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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: -Khush-

Awesome ending Piu ! 🥳
ZOMG ! Jodha gave him a royal Bath in her anger ! 🤣
Seriously I had thought you will give the kekta twist of Jalal distrusting jodha being preggers but Jalal is too pure to think like that ! 😎
Baby machine bana diya Akdha ko 🤣
The real AkDha might be turning in graves for making them a parents of a cricket team compared to the miracle Salim they yearned for 5 years ! 🤣
Write more stuff on AkDha ! More romantic ones if possible ! 🤗


LOL Khush I am sure REAL AKDHA ki atmaein tadap tadap kar ROFL kar rahi hongi🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣😉😉Thanks so much for appreciating this one😛😛😛I will try to write more if anything strikes me😆😆😆😆Till then asta la viesta baby😛😛😛Forum pe Chinta ta chita chita continue karte hain😉
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: ..Tahniat..

The updates were really amazing but I'm going to miss this ff. this was one of my favorites. I really loved the happy ending. I can't say anymore to continue.. God m gonna miss this ff



Thank you so much🤗 I am going to miss this too
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: sharneil92

Oh my god! This was wonderful! RES for now.

BIG ONE! :D :*


Dude I open this thread and I see your ETERNAL RESWA ..😆😆😆Where art thou😆😆😆
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Rozy77

Hi dear

Im so sorry for commenting soo late

I caught up from part 5 till the epilogue

Im disappointed that this story has come to an end 😒. I thought we still had a long way to go 😆. Im really gonna miss it. Thanks for all those longg updates 🤗...

Every single chapter was amazing and beautifully written 👏.

It really got hot towards the end of chapter 6 😳😆... so much passion ☺️. I just loved how u described everything. It was so wonderful until jodha burst out on jalal

I loved how u described jalal's state when it was said that adham will marry jodha ⭐️. Gosh it was that sinking feeling 😭...

And I was so happy when jodha read all those letters that jalal had written. Finally she knew of his love, yeaning, loneliness and grief.

I cant believe the level which adham stooped down to 😡. Such a heinous act. He created such a horrible misunderstanding 😭. I always wondered what on earth could have happened that led these 2 states who were on good terms with each other, to war.

And not forgetting what he did to anjuman... poor woman 😭, its understandable why she became like that. I couldn't stand in her in the beginning but I felt so bad for her after knowing everything. She saved jodha's life. She did the right thing by finishing adham off.

I really didn't expect much from bairam and mahamanga, so wasn't surprised by their betrayal 🤢. All of them were so disgusting. Poor jalal had the misfortune of being surrounded by traitors.

And just when I thought everything is going to be OK between jalal-jodha after their moment 😳, there he goes and stumbles upon jodha's letters to suryabhan . I think jalal suffered the most in this story with so many heartbreaks... and the audacity of him to go and find surya and bring him back for jodha . That was the limit.. I liked how jodha fired him for that.

But awww, their reunion was sweet n hilarious 😳😆. Im so happy they got their happily ever after...

Btw, they had 4 kids right? 2 daughters, twin boys .. and not forgetting 1 on the way😳

Im really gonna miss this. Hope u write another ff😛

Thanks for entertaining us n sending me all the pmz

Take care


Dear Rozy..Please why sorry yaar..It's absolutely PERFECT!! yaar...🤗Thanks for such a detailed and honest review...You liked the story that is what indeed matters to me the most and trust me this last comment Did make up for all the comments which you never posted ..So Only HUGS
BTW yes they had 4 kids along with one more coming their way..Jalaal sapne mein hi kitna kuch kar gaya ROFL😆😆😆😆😆Thanks so much for the wonderful words of appreciation...I hope I can come up with something interesting very soon😳

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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: sweet16cash

This FF is over I'm super sad it was a routine to wait for the updates of this FF and then finally get some satisfaction I'm gonna terribly miss reading this piece of your work..😭.
What do I say you always leave me spellbound with your updates I thought so that jalaal must have found suryabhan so he must have called jodha so that he could hand over jodha to suryabhan I had tears when I read the amount of jalaal felt going away from jodha who literally was and is his life I could actually imagine his pain and agony..😔 😭.
I loved the confession jodha made infront of suryabhan and stopped him from coming towards her she truly accepted that she belonged to jalaal by body mind and soul..😊.
I loved the moment in the room where jalaal thought that he was dreaming about jodha and jodha continuosly splashing water on his face to make him believe that whatever transpired between them was for real and a dream..
Jalaal had a million dollar reaction on finding that he was going to be a father and they did live happily ever after..😃.
Jodha is a mother of four kids and already pregnant with one more my my jalaal and his passion too much..😳.
I liked the possessive jodha quite a treat to read that chudail ko maar dungi aur aapko bhi hehehehehe..🤣.
I loved loved loved loved your FF piu will really miss reading it if you write something on JA do pm me till then stay in touch darls..🤗.
Love,
Kashi..🤗.


Aww Definitelt Kashi would love to saty in touch..Thanks so much dear🤗I will miss you too and this FF..Thanks so much dear🤗Thanks for loving this story😳 again..I will miss all your cries for the updates..Felt so elated Always😳😳😳Do Keep in touch.Will definitely PM you if I ever write any more JA fiction😳😳😳
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: virgo24

Hello Piu, you are on a role. You went by a little to fast. The next time I log onto Jodha Akbar Forum, you are wrapping up Midsummer Night's Dream. It feels like one of those bittersweet endings. I have already read chapters 10-13, and while reading I make notes of what I want to say. I am going to quickly insert the points I had for those chapters:
Hahaha😆😆😆I was dear Virgo..Since it was a weekend,I quickly wanted to finish things really soon..I know it was like roller coaster ride and I hope you enjoyed it too🤔😆😆
BTW I just love your notes..Thanks for such a detailed review 😳

{As a side note from your previous response: Draupati also had a tragic story. How can we forget mahabarat. I found Mahabarat difficult to read although I watched the series. I need to find a copy that I can read comfortable and be able to perceive with my outlook. I will view the links, I have book marked them. And please do share some more, I love to read about all this!}

{I will have to agree to this MB is really difficult to read and I myself am struggling to find a good continuous approach.However I am loving the Palace of illusions...BTW I wrote a small Lakshman Urmila OS and it has some interesting stories about them from the folk tales..

A NEW BEGINNING!!

Chapter 11-13:

~"The king was gone along with the traitors, the future of Agra still alive but broken and fragile like a dry leaf struggling to flourish in the desert storm." Beautifully well written!

Thanks so much😳

~She feels guilt. . . root cause due to adham. How will Jalal help her rid of this? I bet Jalal also feels the same that his misunderstanding led to this.

Yes Virgo at this point both are feeling GUilty .However they were merely prey to circumstances

~Shareefudin was a wonerful person? Jodha finds him to be a nice human? So you will not make him into a villain in your story?

ahhaha😆😆😆Aren't there enough villains in this storySo I spared Shareefuddin this time😛

~Gosh, I knew they were not going to easily pursue their love story. Will Jalal find Jodha's letter written about the night when two souls united and expressed their love? He just kept reading letters about Suryabhan. I hope he does not go hunting for Suryabhan! I am glad he did not write to Jodha that you can stay as long as you want instead he said please wait for me as I will come get you as soon as possible.

Yes You were correct he did go hunting for Suryabhan..My Jalaal here shares a long history of love and attraction with Jodha so he is emotional and just realises how he must have throttled her in an unwanted marriage.If you see he really became responsible after all his so called support system si withdrawn.He becomes a true human being ,a true and responsible king!!

~"Her face started growing pale and her cheeks became even bonier .Her sunken eyes kept on staring at the fort gates often hallucinating him often. The dark patches beneath her deprived eyes became more and more pronounced. Almost two months passed in her loneliness. She grew weaker every passing day when she could barely even mange to catch her breath. Terrible anorexia and aversion to food developed and the only respite was the jasmine fragrance which she sprinkled on herself making her feel better .But her muscles grew weaker." <-- This is quite graphic This made me feel sad. How come no one sent this news to Jalal? Did her mother not notice that she has fallen in love with her husband? No one in the palace cared about Jodha's health?

Aww I know it was quite graphic and but Yes at the palace peole quite seemed to be oblivious about her plight

~I appreciated how Jalal humbly asked for forgiveness from Amer and its people and announced his plans of keeping Amer secure until Kartikya was of age.

As I have already mentioned..Jalaal outgrew himself without his support system in his process to become a true and responsible king!!

~Jodha is pregnant! Jalal does not remember their night of free abandon. The night when two souls became one?.. . .he just has flash back of a supposed dream he must have has?! I am scared, what if he questions Jodha's faith? What if he does not believe that is his child? What if he accuses her to have a dalliance with Suryabhan behind her back. Will that letter come in handy? Will Jalal find it sooner or later?

~Does Jodha still see Meera andGovind and think of Suryabhan? If she has no feelings why not set them free? Jalal sent them to her maayka for Jodha's sake. He must be shocked and disheartened.

~Why did he call her to the other palace? I am also concerned like Moti Bai.

~ Jodha is so excited to be the mother of Jalal's child, to make him a father, to give him joy! I am bracing myself for some tearful episodes. I do not want to be depressed like poor Jalal.

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Before I could come into terms with these chapters, you have posted a few more chapters and an epilogue! It was definitely a readers treat and a happy weekend. But why so soon? I had a gut feeling that Jalal may bring Suryabhan back! I was worried that Jalal may turn into a scorned lover, psycho and angry but you saved our hearts and the character. Also, Suryabhan left on a not so bad note. You salvaged his character when he said, "Jalal will take good care of you Jodha".

hahahhah Yes..I guess I have closed all the questions and loops you raised in your comment and I hope each and every character was justified .

After the revelation and how Jodha ran her way to Jalal I wanted more. I thought you would show Jalal's point of view after he finds out Jodha truly loved him. I wanted to see more of them as a couple in true sense before the leap, children and epilogue. Are you going to continue afterwards or is the The End?

Aww I really do not have any plans to continue ,the story was supposed to end there.I know the couple thing was lacking BUT I seriously hope I can come up with anything else😆😆 later in some other fiction😳

Summer holidays are over, back to studying and reading, and Midsummer Night's Dream is over. You stayed true to the title, it ended with summer. I feel all sad now. I thoroughly enjoyed reading your story as much as I do watching Jodha Akbar. I stuck to your story until the end. I am also glad that as a writer you also stayed with us until the end. . . Will you be writing more Jodha Akbar stories? I will definitely try and follow your other work on India-Forums!

Lots of Love & Happy Writing,

~Virgo


Lots of love to you Virgo dear too.I hope you get back to the whole groove of going getting back to your life and studies and hah😆😆😆Yes the FF ended too with the summer update😳😳😳
I am really glad that you chose to stick to the story till the end and Trust me ,I always cherish people who take such tremendous amount of equal time with which one writes to appreciate and critique..I am one of those writers who loves critique too So ever if you feel anything illogical you can talk about that too.Thanks again for the wonderful and honest reviews.
I will see if I really write JA stories or not but I have kinda Pmed you some links for my other works..Do have a look if you are interested.or else ignore😳.STAY IN TOUCH!! Thanks again Virgo
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Posted: 11 years ago
Loved this ff...❤️Had a great time reading it...so well written...but, I am gonna miss the updates...I really appreciate your hard work...thank you for writing such a beautiful ff...
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Super Kool

Loved this ff...❤️Had a great time reading it...so well written...but, I am gonna miss the updates...I really appreciate your hard work...thank you for writing such a beautiful ff...


Thank you so much🤗I am glad you liked it!!😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
Piyu you are too fast for me girl with his one . . You churned updates so fast i just could not keep up . . . . Read everything in one go from where i had left it was so well written be it jodha s confusion in the temple when jalal is injured . The reason anjuman is so attached to jalal reminded me of junoon , she was such an interesting character but what a tragic end . . How poetic finally she got what she wanted . . I did know it was maham who had something to do with jalal s mom s demise but you even killed humayun :o not fair just not fair . . . . Poor jalal his world just turned upside down in one night and he had absolutely no one and he blamed himself jodha s troubles . . So complex you always manage to spin a web with such well written characters and their psyche . . . . Your descriptions as usual transport me to a place where i can visualize everything from curtains to the jewellery . . . . So it was the brute adham all along but he was way too intelligent in this one 🤣 he can never use his brains so much on the show . . He managed to hoodwink everyone. . Another suprise was mainawati wow i was cheering for her when jodha put the garland on jalal . . . Every inch a royal . . .

I missed kartikeya i wanted to read more about him he is a sweetheart i always imagined him as younger version of man singh . . .

Piyu the best part about your ff s is the hero is not the typical alpha male , macho and someone who will suffer in silence they have a child hidden inside which makes them so vulnerable they are not ashamed to cry when they are hurt making them more realistic, endearing as we all like to mother them 😆

suryabhan leaves a bitter taste in my mouth . . What a man. . Dont know even if i should refer him as one first he never loved her he just stopped all contact with her . . Now he is married and wants jodha to go with him in the darkness of the night muh chupake what a lump of tard jodha would never have been accepted there and would have a horrible pathetic life what was he even thinking when he came with jalal does nt he even think what harm can a scorned woman cause ?
in the end they already have four kids and a fifth one is on the way in five years 😲 jalal is too virile eh 🤣 the possessive jodha is cute . . .

One scene which i loved was jodha playing the sitar and jalal the flute it was such a nice visual . . They were in harmony then . . . Jodha definately feel bad for her jalal had peeled the layers of her cleverly guarded heart and stripped her bare but she would always cover it up again with the harsh reality . . You literally had me shocked she was taught by amer s best courtesan to seduce a man 🤣. . Finally the age difference and her insecurities catch up with her and she is ready to consummate the marriage but thank god she opened her mouth before or she would have definately regretted later bedding the man she thinks is responsible for her father s murder . . I wanted to know what happens next but you cleverly had the flashback as the next update . . . When they finally do it for jalal its just another one his dreams poor jodha she he does not remember anything but one of the highlights of this ff is the morning after . . You wrote it beautifully and explains jodha s desires so well . . . . How she finally accepted him completely . . . One scene where i just could not stop laughing was the tiger scene the girl smartly gives him the credit but the scene where she wants him to come to bed and her pretends to be busy made me feel for anjuman once again . . That woman had had a tough life wed at fourteen used by adham then his dwindling interest, his almost wedding to jodha and the woman s outburst and how she hinted to keep jodha away till jalal is not in town . That brute kicked her mercilessly till she lost her child which she got after so many years you did say jodha was luck she ended not only her mom s , amers but even anjuman s barren streak . . .
Jalal in your ff can read and write that was a welcome change . . . He even wrote letters to her awww that was so cute . . . .
This was such a treat to read pihu. . .continue to write more . . . . . I need to review the other s as well but it will get there :)
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Posted: 11 years ago
it is such a beautiful story.

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