Arpita,
I wanted to respond to your note about comments in last thread. The thread got closed and then could not find it.
I saw you tagged me while explaining Arnav's reaction to La etc to Swati.
1. His lack of "initial "reaction to IUD news was part of my comments too. And we both have gone back and forth on it.
My comment was all about his first gut reaction.
Somehow your recollection what you wrote is different than what is actually in that update
Here is what you wrote
"
What am I looking at?” Arnav said, picking up a file from the dashboard while Aman drove on. The file wasn’t marked or named.
“Lavanya Kashyap’s history and geography” Aman responded in a no-nonsense tone.
“What?” Arnav said as his hands stopped before opening the file.
“She isn’t pregnant. She got an IUD just a couple of months ago and also…” Aman said, his eyes steady on the road but his words shaking.
“Wait!” Arnav exclaimed. “You went around snooping someone’s medical history?”
“Your secretary didn’t go snooping around someone’s medical history” Aman replied in a deadpan voice. “Khushi Bhabhi’s brother did” and Arnav was effectively made to shut up.
“As I was saying. I still wanted to be hundred percent sure. She has had an abortion a few months ago. The report she showed you was the same report with dates changed”
Arnav’s mind first went blank with absolute and utter relief before wanes upon waves of anger came crashing down. "
As you can see he did know it was La.. Aman was talking about not someone.
Even then he said you snooped..no anger. He just shuts up after Aman saying not your employee but Khushi's brother. And also his anger came much later.
2. It is clear to you as a writer how you see your characters, Arnav. La. Khushi,Manali. You know their actions and thoughts in future we don't.
This story was written till last few chapters where infidelity took center stage. It was intended to be..it is only now we know that Arnav hated La too not just Manali (new year's party his thought was added..it was not there before).
So even if we know this ..his conversation with Manali when she threatens him(happens after iud reveal), and he ask La is aware of it or La wants a serious relationship (you called it as he is taking a dig at Manali) will be lost to a reader.
It gets too muddled. You are left thinking he hates Manali but it should also be La.
We are suppose to connect the dots..and understand him now.
it is kind of hard, when nothing is said explicitly by him.
I am no writer and you have written not short but very detailed long updates. Some very amazing chapters that had many of us very emotional. And have been praised and complimented.
Hope this helps you understand my comment as a reader.
Edited by bakwas_serial - 2 years ago
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