arshi ff: without you... thread #1, chapters 1-13 **completed**

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#601

Originally posted by: ArshiHamesha
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You are taking so much patience out of me...because i am the person who wants to know "what happened next " quick...I know sounds like a child..but can't wait...our man just woke up and then Shyam's "Tiya pancha" [destruction] is my dream...

awww, arshi, sorry to make you wait, but hyuk hyuk tiya pancha hoga hoga hoga, zaroor hoga...

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#602

^^^ hi lily,

thanks so much. 😳. will certainly pm...

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riti4u

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Indi di..🤗this was so beautifully written...emotions of a wife talking to her husband in coma.. she was sure he was listening... and that desperation to hear him say something...the flashback..initial attraction...the pull he felt towards her... n then feeling he must get away... then to present...his holding her pallu...and finally those words... ja rhi ho...

beautiful update di...cant wait for next one...

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Newbiesoapfan

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Posted: 12 years ago

#604

Originally posted by: indi52

hey ash, good to see you here. 😳 thank you so much. finding my way through the ff, first one... exciting and scary. thanks for reading. 😃

Di --you should have started earlier... you always wrote so beautifully... I love the way this story flows... shifting between the past and the present and the way you are tying them together!

Only one thing di... happy ending rakho!

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#605

^^^ thank you, ash.

ami chaileo, ending won't be unhappy.😆 this jodi will make one write a happy ending... at least for me.

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Originally posted by: riti4u
Indi di..🤗this was so beautifully written...emotions of a wife talking to her husband in coma.. she was sure he was listening... and that desperation to hear him say something...the flashback..initial attraction...the pull he felt towards her... n then feeling he must get away... then to present...his holding her pallu...and finally those words... ja rhi ho...
beautiful update di...cant wait for next one...

thanks, riti,

i am still pondering what's to happen next, hopefully tomorrow a short one. thank you so much for reading and saying all that you do.

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Horizon

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Posted: 12 years ago

#607

What was that indi? I HAVE to watch this on screen.. feels kind of helpless that it is not possible!! the emotions, each and every move is so vivid that it brings back the world of ASR and Khushi in all its glory to our eyes.. masterpiece indeed.. those interludes of FBs!!

Amazing presentation of Khushi's strength, evident in every of her word, act.. after reading this piece of yours so far..I bowed down to her like I never did watching her for 18 months!

Loved how you brought the mention of one of my most fav dialogues/moments "hum tho aap hi ke hain".. that victorious half smirk/ smile on his face.. what was it about these two that makes even mundane words eternal!

Much looking forward to the next one...

BTW, ofcourse much happy that the man woke up.. but strangely I wasn't much desperate for that.. as much as I dreaded when you started the story... your most beautiful writing, khushi's monologues, and her continuous convos with him, and then those brilliant FBs .. which as I said earlier the original makers wouldn't at all have minded let it happen this way... surprisingly I was OK even with him in that state!

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

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^^^ horizon,

thank you for that last para... that you were fine with the situation. in a way so was i though i was dead inside somewhere... but this is life, and i believe characters as strong as khushi and asr and that relationship can do things that might seem not possible... but funnily, i couldn't kill him. he had to return... too much left to be explored.

and thank you for every word of yours, you make a sundry writer of something called fan fiction feel terribly terribly happy. i cannot imagine portraying them the way they are when you can actually see them, but if i came close, i am yipppeee.

am cogitating updae. khsuhi was a beautiful creature, till channel coerced a makeover... somehow writers lost touch with her inner voice. let's see what i hear. 😳

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Horizon

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Originally posted by: indi52
^^^ horizon,

thank you for that last para... that you were fine with the situation. in a way so was i though i was dead inside somewhere... but this is life, and i believe characters as strong as khushi and asr and that relationship can do things that might seem not possible... but funnily, i couldn't kill him. he had to return... too much left to be explored.

and thank you for every word of yours, you make a sundry writer of something called fan fiction feel terribly terribly happy. i cannot imagine portraying them the way they are when you can actually see them, but if i came close, i am yipppeee.

am cogitating updae. khsuhi was a beautiful creature, till channel coerced a makeover... somehow writers lost touch with her inner voice. let's see what i hear. 😳

red: Oh.. my dear, when I said I was OK with this state of his, I meant ONLY temporary, ofcourse he HAS to return.. there is noway I can imagine/ accept him lifeless. During the kidnapping track, when he was beaten by goons, I thought the makers were being too commercial and violent, forgetting that this is a daily soap taking money from some sponsors to come on air and there would be some default filminess in it.Much hard to watch him in that helpless state! Here, all thanks to your beautiful engrossing writing that I almost forgot that this man is currently not up! Yes, Khushi was indeed innocence and grittiness personified initially I am sure that thread will stay intact when you hear it.

blue: you are on a mission to redefine modesty.. I leave it there as I don't want to make you feel too uncomfy!

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#610

horizon,

thanks... it is a daily soap and dhishum dhishum gets the trp maybe. but horrid me, i was quite okay with all of that because how magnificent did asr look: blindfolded, hands tied behind back but still indomitable. of course, mr sobti in banyan did things to my brain... mush is all it wanted to be. also, suddenly reminded me of jason bourne a character that had thrilled me at 15/16.

and ok, no more modesty... tahnk you for liking what i write. i rsepect you, so i presume i am ok at this thing. hugs.