I Loved You The First Moment I Saw You
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First things first!! THREE BIG THANK YOUS to you - One for thinking of gifting something, Two for making that gift a piece of writing and Three for so beautifully shaping/wrapping the gift!!
As I said I first read the comments, was totally intrigued by them and then immediately moved to story... All the peeps here were so true!! This OS manifests how much you got into the skin of PBD Jodha-Jalal. I don't think any other writer in this forum was bestowed with a return gift as best as this!! I'm blessed, honored and deeply touched Payalia... you're just the sweetest PAGAL!!
I'm chiding as I'm at loss of praises... 😆 🤗🤗🤗🤗
You adapted your thinking, writing to come close to PBD and my my.. YOU DID IT!! 👏👏 Below para proves that..
"May you get everything you desire for..", she whispered softly, looking at him.
"I have everything I desired for..", came his instant reply.
Apprehending the meaning of his words, the delighted woman couldn't help but blush whilst he chuckled at her sheepishness and put his arm around her shoulders as he made her to hold a knife and forward their hands. Bewildered and enchanted by his gesture, she turned her face to him.Their faces an inch apart as she smiled into his eyes. Giving an affectionate smile to his love,jalal gestured with head to proceed.
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My favorite lines..
"Sweetheart!! I didn't know this word would sound so majestic till I heard it from you."
"You filled the emptiness in me.. Thankyou for coming into my life,meenu", saying this softly he gently placed a kiss on her hands which he was holding,firmly.
"The belongingness that I mis..", she choked and a lone tear followed which she was holding back since a while. Holding her face gently, jalal brushed away that tear with his thumb and she shook head.Wiping tears quickly she gave him the broadest of smiles." Don't you want to see your gift?", she chirped and he was taken aback by a sudden change in her mood.
>> Here you got Jodha's nature right by leaving that sad admission incomplete and then suddenly bringing in the chirpiness 👏👏
"She cut the title", "UTOPIA now, as if she find her family in me.How innocently she said it all with just one gesture that how deeply she's in love with me."
Overwhelmed with her innocence, jalal felt blessed, to have her in his life.Though she was expecting a teasing look or a broad smile from him but the sight she bestowed with was beyond her imagination, for, she caught a lone tear travelling down his cheek.
"I LOVE YOU IDIOT", he whispered in her ears and her eyes wide open.
>>This is bang on 👏👏. Though I never made Jalal shed a tear, I so loved reading it here.. I think I too should make him cry once 😆
"Now I understand why people says magical words" Her lips broke into a gleeful smile as she softly moved her hands on his back-only to proliferate his yearning,For Her.
>> I too understand you're looking for those magical words in original story 🤣
Suddenly she felt his hand travelling delicately down at her back. A cold shiver ran down her spine as she was feeling his fingers moving over the knobs of her spine towards her waist and as his hand reached her bare skin, jodha moaned within. Her grip on him becoming tighter as he let his fingers skim across her waist. "Skin against skin.. oh my my.. someone stop him before I.."
Like he listened her insight, his hand moved up and this time rested on her face as he gently parted from her. Holding her face fondly, he placed a soft kiss on her forehead and with closed eyes, she savoured the touch of his rough lips on her soft skin.
"My love!! With every gesture you are making me fall for you more. Why you love me so much?", jodha smiled.
Didn't dare to meet eyes with him, she kept her eyes closed and he smiled at her reticence. "Open your eyes jo", he tucked few locks that were falling on her face behind her ear.
Smiling sheepishly, she shook head and the amused man chuckled.
"Ok if you are not going to open your eyes then I..", stepping forward he again lessened the distance between them. Perceiving his face near hers, the troubled woman furrowed her brows.
>> Naughty Jalal doing chance pe dance 🤣
Tilting head he was looking at her lips while moving towards the tempting side when she opened her eyes. A winning smile erupted on his lips and she squinted at him. Irked by his smile, she glared at him but it was a mere vague attempt as she couldn't restrain her blush bestowing a triumphant expression on him.
Pressing lips not to laugh, she turned her face aside and he came closer. Giving him a look, she pushed a man lighty and swiftly advanced towards a door.
Grinning at her, he shouted from behind "I am still waiting for an answer" making a halt on her feet as she gleefully frowned. "He still remember our conversation. How stubborn he is."
Turning back she smiled at him and anticipated he raised brows in glee.
"After five minutes, In a garden.. I will be waiting for you", saying this she ran out of a room, leaving an inquisitive man behind as he smiled broadly.
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"What she's upto?", glancing around the garden jalal looked for his girl. "I wanted to hear those words from her but here I ended up in saying those words first", shaking head in rue he walked to a fountain when a sound of anklets caught his attention. So eager to get a glimpse of his love, he swiftly turned his head to a direction from where the sound had come but to his disappointment he found no one.
Soon he heard a melodious voice and flabbergasted,he frowned.
>> OKAY!! All below part was the biggest surprise.. I thought the OS was only till birthday gift, but you blended Goa revelation into it VERY BEAUTIFULLY!! 👏👏
This tightest hug is for the effort you put in finding this song and its translation. I initially thought you copy pasted from chapter 1, but the translation differed.. and I was like 😲😲😲😲... she searched for it on net?? A song of unknown language??
Seriously, if it were me, I wouldn't do that yaar... And this gave me all the more reason to call you sweetest Pagal.. 🤗
Ee velalo neevu em chestu vuntaavo
What would you be doing at this moment
Anukuntuvuntaanu prathi nimishamu nenu
Is what I keep thinking every second
As he listened her words, his lips curled into a winsome smile. " My Meenu.."
Naa gunde enaado cheyi jaari poyindi
I have lost the control over my heart
Nee needa ga maari naa vaipu raanandi
It has turned into a shadow of yours and is reluctant to come back to me
Dooraana vuntune em maaya chesaavo
Even though you are far from me...your magic is all over me
"What a smart way to fulfil my wish.. My cunning jo", he shook head in amusement, adoring the love and affection she had for him while relishing the lyrics and the way she chose to convey her feelings, in her melodious voice.
|| Ee velalo ||
Nadi reyilo neevu...nidaraina raaneevu
Even when it's past midnight...you wouldn't let me sleep
As she continued with the song, suddenly a smile on his face got lessened as a strange feeling wrinkled his forehead.
Gadipedelaa kaalamu(2)
How can I spend the days this way?
"This song.. This Voice.. I have heard this before.. but.. where??",knitting brows he spent few moments in contemplation.
Pagalaina kaasepu...pani chesuko neevu
During the day...you wouldn't let me work on anything
Nee meedane dhyaanamu (2)
My mind is filled with you
She moved towards him with a winsome smile adorning her face and he finally got to see her petite form,advancing towards him. Leaving his cogitation, jalal smiled at his girl.
Ye vaipu choostunnaa...nee roope thochindi
Where ever I look...I can only see your image
Holding a broad smile of unfeigned delight, jalal started moving towards her whilst she kept singing, stepping towards him with her eyes fixed downwards.
Nuvvu kaaka veredi...kanipinchanantondi
Nothing else seems to appear before me except you
Looking up, she glimpsed at him as he stood in front of her just 4 steps away now. Gazing at her,Jalal smiled pleasantly.
Ee indrajaalanni...
This magic..
"Ouch..", a shrill cry left her lips and his eyes widened in alarm. Rushing to her, jalal curved his hand around her shoulders, "What happen jo?
Looking down, he espied a thorn in her feet as she lifted her left foot. "Come..", lifting her in his arms he moved to a wooden bench placed near a fountain as he made her sit..
"Sshh..", she hissed in pain. Strained-face, he looked at her with concern. Holding her feet gently, he pulled out a thorn and gently brushed his thumb over the spot when a black mole beneath the first toe on her foot caught his attention. Smiling on recalling the cute incident when he got to know about her little secret in a hotel room, jalal gently brushed his thumb on a familiar dot. Feeling a tingling sensation with his touch,jodha backed off her foot a little but he was not in a mood to leave as heedless of her reaction, he stared at her mole for a while.
Suddenly his grip on her foot loosened, eyebrows rose rapidly for a split second and then drop again, eyes widened in bewilderment and mouth dropped open.
"Jalal..", she called.
But the pensive man didn't react for he recollected the incident when he first saw this "amazing dot." Slowly, his mind started recalling all the incidents of that day IN GOA.
"Same song... Same Voice... Same thorn??", his lips broke into an amused smile. "Did we meet before I joined Regal?", jodha's words at a hotel on their first lunch date flashed across his mind.
" I don't believe this.. Is this true?? Really??.. so this means.. that girl was my jo??", forgetting her presence completely, he grinned some more-her foot still in his hands.
"Jalal..", this time her voice was louder than before which successfully dragged him out of his introspection.
"Jalal.. where are you lost?", little annoyance was perceptible in her tone and he looked up.
The delighted brown eyes met with the confused hazel eyes.
"Do you know me?" His face contorted into a devious grin whilst her face creased into a muddled frown.
"ee indrajalanni, neevena chesindi? (Is that you who did this magic to me?)", He laughed his delight.
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>> Perfectly imperfect juncture to stop it 😡 What bribe do you take to continue this?
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