RaVika OS: 'Major Revelation'

Surprise surprise..!! Look who's here.. I no stopped writing here for the lack of responses but then this idea was so irresistible and tempted me to write.. Also my love for Ravika and writing is not "Response depended".., so I thought to give it a shot.. Hope u guys will like it..

Note- if u really find it Good enough to Enjoy.. Hold on for a sec and leave ur comment.. It will make a difference for me..

Here we go..

RaVika OS: Major Revelation



"WHAT..!!! "


The single word which was shreiked out with such blasting intensity disrupted the peaceful ambience and compelled the innocent and helpless bunch of birds to fly away with a start.. The barren deserted land area which was quite to death moments ago filled with echoes of flapping sounds of winds of innumerable birds.. The owner of the voice himself seem to be flabbergasted.. He fumbled few steps back and stood taking support of car's bonnet.. The women accompanying him narrowed her eyes and noticed his reactions keenly..


"Ye aap kya keh rahi h Ambika ji..??" Ravi managed to speak after composing himself while he is yet to recover from the shock..


"Vahi Jo tumne suna Ravi.. Shaadi karoge Mujhse..??" Devika offered him confidentely and smirked while trying to read his reactions..


" Tumhe to apne aap ko lucky samajhna chahie Jo Ambika.. Ambika Raichand tumse shaadi ke lie Puch rahi h.. Tumhe pata hai London se leke Delhi tak ke sare Rich eligible bachelor ladke mere aage piche dum hilate hue ghumte hai.. But I never took interest in them.." She stated shrewdly.. Attitude was dripping from her words and from her eyes..


Ravi was bombshelled.. He was getting more and more confused.. Till now all his attempt failed to reach to the fact of her identity.. Whatever time he has spent with her and known her his doubts of she being his devika faded and he began to believe that She is Ambika only.. He was shattered thinking about Devika.. His eyes flooded more with memories than with tears..


On the other hand Devika also get baffeled looking at his Behaviour.. She was sure he will comply to her offer easily and won't even give a second thought to it.. Her mind was filled with clouds of doubts and the asummed greadinees of the man in front of her, began to hide behind the clouds..


FLASHBACK

Devika is crying keeping her head on Janki's lap while Janki was comforting her and carresing her hair..

"Us Nivedita Luthra ki Himmat Kaise hui meri Chachi ko in sab me involve karne ki.. Unko takleef dene ka Haq kisiko ni hai.." Devika screamed to top of her voice.. She was shattered and crying profusely..

"Ambika beta sambhalo apne aapko.. Tumhari ladai bht Badi hai or Bht khatarnak logo ke sath hai.. Tum aese kaise haar maan sakti ho.." Janki reminded her of her mission and tried to root some strength inside her..

Devika wipes her tears "Bus Ab bohot Hogya.. Ye Bachna bachaana bohot hogya..ab samay hai Vaar karne ka.. Usne meri Kamjoori ka fayda uthane ki kosis ki h.. Ab mai uski Kamjoori pe Vaar karungi.." Devika wiped her tears and stated being determined.. Her eyes were red reflecting the burning heat inside her..

"Mai kch Samjhi nahi tum karna kya chahti ho..? " Jaanki was confused but was also glad seeing how her daughter managed her breakdown and is back to her ferocity..

"Hum Uspe aesa Vaar karenge Maa ki Vo pagal hojaegi.. Gusse or jalan Ki aag Me aese Jalegi ki mere Apno ki taraf Ankh utha ke nahi dekhegi.. Or tab mere Dil ko sukoon milega.." Ambika concluded grattin her teeth..


" Vaar kaisa Vaar..?" Janki asked..

" Uski Kamjoori pe.. "Ravi" hoga hamara target.." Devika spill the beans and explained her entire plan to Janki..

They planned to offer Ambika's marriage proposal to Ravi which he won't be able to refuse assuming his Greediness and fondness for Money and power.. Knowing about Ravi getting married to Someone else obviously NiVi will loose her temper and liable to Make some mistake which can be used against her.. She will Know the pain to loose the one she loved the most for Money and Devika's revenge can be completed.. They planned to execute the plan next day only while Ravi and Ambika were about to visit a land for their next project(Devika's dream project)


**END OF FLASHBACK**


Some moments spend in utter silence which added to her anxiousness and restlessness.. Most of time went thinking as to why he's not saying anything.. What must be going on in his mind..


"Itna kya Soch Rahe ho Ravi..? Aese Mauke bar bar nahi Milte.. Mai iss dunia ki haar chiz tumhare kadmo me rakh Sakti hu.. Tumhe Zammen se utha ke Aasman pe Baitha sakti hu.. Mere pass itni Daulat or Rutba hai jiske Sahare mai kch bhi kar sakti hu.." She tried to tempt him skillfully showcasing the dreams of successful future he can have..


Ravi didn't move even a bit.. He was rooted and got angry with her words.. Those words were no less than daggers.. How dare she trying to exploit my emotions.. Is she here to ask for marriage or buy a Groom..?? All this thoughts started ringing in his mind.. And now he was sure that the sassy cunning rich lady infront of him Can never be his Devika.. She is just a beautiful face from front with hidden filth ugly blackness and darkness inside her..


" Ambika Ji mai aapke sawal ka jawab jarur dunga but Usse phle mai aapse kuch puchna chahta hu..? " He spoke in a shaky heavy voice.. His heart was weeping from inside..

She smirked with a victorious smile.. "I knew it he will fall for the Money sooner or later..." She exclaimed in her mind..
"Ha pucho.."


" Mai chahunga ki Aap puri sacchai or immandari se iska jawab de.. KYA AAP MERI DEVIKA HAI..?" He confronted her with equal ferocity..


Devika was stunned and shaken to the core.. Her eyes widened and popped out of sockets.. her forehead wrinkled.. She was not expecting the situations to take this turn.. Somehow she composed herself stiffened her back and straightened her neck..


"Oh please..!! Not again.. Mai tumhe pehle hi kitni baar bata chuki hu.. M not Devika.. Mai Ambika Raichand hu.." She kept her cool and spoke with Same pretence...

Ravi let out a sarcastic laught.."Janta to mai hamesha se tha srf ek Last Time Confirm Karna Chahta Tha... Aapka Sirf Chehra milta h Devika Se.. But is chehre ke piche chupa Dil.. Vo Uske jaisa ho hi ni Sakta..". A lone tear which was struggling to find a way since long finally succeeded and embraced his cheeks and down to his chin..

"Kaha meri devika Massum(innocent) , sadi simple, sacchi, hasti muskurati khusiya bekherne wali, jisse kisika b dard ni dekha jata tha.. Or kaha aap Arrogant, Ghamandi, selfish, shrewd.. Aap Kaise meri Devika hosakti h..!!" His voice started choking and the pain in his heart became unbearable.. He was crying profusely thinking about devika..


Devika was appalled.. She couldn't believe her Ears.. Her heart started beating for him and felt his Pain.. All the thoughts of revenge were flushed into gutter and became secondary for her at that very moment.. She wanted to run to him and to ease his pain..


Finally Ravi took a deep breath and composed himself from getting weak.. He declared something which shook her beliefs from its roots...

" Miss Ambika Raichand mai aapse Shadi karne me interested Nahi hoo.. Aapka Paisa apka Rutba Aapko Mubarakho.. Mera Pyaar Bikau nahi hai.." Ravi declared with anger in his eyes and rudeness in his voice..

"Kya kaha tha aapne mujhe Jo Chahie vo De sakti h aap.. "Meri Devika" vapis de sakti h mujhe..??" He said pointing out a finger towards her stressing on the words "Meri Devika"at the top of his voice..

Devika stood lifeless.. As if somebody pulled land under her feet..

"Aasman ki Uchaiyo pe le Jana chahti h na.. Kya "meri Devika" ke dil Me thodisi Jagah dila Sakti h aap..?" He scream clutching his chest over heart tightly and tapping it with closed fist.. No matter how much he tried but His eyes refused to remain dry and flooded each time he took Devika's name..

"Ab chup q hogai..? Kahiye na Devika ko LA sakti h aap..?" He repeated while sobbing loudly.. His body felt weak and he shattered on ground down on his knees.. He was broken he was devastated.. He let out all his bottled emotions and pain which he concelead for 9 long months.. Mostly through his eyes and less with his words..


All his words pierced her heart like daggers and it started weeping and bleeding.. Her mind was lost and all her senses became numb.. She failed to comprehend anything and everything.. Tears started dripping down from her lower lid and smudged her eyes..

"DEVIKAAA...!!" Ravi spread out his hands and screamed until her name Echoed and came back to him.. He covered his face with his hands and continued blabering in squeaky voice " Tum q mujhe chod ke chalk gai.. Plz Vapas aajao devika.. Mai bht akela hu tumhare bina.. Plz devika plz.. Vapas aajao..! "


Devika stood like a cadaver.. She was on rollercoaster of emotions..all those feelings she attempted to lock on deepest pits of her heart came alive ryt in front of her eyes.. Her heart swell up like a balloon with an unidentified emotion may be happiness may be guilt may be love.. She is yet to figure out..

The intensity of emotions rushed down through her veins and she ran towards Ravi.. She sat on ground to his level and embraced him tightly unsure of what she was doing.. The Ambika inside her was left far behind and at this moment she was only DeVika.. Ravi's Devika... Ravi's Heart recognised its rhythmic beating partner on other side and reciprocated.. Resulting in a tighter hug from his side..

After a short breakdown she composed herself ran to her car and drove off while Ravi remained clueless blankly following his gaze towards her car until she disappeared..

Though it took time but Ravi's True Selfless Love and his pure Character shined out like a brightest ray ripping apart innumerable deepest black clouds of misunderstandings and confusions..


The end

P.S if u guys want I can make it a two shot focusing on Nivi's reaction in next part..


Do hit the like button and drop down ur views aand suggestions below..


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Riya

excellent os waiting for those moments in ravika life.
but y devika ran away from that place.
want to see ravi reaction wn he knows abt ambica is devika.
and ravi reaction towards nivi after know the truth.

plz continue ...

👏
u r good writer.
waiting for next part. 👍🏼

i want to see, devika herself comes to ravi and reveal her truth and ravika moments.
not butnot least reveal manju aunty true colour infront of ravi

Originally posted by: dabh9

excellent os waiting for those moments in ravika life.
but y devika ran away from that place.
want to see ravi reaction wn he knows abt ambica is devika.
and ravi reaction towards nivi after know the truth.

plz continue ...

👏
u r good writer.
waiting for next part. 👍🏼

Thank u so much dear..
Actually continuation depends on what most of people think abt it.. If people will demand then I'll write another part also..

Thanks for ur appreciation and suggestion..

Originally posted by: dabh9

i want to see, devika herself comes to ravi and reveal her truth and ravika moments.
not butnot least reveal manju aunty true colour infront of ravi

I was also thinking on same lines.. If ever I'll continue I will write like this only..

Ryt now m least bothered about Manju..

Thanks for ur valuable suggestion.. Heartily appreciated..

Wonderful OS, loved the attention to even the smallest of details like the way you describe crying for example... brilliant writing and you are surely a brilliant writer

Woww that was an amazing write up and a well thought out story on how Devika will realise that Ravi still loves her a lot 👏👏 ...This scene looks so natural and goes well with the ongoing plot too .. I liked how Devika as Ambika will go as per her plan and propose marriage to Ravi thinking Ravi will agree due to his greed for money and this way she can take her revenge from Nivi as well as Ravi but this scenario itself will reveal Ravi's innocence to Devika when he not only refuses her proposal but also pours his heart out for his Devika 😭 .. that was beautifully written especially the emotions and pain felt by both Ravi and Devika that moment when Ravi screams Devika's name .. Wowww ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

I really want CVs to read this story of yours and show something similar in the serial too ... I know many of us predicted about Ravi getting drunk in front of Ambika scenario too but to b honest its quite cliched and we hv seen it in many shows but what u wrote is completely unique and goes well with the flow of the actual story too 👏

I really want u to continue further as I want to know what Nivi thinks about this proposal and also after this what Devika will tell Janki about Ravi .. Does she still doubt Ravi or not ? 😳 .. And yes also want to know will finally Ravi realise this is his Devika because he felt that same warmth during the hug before she left the place 😳

Very well written 👏👏

Originally posted by: LordRiddler

Wonderful OS, loved the attention to even the smallest of details like the way you describe crying for example... brilliant writing and you are surely a brilliant writer

If you are going to do another part, I am going to make my request for it to be about Ravi's reaction and then Devika revealing the truth and then maybe third part being about Ravi and Devika executing a revenge plan against the trio who killed Devika...

Btw.. This is EXACTLY what I want to happen on the actual show. Ravi is shown so confused.. one moment believing she is Devika and then next forgetting everything and believing she is Ambika just based on one moment...

One more thing, are you over 18? If so, please apply at Balaji to write for Kalash, I am sure you would qualify and us fans would actually get to see some tracks we love without really much of the confusing, strectched out, misunderstanding rinse repeat drama in the middle

Awww thank u so much dear.. Even for such single comment I won't mind spending hours to write..

Well I have recently started writing scripts like from last 4-5 months.. M more of a poem person.. The poem format demand constipated writing with saying more in little words .. So when i m doing script everything is coming out in detail.. M glad u are liking it..

I will surely think about the second part..

I so wanted to write a story where everyone will say I want this to be picturized on show..😆 and then I got this idea..

Yupp buddy m above 18.. Thanks for ur consideration for me being or can be a part of creative writing team.. That's such a huge compliment.. BBut m happy limiting writing as my hobby only.. I am already on a well respected profession and serving people being a DOCTOR and earning enough.. And I love doing DAT..

What if i couldnt join balaji i m atleast here.. To surprise u guys with ur choice of plot.. And i'l continue doing dat..

Thanks again for so awesome words of appreciation..

If ever I'll demoralise about writing this comment will inspire me..

Originally posted by: jyoti06

Woww that was an amazing write up and a well thought out story on how Devika will realise that Ravi still loves her a lot👏👏 ...This scene looks so natural and goes well with the ongoing plot too .. I liked how Devika as Ambika will go as per her plan and propose marriage to Ravi thinking Ravi will agree due to his greed for money and this way she can take her revenge from Nivi as well as Ravi but this scenario itself will reveal Ravi's innocence to Devika when he not only refuses her proposal but also pours his heart out for his Devika😭 .. that was beautifully written especially the emotions and pain felt by both Ravi and Devika that moment when Ravi screams Devika's name .. Wowww⭐️

I really want CVs to read this story of yours and show something similar in the serial too ... I know many of us predicted about Ravi getting drunk in front of Ambika scenario too but to b honest its quite cliched and we hv seen it in many shows but what u wrote is completely unique and goes well with the flow of the actual story too 👏

I really want u to continue further as I want to know what Nivi thinks about this proposal and also after this what Devika will tell Janki about Ravi .. Does she still doubt Ravi or not ? 😳 .. And yes also want to know will finally Ravi realise this is his Devika because he felt that same warmth during the hug before she left the place 😳

Very well written 👏👏

Jyoti u r such a sweetheart..
I was kindda avoiding writing but this idea was so irresitable and tempting I couldn't control penning it down.. I was already sure u guys will love it.. This one marriage proposal has the potential to clear out everything..😆
Ravi Devika NiVi all shock , Riya Rock... 😆

M glad I was able to convey their emotions and u enjoyed reading them..

Honestly when I was writing this I was thinking about our discussion on my last story.. The idea of getting them married was used in the show.. Remember..?? Though in a slightly different way.. this same thing inspired me to write thinking what if this time also something like this is telecasted.. And I began writing..

Ravi getting drunk is actually so lame and boring.. 😆

Thanks for liking and appreciating my idea and my creation..


WWooh.. Wooh.. Hold on dear.. So many questions.. U r firing like bullets.. I will sury be back with all ur answers in next part..

Till then njoy the Show..

So well guys I have Got praises and appreciations enough to continue this .. Thank u so much for being so supportive and encouraging..

I haven't thought anything for continuation.. But i 'l think something and be back with next part soonish..

Meanwhile u can also suggest what u want for next part.. I'll try inculcate those things according to my plot..

Thanks so much..

Keep reading and njoying...