FF: Keeping the moon... END PART- Pg 77

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Saregama_fan

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Posted: 18 years ago

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Originally posted by: nazrinkhan
OMG OMG chandni ............u left me speachless........this is the best ff i hav ever read..........ur mindblowing sweety 👏 awww im in luv wid this ff......plz cont soon sweeety....i just cant wait........ 😳
but why did u hav to make tht saku bai soooo perfect n beautiful 😡 n wht else..... shez cuming out of his car..... 😡 ippi ki bachchi yahan bhi peecha nahi choregi...... 😡 hey im not mad at u itz just that i hate this charcter 😳
anyways hunny plz cont sooon 😃
just luv it 👏

😆😆😆...Saku bhai....😆😆 ...love that nick name, just love it....😆 ...ya she did make a quick entry and yes she is perfect...but perfect does not mean better 😉😆 ...thankyou sooooooo much for such wonderful comments....make my day...😃....

Originally posted by: JCluvs srk
hehehehehe.....this fic is too good! i cant wait 4 another shiv/gauri confrontation.

😳😳 ...am I glad you are enjoying the fan-fic, sorry but I won't be able to an update today, I am quiet busy...will try and get one in over the weekend tho...😊

Originally posted by: sun2005
nice episode 👏

thanks you....😃

Originally posted by: Iqbaladdict

that was amazing, u r superb, I loved the part him not to b able to find u, giggles all around, man u r great 😆

Thank you, glad to have made you laugh....😳😳😳

Originally posted by: heartbreakkid
ur mindblowing & ur ff is really funny, interesting,...
now i am also ur big fan dont forget me lol.
cont. soon...

😆...you are making me blush...😳😳😳 ...

Originally posted by: Jenna Dutt
Hillarious..... 😃
I am having a blast reading the updates, really well done Chandni...
Luved it, pls. continue soon.

Thank you sooooooooo much, your comments are really encouraging...😃😃

Originally posted by: jiya imdad
ur update was great 👏
i was laughing hard 😆 😆 😆 n what if my mother caught me surfing the net at 3:00am @ night
she'll really be 😡 @ me
just want to ask can u update daily?
continue soon 😃

Uh, oh that isn't good....don't want you to get into trouble cuz of me...😳😳😳 .... I will try and update as soon as possible, but everyday might not be possible b/c somedays I get really busy...😔 ...hope you understand...😊

Originally posted by: umz2k3
cont soon

alriteeee, will update asap...😊

Originally posted by: lil_desi_goddes
omgg.. i am soo silly not to find such a funnii and gr8 ff before!

i just read ur 3 parts and its mindblowing!!

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please do continue hunnii!!

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Awww, thank you sooooooooooo much ....will try and update soon as possible...😃😃😃

Originally posted by: yamulya1
chandni yet again u did it. i have a bad headache from college but still ur ff made me laugh. just a few comments and i will end.

at first at bus drivers is kind of boring. (first two para)
but then shiv entry, his first line 'oh its u' i just imagined shiv telling them and thts all i need to laugh and feel happy 😛 . loved the way their conversation went. girl thinking to herself, and tht part is very well written 👏 then ipshit part- i started laughing from her entry. never expected her entry so soon. 😆 also gauri's excitement after finding the dating issue is very funny. 😆 we have a totally different gauri and hun please keep her like a normal girl instead of a anytime rona girl.
one more thing, that drver coming first out of the car was also a good idea. not expected. 😃

sorry if i wrote too much. 😊

Wow, Thank you soooooooooooooooo much, your comments really help me out to let me know what is good and what is not....sorry abt the bus driver stuff, but I put that in there, cuz to give an idea of what Gauri is like, with her overactive imagination and all, also to show that she is regular girl who has to take the bus and stuff...but i will try and tone it down if it is kinda lenthy and boring...😉...a lil' secret, the bus thing is very near and dear to me, b/c i have to take the bus all the time, so it is something I experience everyday....😆😆😆...yup Ipshitta came quiet soon, but it was kinda important for the story....😆...u will see...😉 ...glad you are enjoyin the fic...thanks for the lovely comments once again...😃😃

Originally posted by: Addz
Hey ,Nice part ,I was just thinking that when they will have a long conversation 😉 between them ??????????????????????? 😆 😆

hmmm....sooner or later, it has to happen, the two main character's can't avoid each other for too long...or can they??? 🤔.....😉😆

Originally posted by: apapap
hey...that was the most humourous narrative ive read... very vivid description..totally fab...continue soon

Thank you soooo much....will continue asap....😃😃😃

Originally posted by: prab_rockinn
great work!!!!!! very innovative.... 👏

Thanks a lot!!! ...All these comments mean a lot to me!!!!!!! 😃😃😃

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loveanime

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Posted: 18 years ago

#42

Good story. I love the humor, the part where Gauri thinks Shiv has to find her first before he can yell at her, she says she will just never go to college. 😆 Oh god why is Ipshitta perfect, because I kept picturing the current actress playing her, and there is no way in hell she is perfect so it was kind of hard to imagine. Otherwise love the humor. 😆

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kaira11

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Posted: 18 years ago

#43

gr8 part it was rlly funny 😆 😆 😆 awesomely written !!! 👏

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Spandana

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Posted: 18 years ago

#44

Originally posted by: yamulya1
chandni yet again u did it. i have a bad headache from college but still ur ff made me laugh. just a few comments and i will end.

at first at bus drivers is kind of boring. (first two para)
but then shiv entry, his first line 'oh its u' i just imagined shiv telling them and thts all i need to laugh and feel happy 😛 . loved the way their conversation went. girl thinking to herself, and tht part is very well written 👏 then ipshit part- i started laughing from her entry. never expected her entry so soon. 😆 also gauri's excitement after finding the dating issue is very funny. 😆 we have a totally different gauri and hun please keep her like a normal girl instead of a anytime rona girl.
one more thing, that drver coming first out of the car was also a good idea. not expected. 😃

sorry if i wrote too much. 😊

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hey chandni, thanks for taking the comments positively.
oh the bus is ur experience, is this ff like u being in gauri's place. mam who is shiv!!!!😉
no donot say sorry. ur ff is too nice. u should never say tht word.😃

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Saregama_fan

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Posted: 18 years ago

#45

Originally posted by: yamulya1

hey chandni, thanks for taking the comments positively.
oh the bus is ur experience, is this ff like u being in gauri's place. mam who is shiv!!!!😉
no donot say sorry. ur ff is too nice. u should never say tht word.😃

😆 😆...no shiv here in my life🤔 ... and only Gauri for Shiv...😳😆😆 ...I am no Ipshitta either, to come between them...😆😆 ...but ya the situation where they are is a bit differnt then the set up KAA ... The situations in my story are something I can identify with more than situations like guruji predicting the exact day someone will die 🤔😲....😃

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Shagufta

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Posted: 18 years ago

#46

awesome part cont soon plz!!!!!!! 👏

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Saregama_fan

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Posted: 18 years ago

#47

My Lips are Sealed…

Surprisingly, I woke up with the first ring of the alarm clock the next morning. Quickly got dressed and even had time to eat some breakfast before I had to rush out to catch my bus. Even the bus driver was shocked to see me get on the bus without having to run behind it first, his plan to make me suffer had failed today. As I got on I glared at him, and he smiled back, which I am sure was not a friendly smile, but a smile used to cover up his vicious acts. Now I could have stood there as long as it took to get the bus driver to own up to his real intentions, but today was not the day to resolve my issues with him. Firstly because there was huge line-up of people behind me scowling for me to move on so they could get on the bus and secondly I had to get to college as soon as possible. After all I had top secret news to tell my best friends, Shiv Kapoor was dating Ipshitta!

The moment I stepped of the bus I headed straight towards my class, where I knew Gits and Jits would be waiting for me. Now I know what you must be thinking. You are thinking I am indulging in gossip. However, I beg to differ, because it is not gossiping, if what you are telling is the truth with nothing new added. Now I know I was concluding that they both were dating without them actually telling me that, but hello, why else would Ipshitta be in his car. I mean I don't think Shiv is that nice to give people lifts in his car, just like that. Also who you tell the news to is also important when deciding whether it is gossiping or not. And there is nothing wrong with sharing your experiences with your best friends; it wasn't my fault that I just happened to see Ipshitta and Shiv together! I finally stepped into my class and took in a deep breath. I was at my destination and in about two seconds I would share with my two best friends, what I had very painfully kept to myself for long enough now. However, before I could blurt anything out, I was stopped.

Stopped by a strange looking man, who was dressed in a black suit and looked something like the evil computer dude, from matrix. He tapped me on my shoulder and held out a note. I quickly snatched the note out of his hand as though he was holding something of mine he was not suppose to be holding. I eagerly opened it, excited, that maybe I had a secret admirer, unless it was like a note from the principal, so I opened it slower, but what if it was a secret admirer which made me eager again. Finally I had it opened in front of me, and there it was the one liner that made my heart jump.

Meet me at the quiet group study room in about five minutes, ALONE --Shiv

No! This was not happening. He was suppose to have forgotten me by now. "I'll talk to you later" the words echoed in my mind. I wanted to cry out! And the 'alone' in capitals did not help either, it meant I could not bring Gits and Jits with me. I looked up at the strange dude and smiled nervously and then unwillinging started to follow him to the quiet room. As I walked behind me, my mind raced with ideas to get out of meeting Shiv, most of which I even embarrased to tell you about, so we will just skip that part. My head hung low, as the dude opened the door for me, and I walked in. Hearing the door slam behind me, and finding my self there alone with Shiv, panic struck me. Shiv quietly sat on top of one of the tables, looking directly at me. And then it hit me. He was going to kill me.

Yes! He was a big man and I had distrubed him, by ruining his shirt and then his car. He wanted his revenge and was going to kill me. Shiv sat up and slowly started walking towards me, my heart started to beat faster, I had to get out of here, now obviously the door would be shut so I wasn't going to waste my time on that. I had to escape some other way. While I wasted precious moments thinking of ways to escape, my eyes glued to Shiv who was advancing at quiet a fast rate towards me now. As he came closer I lost my power to think. Then he came even closer, and closer until he was so close that I was sure he could hear my racing heart. This was my only chance to save myself, before he made his move to silence me for life. So I did what any other girl in my situation would do.

I threw my hands up in the air and frantically started slapping, and punching Shiv, in an attempt to fight him back. I realized I had made no difference to Shiv when I found Shiv's hands firmly holding mine, slowly pushing them down. Okay, I couldn't fight him he was just too strong for me, I had to switch to plan B now. So I looked right into Shiv's eyes, and starting begging him for my life. I told him how I was too young to die, I promised I would never cross his path again, I would never even eat banana's or any other fruits again. Hearing this, he let out a little laugh, which was very strange to me. I mean here he was ready to kill a person, and he was laughing as they begged for their life. He was more evil then I thought, this made me cry out even louder now. He then suddenly became serious and placed his finger on my lips instantly making me silent. I swallowed hard as I looked into his eyes. This was it, this was how I was going to die. I shut my eyes tight waiting to feel the pain of death. But nothing happened. So I slowly opened one eye while still keeping the other shut. This made him laugh again. Then he spoke as the started to walk away.

"Relax. I am not going to kill you. Take a seat" I did as he said and sat on a chair and he resumed his seat of top of the table in front of me. "I wanted to talk to you about yesterday." Before he could say anything further I assured him that I was really sorry about what had happened and would never do anything of that sort again. Even though he had said it himself I was still not sure about him not wanting to kill me. He was now walking around me my eyes following him. "It is not about that. I want to talk to about Ipshitta and me." Ipshitta and him? Why did he want to talk to me about that? "You have to keep your mouth shut about seeing me and Ipshitta together. You got that?" He slammed his hands onto the arms of the chair I sat on making me jump. I frantically nodded my head up and down feeling like a criminal under heavy interogation. "My lips are sealed, I won't mention it to anyone. I promise. Cross my heart and hope to die, if ...I lie."

"Good. You can go now." I bolted out of the room at the speed of lightening. Maybe I had overreacted just a little about the whole thing. Murder? What was I thinking? Actually I wan't thinking. Definately no more K-soaps for me!

As I slowly walked down the hallway, lost in my own world as usual, I bumped into, yup, Ipshitta. The infamous bump of mine, made her to spill all the books she held in her hands onto the floor. For a moment I froze, I was not getting a break. Seriously, people needed to watch where they are walking. Always bumping into me! Yah that is right, they always bumped into me!

Ipshitta kneeled as she started to pick up her books, I followed. Guiltly trying to avoid her eyes I handed her the books one by one. When no more books were left I looked up and found her staring right at me. This was the first time I was seeing her this close, and she was just as pretty as people said she was. Especially her eyes, they were beautiful, but there was this sadness in her eyes, which I didn't understand. What could she be sad about? For crying out loud she was dating Shiv Kapoor! And was the most brilliant girl in the college, what else did she want? I downcast my eyes, feeling bit awkward staring at Ipshitta like that, but I could still feel her gaze upon me. She was watching me so intently. Why? This made me feel even more awkward.

I heard footsteps from behind me. At once I knew it was Shiv, so without turning back I gave Ipshitta a quick smile, applogized, got up, and started walking straight making sure I did not turn around. God forbid I had to face him again. Ipshitta walked in the opposite direction towards Shiv. As I walked away, I could hear Shiv and Ipshitta talk.

"That's her?"
"Yah."

Hearing this, I increased my pace of walking. I was skipping my classes and heading straight home. What if I hadn't panicked, and they were actually going to kill me! "That's her...the one we are going to jointly murder." No! I had to save myself, so I ran home.

Edited by Saregama_fan - 18 years ago

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Saregama_fan

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Posted: 18 years ago

#48

Originally posted by: maragathm
Good story. I love the humor, the part where Gauri thinks Shiv has to find her first before he can yell at her, she says she will just never go to college. 😆 Oh god why is Ipshitta perfect, because I kept picturing the current actress playing her, and there is no way in hell she is perfect so it was kind of hard to imagine. Otherwise love the humor. 😆

ya, I know the actress that plays her is not quiet perfect 😆😆😆...I think she needs to borrow nikhila's straight iron, and control that frizz too...😆😆, in my story she is not only perfect but also, v. beautiful....can u belive it, what was i thinking....😉

Originally posted by: kaira
gr8 part it was rlly funny 😆 😆 😆 awesomely written !!! 👏

Thank you 😃

Originally posted by: iqbals4ever
awesome part cont soon plz!!!!!!! 👏

Thank you😃

Originally posted by: scxygurl<<
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Originally posted by: umz2k3
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Edited by Saregama_fan - 18 years ago

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mad

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Posted: 18 years ago

#49

omg..hw do u do this
everytime i read your update i laugh like hell
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cant wait for the next part

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Nazrin

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Posted: 18 years ago

#50

chandni darling that was really awesome 😆 so soo hillarious 😆 i was desperately waiting for ur update 😳 ....u made my day 😃
i luv this ff of ur coz i can visualize evry scene u mention....especially the SG confrontaion....... 👏 👏 even my heartbeat got raised when he was moving towards gauri 😳 but why why why this ippi is so perfect n beautiful 😭
anyways sweeety plz cont. soon.........cant wait 😳

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