arshi ff: without you... #2, chapters 14 - 27 **completed**

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

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thank you so much... yes, there were four words he say that night... only one thing matters... that he loves her

Originally posted by: Javeria3991
Fantastic update Di. 👏
The way you describe Arnav and Khushi feelings for each other, the effect on Khushi for finally listening the three -no- four beautiful words for which her ears and heart was desperate to listen, Arnav's desperation, Khushi guilt to disappoint Arnav and not caring for his feeling which he at last accepted, her way to make up to him, the telepathy her calling him from his heart and Khushi dressing up for her Arnavji, the song "sun raha na tu ro rahi hoon main" and them consummating their marriage gently and slowly to make pyaar ki raat memorable and the best part that was proposing for remarriage to shut the mouths and the last hinderance in their life, the cruel society or in other way honoring the wishes and dream of big fat wedding of his wife is stupendous. I love the flow. ❤️ They are ajeeb but looks very cute together.
I love the kangan scene. Kangans were the shogun by Arnav's mother who wasn't present with them but her blessing is and will always present with them. If Arnav's mom would have alive she would have been ecstatic seeing her dearest chotte getting married.
Khushi is kidnap😲. I am sure that like always this time too Arnav will make to his Khushi in time and will catch her again.

javeria,

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thank you so much for liking the night... pyaar ki raat.

thanks for talking about the kangans and shagun. those kangans were so moving in the story... they keep coming up when i think of them... asr loved kkg as a woman, yet there was that sense of mother he got from her... of peace, a place to rest against... she was the only one he allowed inside his hurting world and trusted with his deepest loves, she instinctively felt his fears, his worries...

he wanted to give her the wedding she wanted i think, i don't really think he cared what others, society anyone thought... 😃 i so want to see asr and khushi doing fabulous love together.

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Posted: 11 years ago

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waaao indi sweetie...wat abeautiful part yaar...just no wordxs 2 express da gratitude of ua story ...well written well mos cutiest part:)))) love u👏👏👏👏❤️🤗

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nishu_shorna

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Posted: 11 years ago

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beautiful update...ArShi first night...so so amazingly written...took me back to a different land...loved it so much Di...every bit of it...I wanted to say so much, but yeh AD mauka hi nahi de rahi hain aajkal...
coming back to present, OMG... what is happening... its just too thrilling to wait Di...continue soon naa...

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: mehaksabreen27
waaao indi sweetie...wat abeautiful part yaar...just no wordxs 2 express da gratitude of ua story ...well written well mos cutiest part:)))) love u🤗

mehaksabreen,

you are sweet to leave this comment. 😳 😃🤗

i am so glad you really like this story... not an easy one to read. i write too much and it's slow, plus it's not exciting new asr khushi, but same old same old... but you like, me grateful and thrilled. good to see you, yaar (back in the seventies, in school, how we used to love saying "yaar", you remind me)

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Originally posted by: nishu_shorna
beautiful update...ArShi first night...so so amazingly written...took me back to a different land...loved it so much Di...every bit of it...I wanted to say so much, but yeh AD mauka hi nahi de rahi hain aajkal...
coming back to present, OMG... what is happening... its just too thrilling to wait Di...continue soon naa...

thank you so much, nishu_shorna... you have no idea how good i feel when i see happy comments. always amazes me that you all read something thought up by just someone on the form... i am most appreciative. glad you enjoyed everything... as i said, this one was hard for me... going back and forth within a relationship is so so interesting... see you soon and hope ad is busy but really good.

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: IronButterfly

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what lovely quotes... the first one ha ha... takes exactly that kind of persistence to write fiction but then this is also about a writer's love... 😆

and the second one... asr khushi there... they reach way within each other and open a space... life sustaining this emotion is and it is enough and more in itself...

in this context, on another thread, i wrote something just for the h of it. i don't know urdu, so had to ask my friend for a word... i am no poet, but i liked the feeling i wanted to express... am leaving it here for you, you may like...

tasveer hai tu mere dil mein

zaroori nahin ki tu mere mehfil mein rahe

rehta hai tu mere zehen ke ek falak main aise

jaise shayad hum iss takhleeq mein bhi na rahe

in english:

an impression are you in my heart

that you be in my party is not needed

you live in one of the skies of my mind in such a way

i don't exist even in creation like that

(i used the word impression for photograph or tasveer.)

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yoga123

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Excellent chapter...thanks for the PM

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Merging of my two favorite episodes! great idea!👏

Can't tell you how much i enjoyed! You know how shameless I am to read ASR and Khushi's romance. you can call me a pervert, but I can't help myself, cause they are too sexy together.

So that black diaphanous saree, those diamond ear-rings, bangles all were gifts from her sexy man! His choice is always classy. Though he never wanted her to change herself for him, but I really want Khushi to change her gaudy style for the sake of her sophisticated husband.

Let's come to the ahem part; your vision of their romance is too subtle. i absolutely loved the line that sex was not new to him, but making love is. he only can make love with Khushi who is pristine, pure, ethereal, untouched. really he is blessed with a girl who is pure in every way.

let's come to the present, I'm really anxious about Khushi. shyam has eloped from the jail and Khushi is missing. I hope she is fine and Arnav rescues her before he can harm her.

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: yoga123
Excellent chapter...thanks for the PM

thank you, yoga... good to see you.

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indi52

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Originally posted by: sohara
Merging of my two favorite episodes! great idea!👏
Can't tell you how much i enjoyed! You know how shameless I am to read ASR and Khushi's romance. you can call me a pervert, but I can't help myself, cause they are too sexy together.
So that black diaphanous saree, those diamond ear-rings, bangles all were gifts from her sexy man! His choice is always classy. Though he never wanted her to change herself for him, but I really want Khushi to change her gaudy style for the sake of her sophisticated husband.
Let's come to the ahem part; your vision of their romance is too subtle. i absolutely loved the line that sex was not new to him, but making love is. he only can make love with Khushi who is pristine, pure, ethereal, untouched. really he is blessed with a girl who is pure in every way.
let's come to the present, I'm really anxious about Khushi. shyam has eloped from the jail and Khushi is missing. I hope she is fine and Arnav rescues her before he can harm her.

thank you, sohara...

you enjoyed? 😳

pervert? never. to enjoy the idea of sex or to read and imagine it is natural and fun, sir. also terribly healthy. i love it too, would you believe it. but i don't enjoy unimaginative just for the sake of it stuff...i want to write specific asr khushi love making, not generic more of the same old same old... do i sound a little pagal? he he.

subtle... but i hope it made you feel things... i have been seeing in my mind's eye that first time she will bare herself before him, and he will look at her with a million feelings, gratitude and reverence both part of that emotion apart from extreme desire, longing, perhaps even a shade of carnal lust, and in her a million emotions too including extreme shyness and complete desire, a desire to be looked at by him, touched by him... i have wondered for hours what he might do after that, and all i could see was him gathering her close and burying his head in her lap. just being with her for a bit... before letting all that is desire and its expression, its touching feeling and exploding taking over...

i am so happy you like the chapter. and if she has to change and look boringly so called classy for your sexy boy then he better change ito kurta pajama and look totttallly midddil kilaas for her too... 😆 😆

oh i can see him buying that black saree for her, and her refusing it because she's angry... also the lovely classic, sleek diamond things. 😃