AkDha OS : That Moment! - Page 5

Originally posted by: lashy

And you said you are in 10th, right? Just checking 😉 because when I was in 10th I was still trying to decode Nancy Drew, not write such eloquent prose!

And you picked your favourite part of JA to write on, na? My favourite ones too... after the Benazir track!

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I am shat pratishat a 10th grader dii...and also a normal 14-year-old...😆😃 BTW, Shyamala Aunty also told me something on similar lines sometime back, only that there was Enid Blyton in place of Nancy Drew...😆

Nancy Drew books never took my fancy...Sherlock Holmes and the 39 clues is more like me...

And eloquent! This is the first time someone has used this adjective for my work, and when that someone is you, it means a lot! ❤️ Thank you so much dii! 🤗

Yes...The post-Benzo track is the best of JA! ❤️

The sound of footsteps brought her back from her reverie. Even before she had turned back, she had known the entrant - It was him.

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If it had been someone else, she would have probably stayed a bit longer at the window, but it was this man, someone she couldn't afford not to look at!

I absolutely loved this line... don't know why... but it said a lot without actually saying much!

Thanks di, glad you liked it. Even I had loved it while writing, though I was unsure if it will make any sense to the readers...😳😆

She was about to lift her hand from the window sill, when the sight of another hand just beside hers made her stop.

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The silence was only limited to the tongue, the eyes never failed to express how delighted they were to feel each other's presence after so long!

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Thank you! 😳😃

He paused to gauge her expressions at this announcement, which seemed a bit of surprise, and a bit of something he couldn't recognize.

How cute!

It is! 😳

then again, what's a tigress who isn't stubborn?)

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now when this smiling girl was back, he would make sure she never vanishes again!

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The adorable Jalal! 😳

At the exit, he turned back again, perhaps to collect the smile which she hadn't returned.

Collect the smile which she hadn't returned.. how beautifully put...

When this is coming from someone who so beautifully puts thoughts into word, it means so so so much. Thanks a lot di...😳 Sooo good to know you liked it...❤️

it was about the inner calmness that came along with simplicity. She felt lighter today, for the burden of royalty was now off her shoulders, even though for a short while.

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This part was something I really wanted to mention in the OS. One of the reasons why BK track was so lovely was that they weren't royals...😳 Good to see you quote it...thanks! 😳😃

There he was, sure enough, looking even more charming as a typical, chubby Marwari. She couldn't help but smile at her man.

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"Mhaari Gharaali Sa toh aaj badi sundar laag ri hai!"

Jodha was taken aback by the fluency her dear husband had in Marwari. But it was only momentary surprise, for she continued to play along.

"Aaj toh mhaare bhartaar bhi kuchh kam saje dhaje na laag re...Kahin ghoomne ja rahe ho ke?"

"Ji Haan Sethani Sa, socha aaj apni beendni sang thodi sair kar lun..." ( Yes Miss, I thought to have a tour with my wife...)

"Toh fir raah kiski taak re ho? Chaalo ji, kahin der na ho jaaye thane..." ( Then whom are you waiting for? Let's go, otherwise you'll be late...)

How sweet😳... how did you get the apt marwari dialogues, btw?

The language itself is very sweet. 😳

I framed them myself di. 😃 I would say Marwari is an easy language, once you know a few words, you can easily guess/frame the others. My knowledge of the language is from the show only! 😃

I am glad you liked this part, btw! 😳😃

The four walls of the palace had made her love the blanket of nature. A

"Manne suna hai ki thane mhaaro bado dhyaan rakho Seth Ji?"

"Kyun Sethani Sa? Apni Gharaali ka dhyaan rakhno koi apraadh hai ke?"

"Accha! Par thaari aur bhi toh gharaaliyan hai na, thane unko dhyaan toh kabhi raakhyo aise?"

" Kyunki woh sab humesha Shehenshah ki Begum hi thin aur rahengi Jodha Begum...kabhi apne shauhar ki biwi nahi ban saktin..."

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Even through the Marwari accent, Jalal's commanding tone could easily be distinguished.

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" Ji Bilkul Sa...Main aur mhaari Gharaali ek duje se Ghana prem karein hain, kyun Sethani sa?" ( Yes...We do love each other a lot, right Jodha Begum?)

" Ke huvo Sethani Sa, Manne kuchh galat bol diyo ke?"

" Hun Bhi Apne Bhartaar se Ghana prem karun chhoon..."

The hidden confession.. ❤️

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Beautiful, baisa... keep it up and keep it coming!

Thank you so much Lashy di for the lovely comment...🤗

You know what, when I was a visitor on IF, I had read some of your works. I was and still am a huge fan of your writing. That time I had never thought I would ever get to talk to you, let alone reading your comment on my very own work! This still seems like a dream to me! 😳😃

Thanks again di, this really meant a lot! ❤️

Love you...❤️

Originally posted by: divyaJA

Awesome yar...beautiful

Originally posted by: Acchu02

awe awesome..

Originally posted by: eshalli

Very nyccc one dear
Thxc 4r pm

Originally posted by: dellaakdha

lovely os..superb..expecting more os frm u..thanks for pm..

Originally posted by: crystalwings

Wow written with such eloquence depicting JoJa's verbal, non verbal and emotions ..,,bringing back memories of their beautiful romantic track ...😊

Originally posted by: crystalwings

Thanks for the PM

Originally posted by: alffim

Dear Shagun!
Many thanks for story and for pm! That's wonderful!
It was such a cautious new path to each other, with a new trust.
In the show was a nice scene, which is interrupted appearance Rukaya.
It is good that at you she not come. 😛
I am very sorry that this OS,( OS - it means a one story?). I'd like to continuation. 😃

Originally posted by: divyadaya13

My dear shagun. You always amaze me. It was fantastic. I was smiling and sometimes laughing reading the convo between akdha. Kudos to you👏