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Okay.. first of all.. I want to say my idol on Fanfic is SaReGaMaPa fan and she has given me the courage through her wonderful fanfic writing to put up mine. This one is for you SaReGaMaPa... your the best writer in the world! I am still nervous about this,but I have always wondered what it would be like for Bani and Jai if they loved each other, but then Pia came back into their lives. So here it goes with the beginning

Pushkar's house

Pia is pacing around her bedroom, when Pushkar walks in … she looks @ him with that glare she gives him every now and then and then looks away

Pushkar: Kya hua Pia?

Pia: Pushkar mujhey tum sai koi baat karni hai

Pushkar: Bolo

Pia: Pushkar… tum jaantey hoa ke I love you, aur tumarey liye main iss ghar main rehey rahi hoon, lekin…

Pushkar: Lekin kya Pia?

Pia: Lekin Pushkar, main abh iss ghar main nahi rehey sakthi.

Pushkar: (astonished) Lekin kyon?

Pia: Pushkar.. Dekho main ek modern laadkhi hoon, aur main jaisi bhi hoon vaisi hi rahongi.

Pushkar: Lekin hua kya hai Pia?

Pia: I just can't take it anymore Pushkar. I mean haan mushy kahna nahi bana atha, main dresses penthi hoon, and haan main apni night gown ghar main ghoom ke firthi hoon, lekin iska mathlab nahi hai ke koi bhi aakey mujhsey kuch bhi ke sakey. Tumey malum hai Pushkar jab bhi tum kaam par jaatey hoa. Bhabhi toh koi nah koi bhana doondthi hain thaana marney ke liye. Aur bhaiya… voh toh vaisey bhi meri shakal thak nahi dekhna chahtha.

Pushkar: Lekin Pia..

Pia: Pushkar tum nahi jaantey main kithni akeli hoon iss ghar main. Pehli baar lagh raha hai ke ithney logon ke beech main ke main akeli hoon.

Pushkar: Main hoon nah Pia

Pia: Nahi Pushkar… tum nahi hoa… tum yeh toh job par hamesha hotey hoa. Aur ghar aakhey soh jaatey hoa. Tum kya jaantey hoa iss ghar main hota hai. Bhabhi toh bhabhi hain lekin mumma… voh bhi unkhi taran yeh na pehno voh nah pehno.. Har baat ki pahbandhi lagathi hain.

Pushkar: PIA! Dekho tum bhabhi se problem hain fine, bhaiya se FINE, lekin ma ko kuch muth kehna, VOH TOH SIRF TUMEY SAMJHANEY KI KOSHISH KAR…

Pia: I don't care Pushkar! Main yahan tumarey liye rehey rahi hoon and that's it ! Lekin abh… main yahan nahi rehey sakthi. Jahan pe meri hamesha besthi hoti hain main nahi rehey sakthi Pushkar!

Pushkar: Phir kahan jaogi?

Pia: Pushkar, kyon nah hum ek alag ghar le lein?

Puskhar: Pia tum jaanthi ho.. Main apni family se alag nahi hoa saktha I love them.

Pia: mujsey bhi zaada?

Puskhar: Piaa

Pia: nahi pushkar tumey aaj chuna hoga… yeh main.. Yeh phir tumari family

Pushkar:are you serious?

Pia: haan

Pushkar: teek hai.. Tumey joh karna hai karo, but ek baat keh detha hoon Pia MAIN APNI FAMILY KO NAHI CHOR SAKTHA

Pia: teek hai… phir main jah rahi hoon

Pia is getting her clothes out of her closet and dumping them in her suitcase

Pia: Apni Bani didi ke paas, voh hamesha mera saath deengi aur pyaar bhi karengi, voh bhi tumsey zaada!

Pushkar: Teek hai Pia, lekin yeh hamesha yaad rakhna, ke I love you, lekin mera parivaar bhi mere liye valuable bhi hai, aur unkho main kisi haal main bhi nahi chor saktha.

Meanwhile at the Walia Mansion we see Jai and Bani in their room. As always Bani is getting ready in front of the mirror, fresh out of the shower her hair is wet and hang around her face (Wearing a beautiful maroon salwaar kameez) and Jai is trying to tie his tie (In this fanfic they both are madly in love already yet still shy with each other )

Bani looks over and sees Jai struggling with his tie and tries to hide her smile while she is walking over to help him.

As Mr. Walia is looking down and struggling with his tie Bani says..

Bani: Mr. Walia

Jai: hmmm.. (still looking down)

Bani: Um… Mr. Walia

Jai: Kya hai bani (finally looking up)

Jai's mouth opens up like always (awww what a cutie)

Bani: Mr. Walia…

Jai: mouth still open

Bani: Mr. Walia…

Jai: Oh.. Eh hem…haan.. Kya baat hai Bani

Bani: Kya main aapki madath kar sakthi hoon?

Jai: Kya?

Bani: Voh mainey dekha aaj aapko tori si mushily hoa rahi hai tie bandhney main so mainey soocha kyon nah help kar doon (bani smiles at him)

Jai: Um.. Sure why not.

Bani comes closer to help him tie his tie

Jai: Voh nah mere sar main tora sah dard tha aaj iss liye neechey clearly aaj dekhayi nahi deh raha tha.. Toh tie bandh ne main tori si mushily hoa rahi thi .. Varna main kudh bhi kar saktha hoon .. Aur..

Bani: Ho gaya

Bani looks at Jai and Jai looks at her.. Jai pulls a strand of wet hair sticking to her face and then They just stare at each other for a few minutes…

Jai: (whispering) Bani

Bani: Ji (kinda nervous)

Jai: (still whispering) Main tumsey kuch kehna chatha tha

Bani: Ji (still nervous)

Suddenly the door bursts open to their room both Bani and Jai jump away from each other, and Jigaysa comes in

Jiggy: Jai bhaiya! Aapko malum kaun aaya hai neechey?!!

Jai: (irritated look on his face) Kaun Jigayasa?

Jiggy: Actually bhaiya aap neechey aakhey kudh dekh lijeye.

Jai: Oh for god's sake Jigaysa… fine!

Everyone going downstairs, Bani is behind Jai. Once they reach the bottom at the front entrance, Jai sees Pia. Jai is dumbfounded, while Bani looks really scared about what Jai is going to do.

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Eagerly waiting for the next episode ...

just awesome!!! cant wait for the next part! i was laughing when i read about the "mouth open" part! could clearly imagine it 😆 please continue.

just like your idol, u are doing a great job too! 👏 👏

😳 Impatiently waiting for next...that was great 👏.

Wow praina!! that was awesome!! 👏

wow!!! tht was great...plzzz continue soon 👏 👏

THAT WAS A GREAT START, HOPE TO READ TE NEXT BIT SOON

awww! dat soo cool..plz continue soon 👏

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this was realli gud!!!
pls continue soon!!
luv sweetu 😃

awesome 😊
plz continue it