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OS: Ankahee Baatein
Hi! This is my first creative writing ever. Creative writing is not my forte. My field is science/medical related but I love reading (fiction, non-fiction or anything that gives me knowledge). I am huge fan of Akdha and have almost read all the fan-fictions in this forum. I also post my opinions on analysis thread and reviewed fan-fictions but never wrote a os,ss or ff. Almost a month ago, one of my dearest friend and superb ff writer, Bhavini (shahbhavini) told me after reading my reviews on her stories that I should write a story on Akdha and I told her it is not my cup of tea and kindly denied her idea. But, couple of days later, one idea for a story struck me but could not gather courage to write it ( My idea that time was of Jalal-Jodha meeting in Mathura.) Then, two-three days ago she insisted again that I should write a story and this time I thought of writing based on Jodha coming back to Agra and coincidentally she suggested same thing. But, I told her that I am not too sure but will think about it. In last two days, I had developed a story in my mind but just could not bring my self to start typing it. But, here I am, presenting you guys, my first story ever!!! (I am very nervous and excited). Thank you for reading my rant/introduction/background and my story!!! đ
Disclaimer: This is a fan-fiction based on Jodha and Jalal (historical characters shown in the show)! This story has nothing to do with real Jodha (Harka bai/heer kanwar) and real Akbar (Jallaludin Mohammad). I have no intention of hurting anyone's sentiments! Forgive me if anyone is hurt or offended!
(NOTE: few scenes might be similiar to shown in the show.This story is starting after the scene where Jodha is done talking to Dadisa about the trip to Baba Salim chisti's . English translation of dialogues are in parentheses in pink)
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Jodha is tossing and turning in her huge, comfortable and cosy bed (in Amer). She has been thinking about her entire conversation with her dadisa when she was reminiscing about the beautiful trip with her Shahenshah to Baba Salim Chisti's abode. She had felt little lighter sharing her feelings with her dadisa about how she felt regarding recent happening between her and Shahenshah.
Jodha (thinking): hum toh naaraz or krodith the Shahenshah par, toh aise kaise hum kho gaye unki yaadon mein, jab hum dadisa se baat kar rahe the. kya humme unki yaad aarahi hain? nahi, nahi-woh to aise hi, kyunki dadisa ne pucha isliye humne unhe yaatra ke baare mein bata rahe the. Accha , bahot soch liya, hume so jana chahiye, kitni ratri hogayi hain
( I was upset and angry at Shahenshah, then how could I get lost in thoughts when I was talking to grandma? Am I missing him? No, no, it's because grandma was asking about the trip so I was just telling her. Anyway, I am thinking too much, I should go to sleep, it is too late).
( Jodha's hojra at Agra)
Jalal is holding and caressing Jodha's payal which he had found near the pond in Amer when he saw Jodha first time during Ganghor festival.
Jalal (thinking):Jodha begum, hum nahin jaante the ke, jinhe hum apni jeet ka tohfa or zidd samaj ke liye laye the, unhi se hum ek din mohabbat karne lagenge aur woh humari zindagi ban jayegi! aur unhe hum apne hi vajah se kho denge! Kaash humne aap pe bharosa kiya hota! kaash hum Maham Anga ki baaton mein nahi aate! Kaash humne aapse saaf saaf kaha hota keh hum aap pe bharosa karte hain, aur hume aapki fikar hain, isliye hum jaanna chahte hain ke aap kisse milli thi, mandir ke picche! kash apne hume bata diya hota ke aap ne zubaan di hain aur samay aane pe hume sab kuch batadenge! toh shayad yeh faaslein nahi aate hamare beech! Laut aaiye Jodha begum, khuda ke liye laut aaiye waapas!
( Jodha begum, I did not know that whom I consider a gift of my victory and my obsession, I will fall in love with her one day and would become my life and will lose her because of my own foolishness. I wished I had trusted you and did not listen to Maham Anga! Wished I had told you that I trust you, am concerned about you and that's why I want to know that who did you meet behind the temple!I wished you had told me that you promised someone but would tell me everything when the time is right! then, may be there would have been no problems between us! Come back, Jodha begum, for god's sake, please come back!)
(Next day at Amer in morning)
Jodha is feeding pigeons but forgot to bring water. Shehnaaz comes and brings water and tells her that birds get thirsty too. She recalls the time when Shahenshah had said same thing right before when they left for Ajmer shariff trip. She is lost in thoughts when Jalal had saved her from falling by holding her hand which brings a smile on her face. A Maid calls her by breaking her thoughts and gives her clothes for her fencing practice.
Jodha is practicing her fencing skills (sword practice) with a soldier and gets lost into thoughts when she had fought first time with Shahenshah using sword and how he had blamed her beauty for his defeat and thus complimenting her which makes her blush. Because she is lost in memories, she stumbles and her feet bleeds but does not realize. Suddenly, soldier stops and brings it to her notice and calls for help.
Shehnaaz brings a medicinal paste and applies to her feet. Jodha is not really paying attention to any of it and remembers when Jalal had made a hot compress to soothe her feet on the way to Baba Salim chisti's trip. She is thinking how he had been so caring towards her during that time and how soon it went all away in turn making her sad.
A Maid comes to tell Jodha that her breakfast is being brought to her room. She is going to her room and in process she is passing by her brother's room. She is happy to see how her brother and sister-in-law are sharing a plate of food and feeding each other. She arrives in her room and sits down to eat. She is recalling about her brother and sister-in-law and relating to the time when she and Jalal had asked her to share a plate and insists on eating the same food she eats and complimented her cooking skills. She is smiling remembering all of it but suddenly realizes that she is alone here in amer- away from him. She leaves and runs into the garden and starts sobbing.
Jodha (thinking and crying): Kya ho rahe humein!kyun hum unki judi huyi baatein yaad aa rahein hain! kyun hum apne aap ko sambhal nahi paa rahein !hum kal raat se unhi ke baare mein soch rahe! Pehle pakshion ko dana dete vakt, phir talwarbaazi karte vakth aur tabh toh hamein chot bhi lagi aur ehsaas bhi nahi hua! Phir dava lagate samay aur phir jab humne bhaisa aur bhaabhi sa koh dekha tab! hume nahi yaad karna unhe jab ki unhone hum pe vishwaas nahi kiya! jab hume unse prem hone hi laga tha ke, unhone hum pe laanchan lagaya! kyun kaanha hum unhe bhul nahi paa rahe hain! hum unse dur hoke bhi khush nahi hain! kya karein hum, kanha! kripiya karke hamari madad kijiya!!
( What is happening to me? Why am I remembering things related to him? why am I not being able to handle myself? why am I thinking about him since last night? First, when I was feeding birds, then during sword practice when I did not even realize I was hurt, then during application of medicine and lastly when I saw my brother and sister-in-law. I don't want to remember him when he did not even trust me! When I just started loving him, he accused me of adultery! Why can't I forget him? I am far away from him and yet I am not happy. what do I do, Kanha? Please help me, Kanha!)
A maid comes to tell her that Raja Bharmal had called her. Jodha goes and finds out about Shahenshah forgiving Shivani and Tejwant. Jodha tries to show Shivani's point-of-view to her father. Her father says he cannot forgive Shivani but wishes her well. Jodha tells that Dadisa that she understand love better than before but she is still mad at Shivani for putting her Mughal family's honour at stake. She was trying to show her father the other side of coin but does not mean she supports Shivani's elopment. She also tells her Dadisa that she is little surprised that Shahenshah had forgiven Shivani because she knows that how upset and furious he was when Shivani eloped and thus breaking his brother and her devar's heart. She wonders if he had started understanding love better just like her and how come even after she refused to go with him to Agra, he still forgave Shivani despite the latter being at fault. She wonders if Kanha is trying to give her some kind of signal.
(At Agra)
Jalal on other side had removed tirth kar (pilgrimage tax) on hindus and is hoping that Jodha at least thinks of him once when she hears this news.
(At Amer)
Outside Kali ma temple, Jodha is distributing coins to help hindus for pilgrim tax when she hears the news of Shahenshah removing pilgrimage tax. She is ecstatic and can't contain her happiness and excitement. When she hears subjects hailing her husband, she feels so proud of him and also being his wife! She is so touched by his gesture!
Jodha is sitting in her palkhi and looking how happy and relieved are the subjects. She remembers how her mother had said that "jo raja jamin pe raaj karte hain, woh mitti mein hi mil jaate hain aur joh raja apni praja ke hriday mein baste hain woh hamesha ke liye amar ho jata hain" (A king who rule over land, gets immersed in dust but a king who lives in his subjects' hearts, becomes immortal). She is thinking about all things that transpired between her and Shahenshah from Baba salim chisti's trip to harem election issue to murti khand issue to big fight that fateful night to meeting near mathura lake to jalal asking for forgiveness one last time in Amer to Mainavati's scolding (of how any other -rajavanshi would have not come to take back a wife who left her marital home) to Shaguni bai's conversation to Shivani's forgiveness and lastly the reactions of people with removal of pilgrimage tax on hindus. She also realizes that because she was hurt and angry in past few days she was not admitting to herself that she was also partly at fault regarding Sujamal bhaisa's misunderstanding. Yes, she did not know that Shahenshah knew of her outing at nights but later she realized that he still did not stop her when he found out first night because at first he did trust her but may be when she hid things from him, it created a suspicion in him and may be any other person would have doubted too.
Jodha comes to palace and tell her family that she had done a mistake and wants to rectify it and go back to her home- to HER shahenshah. She insists on leaving right away and not waiting for morning. Raja Bharmal decides to send her brothers with her for her protection and also sends a fastest horseman to send a message to Shahenshah that Jodha is coming back to her home.
(At Agra)
Jalal gets back a message after a day that HIS Jodha begum is coming back. He feels as if his life is coming back and bringing lots of happiness. He is so excited and rushes to tell his Ammijaan that Jodha begum is coming back. Both mother-son duo hug and gives thanks to Allah.
After two days in evening, Jalal, Hamida Bano, Salima Begum, Atgah Sahahb, Jiji Anga and others are waiting at the gate of Agra Palace to welcome Jodha begum.
Jalal is waiting eagerlessly for his Jodha begum while Jodha is impatiently waiting for her palkhi to halt and put down so she can see her Shahenshah. She gets down and sees Jalal and both lock their eyes. It seems like centuries have passed since they met. Their teary eyes reflect their happiness, relief, excitement and restlessness.
Jalal (thinking):hamari nigahein taras gayi thi aapke deedar ke liye. Itne din humne kaise apne aap ko sambhala hum hi jaante hain. Aur jabse humne aapki aane ki khabar suni hain, tubse to humare par ek ek pal bhari pad raha tha aapke intezaar main! aisa lag raha tha jaise ki vakt teher gaya ho!
( My eyes were desperately waiting to have one look of yours. You have no idea how I handled myself all these days. Since I heard of you coming back, each moment was weighing hard on me and I could wait no more. It felt like time has become still.)
Jodha (thinking): Jabse hume ehsaas hua ke hum bhi galat the, tabse hume chain nahi aaya. hume aapko aur kasht dena nahi chahte the. hum aapse shigr hi milna chahte the. hum laut aaye hain Shahenshah, aap ke liye, hamare liye aur hamare atoot rishte ke liye! (Since I have realized I was wrong too, I have been restless. I did not to cause you anymore hurt. I wanted to meet you right away. I have come back for you, for me and for our unbreakable relation).
Before Jalal can come forward to greet her, Hamida Bano comes and hugs Jodha and tells her how happy she is to see her back and how much she missed her. All other ladies take turn to meet Jodha. All are walking towards Jodha's hojra while Jalal is following them. Jodha keeps tuning back to see Jalal when others are busy talking with each other. Finally, Jodha and her company arrives in her room and tell her to take rest and leaves her alone.Just then, Jalal enters her room.
(Jodha's Hojra in Agra)
Jalal (smiling widely): Aadab Jodha begum!
Jodha (smiling too): Pranam Shahenshah!
Jalal: Hum bata nahi sakte ke hum kitne khush aapko yaha dekh kar! hume yakin hi nahi ho raha hain ke aap wapas aa gayi hain! (I cannot tell you how happy I am to see you here! I cannot believe you are back!)
Jodha: Hume vapas to aana hi tha Shahenshah!( Now getting teary-eyed and getting emotional and folding hands) Hume kshama kar dijiye Shahenshah! Aapne humse baar baar kshama maangi par humne aapko kshama nahi kiya! aap hamare dhundte huye mathura pahucha aur phir Amer bhi aaye aur phir bhi hum appko kshama na kar saka! hume bahot tehes pahochi thi ki aapne hum pe vishwas nahi kiya!aur hamare charitra pe ungli uthayi. Aur sabse jyada hume thes tab pahocchi jab aapne kaha ke hum vishpaan ke baad jab hum maut se wapas aaye to aapne kaha ke hum gair mard ke liya wapas aaye aur aapse badla lene ke liya aaye, aur aaj tak jo humne sab kiya woh sab naatak tha! Shayad hum se hi galti huyi hongi ke hum aapke vishwas na jeet sake!Par Jab humne bahot socha toh hume ehsaas hua ke hamari bhi kahi na kahi galti thi! agar humne aapse ek baar yeh kehne ki koshish ki hoti ke hum vachan band hain magar samay aate sab kuch bata denge toh shayad yeh sab na hota! hamae kshama kar dijiye shahenshah. humse bahot badi bhul ho gayi.
(I had to come back Shahenshah! Forgive me Shahenshah! You apologized to me repeatedly but I still did not forgive you. You came looking for me all the way to Mathura and then to Amer and I still did not forgive you. I was very hurt that you did not trust me and accused of adultery. It hurt me most when you said that I came back to life for other man after consuming poison and to take revenge from you and whatever I did until now was all drama! May be it was my fault that I could not win your trust. But, when I thought a lot, I realized that I was at fault too somewhere. If I had tried to tell you that I had given promise and when the right times comes, I would tell you everything, then may be all this won't have happened! Please forgive me Shahenshah! I made a big mistake!)
Jalal (holding her folded hands): nahi... nahi jodha begum! humse bahot badi bhul ho gayi ki humne aap pe vishwas nahi kiya, jisne hamari jaan bachane ke liye vish pi liya! aur humne kya kiya, use bhi naatak kehke uski bhi beizzati ki! hume muaff kar dijiye!hume aisa nahi kehna chahiye the! hume bahot sharminda hain us raat ko jo bhi humne aapse kaha! hum aisi bhul kabh bhi nahi karege!
(No... No Jodha begum! I made a huge mistake that I did not trust you, one whom consumed poison to save my life! What did I do? I said that it was all drama and insulted it too. Forgive me! I should not have said all of that! I am very ashamed of all what I said that night! I will never repeat same mistake!)
Jodha : ab in sab baaton ko bhul jaiye! Haan magar hum aapse ek baat jaroor kehna chahte hain ke jab aapne hum se aakhri baar pucha tha ke hum Agra wapas aayenge ya nahi aur hum ne na kaha tha. Aur aapne kahan the ke aapka guroor jit gaye aur aap haar gaye. Hum yehi kehna chahte hain ke woh hamara guroor nahi tha magar hamari pida thi! kyonki hume aisa laga ke jub chaha aapne hum ghar se nikila jab chaha bula liya,- jaisi ki hamari koi marzi hi nahi hain- hamara koi astitva hi nahi hain. kya hamara koi haq hi nahi hain koi faisla lene ka ya phir kuch kuch kehna ke hamare samabandh mein. Is liye humne kaha thi ke hum vapas tabhi aayenge jab hamara maan chahega.
(Now forget all this! But, yes I want to tell you one thing for sure that when you asked me last time if I will come back to Agra and you said that my ego and pride won and you lost. I just want to tell you that it was not my ego or pride but my anguish, hurt and frustration. Because I felt like that you called me back when you wished and threw me out when you felt like it- as if I don't have my own wish or any identity. Don't I have any right to take a decision or have any say in this relationship. That is why I said I will only come when I feel like coming back.)
Jalal: hume muaff kar dijiye. humne yeh vajah sochi hi nathi thi aur hume ehsaas hi nahi the ke aap ko aisa lag raha tha. agar hume maloom hota toh hum yeh kabhi na kehte ke aapka guroor hain joh aapko rok raha hain. aapka poora haq hain. hum dhyan rakhenge is baat ka.Magar hum bhi ek baat kehna chahte hain ke abse aap koi bhi baat ho to humse chupayengi nahi aur hume bina dare kahengi!
(Sorry. I did not even think about this and did not realize that this is how you felt! otherwise I would have never said that your ego and pride is stopping you. You have full right. I will keep in mind. But, I also want to tell you one thing that from now you will not hide anything from me and will tell me without fear).
Jodha: Par aap bhi hamari baat shanti se sunege aur gaur karenge naki kaat denge aur hum pe vishwas karenge! Ek aur baat hum aapko apne hriday se dhanyavaad dena chahte hain ke aapne tirth kar wapas le liya! hum itne prasan hain ke bata nahi sakte!
(But you also have to listen to entire thing nicely and pay attention to it and not ignore it and trust me too! Any yes, I also want to thank you wholeheartedly for removing a pilgrimage tax on hindus. I am so happy that I cannot even tell you!)
Rahim suddenly runs in Jodha's room surprising Jodha and making her happy. She takes him in her arms and hugs him. Rahim starts crying and tells her he missed her a lot and why did she leave him? He asks if she will leave him again! (Jalal is admiring Rahim and his choti-ammijaan's love towards each other).She answers she will never leave HIM by looking at her Shahenshah.
Rahim insists on hearing story from his chote abujaan and choti ammijaan. He brings both of them on Jodha's bed and sits between two to hear the story. He wants both of them to tell the story together by taking a turn. Jalal starts story by telling Rahim of a King who saw a Princess called "Registan ka Gulab" in her palkhi first time during Ganghor festival...Jodha continues to tell him how princess saw a handsome and uknown face which looked like a King in reflection of water. They continued the story while looking at each other and reveling in their journey and in between looking at Rahim while making themselves comfortable by lying down next to him on each side. They did not even realize when Rahim fell asleep and ended the story that with a new ray of sunshine will bring a positivity and a new beginning in King and Queen's lives. Jalal and Jodha falls asleep with smile on their faces ( next to Rahim ) with their hands entangled on top of Rahim's hands.
(One shot ends here)
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(Note: I know many of you must have expected romantic or passionate update but I felt this would be more apt and realistic at this point of time in the show. I feel the passion and romance would suit better when their old issues have been sorted out and not rushed)
Thank you all for giving a chance to a novice writer like me! Forgive me for any mistakes!
I would really appreciate if you can drop an honest and genuine review of this os! Like and genuine comments will be appreciated!! Constructive criticism is welcomed!
Looking forward to hear from you!đ
Special Mention: Thank you VERY much Bhavini for encouraging to write me a story and showing confidence in me! Lots of love đ¤
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