AkDha OS : That Moment! - Page 7

Originally posted by: Ash67

Dear Shagun,

This is just lovely. Your imagination and the writing!

I agree with Lashy's comments in toto 😉and would ask the same question about the marwari dialogues. 😛

I wish of course that they had thought and shown such things to tap into the potential and the magic of the on screen jodi rather than the heavy negativity and unwanted leaps they persisted in dishing out.

But why an OS? I am sure you have imagined more around the Badal Kajari track than one OS. Keep writing my friend 😃

🤗

Ashwinee

Originally posted by: -AkDha.Lover-

Glad you liked it di! 😳 Thank you...😃

Originally posted by: shahbhavini

Omg... Shagun... Love U🤗... My fav track😳... U have reminded me of those beautiful days. When this track was coming to end I was inclined and crazy I put my story aside and began to write on prediction shots of this story. Best track.

My dear cutie pie😛... U seriously bloomed same feeling once again through your writing and Marwari touch is like sone pe suhaga'.

Thank you so much dii...🤗

Yes...this track was...

So so so good to know you have liked it this much...😳

Does he really care for me? Do I really mean something to him? Or...was it only out of guilt?

If he really ever cared for her, would he insult her the way he had been doing all last month? No!

Interesting view on Jodha's side...

Thanks...😳

An unusually long silence prevailed between the two of them. But the silence was only limited to the tongue, the eyes never failed to express how delighted they were to feel each other's presence after so long!

Superbly written Shagun. You know what make that scene best... Silence... there was no need to talk... both of them are skilled actors... their eyes perfectly displayed what viewers wanted to see. Shagun... My dear cutie pie... U seriously bloomed same feeling once again through your writing and Marwari touch is like sone pe suhagg'.

Thanks a lot! 😳

True, silence between them is always more beautiful than words, and PariJat express so well through their eyes! 😳❤️

"Haan...bohot shaanti milti hai chandrama ko dekh kar..." ( Yes, it gives me immense peace to look at it!) Jodha began in a low voice.

"Tab toh lagta hai aapko kaafi shaanti mil chuki hai, chaliye baithkar baat karte hain ab!" ( It seems you've already got a lot of peace, let's sit and talk! )Jalal replied in his usual fun way, his eyes never leaving hers.

I felt watching moon... felt symbolic... finally after a horrendous storm finally peace is on his way to gratify the couple...

Yes...I wish this peace was a bit longer in the show...

Grasping what exactly was going on in her mind, he continued, " Itna toh hum aapko jaan hi gaye hain Jodha Begum! Aur fir woh Baaghin hi kya, jo zidd na kare, hai na?!" ( I know you this much at least, Jodha Begum. And then again, what's a tigress who isn't stubborn?) He waited for a response, that innocent look perfectly placed on his face.

I can't put not finger why I loved this simple line may be the way Jalal teased her. He was just jesting but the sentiments of love overwhelmed my emotions.

I enjoyed writing this one dii, glad you liked it! 😳

Love is hiddenin every bit of their convos in the OS...😉😳😃

At the exit, he turned back again, perhaps to collect the smile which she hadn't returned. (Dreamy) And as if involuntarily, she smiled as soon as her eyes met his, making Jalal smile wider!

Oh wow you too liked this line. Thank you di! 😳

As he left the room, feeling more elated than he had expected to, she sunk in the couch...thinking of what magic this man does to her.

Magic haan! 😆😉

This couple is really adorable😳... NO one can beat... Oh God.. U perfectly captured me in this OS... Shangun... I am reliving the moments... Love U😊...

Uff...adorable they are!

I am so glad you enjoyed it dii! 😳

There he was, sure enough, looking even more charming as a typical, chubby Marwari. She couldn't help but smile at her man.

Rajat did looked like golguppa🤣 in this dress... Blue dress... hehehe

>>>😆😆😆

Catching her looking at him, Jalal instantly looked down for a moment. It was'nt less than a treat for him to see his very own Jodha Begum drooling over him! A slight blush and a tiny smile...any onlooker would describe his face this way!

Loved the way U pick every emotions of Rajat🤗 ... so perfect ... this how exactly our Rajat acted and smiled.

Thank you so much...🤗

If you remember, it was this same expression on his face before that Chaugan with Ruqs, when he had caught Jo staring at him...😳😃

"Aaj toh mhaare bhartaar bhi kuchh kam saje dhaje na laag re...Kahin ghoomne ja rahe ho ke?" (Today even my husband looks quite good, you are going somewhere or what?) A grin spread across her face as said.

Awww. So cute...😛

Sach mein dii...both of them were sooo cute as the Marwari Seth Ji and Sethani Sa. 😳

This statement of Jodha made Jalal stop walking. He paused where he was and turned to look at her. Looking straight into those honey-colored eyes, he said, " Kyunki woh sab humesha Shehenshah ki Begum hi thin aur rahengi Jodha Begum...kabhi apne shauhar ki biwi nahi ban saktin..." ( Because they are all the King's queens Jodha Begum...they would never be their husband's wife...)

This line evolved around entire serial... other than Jodha no one else were able to become his wife...

Yes...this is actually what the entire serial was about...it tells what made Jodha different from the others...⭐️😳

Thanks for liking it! 😃

"Pehle aap let jao Sethani Sa...itni yaatra karke aayi ho...thaak gi hogi..." ( First you take rest, Jodha Begum...you have been through such a long trip, must be tired...) Jalal said with concern reflecting in his eyes.

How caring... Awww.. I am in love with this Jalal.

You always were! 😆😉

"Arrey na na Seth Ji...itna bhi na chaali se main...pehla aap vishraam kar lo, aap bhi toh thaak ge hoge na..." ( No Shehenshah...I haven't walked that much...you come rest first, you must be tired too...) She replied calmly, with no sign of the long walk's effect on her face.

I am glad... At least you have shown both loves equally...😃

Of course di, I am sure the show's Kajri would also have reacted the same way...😃

Realizing that the lady was still waiting for an answer, Jalal slowly looked up to her smiling face, and replied, " Ji Bilkul Sa...Main aur mhaari Gharaali ek duje se Ghana prem karein hain, kyun Sethani sa?" ( Yes...We do love each other a lot, right Jodha Begum?)

This line...

Jodha instantly looked up at Jalal, not able to believe what he had just so casually said!

Did he just say...?!!

Confession wow Shagun...

>>>😳❤️

Jalal's voice brought her back again. " Ke huvo Sethani Sa, Manne kuchh galat bol diyo ke?" ( What happened Jodha Begum, did I say something wrong?)

Hehehe... sounds so cute...

Yes...😳

She just kept on staring at him, while words escaped on their own. " Na Na Seth Ji, Aapne bilkul chokhi baat kahi se..." ( No, Shehenshah...you said it perfectly right...) Now looking him straight in his eyes, she said, " Hun Bhi Apne Bhartaar se Ghana prem karun chhoon..." ( I too love my husband a lot...)

A long pause again, perhaps longer than ever before, with both of them lost somewhere in each other's glimmering eyes.

So sweet ... Jodha also confess... seriously.. am I dreaming... heheheh

No you're not...😆

Shagun...👏👏👏 Master piece👏

OMG Master Piece! 😲☺️☺️

Thank you sooo much for the wonderful and beautiful comment dii...Love you...🤗

Originally posted by: moni_06

"Because they are all the King's queens Jodha Begum...they would never be their husband's wife..."

My favourite line , it gives that perfect hue of love building between the couple

Glad you liked it dear...😳

Now coming to the os

Through the os u made me enchanted that you are a great writer

Thank you so much Monika...😳

It made me bewitched of the lovely episodes of the serial

Those were the best days...

I like the way you wrote the marwari accent , you really have your grip over it

Glad you liked that part dear...😳...And no, I don't know it well, just tried...😃

Although it melancholy reminded of such romantic parts of the serial.

And you took that lovely part that reconciled the two

In short a perfect update

Thanks again dear! 😳😃

And yes i have read you want to be a writer or novelist

Good luck for future , maybe you can work on prepositions (though i am no one to tell you), you will surely have eminence...

Thank u for the pm

No no buddy, I just want to write a book someday, that's it. 😆 Thank you! 😳😃

Prepositions...Ohkay, can you tell me where you found them wrongly used?

Originally posted by: pinu20

Lovely os 😊
Thanks for pm

Originally posted by: sweet_diksha

nice OS, Shagun...remembered Badal and Kajri😉😃

Originally posted by: -AkDha.Lover-

Originally posted by: binduprasad41

so beautiful os dear
I just love it
how much I miss this things in serial which never happen in serial
each line of this os is so beautifully written
and you took so much afford to translate each marwari line's which I really appreciated dear
" because they are all the King's queens jodha begum...they would never be their husband's wife..". how much i love this line. in this single line jalal express his felling ,how much she important to him,
and in the last their indirect confession.
one more time dear I just love this os.

Originally posted by: moni_06

I agree shagun

In school only get "irrelevant matter" ,how ,why

Nd spelling errors , punctuation errors

And all i get is teachers signature😛