SEVEN Shots~Laal Ishq~*HOLI SPCL* ESP UPDATE*SR* ON PAGE 38(COMPLETED) - Page 16

Originally posted by: SUMESHNI

Superb amazing update

Plz plz continue soon

Originally posted by: akdha-fan

Awww..!!Such a sweet chapter...!!! This Jodha is sooo CUTE!! And Jalal is sooo mischievous!! The perfect combination...
And thank god u made it 7 shots... The story is going really well...

Originally posted by: shahbhavini

CHAPTER 2 COMMENT

Pallavi devi...aapke charan kaha hai... Hum aapko shahtan pranam karte hai...

ye lo balike...magar ek shan ruko...humare charan itne lambe nahi hai...USA tak kaise pahuchege...😆

MIND BLOWING⭐️... ROCKING😃... HILLARIOUS😆... PRECIOUS😳...ROMANTIC😳

Offo...saari vocab kharch kar daali tune to...thanku🤗

ISS OS KE LIYE MERE PAAS KOSABAD NAHI HAI... Me dil se keh rahi hu... yaar tune muje khush kar diya tere😊😛 update se... I remember I was not in good mood that entire week... After reading ur update me khush ho gayi...dilse👏

mera maksad hi wohi tha yaar...tabhi tune notice kiya hoga ke is story me ek bhi sad ya unhappy scenes nahi hai...its full too enjoyment wali story😃

I wish Jalal sabko mile aur aese surprise bhi... vow... The way he planned everything is just amazing... Really touching... Moti and Jalal Rocks...not together...lol

i hope yaar...waise ye surprise mere dream hubby ke liye tha...i love surprises...lekin abhi tak i dint get any...so fulfilled my wish here...imaginig myself as Jo😃

What touching note... Jodha senti... and Jalal worried... poor innocent fellow... how cute Jalal is... Jodha gooring Jallu...lol...When Jalal wiped her tears it tickled me... " Apki Khwhish chupayegi aur hume pata nahi chalega" loved it...

Aww...baby...thanku🤗

Salima Moti... Hamida... Jalal... Mirza...Maan... Bakshi... Yaha to pura khandan jama hai... lol I love how u have covered all good people in this os... bas happiness ... Sacchi me holi ko tune rangin kar diya...

tabhi maine koi negative character rakha hi ni...kyuki meko sirf khushiya dikhani thi...😃

What divine moment... when he asked her to put color on her face...and she said so sweetly...nisandeh shenshah...aapke atirikt koi aur hume aajka pehla rang lagaye...ye hum chahege bhi nahi... awww

And when he put sindoor in her maang... My heart filled with love...her with tears... U know I really like U written in the first distance between them... They are not close to each other yet...OMG SURPRISE... SUKU darling entry... Jalal the way he talk to her I loved it... kitna pyara romance chal raha tha... aur bich me sali shiba tapak padi... khich ke le gayi jo ko...

yaar i forgot a scene their...pehle jo was supposed to touch his feet but bhul gayi...dekho i ll add now...i too loved scene...mujhe jija saali convo pasand hai yaar...duriyan to mohabbat ko aur bekarar kar deti hai jaanu😆

MIRZA... YE TUNE KYA KIYA RE... KUCH TO SUN LETA MAAN KI BAAT KO... CHALO HUME TO MAJA AAYA... YAAR u the best writer... tere dialogue the best... Nachiz tarif karne se dar rahi hai... Gustakhi maaf ho Malika E dialouge...

WAH WA...WAH WA......"FALAK KI PARI KO MUSKURATE HUE DEKH RAHE HAI BUS..." I LOVE THE PART WHEN JALAL RAN BEHIND HER ... SO CUTE...

me too..me too...loved it...i imagined rajat while writing this line and got goose bumps too...itti high quality taarif...thanku ...but ye nacheez kaun hai...hey imposter nacheez..bhavu ka a/c hack kiya kya tune😆

OMG... BEST SCENE... Jodha hiding behind pillar... and The way he put color on her face... (master piece) I have read that para atleast 10 time... so romantic... He almost kissed her...ufff... What a sensual feeling... beautiful... beyond any word Yaar u have taken my heart...

aaye haaye...mera bhi yehi haal tha beta...i have so many favs of mine in this story...aur ek ek karke tu sab mention kar ri hai...love u😃

Omg... Mirza's dialouge so sweet

Mirza: - aap to buri tarah rang gayi hai bhabhi jaan...lagta hai kisi ne badi shiddat se rang lagaya hai aapko...

naughty mirza...i so much wish to see him like this in the show...but ye cvs...useless fellows...rukmaham ki jagah...maanmirza bonding dikhaye to kitta acha ho😃

NOW FUN PART: JO GULPED BHANG...LOL

NAUTANK START... LOL...AMAZING... CHAPTER... CAN'T WAIT TO REVIEW ON NEXT MY MOST FAV CHAP... SUPERB... WONDERFUL... YAAR (SAMAJ LO)...

phir samajh lo...are yaha pe samajh lo part ka kya kaam...bhavu...u naughty girl😆 thanku for this beautiful review🤗

Originally posted by: Akhdhaa

SUPERB DI👍🏼AMAZING POST !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! CONTINUE SOOON...
WAITING FOR UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Originally posted by: Pallavvi

thanku betu...😃

di mat bol yaar...

kitte saal ki tu??

Originally posted by: shahbhavini

PALLU AA GALE LAG JA... ME DRUNK...MUJE BHI YE UPDATE KA NASHA HO GAYA HAI..

are na baba...jija ji ko kya jawab dugi mai...wo to yehi sochege na..ke maine unki better half ko bevdi bana diya...Bevdi bhavu..😆

YAAR ME KYA LIKHU SAMAJ ME NAHI AA RAHA... I LOVED EACH AND EVERY LINE...WORD OF THIS CHAPTER... CHAL PHIR BHI TRY KARTI HU... MUJE LAGTA HAI... ME TERA POORA CHAP COPY PASTE KARNE vali hu...

are tu kuch bhi likh yaar...waise bhi tere normal reviews itte funny hote hai...to phir is chappy ka to.😆.. i m preparing myself...kahin haste haste behosh na ho jau..😆

1. SWINGING JODHA...LOL... POOR MAAN... YAAR JALLU KO JACKPORT HI LAG GAYA...LOL

Haan beizzati ka jackpot😆

2. HALF OPEN EYES... HMMM... AWW.. clueless Jallu... he has no idea what is going to happen to him I have started to laugh already... "kya hummm"...koi moka nahi chorte...lol bhitar chale... I was like nautanki to abhi suru bhi nahi hui...

me too yaar...mai tujhe bata ni sakti mai kitta has has ke ye chappy likhi hu...tabhi to i said i really enjoyed writing this story...yaa hmmm...meri samajh daar bevdi jo...bhang pine ke baad mentos ki batti jal gayi uski😆

3. HOLI HAI.. PALLU I CAN'T WRITE I AM JUST LAUGHING.. AND COPYING EVERYTHING...I AM TELLING U UR STORY... I loved it when she called him... Jallad kahin ke... Lol...khadoos shenshah...lol... aur wo bhi sabke samne... I can't believe this u were able to write all this... I have no words...

mujhe bhi believe nahi hota kabhi kabhi...because when i read it after writing for the first time...mai chair se niche gir padi thi...that is why it was a single stroke writing...no back check..🤣

4. I loved it to core... how she tell Hamida... Apne humara sath diya... awww.. so touching... then Salima... I love how she kiss her... I was rolfing... Tuje pata nahi I laughed so much... aur mene jitni baar padha I have laughed...

aww thanku baby...i m glad mai tere chehre pe hansi la saki😃

5. Do begum baat kar rahi to Shenshah ko beech me nahi bolna chahiye... yaar hillarious... poor jallu...

bechara...bhaang bhari mohabbat ka maara😆

6. Maansingh turn: Kisi ne kuch kaha... Boxer Jodha is present... lol... teddy bear...lol

7. Mirza gaya kaam se... Jalal gooring at him...

Mirza ki to ekdum se pol khol di...aur maan ke liye mujhe samajh ni aa raha tha...phir meko uske bhole looks yaad aaye to maine soch chalo uska defender bana dete hai jo ko...😆

8. Shenshaahhh...lol...singing...Jalal was scared... he fix his cloth...lol ..."AAP SAMAJHTE KYA HAI APNE AAPKO HAAN??...BADE AAYE...HINDUSTAN KE SHENSHAH...MANA KE DIKHNE ME THIK THAK LAGTE HAI AAP...MAGAR ISKA MATLAB YE THODI HAI KE APNI SUNDARTA PE GHAMAND KARNE LAGE AAP..."... omg pallu tune ye kya kar diya...my mind blank out... superb..."GHUR KYA RAHE HAI...HAAN??...GHURNA HUME BHI AATA HAI...HUM AAPSE NAHI DARTE...SAMJHE AAP...AGAR AAP SHENSHAH JALALUDDIN MOHAMMAD HAI TO HUMARA NAAME BHI JODHA BAAI HAI" JODHA NE SACH ME JALAL KI CLASS LE LI... HILLARIOUS... JASHAN KHATAM...LOL

One of my fav part...i can't tell u how much i laughed while writing the first line of this para...i had to drink water than write further...mere dimag me puri movie jo chal rahi thi...😆...and jodha ka double intensity se ghurna...yaar pata nahi us din kya ho gaya tha meko...abhi bhi sochati hu...ye maine hi likha hai...mai ittni funny nahi hu waise😕

9. Jodha punched jallu... omg... Jalal is running her to catch ... hillarious... I wish serial me aesa ho... poor Jallu had to control his emotion...She pulled him in the waterKINTU PARISTHITIYA*conditions* IS TARAH BADAL JAYEGI HUMNE KABHI SOCHA BHI NAHI THA...HUM AAP PER BHAROSA KARTE HAI AB SHENSHAH...HUME VISHWAAS HAI KE CHAHE JO HO JAAYE...KINTU JAB TAK AAP HUMARE SAATH HAI...HUME KUCH NAHI HO SAKTA...AAP BAHUT ACHE HAI SHENSHAH...AAP BAHUT ACHE HAI..." Her first confession...amazing pallu...sorry I can't find any more words...

JO ne ek hafte ki jogging practise ek saath kara di jallu ko..😆..no problem yaar...i m feeling so happy...mai samajh sakti hu tu kya kehna chahti hai...i love u yaar bhavu...i m feeling like crying..kuch bhi nahi likha phir bhi kitta kuch i m feeling😭🤗

10. YOU ARE JUST IMPOSSIBLE...I NEVER FELT THIS HELPLESS IN FRONT OF ANYONE...BUT YOU ALWAYS GET SUCESSFUL IN MAKING ME RUN AFTER YOU...OK MY BAAGHIN...I WILL TAKE YOU TO YOUR ROOM...YOU STUBBORN BABY..."...Poor Jalal carry her from pond to her room... lol... Even UR baapu sa wont be able to lift U now...lol...

heheh...bechara utha utha ke thak gaya tha...aur phir he knew ke abhi aage kuch karna nahi hai...to faltu me harmones thakane ka kya fayda??😆

11. Ang se Ang Lagana... Poor Jallu... Hillarious..."kya kya karna pad raha hai ya khuda??")

12. Nautanki... hum doob jayenge... Lol...

doob jayege wala part was inspired by DMG...that was one of my fav shows once😃

13. Jodha: - (in a scolding voice)...haan...pata hai hume ke aap kya kehlvana chahte hai humse...yehi na ke hum aapse prem karte hai...to karte hai na prem...usme kaun si badi baat hai... finally she confess it... omg... U Rock Pallu...

aww...thanku ...tu bhi double rock bhavu...😃 are haan mai to tujhe wish karna hi bhul gayi...congo for becoming dazzler😃🥳

14. Pallavi ... After her confession ... I could feel Jalal's happiness... I was dancing inside... I wanted to scream... beautifully written... marvelous... JACKPOT...

AMAZING... MASTER PIECE... LOVE U JAAN... THANK U SO MUCH FOR WRITING THIS AND U HAVE MAKE ME SO HAPPY

u made me so emotional with ur review yaar...u could feel the essence of the story...i could make u laugh...smile when u were in bad mood...isse bada compliment aur ho hi nahi sakta...love u bhavu...thanku so much...u r the best...my fav writer...🤗

aur do chappy hai...unpe bhi to review de na... maine continue kiya tere kehne pe...bata to...theek hai ya boring😭

Originally posted by: PrincessNancy

Res...

Maarna mat pallu... Aaj saare commnts unres karungi...

Btw LOVED this story sooo much

Love u Pallu

Originally posted by: spvd

part 5
awesome...
excellent...
hahaha poor Jodha, Jalal doesnt leave a chance to irritate her...
cont soon dear...