arshi ff: without you... thread #1, chapters 1-13 **completed**

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#591

Originally posted by: DurgaS

Hi, I am back with my second edition of comments. Always feel that there is still something left that I wanted to say. The above bold, so true. When we feel we are right, believe in our stands, something happens to put the scenario in a new light and we are left to question our own beliefs.

Noticed that in my earlier comment I mentioned the third part as the second part, wondered how, wanted to correct, then let it be. Because, for me the flow of the pallu merged both parts of past and present. And the same pallu kept flowing in the last part which Arnav managed to catch on to and pull.

Reading the other responses to the chapter, everyone ecstatic that he has come back. I wasn't, because I always knew he would be back, it was the question of when and how. Was really happy to read the how, the tug of the pallu, the jaa rahi ho, so IPK, it couldn't have been any other way. 😃

So, ASR has been brought home for better security and the family has decided not to talk about the Shyam factor in front of him. Interesting to know where this will lead to.

thanks for second appraisal. 😆. durga, that pallu... you know that bit where past and present connected through it, that i'd designed... but that it would naturally link to him holding the pallu i hadn't thought through... of course, it would, but somehow i hadn't consciously thought of it.

about that in pink... 🤗... ok, you write so you will understand when i say that my husband and daughter's laughing and saying hey wake him up, while funny and cute, had me in a tizzy... i had no idea if it was time... i was feeling my way around the thing. am not a fiction writer... i just go about it instinctively... my planning is not too expert... i felt an awful pressure... i knew in that state he would break barriers, find his mother... a primary heart/life connection that is unresolved, painful... but how would it all come together. then saw farha's edit... felt it... posted on our thread, couple of you said it felt like "without you," and slowly the story started to come together. interesting, this whole process.

fiction is terribly interesting, i really wish i knew how writers think... invent.

yes, he doesn't know about shyam... not yet. let's see what happens.

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Sunshine80

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Posted: 12 years ago

#592

ASR uth gaye...uth gaye di...

Kis style mein dance karoon soch rahi hoon😃

That was so emotional di...each word so touching...I jst cldn't stop crying...until that tug...👏👏..beuatiful di😳

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#593

^^^ chhotey sir, you are here... i want to see you dance. no rona dhona... it's asr zindabad time. i want my dynamite man back and want to hear everyone reading do gulabi aankhen...

thanks so much for saying what you do. you really liked... really? phir toh raanisahiba grinning madly.🤗

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Sunshine80

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Originally posted by: indi52
^^^ chhotey sir, you are here... i want to see you dance. no rona dhona... it's asr zindabad time. i want my dynamite man back and want to hear everyone reading do gulabi aankhen...

thanks so much for saying what you do. you really liked... really? phir toh raanisahiba grinning madly.🤗

aap bas behte gaye di...😳

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Newbiesoapfan

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Posted: 12 years ago

#595

Indrani -di -- Am loving it!

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DurgaS

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Originally posted by: indi52
thanks for second appraisal. 😆. durga, that pallu... you know that bit where past and present connected through it, that i'd designed... but that it would naturally link to him holding the pallu i hadn't thought through... of course, it would, but somehow i hadn't consciously thought of it.

about that in pink... 🤗... ok, you write so you will understand when i say that my husband and daughter's laughing and saying hey wake him up, while funny and cute, had me in a tizzy... i had no idea if it was time... i was feeling my way around the thing. am not a fiction writer... i just go about it instinctively... my planning is not too expert... i felt an awful pressure... i knew in that state he would break barriers, find his mother... a primary heart/life connection that is unresolved, painful... but how would it all come together. then saw farha's edit... felt it... posted on our thread, couple of you said it felt like "without you," and slowly the story started to come together. interesting, this whole process.

fiction is terribly interesting, i really wish i knew how writers think... invent.

yes, he doesn't know about shyam... not yet. let's see what happens.

It is amazing, isn't it Indi? We know we are supposed to do something, but don't know how to go about it. Then, something comes up and while we are at it, suddenly we find a way, the path clearing up and we see that it smoothly leads us to our goal. But, the best thing is that you manage to cling on to that something that comes up, what if it was ignored? You would still be in that blurry state. So, I would say catching on to that something is also important and you are pretty good at that. 😊 About the few stories I have written, the complete structure was planned before I started penning them. Yet to try my hand at something where I wouldn't know which way it would lead me to. Would really want to experience that, it will enrich my writing experience.

Yes, it would be interesting to know how the writers go about with their stories. I guess, each has his/her own way.

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Originally posted by: Newbiesoapfan
Indrani -di -- Am loving it!

hey ash, good to see you here. 😳 thank you so much. finding my way through the ff, first one... exciting and scary. thanks for reading. 😃

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..Anita..

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Posted: 12 years ago

#598

That chapter was so beautiful

Edited by ..Anita.. - 12 years ago

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Mysticaldivine

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Posted: 12 years ago

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@Indi

You are taking so much patience out of me...because i am the person who wants to know "what happened next " quick...I know sounds like a child..but can't wait...our man just woke up and then Shyam's "Tiya pancha" [destruction] is my dream...