arshi ff: without you... thread #1, chapters 1-13 **completed**

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#541

Originally posted by: cinthiann1758
she hadn't seen his eyes for so so long.

I couldn't imagine this for Kushi not to be able to see those beautiful chocolate eyes. Not to be able to have her questions answered, to be alone even though his body is there in front of her. She couldn't feel his touch, she could only touch. She couldn't hear his words, she could only speak, never knowing if he heard her words. The frustration she must be feeling, the loneliness, the memories of a passionate love. Memories that make her blush.
To be honest I was getting a little frustrated because I know the longer he is in the coma the worse it is for him. Recovery would take too long but I guess that is the nurse in me and not the romantic.
I am very happy that our loverboy is waking and you listened to your hubbie and daughter!
Just beautiful and thank you for sharing this beautiful story.

hi cynthia,

yes, lover boy is back. couldn't kill him off... just couldn't, bas. gautam hegde was asked how they felt about writing and shooting his death... he said it was pretty bad. i can imagine. how could they ask the makers of asr to finish him off just for the h of it.

glad you liked.

i need the nurse to guide me a bit about his recovery. he has lots to do... please let's hope doc verma has some miracle techniques at hand or is willing to work with a homeopath to get my boy super cool and fighting fit.

thanks so much for reading and liking.

i couldn't keep him in coma beyond 7 chapters, did they really think they could kill him? ha ha ha ha.

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#542

Originally posted by: Siya6490
My heart stops when arnav says "ja rahi ho"...
I cant believe he is back... Iam very happy...
Continue soon..
a big tjanks for the pm...

hi siya, 😳

your heart stops... you know i thought i'd write that for khushi, really, that she felt "saansey ruk gayi," but when i came to her looking into his eyes, felt like a natural pause. i guess the breath stop was in the scene. thanks so much for your comment. will pm when i update.

he is back... yes, woh aa gaya...

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#543

Originally posted by: incandescent
Did he really wake up? Did he? OMG he did!! I actually did a happy dance. 😳

I was so sad when I read it has been six long weeks.

I loved the way you described every emotion and you understand Arnav and Khushi so well'.you know them in and out.

This chapter was worth waiting for. Beautifully written. 👏

It was a delight to read.

yes yes yes, fari, he's up... and soon i hope he'll be about. i thought readers would enjoy seeing him awaken, never knew how light and happy i'd feel. gosh this guy is giddy making lovely and how did khushi manage these 6 weeks... writer was in catatonic state almost 😆.

thanks for liking the writing and all your lovely words. i wondered right through how would it be if this were to happen in my life. feet go cold at the mere thought.

see ya soon. and looking forward to your new chapter. 😳

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Crazy4IPK

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Posted: 12 years ago

#544

Omg, he is back from coma?

Let me dance first

Khushi's monologue to him, her pensive state, her expressions of deep love for him couldn't make him dormant any more I guess. Finally her love compelled him to get back from his coma.

Amazing amazing, amazing, can't telly you how beautifully you wrote this chapter. Uff what a description of ASR's gorgeous face, all the adjectives were so apt. even I loved how you described Khushi's beauty as well.

loved the assimilation of the pallu scene with the present and the past.How the deep visceral attraction pulled him to catch falling Khushi is beautifully depicted by you.

The gardens what were impeccably tended and he saw Khushi in a veil; is it a dream from his dormant state?

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#545

hi sohara,

so glad you are dancing. 😆 see, i did listen to all of you and said, wake up, honey.😳

thanks for liking the words, the descriptions, everything.

and no, not khushi, he saw his mother in that other worldly garden... he was a boy, she was a woman in sari, covered from head to foot. i didn't want to use the word maa, maybe i need to clarify something there if you thought it was khushi.

he is out of that awful state, i am leaping with joy practically. see ya soon.

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hd75

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Posted: 12 years ago

#546

Indi, what can I say, that I havent said earlier? I will just stick to the basic word - beautiful ! And, the man is back ! Thank you 🤗. "You are in me, I am in you, together we shall face this thing, even if it is called death" 👏 👏 👏. If anybody is looking for the definition of true, divine love, then, this is it !

You've ended the chapter in IPK style - without a pre cap - sach hai ya sapna? 😉

Loved that little chat Khushi had with ASR, felt like watching IPK all over again. I agree with what you said Indi, despite the poor writing towards the end, Khushi is still my favourite, I don't know if it was because of Sanaya or I love the girl way too much. None of the insane antics including the pathetic act of disguising as an office peon could make me cringe at the character. I love the Khushi in your story, this is how she was always meant to be, right?

Now, that the chocolate brown eyes have opened, can't wait to read about the magic they can do 😊

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DurgaS

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Posted: 12 years ago

#547

Beautiful. Very very beautiful. The descriptions, so complete. They say in a visual medium, there's not much left for imagination. But, while reading the written word, each person has his/her own visualisations of the scene. But not in your written world Indi. The scenes are crystal clear, I can even sense the wind blowing and rabba ve playing. This is awesome work and it is getting better and better with every instalment. 👏 The second part, the lady in her pallu, that was Arnav's mother. Arnav found her, in a place that was not seen before, he was happy, wanted to hug her. But she reminded him, not yet. And he makes his way back. Was he searching for his mother all this while? The third part, I could hear rabba ve sung in high pitch by both male and female voices, that comes at the fag end of Kyun dard hai itna. Each line of this chapter is brilliantly written. The man in your story makes his way back and opens his eyes. Across the seas, a little boy comes out and opens his little eyes. 😊

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Omoraboti

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Posted: 12 years ago

#548

Updated my comment on page 68 😊

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supriya

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Posted: 12 years ago

#549

INDI He is awake...i am almost in tears here

...you hav no idea

i loved it 😃

my god wat a chapter...just Brilliant ⭐️👏
how did you write it?? everythin its place , perfect lines , phrases scenario⭐️

on the first part...i was crushed see the state of Khushi...tryin every possible thing to wake him up...speakin of her desires . the days activity . lol even NK...just really made me soo broken for our chirpy girl
btw tht was awesomely written , all of her dialogues to him...it was just amazing ⭐️

on the second...aww he caught her this time 😉

nd the last

I freakin Love you for it...so amazingly written wat a twist

do you remember while IPK epi used to air nd in the of the epi some crazy thing would happen...nd the entire forum would be rejoicing nd dancin...thts exaclty my situation...m smilin throughout writing this
just Fantastic Thank you 🤗