FF:Breathless: Tryst with Fate (Chap 4 updated page 1 (23.03.16))

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SUGANYA.S

@Suganya.S

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Posted: 9 years ago

#31

I know it's late , still 😆

But u see , i m as usual the same ! Nothing as changed 😉

The part wen Jalal yearns to meet jo and the sister's chit-chat was so beautifully described 👏👍🏼 I particularly loved the way u have penned all the scenes perfectly well that i m now doubly intrigued to know how jagati bai tortured her prince charming for 365 days 😲

Update next part soon😃

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maheshi

@amitaprasad

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Posted: 9 years ago

#32

amazing awesome beautiful beyond words.feeling short of words to praise ur story.please pm me.

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 9 years ago

#33

Yet another masterpiece dear!!!👏

Loved how the hazel eyed warrior managed to sow the seeds of tumult in Jalal's mind...yet... my biggest love for this chapter is because Jalal is not alone in experiencing this tumult. Jodha is affected too!!!😛😳

Love the fact that this development has not turned an Emperor into a lovesick puppy and that he continues to thirst for power... that his ambitions have not waned... that he remains -in truest sense - the warrior he was before the chance-meet!!! So much so that he plans to attend a Gurukul to hone his skills, eh? 😉

Loved the dedication he shows towards his training!!! Wine and women... Imagine staying away from THAT!!! (Not to mention, the unpleasant reactions it evoked in Ruqs😆)

Amer was Amer - happy, chirpy, festive and bustling! The sisters brought the homely aura we associate with the Rajput palace.😃

My only doubt though was how did Jodha hope to see the black-eyed man in the Rajput festival... I assumed Jodha/Sujamal recognized him as a Mughal because of his attire/dressing style... I could be mistaken though... 😳 sorry if so...

The assassin vs Sleeping with the enemy lines really intrigued me...as did the prologue and the infamous 365!!! WAITING for more..

Btw, sorry for the delay in replying.. have been so busy... and wanted to read/reply when I had nothing else on my mind... 🤗

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divya joshi

@divyaJA

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Posted: 9 years ago

#34

Awesome story..
cont soon..
do PM me..plzzz

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Deepa

@Deepasub

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Posted: 9 years ago

#35

So sorry IFians for the delay.
Working on the update will update soon.
As soon as I am happy with it.
By end up of the week it will be up for sure.

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Kalgi22

@Kalgi22

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Posted: 9 years ago

#36

Originally posted by: Deepasub
So sorry IFians for the delay.
Working on the update will update soon.
As soon as I am happy with it.
By end up of the week it will be up for sure.

Aww Waiting

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harshal

@harshu27

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Posted: 9 years ago

#37

Originally posted by: Deepasub
So sorry IFians for the delay.
Working on the update will update soon.
As soon as I am happy with it.
By end up of the week it will be up for sure.

waiting... 😉

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Jeryl

@Jeryl

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Posted: 9 years ago

#38

Let me reserve a slot before you post the next update 😉
Congratulations Deeps for your first fan fiction 🥳
We are eagerly waiting to see how the renowned poetess is going to mesmerize us with her writing skills 😆
The prologue and the first 2 chapters have already become the testimony of sorts for your ability in your new endeavour. We are happily waiting for the promised twists and exciting events as this story unfolds in the future 😃

Breathless: Tryst with Fate

- Destiny has already decided to have a romantic, rendezvous encounter between these lovers and the first move has been already in place

Prologue (Sounds interesting...)

- The mighty Jalal was challenged by his own Princess who is yet to become HIS QUEEN
- Jalal is awestruck by her beauty, brain and not to forget her bravery
- He has been bitten by love bug but his lady love is yet to reciprocate
- Jodha is feeling guilty during the kidnapping saga and desperate to seek HIS forgiveness (for torturing HIM over 365 days??!!)
- Has Jalal found an innovative way to torture HER in 365 ways?

Ch.1

Fate's first step towards its goal: Making the mighty warrior and the crouching tigress to meet under disguise and fall in love at the very first instance. Breathlessness was in the air...making the emperor for a moment to forget his ambition to expand his empire beyond the current boundaries and the princess to be drawn deeply to a pair of black orbs...

Ch.2

Down with a strange illness called LOVE, Jalal began his game by making the first move, by seeking the advice of his mentor Bairam Khan and eventually got a thumbs up reply unknowingly from him;
"It always seems impossible until its achieved, just like the fierce battles you have fought & won Jalal" spewed Bairam Khan.

His confidence has soared to great highs by listening to his guru's plan. He is ready to sacrifice EVERYTHING to achieve what he wants. Ruks experiences her first failure...
Life wasn't easy for the princess either...who was constantly looking out for the black orbs which mesmerized her entire being. Going through the entire profile of those Rajput princes didn't satiate her desperate eyes. Waiting for her Prince Charming to whisks her away...Will it happen?!

Precap

But little did she know, that she would be sleeping with the enemy
And little did he know that his rendezvous would be with an assassin.

Enemy and assassin??!! Fate's another game?!

Deeps...Your poetic musings at the end of each chapter are reflecting their mindsets and feelings well, making us to crave for more. Eagerly waiting for the next twist...

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Edited by Jeryl - 9 years ago