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Posted: 19 years ago
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Na reth ki lakeer
Jo mite...
Hawaa ke jhonke se..

Na saagar ki leher
Jo mite...
Takaraakar kinaare se...

Na baarish ki boond..
Jo kho jaye...
Baraste saawan ki ..
Ladi mein....

Na aankhon ka sapna...
Jo ojhal ho jaye...
Subah ki kirnon mein...

Na koi khusboo
Jo banke reh jaaye...
Pal bhar ka ehsaas...

Rooh mein..
Bas jaaye...
Jo, wo ehsaas..
Ho tum....

Samaa gaayi...
Mujhe mein...
Jo meri..
Pehchaan ban kar...
Meri wo parchaayi...
Ho Tum...

-Sareeta

For Shiv and Gauri, and particularly, how Gauri has become Shiv's identity... and he is yet to realize....

Dedication: Dedication for one of my dear friends on IF, Sana aka smartc. Her video mixes have been a point of identification for many of the verses I have penned and this particular one was inspired by the vid mix...she made for me on my request...

Hope you like it Sana.... 😊

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Posted: 19 years ago
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very very nice.ur shayaari is very nice,kash shiv is shayari ko sunke gauri ki importance samajetho bahuut accha hoga.
hope he relalises soon.
once again sareeta a big applause for ur shayaari 👏
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Posted: 19 years ago
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sareeta another perfect and great thought.. 😊

yeah gauri has become shiv's parchaayi ..

love this bit and its heart touching..

"Samaa gaayi...
Mujhe mein...
Jo meri..
Pechaan ban kar...
Meri wo parchaayi...
Ho Tum..."

yeah gauri has become shiv's identity..

par kya shiv iss baat ko kabhie pehechan payega ke woh guari ke bina adhoora hein...

woh do jism ek jaan hein and they complete each other....

just hope he realised it soon ...

sareeta great job as usual and in fact was missing your thought yesterday...

these are for you sareeta... 👏 👏 👏

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Posted: 19 years ago
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Originally posted by: sum2005

👏
very very nice.ur shayaari is very nice,kash shiv is shayari ko sunke gauri ki importance samajetho bahuut accha hoga.
hope he relalises soon.
once again sareeta a big applause for ur shayaari 👏

Awww, thank you sooooooooooo much!!! Gosh... I am soooo overwhelmed... didnt expect , you'd like it sooo much!!! Thank you!!! * bows to the applause*

I hope so too, ki Shiv realizes his love for Gauri... but I wouldnt want it to be drastic... but more subtle... and a gradual...way.... but I hope Ekta dosent put inane twists and drag it too much....😊

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Posted: 19 years ago
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that is a very sweet poem...
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Posted: 19 years ago
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Originally posted by: sareeta

Awww, thank you sooooooooooo much!!! Gosh... I am soooo overwhelmed... didnt expect , you'd like it sooo much!!! Thank you!!! * bows to the applause*

I hope so too, ki Shiv realizes his love for Gauri... but I wouldnt want it to be drastic... but more subtle... and a gradual...way.... but I hope Ekta dosent put inane twists and drag it too much....😊

very nice of u sareeta. i think it will take time to shiv to realise his feelings towards gauri.but with ippi around he cant confess his feeling towards gauri to himself also. ippi shiv ke peche padgayi.

Edited by sum2005 - 19 years ago
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Posted: 19 years ago
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Originally posted by: 3 angels

sareeta another perfect and great thought.. 😊

yeah gauri has become shiv's parchaayi ..

love this bit and its heart touching..

"Samaa gaayi...
Mujhe mein...
Jo meri..
Pechaan ban kar...
Meri wo parchaayi...
Ho Tum..."

yeah gauri has become shiv's identity..

par kya shiv iss baat ko kabhie pehechan payega ke woh guari ke bina adhoora hein...

woh do jism ek jaan hein and they complete each other....

just hope he realised it soon ...

sareeta great job as usual and in fact was missing your thought yesterday...

these are for you sareeta... 👏 👏 👏

Awww, Khyaateee, know what, the part you said, you liked in the verse, is the one , I penned first... and then went to on pen the thoughts that flowed ... after that... its my fav... as well... Am so happy you liked it...........😊

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Posted: 19 years ago
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Originally posted by: rsoharu

that is a very sweet poem...

Thank you soooooooooo much Rajni! Glad you liked it! 😊

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Posted: 19 years ago
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👏 👏 thank you sareeta ji, ap ki creativeness aur lafzo ko, hamara salaam, 😊 its beautiful, i read each line twice to make sure i got it all, hindi is a bit kachi! kachi-lol

Samaa gaayi...
Mujhe mein...
Jo meri..
Pechaan ban kar...
Meri wo parchaayi...
Ho Tum...

so true for shiv langur, he is so thick, his pehcan is gauri not that plastic ki guria ipshagun.

may u pen more....
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Posted: 19 years ago
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subhanAllah!!!!
dii first of all... i wud like to do this 👏
now....that was so so so soooooo beeeaaaaauuuutiiiifuuuul.....
is bar dil ko nahi...rooh ko chu gayi....mashaAllah....aap ka jawab nahi...hamesha yehi sab kehtii hu....par kya karu...aaap ki likkhi huyi khubsurat shabdon ko parhkar mujhse kuch likkha hi nahi jaata....kahi humse koi gustakhi na ho jaye 😳

luved this bit :

Na koi khusboo
Jo banke reh jaaye...
Pal bhar ka ehsaas...


Edited by nazrinkhan - 19 years ago

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