NOVEL~*Hiding behind a Stranger*~ Thread 3- CHAPTERS 5 & 6

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Kalgi22

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Posted: 9 years ago

#111

Originally posted by: cute.manasi

am i wrong kalgi di ???

No not at all. I was in peace and enjoyed the update but now scratching my head

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@old_charm

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Posted: 9 years ago

#112

Originally posted by: Kalgi22
No not at all. I was in peace and enjoyed the update but now scratching my head

same here...😆

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melovesja

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Posted: 9 years ago

#113

how flawless write up of her state of mind and scan. it's spellbound me. stranger became her savior and they come face to face was fantabulous. .👏 how intelligently , smartly crate the situation so only two of them their. No one around. magnificent interaction. use of word shahib is indicating .

You just play with the words and create imaginary world. You introduce any character with scan which saw person's importance, give freedom to us to understand and made their image and their character got imprinted on our mind and also left their impact on us. Feel Connected with story.😊

The stranger the way you introduced him I don't have appropriate word to describe his personality (he captured reader's mind) and your writing. 👏

His mere presence or glare was enough to got hold of person. Helped people with knowledge, courage, things, value and save life , but not a emotional or connect with people. Practical man and pakka businessman.. Not flinched by allegation of opportunist. Intelligent and sharp. ⭐️😊 keen observer.

with the money for water bag we understand two type of mentality pay and use other one it's necessary of life so ready to share with any one without expectation. Bargain for water and haveli was kept it near reality.

Harka's people were not only loyal but care as relative, understand her, worried about what she going through and her comfort. she is simple, caring ,covering her people , ready to give her everything to save them, adjust herself as per situation and ready to let go as need of time. Softly took situation under control and know the person by behavior ( opportunist and money counting).😛

Description of forest, night, haveli , river bank and foot bridge make it visible. 😃

As she got her much needed privacy to settle her mind and heart on her own free from new issue . in the lap of mother nature with childhood's play she want to pour out her pain of lose, loneliness, worry of kuwarsa, possibility of unknown danger at every step, she miss Durga's guidance, heart wrenching wish of Durga's hand on her head all were so touchy. she wants relaxation from tumult but it was not easy so she left from there to face reality.

She faces threat to her life with Foot Bridge. Whole scan was written Very effectively. Fear engulfed me and my heart skip a bit when she flung in to water.

Stranger became her savior.😛 First she feared from him but try to hold him to save herself and when she recognize his voice her fear got vanished .She didn't feel uncomfortable and in his presence observed his features to know his identity.

He saved her but stay unbothered not look at her. He is not interested in women so when she try to hold him he feel it uncomfortable and in frustration he shouted but stuck at her Hazel . No one is less she to retort back as she too not interested to roaming around man. Bluntly stated If she was not helpless she went away from here and he show her way to climb as he believe in self dependent personality. Loved first interaction between them.😃 which may become their life changing .

two people with some similarity and some contras.😊

Both were loner one was supported by loyal people and other was supported by loyal friends(as per prologue) she was emotional ,attached to people ,caring , helping and he was hard hearted, unbothered, non caring . their different personality and as you vivid the story it's become more interesting😊.

opps it's become too long . I was not able to stop my self😳

Edited by melovesja - 9 years ago

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melovesja

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Posted: 9 years ago

#114

@ nancy

wow fitted pics to explain both personality.👏

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IshqHaiWoEhsaas

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Posted: 9 years ago

#115

Good Evening Harshu di and all...🤗

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IshqHaiWoEhsaas

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Posted: 9 years ago

#116

Originally posted by: cute.manasi

i know re...😆

but this shagun , all thanx to her...😡

You're most welcome dii...🤗

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Cattywrites

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Posted: 9 years ago

#117

Originally posted by: Kalgi22
Hey girls, it's totally my POV and more towards practical thinking. Chellam correct me if anything wrong... and I'm not talking about 21st century. 😆

1. Why Durga wouldn't have taken her life before anything? It's simple. After all she's trained and skilled warrior. She doesn't want to end her life as like all other women do in her century. Instead she wanted to fight and die. Because she knew well she can't escape so she as like all warriors would like to die by fighting. Isn't it a forward thinking of 17th century woman? So I'm obviously admiring her decision.
>>> I totally agree with this point kal!!😊

2. Why Khalil didn't just kill her? it's again simple. He's ruthless killer. For him, women meant to be for pleasure. But here he saw a striking young beauty; she didn't kill herself nor beg him for anything as the most women do in that century. Instead she fought back and killed his some of men. How come we can expect him to just kill her. And after all he's not 21st century man to encourage equality and accept her fighting nor he's not Ram. So as per his assumption and to treat his hurt ego, he punished her by taking her modesty that more valuable to her. (Well I'm not trying to justify Khalil here😆😕)
>>> Sadly,we still have such Khalil(s) in our society. what u write is correct dear!!

3. If suppose Khalil let her alive, What Durga would do?? Yes she would kill herself. Because there's no purpose of living that would hurt her more than anything in that society she's living and she knew well her sister is there for her people. If you all think she should live to take revenge... It's not simple as we think. Because she's not a powerful queen of big empire. She's just orphaned heiress of small land with just 400 families and that too already under Mughal empire power. Who's going to support her? Will her fiance do? Is it possible? He's still a prince who is already serving for Mughal. Do you all think he would choose Durga over his people?? NO. The simple example is Why Raja Bharmal married off her daughter to Mughal without fighting back. And I'm sure, Durga is not selfish to sacrifice her own people for her revenge. After all she was fighting for well-being of her people.
>>> I already wrote about this, what I feel so don't agree with this point.

4. Ok let's assume she alive and going to fight for her disgrace... then what's the purpose of our heroine?? 😉 We all very well know that she's already overshadowed by her sister. So in this story, Durga is one side character and her horrified murder is the pulling force to our heroine to come out with some plot and take revenge.😆
>>> I asked that thing in general and There was nothing related to storyline as I know she had to die in story.

Some talked about Draupadi. Though I don't accept her as a human being, still she was backed with the most powerful god Krishna and her five great warrior husbands. More to it, she's princess by birth and queen by marriage. And here also her disgrace is pulling force for Pandava. Otherwise do you all think that Pandava would ever fight against their relatives??? NO. Not in their dreams even. So here too, Durga death and her sacrifice are the pulling force for our heroine. So Keep the rage 'simmering' girls ... Revenge will come! 😆

Thanks for the pm kal!!😊

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IshqHaiWoEhsaas

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Posted: 9 years ago

#118

Originally posted by: 155pari

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kaisa shagun?first one or second one?

Hatt paagal... maine chhutku kaha, bacchon wala nhi!!! 😆😆😆

Waise mera side-slinging type hai...😆

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Cattywrites

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Posted: 9 years ago

#119

Originally posted by: Kalgi22
Payal, I don't think girls who were the victims of assault suicide only because they lost the dignity. But it's because of the FEAR!!!
Fear of facing the society!
Fear of their future!
Fear of what if someone making advantage of her vulnerable state! (We knew several stories victim of rape, raped by police and others who were in judicial system..I'm not particularly pointing police but it's just an example.)
And Fear of etc... etc!
If that girl get proper assurance, security and support from her closed ones, I don't think they will think of suicide.

I agree to this but she should give a chance atleast.Thinking about such things, if a girl commit suicide then it's not right because if she thinks like that, then this will happen with her. If we have faith on God or ourselves then we can do anything and solve any problem.

but many girls don't think this way(Police thing which u wrote) and commit suicide because of shame or family or this society which I feel is absolutely wrong!!

and that's just my opinion dear. I know that no one will agree to this.

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Cattywrites

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Posted: 9 years ago

#120

I read few comments, not all but noticed that everyone was saying that's not possible in 17th century. Well whatever I wrote in my last comment, I don't think that makes a difference whether she's a 17th century girl or of 21st century. That's all I can say!!

And don't worry I am not bringing back this topic again. kal pmed me the links so had to reply her.

Edited by sharmacatty - 9 years ago