FF:Breathless: Tryst with Fate (Chap 4 updated page 1 (23.03.16))

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Geetbaala

@Geetbaala

Dazzler

Posted: 9 years ago

#21

Fanatabulous chappy Deepu👏👏

Love you dear for continuing this story🤗

I loved it to the core.❤️

Jo and Jalal both sailing in same boat...both were mesmerized by each other..

She was immersed in his deep black orbs and he was awestruck by the celestial nymph who knocked his heart to make him realise it exists.❤️

Ohh! he was all set to meet that angel in disguise..

What happens wen she comes to know the handsome black orbs which hypnotized her was of none other than her enemy.😳

Most amazing part in your writing I always find exciting is your poems Deepu...

Sweet torments which were spinning in their budding heart were communicating with each other through telepathy..praising each other's features both drown in eachother... her brown eyes and his deep black orbs...her fragile body yet agile fighting skills sent him to lala world to go gaga over his disguised beauty😳

And his masculine strong shoulders ..curly hairs ...great persona attracted her.

Precap is intresting Deeps!

Both are together wow...don't know each other identity...woooh

Now I am eager to read further.. Update next chappy soon.

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Ashvneet

@Ashvneet2399

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#22

Unressed on pg 1 dii 😳 !!

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Bond_7

@Bond_7

Rocker

Posted: 9 years ago

#23

What a lovely update!❤️

First abt the prologue😳,very interesting one😉.SHE tortured HIM for 365 days and HE wants to torture HER in 365 ways..what an idea sirji !!😆

I was confused with the new name,Jagti Bai.Got the clarity after reading Ch-2.

Chapter 2 was really fantastic👏.Both are breathless and drowned in each other's thoughts😛.I'm waiting for their next mulakat eagerly😳

The words,"over analytical cerebrum" cracked me😆.Your style of describing people,their thoughts and emotions is beautiful😃

The way you sum up the entire chapter,their emotions in the form of poem is just amazing⭐️

Update soon,akka and thnx for the PM😊

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Kalgi22

@Kalgi22

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#24

Wow Deeps⭐️ First of all Congratulation for your FF👏

With the mysterious prologue with 365 days 😲😲 What a start it is. Excellent! Celestial nymph and prince charming ☺️ Wow! 😃 getting ready for their next meet at Diwali Much excited to read your twisted plans so that twisted story 😃

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lovespari

@lovespari

Rocker

Posted: 9 years ago

#25

Congratulation fr ur frst FF deep dii🥳
prologue is super interesting dii😉😃
but hv one ques did the man is ja wjo kidnappd her or one more did both ja jo mrried😕😆

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lovespari

@lovespari

Rocker

Posted: 9 years ago

#26

The frst chap was amazing dii😃
ja was rescued n saved by jo but tht time he didnt recognize her as woman but waking aftr deep slumber n watching her tendering his wounds he recognize her in mans cloth also...😉😆 tht she is a beautyful doe shaped eyes women who tks his breath with her frst sight😉
both didnt reveal ther true identity but ja cam to knw abut her place n her real name..😉 lucky man
but dnt unfrstnd y she disguised..
n thn both separate jo on her path n ja on his...
but with restlessness n unfrgateable memory with thm😉😃

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lovespari

@lovespari

Rocker

Posted: 9 years ago

#27

The scnd update was fantastic dii😃
both ja jo was jst lost in echother thoughts😉
aftr reaching ja was jst mking all effrts frm wher he culd again met his dream girl😉😆 now his all nights n days passed only remmbering abut her😉
n now he gt a chance to meet her again he is wrking hard😉
both r drownd on ech other thoughts..one is lost in brown orbs n other one in her beauty n her talent n skills 😉😃
love the precap dii..
waiting fr nxt update 😊

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lovespari

@lovespari

Rocker

Posted: 9 years ago

#28

u r a superb writer dii😃
n the way u combined ur story with ur beautyful poem is jst amazing dii⭐️😃
jst loved it dii😃
ohh yes its frst tim i read ur story i didnt read ur OS so did i hv to read tht also...did i hd missed anything...
or this story is with strt...

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harshal

@harshu27

Stunner

+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#29

congo deeps so finally u decided to write an ff... 😉 and good u u took dis awsum decision... 😛 loved ur updates so joja r thinking about each other... 😛 precap is interesting do update soon...will b waiting fr ur update... 😛

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Deepa

@Deepasub

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#30

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Ah! Thank you all for liking my craziness and thanks to those for commenting. It helps me to come up with more twists that you all can ponder a bit more. 😆

Will reply to your comments slowly but surely.
Thank u all.

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