FF:Breathless: Tryst with Fate (Chap 4 updated page 1 (23.03.16)) - Page 8

Originally posted by: lovespari

The frst chap was amazing dii😃
ja was rescued n saved by jo but tht time he didnt recognize her as woman but waking aftr deep slumber n watching her tendering his wounds he recognize her in mans cloth also...😉😆 tht she is a beautyful doe shaped eyes women who tks his breath with her frst sight😉 Haa, its attraction at first sight!
both didnt reveal ther true identity but ja cam to knw abut her place n her real name..😉 lucky man
but dnt unfrstnd y she disguised.. Yes, he knows one clue to her identity. But she does not know. There will be twists until they know each other's identity.
n thn both separate jo on her path n ja on his...
but with restlessness n unfrgateable memory with thm😉😃

Originally posted by: lovespari

The scnd update was fantastic dii😃
both ja jo was jst lost in echother thoughts😉 Yes, they were lost in each other's soul mates.
aftr reaching ja was jst mking all effrts frm wher he culd again met his dream girl😉😆 now his all nights n days passed only remmbering abut her😉 First time, he was intrigued by the strength of a woman who had rescued him. Hence it was more of respect than lust, but physical features contributed to messing of his thoughts.
n now he gt a chance to meet her again he is wrking hard😉
both r drownd on ech other thoughts..one is lost in brown orbs n other one in her beauty n her talent n skills 😉😃
love the precap dii..
waiting fr nxt update 😊

Originally posted by: lovespari

u r a superb writer dii😃

n the way u combined ur story with ur beautyful poem is jst amazing dii⭐️😃 Haa, you will be tortured with my peotry unfortunately. Cant help it. 😃
jst loved it dii😃
ohh yes its frst tim i read ur story i didnt read ur OS so did i hv to read tht also...did i hd missed anything... No You have not missed anything. I did post part one as an OS in another thread.
or this story is with strt...

Originally posted by: harshu27

congo deeps so finally u decided to write an ff... 😉 and good u u took dis awsum decision... 😛 loved ur updates so joja r thinking about each other... 😛 precap is interesting do update soon...will b waiting fr ur update... 😛

Originally posted by: Suganya.S

I know it's late , still 😆

But u see , i m as usual the same ! Nothing as changed 😉

The part wen Jalal yearns to meet jo and the sister's chit-chat was so beautifully described 👏👍🏼

Thank you dear. Yes, two souls yearn for eachother and sister's banter was inevitable.

I particularly loved the way u have penned all the scenes perfectly well that i m now doubly intrigued to know how jagati bai tortured her prince charming for 365 days 😲 For that you will need to read as the mysteries unfold.

Update next part soon😃

Originally posted by: amitaprasad

amazing awesome beautiful beyond words.feeling short of words to praise ur story.please pm me.

Originally posted by: lashy

Yet another masterpiece dear!!!👏

Loved how the hazel eyed warrior managed to sow the seeds of tumult in Jalal's mind...yet... my biggest love for this chapter is because Jalal is not alone in experiencing this tumult. Jodha is affected too!!!😛😳 Haa! first time Jalal is rescued by a woman. And Jo is mesmerised by Jalal's aura. So both are lost in each other.

Love the fact that this development has not turned an Emperor into a lovesick puppy and that he continues to thirst for power... that his ambitions have not waned... Glad you liked that. Well, he was an Emperor who needs to think of bigger things always. His need for power will be exist forever. Yes, I didn't like the natakiya roopantar, hence made sure the Emperor stays an Emperor no matter what happens.

that he remains -in truest sense - the warrior he was before the chance-meet!!! So much so that he plans to attend a Gurukul to hone his skills, eh? 😉 Yes, he was bowled over by the skills of the warrior who rescued him. So much so, he wants to master that skill if possible.

Loved the dedication he shows towards his training!!! Wine and women... Imagine staying away from THAT!!! (Not to mention, the unpleasant reactions it evoked in Ruqs😆) Haa! Kuch paane ke liye, kuch kona padtha hai. So to attain superior concentration, one has to toil hard, even if that means one has to sacrifice simple pleasures. Here simple pleasures of an Emperor Wine & women will have to be strangers to him for some time 😆 .Well Ruqs can't understand other's point of view. She will only look after herself.

Amer was Amer - happy, chirpy, festive and bustling! The sisters brought the homely aura we associate with the Rajput palace.😃 Yes, wanted to introduce Amer as happy & festive.

My only doubt though was how did Jodha hope to see the black-eyed man in the Rajput festival... I assumed Jodha/Sujamal recognized him as a Mughal because of his attire/dressing style... I could be mistaken though... 😳 sorry if so... Yes, you were right. Sujamal recognised him as one belonging to the Mughals. But not his true identity.

The assassin vs Sleeping with the enemy lines really intrigued me...as did the prologue and the infamous 365!!! WAITING for more.. Yes you will have to wait for it to unfold.

Btw, sorry for the delay in replying.. have been so busy... and wanted to read/reply when I had nothing else on my mind... 🤗 Sorry I'm late in replying. Please comment when you can. 🤗

Originally posted by: Jeryl

Let me reserve a slot before you post the next update 😉
Congratulations Deeps for your first fan fiction 🥳
We are eagerly waiting to see how the renowned poetess is going to mesmerize us with her writing skills 😆
The prologue and the first 2 chapters have already become the testimony of sorts for your ability in your new endeavour. We are happily waiting for the promised twists and exciting events as this story unfolds in the future 😃 Yes, the twists and turns will be there for sure. With me its unavoidable. 😆


Breathless: Tryst with Fate

- Destiny has already decided to have a romantic, rendezvous encounter between these lovers and the first move has been already in place. Yes, the first twist was an encounter of mutual attraction.😉

Prologue (Sounds interesting...)

- The mighty Jalal was challenged by his own Princess who is yet to become HIS QUEEN
- Jalal is awestruck by her beauty, brain and not to forget her bravery
- He has been bitten by love bug but his lady love is yet to reciprocate. Its admiration for a woman who rescued him. She was the first fiesty woman he had encountered, hence the instant attraction.
- Jodha is feeling guilty during the kidnapping saga and desperate to seek HIS forgiveness (for torturing HIM over 365 days??!!) You are going to the end of the story so soon😲 tortures & twists awaits you dear. Wait for it as it unfolds.
- Has Jalal found an innovative way to torture HER in 365 ways? For that thy cerebrum is working hard😆

Ch.1

Fate's first step towards its goal: Making the mighty warrior and the crouching tigress to meet under disguise and fall in love at the very first instance. Breathlessness was in the air...making the emperor for a moment to forget his ambition to expand his empire beyond the current boundaries and the princess to be drawn deeply to a pair of black orbs... Yes quite true!, But both are stubborn souls yet were attracted to each other without them acknowledging it. 😳

Ch.2

Down with a strange illness called LOVE, Jalal began his game by making the first move, by seeking the advice of his mentor Bairam Khan and eventually got a thumbs up reply unknowingly from him; Yes, the first bug of Loveria has bitten Jalal. Jodha only has symptom.
"It always seems impossible until its achieved, just like the fierce battles you have fought & won Jalal" spewed Bairam Khan. Bairam Khan was a steel pillar of support to jalal.

His confidence has soared to great highs by listening to his guru's plan. He is ready to sacrifice EVERYTHING to achieve what he wants. Yes, he has to let go of certain things in order to gain others. Ruks experiences her first failure... Yes, first of the many instances.
Life wasn't easy for the princess either...who was constantly looking out for the black orbs which mesmerized her entire being. Going through the entire profile of those Rajput princes didn't satiate her desperate eyes. Waiting for her Prince Charming to whisks her away...Will it happen?! Well, chapter 3 has some revelations. Yes, she was mesmerised, but she will revoke that soon.

Precap

But little did she know, that she would be sleeping with the enemy
And little did he know that his rendezvous would be with an assassin.

Enemy and assassin??!! Fate's another game?! Yes, another twister of twists.

Deeps...Your poetic musings at the end of each chapter are reflecting their mindsets and feelings well, making us to crave for more. Eagerly waiting for the next twist... Gald you like it. Will unfold slowly.

Rose

Originally posted by: maniwood

Lovely story I read it in one go

Update soon and plz pm me 😊