

well jai bani and no stares involved, nahin yaar, not possible, their aankh micholi is what all of us adore, so i am making the most of it.

started the ff for u only na, just hope u continue to enjoy it by the time i am through.

love...sabs

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Posted: 18 years ago
#15

Originally posted by: lonely14

You started another one!!!!! Just for that 🤗

Loved the first part!!!!! Amazing, liked the first attraction between them. hahah i can so imagine him wearing blue t-shirt and jeans. lol.

Shina

hey shina, if i knew i was gonna get so many hugs, i would have written 10 ff's by now. thanks sweetheart, ur butterfly farm was long overdue, thanks for waiting so patiently. i just wanted a casual jai for a change, no suit boot ....... i can see the twinkle in ur eyes, am glad u r enjoying it.

this is for u

love...sabs


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Posted: 18 years ago
#16
wow hun!! that was AMAZING 👏 👏 it felt like i was reading a real novel 😳

please please write long parts unlike some people *cough* cordy *cough* lol 😆
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Posted: 18 years ago
#17

Chapter 2

Reaching into the back pocket of her jeans, Bani pulled out a hastily written list and scanned it. She needed to talk to Raashi first, and make sure everything they had ordered had arrived. With what theyd paid, there certainly should be no problems. Still why take chances.

"You dropped this" said the same husky voice again.

Bani turned and stared into those intense brown eyes. He held up a slim gold chain, and her sapphire pendant winked in the light.

"I found it on the steps," Jai said. "Want it back?"

"Please." She held out her hand, expecting him to drop it into her palm.

"Turn around, and Ill fasten it on you," he said (studman doesnt waste any time now does he).

"I dont think so" said Bani, actually please do, I would loooooooveeeeee that .... Bani thinking to herself.

But he had already stepped behind her. "Lift your hair," he said, reaching around her, and to her amazement, she did. She could feel his hot breath on her bare shoulder as he leaned down. He fastened the chain against her neck, his fingers brushing lightly against her sensitive skin. Startled, she sprang away, then stood looking at him, fingering the pendant.

"The sparkle in the sapphire matches your eyes," Jai said.

She turned and tried to walk away, but he met her stride as she headed toward the back of the store.

"Youre welcome," he said. "Glad to help" he chuckled under his breath.

"Well, really," said Bani. "Thats a sorry pick up line mister."

"Did you think I was trying to pick you up?" Jai asked. The amused grin was back. "I wasnt, sorry to disappoint you though."

"Hmmm" was all Bani could manage.

"Would you like me to pick you up?" Jai asked enthusiastically with a smirk on his face.

"No" she said and turned the corner. Bani stopped for a few seconds, watching him from the corner of her eye. She picked up a jar of spaghetti sauce and pretended to examine the label.

"Wow, where did you learn how to read a jar upside down, could you teach me too" teased Jai.

Bani fumed on realising her folly. She kept the jar back and gave Jai a nice hard stare from head to toe and suddenly she did not mind his attitude anymore.

"Appraisal number 2 ........ god it's hot in here, isn't it Bani, do you feel the heat too" said Jai.

"What aaa........ppraisal number 2, what are you talking about" enquired Bani, but she knew what he was referring to.

"I thought you were planning to pick me up, outside the store," he said. "Not that I would have minded. I quiet enjoyed the appraisal you were carrying out on me" continued Jai.

Bani continued walking, but her pulse quickened at the suggestion. She cast him a sidelong glance, just to see if he was teasing her. Their eyes met and she felt herself blush. Dhak Dhak karne laga, oh mera jiya jalne laga .........

"Why dont I make things simple for you, and ask for your number?" Jai said. "I plan to be in town for a few days, anyway. We can start with dinner unless you have something else in mind."

"Absolutely not" retaliated Bani.

You mean yes actually, but choose to say no. Ok I get it, I know that is the in-thing now. Im good at breaking codes. So, Ms. Absolutely not, where would you not like to go asked Jai trying hard to control his laughter.

"Sometimes you put walls up not to keep people out, but to see who cares enough to break them down."

??????

Edited by sabsj - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
#18
wow!! that was AMAZING 👏 👏 👏 love jai 😳 so bold 😉
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: babethatsme

amazing...this is the frst time ive read somethin written by u and probably the 3rd ff im readin...
mind blowing...ur truly a gifted writer and ur writing has great depth in it...

👏 👏 👏 regards shruti

hi shruti,

thanks dear for the lovely compliments ........ i hope i manage to live upto to ur expectations.

love...sabs

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Posted: 18 years ago
#20

Originally posted by: sxcdevil

that was amazing pls continue! 👏

thank u, have posted chapter 2, please enjoy.

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